高三英语作文写作指导.ppt

English Writing 中央号召创建节约型社会，可是许多校园内部中央号召创建节约型社会，可是许多校园内部浪费现象严重。请你在班会上发表演讲，号召同学浪费现象严重。请你在班会上发表演讲，号召同学们从我做起，杜绝浪费。们从我做起，杜绝浪费。提示：提示：1、浪费现象：水、电、餐厅的食物及其他；、浪费现象：水、电、餐厅的食物及其他； 2、危害、危害:自身性格，父母财政负担，自然资自身性格，父母财政负担，自然资 源；源； 3、制止浪费现象的措施：由自己设想。、制止浪费现象的措施：由自己设想。要求：要求：1、词数、词数150左右；演讲的开头和结尾左右；演讲的开头和结尾 已写好已写好,不记入总词数。不记入总词数。 2、不要逐字逐条翻译，要组成一篇、不要逐字逐条翻译，要组成一篇 通顺连贯的短文。通顺连贯的短文。How can we organize the passage? Para.1MeasuresPhenomenaHarmPara.3Para.2 Para. 1 Phenomenaphave lights onporder too much food and leave leftovers on the table Some students have the lights on in the daytime. Some students order too much food and leave a lot of leftovers on the table. Some ask their parents for a lot of pocket money and spend too much on snacks or drinks. uuse paper casuallyuspend pocket money on snacksuSome students leave tap water running after washing.pleave tap water runningPara.2 Harmphave a bad effect on ones character building padd financial burden to ones parents puse up the worlds limited natural resourcesl(school) burden with extra expenditure(开支开支).l The bad habit of being wasteful will have a bad effect on their own character. It adds financial burden to their parents. The worlds limited natural resources will be used up soon. Para.3 Measuresphave a clear awareness of the serious situationpeducate students in schoolpset rulespstart from oneselfptake the lead in reducing the wastep In my opinion, we should have a clear awareness of the serious situation. We should educate the students to form the good habit. We should start with ourselves and take the lead in reducing the waste to save everything. Some students leave tap water running after washing. Some students have the lights on in the daytime. Some students order too much food and leave a lot of leftoverson the table. Some ask their parents for a lot of pocket money and spend too much on snacks or drinks. The bad habit of being wasteful will have a bad effect on their own character. It adds financial burden to their parents. The worlds limited natural resources will be used up soon. In my opinion, we should have a clear awareness of the serious situation. We should educate the students to form the good habit. We should start with ourselves and take the lead in reducing the waste to save everything. 117 words第五档第五档( (很好很好) )（21-2521-25分）分）第四档第四档( (好好) )（16-2016-20分）分）第三档第三档( (适当适当) )（11-1511-15分）分）第二档第二档( (较差较差) )（6-106-10分）分）第一档第一档( (差差) )（1-51-5分）分）书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求第五档（第五档（21-2521-25分）分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。完全完成了试题规定的任务。l准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容，要点无遗漏准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容，要点无遗漏l应用了较多的语法结构和词汇应用了较多的语法结构和词汇l语法结构和词汇有少许错误，但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式语法结构和词汇有少许错误，但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式 所致；具备较强的语言应用能力所致；具备较强的语言应用能力l有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑完全达到了预期的写作目的。完全达到了预期的写作目的。第四档（第四档（16-2016-20分）分）完成了试题规定的任务。完成了试题规定的任务。l比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容l应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求l语法结构和词汇应用基本准确，少许错误主要是因为尝试较复语法结构和词汇应用基本准确，少许错误主要是因为尝试较复 杂语言结构或词汇所致杂语言结构或词汇所致l应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 达到了预期的写作目的。达到了预期的写作目的。第三档（第三档（11-1511-15分）分）基本完成了试题规定的任务。基本完成了试题规定的任务。l能说出短文的基本内容，但逻辑关系较混乱，要点有遗漏，能说出短文的基本内容，但逻辑关系较混乱，要点有遗漏， 没有写自己的认识没有写自己的认识l应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求l有一些语法结构和词汇的错误，但不影响理解有一些语法结构和词汇的错误，但不影响理解 l应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。第二档（第二档（6-106-10分）分）未恰当完成试题规定的任务。未恰当完成试题规定的任务。l未能清楚地表达短文的内容，写了一些无关内容未能清楚地表达短文的内容，写了一些无关内容l语法结构简单，词汇项目有限语法结构简单，词汇项目有限l有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解l较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性信息未能清楚地传达给读者。信息未能清楚地传达给读者。How can we get our passage polished up? Some students leave tap water running after washing. Some students have the lights on in the daytime. Some students order too much food and leave much leftovers on the table. Some ask their parents for a lot of pocket money and spend too much on snacks or drinks. ,The students leave tap water running after washing and have the lights on in the daytime, which means a huge waste of water and electricity. Some students get into a bad habit of ordering much delicious food in the canteen but they dont eat all the food, leaving much on the table. Some ask their parents for a lot of pocket money. So it is high time we had to deal with the problem. The reasons are as follows:在表达准确、保持连贯的基础上在表达准确、保持连贯的基础上, , 尽量使用较复杂的语法结构和较高尽量使用较复杂的语法结构和较高 级的词汇级的词汇; ;Tips The bad habit of being wasteful will have a bad effect on their own character. It adds financial burden to their parents. The worlds limited natural resources will be used up. In the first place, the bad habit of being wasteful will have a bad effect on their own character. Secondly, it adds financial burden to their parents. Last but not least, the worlds limited natural resources, such as water and electricity , will be used up soon.First of all Firstly,To begin with,In addition,Besides,Moreover,Whats moreFinally,Whats worse,在在表达准确、表达准确、保持连贯的基础上保持连贯的基础上, , 尽量使用较复杂的语法结构和较高尽量使用较复杂的语法结构和较高 级的词汇级的词汇; ;恰当使用过渡词或过渡句恰当使用过渡词或过渡句, ,使文章使文章 结构紧凑结构紧凑; ;Tips In my opinion, we should have a clear awareness of the serious situation. We should educate the students to form the good habit. We should start with ourselves and take the lead in reducing the waste to save everything. But how can we reduce waste? In my opinion, it is everybodys duty to fight against waste. On the one hand, I should start with myself to save everything. On the other hand, Id like to remind my friends here to take the lead in reducing the waste.As far as I am concerned, I think only when all of us are fully aware of its seriousness can the situation be improved. On the one hand, it is necessary for schools to educate every student not to waste anything in any form and on the other hand every one of us should start with ourselves to fight against waste. It is not until all of us are involved in the activity that we can bring the situation under control.在在表达准确、表达准确、保持连贯的基础上保持连贯的基础上, , 尽量使用较复杂的语法结构和较尽量使用较复杂的语法结构和较 高级的词汇高级的词汇; ;恰当使用过渡词或过渡句恰当使用过渡词或过渡句, ,使文章使文章 结构紧凑结构紧凑; ;适当地变换句型结构和所用词汇适当地变换句型结构和所用词汇, , 尽量避免重复和单调。尽量避免重复和单调。Tips 养成良好的写作习惯养成良好的写作习惯一、书写规范，卷面整洁；一、书写规范，卷面整洁；二、审清题目，提炼要点；二、审清题目，提炼要点；三、组词造句，组句成篇；三、组词造句，组句成篇；四、仔细检查，认真修改。四、仔细检查，认真修改。 Nowdays, it is common that the students have tap water running after washing and leave the lights on in the daytime, which means a huge waste of water and electricity. Some students get into a bad habit of ordering much delicious food in the canteen but they dont eat all the food, leaving much on the table. Some even ask their parents for a lot of pocket money. So it is high time we had to deal with the problem. The reasons are as follows:Sample: In the first place, the bad habit of being wasteful will have a bad effect on their own character. Secondly, it adds financial burden to their parents. Last but not least, it also exhausts the worlds limited natural resources, such as water and electricity. But how can we reduce waste? In my opinion, it is everybodys duty to fight against waste. On the one hand, I should start with myself to save everything. On the other hand, Id like to remind my friends here to take the lead in reducing the waste.Thanks for your kind attendance! 国务院日前向全国各机构下发关于限制生产销售使用塑料国务院日前向全国各机构下发关于限制生产销售使用塑料袋的通知。请根据以下提示袋的通知。请根据以下提示,用英语写一篇用英语写一篇150词左右的短文词左右的短文,简简述该规定的有关内容述该规定的有关内容,并就此谈谈你的看法。并就此谈谈你的看法。内容内容自自2008年年6月月1日起，中国在所有超市、商场等日起，中国在所有超市、商场等场所实行塑料袋有偿使用制度，规定一律不得场所实行塑料袋有偿使用制度，规定一律不得免费提供塑料购物袋。免费提供塑料购物袋。背景背景中国每年都要消耗大量的塑料购物袋。由于过中国每年都要消耗大量的塑料购物袋。由于过量使用及回收处理不到位等原因，造成了严重量使用及回收处理不到位等原因，造成了严重的能源浪费和环境污染。的能源浪费和环境污染。后果后果如果不予治理，终有一天，满世界的白色将吞如果不予治理，终有一天，满世界的白色将吞没我们赖以生存的地球。没我们赖以生存的地球。你的你的看法看法 From June 1, 2008, China will ban shops from offering plastic shopping bags for free. All supermarkets, department stores and shops must charge the customers for them. Each year China consumes a large number of plastic shopping bags. Too much use of them, inadequate recycling and other factors have caused a serious waste of resources and serious environmental pollution as well. If things go on like this, the earth we live on will be buried in an ocean of white rubbish one day. The new regulation brings China in line with a growing international trend to cut back on the use of plastic bags. Personally, I think the regulation is a timely measure against plastic bags. The ban on free plastic bags encourages people to be more environmentally friendly. As students, we should be fully aware of the damage they cause and use paper or cloth bags instead to reduce environmental pollution.Thanks for your kind attendance!Dear friends, May I have your attention, please? Now Id like to make a speech here. With the improvement of living standard, there is a lot of waste on campus. For example the students _ Therefore, Im sure, with everyone doing his bit, we will change the present situation the better. Thats all. Thank!1. First, Next, Then, Finally.2. thus, therefore, however, in fact, besides, on the contrary, instead of3. first, second, and, but, for, or4. whats more, as a result, what is better still5. as far as I know/am concerned; personally;使用好过渡性词语使用好过渡性词语过渡性词语是把在意义上相连贯的句子联过渡性词语是把在意义上相连贯的句子联接在一起的链条接在一起的链条, 指出作者思维活动发展的指出作者思维活动发展的方向。方向。