英语基础写作专题.ppt

高考英语复习专题高考英语复习专题 基础写作基础写作 汕头市金禧中学余雪红汕头市金禧中学余雪红1 1体裁格式体裁格式2 2内容内容3 3人称、时态人称、时态4 4信息点的整合和排列信息点的整合和排列第第1 1步步 审题审题说明文说明文描述学校植物园描述学校植物园第三人称第三人称, ,一般现在时一般现在时5 5项项一、基础写作的推荐步骤：一、基础写作的推荐步骤：第第1步步 审题审题第第2步步 归纳、排列信息点（整合信息）归纳、排列信息点（整合信息） 第第3步步 确定短语和句型、连词成句确定短语和句型、连词成句第第4步步 组句成篇组句成篇第第5步步 检查修改检查修改二、评分标准（要求）：二、评分标准（要求）：1、句子结构、句子结构准确准确 2、信息内容、信息内容完整完整3、篇章结构、篇章结构连贯连贯 4、书写规范、卷面整洁书写规范、卷面整洁2009广州一模基础写作：广州一模基础写作： 请根据以下构思图，写一份关于你校植物园的英语简介请根据以下构思图，写一份关于你校植物园的英语简介参考词汇参考词汇 植物园植物园 botanical garden写作要求：只能使用写作要求：只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。个句子表达全部内容。评分标准：句子结构评分标准：句子结构准确准确，信息内容，信息内容完整完整，篇章结构，篇章结构连贯。连贯。第第2步步 整合信息整合信息, 译成英语。译成英语。1 1、校园西南角，面积校园西南角，面积1000平方米。平方米。at the southwest corner of our school, 1000 square meters (1000 )（植物园）位于我校校园西南角，面积（有（植物园）位于我校校园西南角，面积（有)1000平方米。平方米。(1) Located at the southwest corner of our school, the botanical garden is spread an area of 1000 square meters. (2) Located at the southwest corner of our school, the botanical garden covers an area of 1000 square meters.(3) With an area of 1000 square meters , the botanical garden is located at the southwest corner of our school.(4) Covering an area of 1000 square meters , the botanical garden is located at the southwest corner of our school.(5) The botanical garden is located at the southwest corner of our school and it covers an area of 1000 square meters.改正下列句子：改正下列句子：1. The botanical garden which on the southwest of 1. The botanical garden which on the southwest of school with a area with 1000 square kilmetter. school with a area with 1000 square kilmetter. The botanical garden ,which is located at the southwest corner of the school ,covers an area of 1000 square meters.2. The botanical garden located in the 2. The botanical garden located in the southwestern on our school, covered 1000 meter.southwestern on our school, covered 1000 meter.The botanical garden is located in the southwest of our school, covering 1000 square meters.The botanical garden is located in the southwest of our school and it covers 1000 square meters.2、20年的年的历史历史， 2008年年重建重建 history, rebuild（植物园）（有）（植物园）（有）20年的年的历史历史，（在，（在 ）2008年（被）年（被）重建。重建。（1）The garden is over 20 years old and was rebuilt in 2008.（2）The garden has a history of 20 years and was rebuilt in 2008.（3）With a history of 20 years , the botanical garden was rebuilt in 2008.改正句子：改正句子： 1 1、We schools botanical garden had a history of We schools botanical garden had a history of 20 years and it was rebuilted in 2008.20 years and it was rebuilted in 2008.Our schools botanical garden has a history of 20 years and it was rebuilt in 2008.3、各种花卉、树木、药用植物、各种花卉、树木、药用植物 all kinds of , various kinds of ，a variety of , varieties of , beautiful flowers, trees and herbs.(你可以在植物园里看见你可以在植物园里看见)各种花卉、树木、药用植物。各种花卉、树木、药用植物。（1）As you walk through the garden, you can see various kinds of beautiful flowers, trees and herbs. （在植物园里有（在植物园里有)各种花卉、树木、药用植物。各种花卉、树木、药用植物。（2）There are varieties of beautiful flowers, trees and herbs in the botanical garden. 4、观赏至少需、观赏至少需1小时小时 visit , at least one hour 需要花费至少需要花费至少1小时来观赏植物园。小时来观赏植物园。 (1) If youre planning to explore the garden, set aside at least one hour. (2) It takes you one hour to visit the botanical garden.(3) You may spend one hour (in) visiting the botanical garden. 5、美化校园、美化校园 研究植物场所研究植物场所 休闲之地休闲之地 beautify the school/ make our school more beautiful study the plants relax oneself植物园可以美化校园，它也是一个学生研究植物和休闲的植物园可以美化校园，它也是一个学生研究植物和休闲的地方。地方。(1)The garden makes our school more beautiful and its a fantastic place for students to study and learn more about plants or simply to relax for a while.（2）The botanical garden can beautify our school and its a good place for students to study plants and relax themselves.(3) Not only can the botanical garden beautify our school but (also) its a good place for students to study plants and relax themselves.第第3步步 连句成篇连句成篇 Located at the southwest corner of our school, the botanical garden is spread over an area of 1000 . The garden is over 20 years old and was rebuilt in 2008. As you walk through the garden, you can see various kinds of beautiful flowers, trees and herbs. If youre planning to explore the garden, set aside at least one hour. The garden makes our school more beautiful and its a fantastic place for students to study and learn more about plants or simply to relax for a while.第第4步步 检查修改检查修改一、基础写作的推荐步骤：一、基础写作的推荐步骤：1 1、认真审题、认真审题 2 2、归纳、排列信息点（整合信息）、归纳、排列信息点（整合信息） 3 3、确定短语和句型、连词成句、确定短语和句型、连词成句4 4、组句成篇、组句成篇5 5、检查修改、检查修改二、二、评分标准（要求）：评分标准（要求）：1、句子结构、句子结构准确准确2、信息内容、信息内容完整完整3、篇章结构、篇章结构连贯连贯4、书写规范、卷面整洁、书写规范、卷面整洁高高 三三 学学 生生 现现 状状负担过重的原因负担过重的原因每天在校时间每天在校时间约约10小时小时1. 面临高考；面临高考；2. 家长期望高。家长期望高。每天作业时间每天作业时间3-4小时小时每天娱乐时间每天娱乐时间几乎没有几乎没有每天睡眠时间每天睡眠时间不足不足某报设有一个求助信箱，请根据以下表中列出的信某报设有一个求助信箱，请根据以下表中列出的信息，以高三学生李华的名义给息，以高三学生李华的名义给Mr. HelperMr. Helper写一封英文写一封英文短信。信的开头和结尾已写好，不计入五句话。短信。信的开头和结尾已写好，不计入五句话。Dear Mr. Helper, Im a senior 3 student. I am now in great need of your help because I can hardly stand the great pressure._ I am looking forward to your advice. Yours sincerely, Li Hua1 1 体裁格式体裁格式2 2 内容内容3 3 人称、时态人称、时态4 4 信息点的整信息点的整合和排列合和排列第第1 1步步 审题审题写信（应用文）写信（应用文）描述高三学生现状描述高三学生现状第一人称，一般现在时第一人称，一般现在时6 6项项第第2 2步步 整合信息整合信息, , 译成英语。译成英语。1) 每天在校时间约每天在校时间约10小时。每天完成作小时。每天完成作 业时间业时间34小时。小时。 Every day we stay at school for about ten hours to have lessons. We spend at least three to four hours doing our homework.2) 每天几乎没有时间娱乐、消遣。每天几乎没有时间娱乐、消遣。 a. We hardly have any time for relaxation. b. Hardly can we find any time to do what we want.3) 每天睡眠时间不足，不利于健康。每天睡眠时间不足，不利于健康。 a. We dont have enough time to sleep, which does harm to our health. b. We suffer from lack of sleep, which, in the long run, is not good for our health.4) 负担过重的原因是面临高考。负担过重的原因是面临高考。a. The main cause of our heavy burden is the pressure from the college entrance examination.b. The reason why we are carrying such a heavy burden is that we are facing the college entrance examination.5) 父母对我们的期望很高父母对我们的期望很高。 a. Our parents expect too much of us. b. Our parents have high expectations of us. Dear Mr. Helper, Im a senior 3 student. I am now in great need of your help because I can hardly stand the great pressure. Every day we stay at school for about ten hours tohave lessons _ spend at least three to four hours doing our homework. _, hardly can we find any time to do what we want. _, We suffer from lack of sleep, which, in the long run, is not good for our health. The reason why we are carrying such a heavy burden is that we are getting the pressure from the college entrance examination. _, Our parents have high expectations of us. I am looking forward to your advice. Yours sincerely, Li Hua第第3 3步步 连句成篇连句成篇andAs a resultWhats worseIn addition附录：如何使文章连贯？附录：如何使文章连贯？(过渡词的使用过渡词的使用)1) 时间：时间：soon, then, suddenly, meanwhile, before, after, earlier, in the morning, afterwards, later, immediately, next, the other day, nowadays, gradually2) 空间空间: above, below, up, down, under, near, far from, in front of, behind, beside, beyond, on the right/left, around, inside, outside, opposite to, next to, on top of, across.3) 列举：列举：for example, such as, first(ly), second(ly), finally, besides, apart form, for one thingfor another ,(the)last but not (the) least(最最后后但但也是也是最最重要的重要的 )4) 比较比较: like, unlike, on the contrary, in contrast to, on one handon the other hand, than, not soas, asas, while, similarly, the former, the latter, someothers, onethe other, compared with/to5) 逻辑关系：逻辑关系：a. 并列：并列：and, as well as, alsob. 转折：转折：but, however, yetc. 递进：递进：besides, apart from, in addition, whats more, furthermore, moreover, to make things worsed. 原因：原因：because, because of, as, since, for that reasone. 结果：结果：so, therefore, thus, as a result f. 让步：让步：though, although, in spite ofThanks!bye-bye!