读后续写备考指导.pptx

建后续写备考读烟台一中烟台一中 高三英语组高三英语组 王楠王楠议卷东山一、山东卷读后续写一、山东卷读后续写题型解读题型解读及及能力要求能力要求二、读后续写二、读后续写阅卷心得阅卷心得（评分标准及备考建议（评分标准及备考建议）三、案例式三、案例式教学示范教学示范及及优质资源优质资源推荐推荐一、山东卷读后续写及 提提供一段供一段350350词以内词以内的语言材料，要求考生依的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给两段段落开头语进行续写据该材料内容、所给两段段落开头语进行续写（150150词左右词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻有逻辑衔接辑衔接、情节合理、完整情节合理、完整的短文。的短文。To is one thing, to is another.To is one thing, to is another.王初明教授-1.1.释放创造力和想象力释放创造力和想象力2.2.融入读物提供的语境学习语言融入读物提供的语境学习语言3.3.语言可模仿，内容则要创新语言可模仿，内容则要创新4.4.顺着语篇续写，学习连贯表达顺着语篇续写，学习连贯表达5.5.补全的是语篇，而非单词或短语补全的是语篇，而非单词或短语6.6.语言理解与产出结合紧密，显著提高外语学习效率语言理解与产出结合紧密，显著提高外语学习效率7. 7. 对外语教学和学习几乎无负面影响。对外语教学和学习几乎无负面影响。 一、读后续写及* *要求考生在理解一篇不完整文章的基础上，充分调动要求考生在理解一篇不完整文章的基础上，充分调动想象创新思维，大胆预测文章缺失部分的内容走势，想象创新思维，大胆预测文章缺失部分的内容走势，进行充满个性色彩的设计，并用英语进行续写表达。进行充满个性色彩的设计，并用英语进行续写表达。所提供短文多以记叙文故事类文章或夹叙夹议类文章所提供短文多以记叙文故事类文章或夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折有起伏，但故事线索的逻辑性为主，故事情节有曲折有起伏，但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。比较强。 * *创造性创造性+ +逻辑性逻辑性+ +丰富性丰富性1.1.没有划线词，难度增加。没有划线词，难度增加。2.2.时间时间+ +剧情剧情 均跨度较大均跨度较大3.3.主题意义鲜明（人与自然，人与社会，人与自我主题意义鲜明（人与自然，人与社会，人与自我）4.4.新的评分标准新的评分标准山东续写山东续写浙江续写浙江续写总则总则总分为总分为25分，按分，按7个档次评分个档次评分总分为总分为25分，按分，按5个档次评分个档次评分1. 内容质量、完整性、与原文内容质量、完整性、与原文情境情境融洽；融洽；2. 词汇词汇&语法结构准确恰当多样；语法结构准确恰当多样；3. 上下文衔接上下文衔接&全文连贯全文连贯1. 与所给短文与所给短文&开头语衔接；开头语衔接；2. 内容丰富内容丰富&划线词划线词使用；使用；3. 语法结构语法结构&词汇丰富准确；词汇丰富准确；4. 上下文连贯上下文连贯词数少于词数少于120的，的，酌情酌情扣分扣分词数少于词数少于130，从总分中减去，从总分中减去2分分2225分（优秀分（优秀）1. 创造了创造了新颖新颖、丰富、合理的内容，、丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境文情境融洽度高融洽度高；2. 使用了使用了多样且恰当多样且恰当的的词汇和语法结词汇和语法结构构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完完全不影响全不影响理解；理解；3. 自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段衔接手段，全文结构清晰，全文结构清晰，前后呼应前后呼应，意义连贯。意义连贯。21-25分（优秀分（优秀）1. 与所给短文与所给短文融合度高融合度高，与所提供的各段与所提供的各段落开头语落开头语衔接合理衔接合理；2. 内容丰富，内容丰富，应用了五个以上短文中标出应用了五个以上短文中标出的关键词语的关键词语；3. 所使用所使用语法结构和词汇丰富语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可、准确，可能有些许错误，但能有些许错误，但完全不影响完全不影响意思表达；意思表达；4. 有效地使用了有效地使用了语句间的语句间的连接连接成分，所续成分，所续写短文结构紧凑。写短文结构紧凑。山东续写山东续写浙江续写浙江续写1.1.：原文阅读：原文阅读+ +信息梳理信息梳理 读情节读情节+ +读语言读语言+ +读线索读线索2.2.：潜心构思：潜心构思+ +情节预设情节预设+ +明确方向明确方向 关注关注“两线两线”-”-情节线情节线& &情感线情感线 关注关注“四点四点”-”-四处衔接四处衔接3.3.：初稿勾勒：初稿勾勒+ +润色提升润色提升+ +正规誊写正规誊写二、阅卷心得（评分标准及备考建议）1.1.明确续写的明确续写的评分标准评分标准2.2.反思学生续写中反思学生续写中存在的主要问题存在的主要问题及应对及应对措施措施3 3. .备考续写备考续写的几点的几点思考思考1. 明确读后续写的评分标准评分评分: : 先根据整体情况对文章进行先根据整体情况对文章进行定档定档，然后依据该档的，然后依据该档的相应要求来相应要求来确定或调节档确定或调节档次次，最后打分。，最后打分。打分打分主要从主要从续写续写内容、词汇语法、篇章结构内容、词汇语法、篇章结构三方面考虑。三方面考虑。1.1.创造创造情节情节的质量、续写的完整性及与原文情境的融洽度。的质量、续写的完整性及与原文情境的融洽度。2.2.词汇、语法词汇、语法的准确性、恰当性及多样性。的准确性、恰当性及多样性。3.3.上下文的上下文的衔接衔接和全文的和全文的连贯连贯性。性。读后续写的高考评分标准各档次给分范围和要求各档次给分范围和要求: : 总分为总分为2525分，按分，按7 7个档次个档次给分给分。评分评分档档次次描描 述述第第七档七档（22-25分）分） 优秀档优秀档创造了创造了新颖、丰富、合理新颖、丰富、合理的内容，富有的内容，富有逻辑性逻辑性，续写，续写完整完整，与原文情境，与原文情境融洽度融洽度高。高。使用了使用了多样且恰当的词汇多样且恰当的词汇和和语法语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解。结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解。自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段衔接手段，全文结构清晰，全文结构清晰，前后呼应前后呼应，意义连贯。，意义连贯。读后续写的高考评分标准各档次给分范围和要求各档次给分范围和要求: : 总分为总分为2525分，按分，按7 7个档次个档次给分给分。评分评分档档次次描描 述述第六第六档档（18-21分）分） 良好档良好档创造了创造了比较比较丰富、合理的内容，丰富、合理的内容，比较比较有逻辑性，续写有逻辑性，续写比较比较完整，与原文情境融洽度完整，与原文情境融洽度比较比较高。高。使用了使用了比较比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，有些许语法多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，有些许语法错误，不影响理解。错误，不影响理解。比较比较有效地使用了段落间衔接手段，全文结构有效地使用了段落间衔接手段，全文结构比较比较清晰，意义清晰，意义比较比较连贯。连贯。读后续写的高考评分标准各档次给分范围和要求各档次给分范围和要求: : 总分为总分为2525分，按分，按7 7个档次个档次给分给分。评分评分档档次次描描 述述第五第五档档（15-17分）分） 一般档一般档创造了创造了基本合理基本合理的内容，有的内容，有一定的逻辑性一定的逻辑性，续写，续写基本完整基本完整，与原文情境，与原文情境相关相关。使用了使用了比较恰当比较恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达方式的词汇和语法结构，表达方式不够多样不够多样，表达，表达有些有些错误，但错误，但基本不影响基本不影响理解。理解。使用了使用了语句间衔接语句间衔接手段，全文结构手段，全文结构比较清晰比较清晰，意义，意义比较连贯比较连贯。读后续写的高考评分标准各档次给分范围和要求各档次给分范围和要求: : 总分为总分为2525分，按分，按7 7个档次个档次给分给分。评分评分档档次次描描 述述第四第四档档（11-14分）分） 较差档较差档（低级语法错（低级语法错误，如主宾格误，如主宾格使用混乱，时使用混乱，时态错误，拼写态错误，拼写错误等）错误等）创造了创造了基本完整基本完整的故事内容，但的故事内容，但有的有的情节情节不够合理不够合理或逻辑性不强，与原文情境或逻辑性不强，与原文情境基本相关基本相关。使用了简单的词汇和语法结构，有使用了简单的词汇和语法结构，有部分语言错误部分语言错误和不恰当之处，和不恰当之处，个别个别部分部分影响影响理解。理解。尚有尚有语句衔接的意识，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本语句衔接的意识，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯。连贯。续写得分技巧：* *1 1）内容上内容上鼓励大胆想象，有鼓励大胆想象，有创新创新意识（不离奇，重逻辑），情意识（不离奇，重逻辑），情节节丰富丰富，尽可能，尽可能合理展开合理展开，并注意，并注意前后文呼应前后文呼应，与原文，与原文融洽度高融洽度高。* *2 2）写作尽可能）写作尽可能传递正能量传递正能量. .要提炼有思想性、体现价值观和传递要提炼有思想性、体现价值观和传递正能量的元素（例如珍爱生命，学会合作，学会感恩等）正能量的元素（例如珍爱生命，学会合作，学会感恩等）* *3 3）记叙文）记叙文语言表达语言表达流畅，避免低级语法错误，注意流畅，避免低级语法错误，注意连接词连接词的正的正确使用，使上下文连贯；注意确使用，使上下文连贯；注意句子结构句子结构的多样性和的多样性和语言语言的丰富性。的丰富性。* *4 4）检查，誊写）检查，誊写-检查文章的连贯性、逻辑性，规范性。最后誊检查文章的连贯性、逻辑性，规范性。最后誊写要做到写要做到字迹工整，清晰美观字迹工整，清晰美观。2. 反思学生续写中存在的主要问题及应对措施：* *阅读方面，学生的问题主要是阅读方面，学生的问题主要是词汇贫乏词汇贫乏和和阅读能力不够阅读能力不够或或时间紧张没有意识到解读文本的重要性时间紧张没有意识到解读文本的重要性；* *续写写作部分，主要在续写写作部分，主要在内容内容（逻辑性、合理性），（逻辑性、合理性），词汇和词汇和语法语法（丰富、准确），以及（丰富、准确），以及语篇语篇（连贯性，前后呼应）这（连贯性，前后呼应）这三三大大方面方面存在问题存在问题* *文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离。文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离。* *情节没有得以展开，体现不出丰富新颖。情节没有得以展开，体现不出丰富新颖。* *所创设的情境违背真实生活，缺乏合理性。所创设的情境违背真实生活，缺乏合理性。* *融洽度不高，衔接不合理。融洽度不高，衔接不合理。* *大量对话无意义，段落间分布不均衡。大量对话无意义，段落间分布不均衡。* *主题升华牵强或跑偏。主题升华牵强或跑偏。 内容（逻辑性、合理性）-情节构建中的问题： 词汇和语法方面存在的问题：* *词汇词汇-使用过多的上义词，不会替换相应下义词；使用过多的上义词，不会替换相应下义词； 重复使用同一词语；重复使用同一词语； 基础词汇拼写及词性错误较多基础词汇拼写及词性错误较多* *语法语法-通篇都是简单句的堆积；通篇都是简单句的堆积； 非谓语的使用出现语法错误；非谓语的使用出现语法错误； 时态、语态的错误；时态、语态的错误； 低级语言错误低级语言错误( (如主宾格不分，谓语动词单复数使用混乱等如主宾格不分，谓语动词单复数使用混乱等) )* *衔接不符合逻辑，如要求续写的第一段最后一句与所给第二段衔接不符合逻辑，如要求续写的第一段最后一句与所给第二段首句连接不当，或两段间毫不关联；首句连接不当，或两段间毫不关联；* *句句间逻辑不严密，不能有效借助连词、代词、副词等语言手句句间逻辑不严密，不能有效借助连词、代词、副词等语言手段建立清晰合理的逻辑关系。段建立清晰合理的逻辑关系。 语篇的衔接连贯方面：针对上述问题的应对措施：分期有计划地进行读后续写专题指导课：分期有计划地进行读后续写专题指导课：* *如何有效构建续写情节如何有效构建续写情节* *如何打磨续写语言（词汇和句式两个层面如何打磨续写语言（词汇和句式两个层面）Show,dont tell!Show,dont tell!3. 备考读后续写的几点思考：1.1.读后续写，读后续写，读读是基础是基础。读的深度决定写的高度。读的深度决定写的高度。2.2.要想学生写得漂漂亮亮，清清楚楚，大量地道的要想学生写得漂漂亮亮，清清楚楚，大量地道的语言输入语言输入无疑是必不可少无疑是必不可少的的. .做好高中三年阅读规划做好高中三年阅读规划，精读与泛读有效结合。，精读与泛读有效结合。（2121世纪报，新概念世纪报，新概念2&32&3，黑布林英语阅读，书虫，典范英语阅读），黑布林英语阅读，书虫，典范英语阅读）3.3.课堂教学课堂教学的指导的指导上：可以组织学生进行小组讨论，读写展示活动、小组互上：可以组织学生进行小组讨论，读写展示活动、小组互评活动等多评活动等多。同时，老师们同时，老师们要要有步骤地进行写作方法微技能的指导。有步骤地进行写作方法微技能的指导。4.4.写作输出写作输出方面，帮助学生规范写作，形成素养。方面，帮助学生规范写作，形成素养。总结归纳如下：学&教如何写如何写：1. 1. 情节情节-二条四点定框架二条四点定框架 + + 细节补充细节补充 指向主题指向主题 2. 2. 语言语言-逻辑连贯（连词、代词等逻辑连贯（连词、代词等） + + 生动形象生动形象 3. 3. 规范规范-字数字数+ +卷面美颜卷面美颜如何教如何教：1. 1. 明确评分标准（明确评分标准（1616，16-2116-21，22-2522-25） 2. 2. 指导方法（文本解读指导方法（文本解读+ +情节构建情节构建+ +结尾升华结尾升华） 3. 3. 修改评价修改评价高一年级：重基础高一年级：重基础 读经典读经典 多仿写多仿写高二年级：重积累高二年级：重积累 理逻辑理逻辑 提表达提表达高三年级：重打磨高三年级：重打磨 抓规范抓规范 勤思背勤思背高一续写示范课（两节）高二续写写前指导课（淄博实验中学 吴美丽）高三续写写作专题指导课+高三续写写作讲评课三、及人教版选修小说欣赏入门 典范英语 黑布林英语阅读 高考真题完型填空加工再利用新高考写作高效提分教程-读后续写构建语料库构建语料库读后续写的好词好句反复应用一、情感好词： 喜乐 The smile on her face shone like a diamond. A simile of understanding flashed across his face. A ripple of excitement ran through them. Laughter lingered around the room. His eyes twinkled with pleasure. A wild joy took hold of her. Unforgettable were her eyes that shone like diamonds and lips held in a steady smile. I was wild with joy. I was pleased beyond description. She wore a shining smile on her face. Her smile lit up the whole room. She shed tears of joy. Her eyes were sparkling like diamonds. She was overflowing with happiness. Her flushed face was shining with excitement. Joy welled up inside her. I was floating on air. Amusement gleamed in his eyes.愤怒： I was seized by anger. He was fuming with rage. His anger boiled over. He could hardly/scarcely contain his rage. He was breathing fire and fury. His voice trembled with anger. He gave me a look of burning anger. He glared at me with burning eyes. He flared up at the word. His face clouded with anger.悲伤烦恼 He stood silently, tears rolling down his cheeks. I feel like I am floating in an ocean of sadness. Her hands were shaking. She was on the verge of tears. Hearing the news, so desperate was he that he drowned sadness in wine. She burst into tears and ran out of the room. She sobbed, hiding her face in her hands. I tried to fight back tears. /My eyes were filled with tears. A frown（皱眉）now stood on his face. They sat there with glum looks on their faces. The news cast a cloud of gloom over his face. He brimmed over with sorrow when. They were immersed in sorrow. These days he was in low spirits.害怕：He turned to me, with his eyes full of horror.Fear slowly creeps upon her.She was struck with horror when.She was choked by fear.Her face turned pale and stood there tongue-tied.A flood of fear welled up in him. / Fear flooded over him.Her heart beat so violently that she felt nearly suffocated（窒息）.She shook all over, feeling like sitting on pins and needles.感动： Touched deeply/immensely, we Tears filling her eyes, she offered her heartfelt gratitude. With tears streaming down her face, she.构建语料库构建语料库-来自平时积累（各种心情）来自平时积累（各种心情）读后续写的好词好句反复应用一、情感好词： 喜乐 The smile on her face shone like a diamond. A simile of understanding flashed across his face. A ripple of excitement ran through them. Laughter lingered around the room. His eyes twinkled with pleasure. A wild joy took hold of her. Unforgettable were her eyes that shone like diamonds and lips held in a steady smile. I was wild with joy. I was pleased beyond description. She wore a shining smile on her face. Her smile lit up the whole room. She shed tears of joy. Her eyes were sparkling like diamonds. She was overflowing with happiness. Her flushed face was shining with excitement. Joy welled up inside her. I was floating on air. Amusement gleamed in his eyes.愤怒： I was seized by anger. He was fuming with rage. His anger boiled over. He could hardly/scarcely contain his rage. He was breathing fire and fury. His voice trembled with anger. He gave me a look of burning anger. He glared at me with burning eyes. He flared up at the word. His face clouded with anger. 构建语料构建语料库库-来自高考真题完型来自高考真题完型I jumped at the idea of taking the class because, after all, who doesnt want to save a few dollars?And, even if I werent excited enough about free credits, news about our instructor was appealing enoughto me.In his introduction, he made it clear that our credits would be hard-earned.I managed to get an A in that course and learned life lessons that have served me well beyond theclassroom .These words still ring true today in my role as a journalist.2018年全国一卷So imagine my delight when he emailed me saying he wanted to come to visit me.Fortunately , after a brief stay in hospital, Ben was well enough to be allowed to leave and later thefamily met up for dinner. 2018年全国二卷I never felt an urge to learn any sign language before. Little did I know that I would discover my love for ASL.After that, feeling the need to explore further, I decided to drop in on one of ASL clubs meetings.Yet instead of being discouraged by my slow progress, I was excited. I then made it a point to attend thosemeetings and learn all I could.Instead , if there had been any talking, it would have caused us to learn less.2018年全国三卷 构建语料库构建语料库-来自读后续写语篇来自读后续写语篇 She turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top.1.As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family.2.Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落）somewhere at a distance.3. As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter.2016年10月浙江试题1. The streams were long gone back into the earth. 2.He wasnt walking with his usual steps.3. He was obviously walking with great effort, trying to be as still as possible.4.Moments later, however, he was once again walking in that slow purposeful long step toward the woods.5. Finally, my curiosity got the best of me. I crept out of the house and followed him on his journey.6. He was cupping both hands in front of him as he walked: being very careful not to spill the water heheld in them.7. Branches and thorns slapped his little face but he did not try to avoid them.读后续写训练语篇 构建语料库构建语料库来自名著来自名著1. Carters father paused, again looking deep into his sons eyes.2. His mind began to race, and in his fantasy, the horse and rider became black figures, risingand falling in slow circles against a fiery red sky.3. A small squeeze of the trigger, and Carter Druse would have done his duty.4. But this time he pointed his gun at the horse. Words rang in his head.5. His eyes climbed to the top of the cliff that looked over the valley.6. His hair streamed back, waving in the wind.7. In fact, if his commanding officer were to see him, he would order Carter shot immediately.8. If he dropped a stone from the edge of this cliff, it would fall for six hundred meters beforedisappearing into the forest in the valley below.9. Hidden in the valleys forest were five union regiments - thousands of Carters fellow soldiers.10.Brave and strong as he was, Carter almost fainted from the shock of what he had seen 选自自编课程名著短篇小说阅读与欣赏Nothing is too difficult if you put all your heart into it.课后续写录播读烟台一中烟台一中 高三英语组高三英语组 读后续写的评分标准综述评分评分: : 主要从主要从续写内容、词汇语法、篇章结构续写内容、词汇语法、篇章结构三方面考虑。三方面考虑。1.1.创造创造情节情节的质量、续写的的质量、续写的及与原文情境的及与原文情境的。2.2.词汇、语法词汇、语法的准确性、恰当性及多样性。的准确性、恰当性及多样性。3.3.上下文的上下文的衔接衔接和全文的和全文的连贯连贯性。性。What is What is plotplot? ?Plot is the way an author creates and organizes a chain of events in a narrative. The plot must follow a logical, attractive format that draws the reader in. Plot differs from “story” in that it highlights a specific and purposeful cause-and-effect relationship between a sequence of major events in the narrative.Plot is a literary term defined as the events that make up a story, particularly as they relate to one another in a pattern, in a sequence, through cause and effect.A logical plot?A logical plot? Twilight merged into . With the class approaching, I got more and more nervous. Despite the hours devoted to it these days, I still felt butterflies in my stomach. The whole night found me turning and tossing in bed, unable to fall asleep. I got up and opened the window. The air was so fresh, and the lovely birds were hopping from branch to branch, singing beautiful songs merrily. Suddenly, I sensed the smell of spring, with everything coming back to life., I took my cellphone and read an article about how China take on the virus. Proud of the efforts China made to keep standing, I felt lucky to have such a big country to fall back on. , which is time for my class. With a trembling hand, I turned on the computer, my heart pumping violently. Taking a deep breath, I managed to calm down and began my class as usual.后续-Logical plotting1. 1. 续写第一段的内容设计既要考虑与上文的融洽衔接，同时也要续写第一段的内容设计既要考虑与上文的融洽衔接，同时也要考虑本段和最后一段开头语的呼应和衔接，而后者是容易忽视的考虑本段和最后一段开头语的呼应和衔接，而后者是容易忽视的部分。部分。2. 2. 续写第二段是文章的结尾，要关注与文章开头的遥相呼应，凸续写第二段是文章的结尾，要关注与文章开头的遥相呼应，凸显主题，升华精神。显主题，升华精神。* * * *如何构建续写情节如何构建续写情节(logical plotting(logical plotting) ) 本节重点本节重点The exposition introduces the , describes theand establishes the in the story.The rising action is where builds and the problem gets worse and becomes more .The climax is in the story. It is usually the most exciting part in the story and the part that makes the reader eager to keep reading.The falling action is the events that happen after the climax and lead to a resolution.The resolution is the outcome of the story. It is how things end up or turn out for the characters.1. 1. 文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离2. 2. 违背真实生活，缺乏合理性违背真实生活，缺乏合理性3. 3. 融洽度不高，衔接不合理融洽度不高，衔接不合理4. 4. 大量对话无意义，段落间分布不均衡大量对话无意义，段落间分布不均衡5. 5. 主题升华牵强或跑偏主题升华牵强或跑偏1. 1. 文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离 Conner ran to Calebs side, and the boys tried to Conner ran to Calebs side, and the boys tried to co