高中英语写作技巧及要领.ppt

抄改连扩抓审书面表达书面表达六步法书面表达六步法书面表达六步法一、审题抄改连扩抓书面表达3 3 审审: : 审文体审文体 审要求审要求 审人称审人称2007浙江浙江高考高考在英语课堂上，你喜欢老师授课时只用在英语课堂上，你喜欢老师授课时只用英语还是英语、汉语兼用。请你围绕英语还是英语、汉语兼用。请你围绕“ “ How do you prefer your English classes to be taught? In English only , or in both English and Chinese? ” ” 这个问题，参考这个问题，参考所给要点，选择一种授课形式，写一篇英所给要点，选择一种授课形式，写一篇英语短文语短文授课形式一：授课形式一： 只用英语只用英语授课形式二：授课形式二： 英语、汉语兼用英语、汉语兼用优点：有助于提高优点：有助于提高 听说能力等听说能力等缺憾：不易听懂缺憾：不易听懂 等等结论：结论：优点：易于理解等优点：易于理解等缺憾：英语氛围不浓缺憾：英语氛围不浓 等等结论：结论：注意：注意：1.1.词数词数100-120, 100-120, 短文开头已给出短文开头已给出( (不计词数不计词数). ). 2. 2.参考词汇参考词汇: atmosphere : atmosphere 氛围氛围I prefer my English classes to be taught in I prefer my English classes to be taught in 审文体：审文体： 审要求：审要求： 审人称：审人称：议论文议论文根据所给要点，选择一种授课形式提论点，根据所给要点，选择一种授课形式提论点，论据，论证过程论据，论证过程第一人称第一人称某考生某考生 I prefer my English classes to be taught in both English and Chinese. Now in our English classes, with how to be taught we have two choices: In English only, or in both English and Chinese, and its all has its advantages and disadvantages. If in English only, can make our listening and speaking more good, and what worse, we will hard to understand our class. But if in both English and Chinese, also understand will be more easily, the English atmosphere is less than in English only. In my opinion, we study English to understand it is the most important. After we study and understand it good, listening or speaking will be easy. So I think my English classes to be taught in both English and Chinese will be more better.书面表达六步法二、抓要点确定主要行为What happened?抄改连扩审书面表达 时下，各类电视节目广泛使用短信参与方式，对此时下，各类电视节目广泛使用短信参与方式，对此人们评价不一。请你对此现象向人们评价不一。请你对此现象向21st Century 21st Century 投稿，投稿，谈谈个人看法：谈谈个人看法： 态度一态度一 态度二态度二 你的观点你的观点给观众提供了更多的给观众提供了更多的参与机会参与机会 控制不当，节目品位控制不当，节目品位无法保证无法保证 ？ 给媒体带来更多收益给媒体带来更多收益 短信费用过高，观众短信费用过高，观众易生反感易生反感 迎合年轻人对新事物迎合年轻人对新事物的追求的追求 沉溺于此，浪费精力沉溺于此，浪费精力 要求要求:1:1词数：词数：120120词左右。词左右。 2 2可根据内容要点适当增加细节，以使行文连贯可根据内容要点适当增加细节，以使行文连贯. . Practice: 1. 提供机会提供机会2. 带来收益带来收益3. 迎合追求迎合追求4. 保证品位保证品位5. 产生反感产生反感6. 浪费精力浪费精力7. 你的观点你的观点 offer chances bring in profits / benefit from appeal to the needs of ensure the taste feel bad / bored / annoyed waste time and energy take a critical attitude 列出要点书面表达六步法三、扩展成句形成基本语义单位Who did what?抄改连抓审书面表达 1 offer chances Audiences are offered more chances to participate in the live programs. 2 bring in profits / benefit from They bring in profits to the mass media. 3 appeal to the needs of They appeal to the needs of the young people. In my opinion we should take a critical attitude towards short messages. 书面表达六步法四、连句成文正确使用过渡词，使行文流畅。并注意段与段的衔接。 抄改扩抓审书面表达a. 表示列举和顺序用表示列举和顺序用 firstly, secondly, last, then, finally, next, such as，after that b. 表示意义增补和引申用表示意义增补和引申用also, besides, above all, whats more / whats worse c. 表示结果用表示结果用 so, therefore, as a result, sothatd. 表示意义转折用表示意义转折用 instead, however, bute. 表示解释说明用表示解释说明用 in other words, that is to sayf. 表示概括和总结用表示概括和总结用 in one/a word, in all, as we knowg. 表示时间顺序用表示时间顺序用 now, at first, when, afterh. 表示并列关系用表示并列关系用 or, and, also, too, i. 表示条件关系用表示条件关系用 as (so) long as, if, unless j. 表示举例用表示举例用 for example, for instance, such ask. 表示让步关系用表示让步关系用 though, even if , however, as 1.过好行文逻辑关过好行文逻辑关A passage without connectorsDefenders hold the view that short messages offer the audiences more chances to participate in the live programsThe mass media benefit a lot from them.They appeal to the need of the young people A passage with connectorsDefenders hold the view that short messages offer the audiences more chances to participate in the live programsIn this way, the mass media benefit a lotfrom themOn the other hand, they appealto the need of the young people Practice: Try to improve the passage below.Critics accuse that if the short messagesare out of control, we cannot ensure thetaste of the programs. The expenses may make audiences feel badsome teenagersare addicted to them and too much timeand energy are wasted Critics accuse that if the short messagesare out of control, we cannot ensure thetaste of the programs. Whats more, theexpenses may make audiences feel badTo make matters worse, some teenagersare so addicted to them that too much timeand energy are wastedOne possible version: At present, short messages are widely involved in various TV programs. People react to them in different ways Defenders hold the view that short messages offer the audiences more chances to participate in the live programsIn this way, the mass media benefit a lot from themOn the other hand, they appeal to the need of the young people Critics accuse that if the short messages are out of control, we cannot ensure the taste of the programs. Whats more, the expenses may make audiences feel badTo make matters worse, some teenagers are so addicted to them that too much time and energy are wasted As far as I am concerned, the short message is typical of information technology, but it is a powerful tool that needs to be used with care2.2.用活语言，准确生动用活语言，准确生动 使用常用高级语法:非谓语动词，with复合结构，虚拟语气，强调句，倒装句，感叹句，定语从句，状语从句等The meal was so nice that we all enjoyed it very much.a. The meal was very nice. We all enjoyed it very much. (so that/sothat/suchthat)Not only is he a famous singer but also he has written some interesting books.b. He is a famous singer. He has also written some interesting books. (not onlybut also)c. My brother was riding a bike. I sat on the seat behind him. (with sb. doing) My brother was riding a bike with me sitting on the seat behind him.Not having received his letter he decided to write to her again.d. He hadnt received a letter . He decided to write to her again. (not having done)e. We are glad to see such great changes in our school life. ( how )How glad we are to see such great changes in our school life. 一篇档次较高、得分较多的书面表达，一篇档次较高、得分较多的书面表达，给阅卷老师的印象应该是：给阅卷老师的印象应该是： 语意要合情合理，过渡自然；语意要合情合理，过渡自然； 语句要有简有繁，随语句要有简有繁，随“意意”而安；而安； 语法要结构正确，无懈可击；语法要结构正确，无懈可击； 语言要地道流畅，书写规范。语言要地道流畅，书写规范。 目前，许多学校对学生采取封闭式管理，学生对此看法不一。目前，许多学校对学生采取封闭式管理，学生对此看法不一。请根据下表所提供的信息，写一篇英语短文，谈谈自己的看法。请根据下表所提供的信息，写一篇英语短文，谈谈自己的看法。 有的同学认为有的同学认为 有的同学认为有的同学认为 学校限制我们的自由；学学校限制我们的自由；学生和社会接触少；学生的生和社会接触少；学生的兴趣和爱好不能得到充分兴趣和爱好不能得到充分的发展。因此的发展。因此 学校是学习知识的地方：学学校是学习知识的地方：学生应该安心在学校里学习；生应该安心在学校里学习；学生缺乏自觉性，离开了老学生缺乏自觉性，离开了老师，可能会师，可能会 你的看法：你的看法： 注意：注意：1. 1. 字数字数120120左右左右; ; 不要逐字翻译。不要逐字翻译。2. 2. 短文开头已给出，不计人总词数。短文开头已给出，不计人总词数。 Nowadays a lot of schools keep their students in school all day long Practice Nowadays a lot of schools keep their students in school all day long. Students have different opinions about it. Some of the students think they enjoy less freedom and have little chance to get in touch with society. They are not able to fully develop their interests and hobbies. Therefore, they have lost interest in their studies. Some others think school is the best place to get knowledge so they should put their heart into their lessons. Some students lack the ability to control themselves. Once out ofschool, they may lose control of themselves and do something that will influence / affect their studies. Personally I think, it is necessary to keep students at school. But at the same time schools should organize various activities so that students can enjoy their school life. (I dont agree to keep students at school all day. Schools should offer students more free time to develop their personal interests.) 文不对题（文体格式不规范）离题太远（抓不到要点，该说的不说，不该说的说的太多）词不达意（有的甚至用汉语标注、留空或抄袭试卷上的材料）病句太多（时态、语态、人称、数等语法错误）卷面不工整（字迹潦草、乱涂改、添插箭头满篇飞，这是经电脑扫描后网上阅卷的大忌!） 前车之鉴!书面表达六步法五、查错改错注意时态、标点是否正确,词数是否符合要求,是否有破句等。抄连扩抓审书面表达书面表达六步法六、誊写修改无误后，认真规范地誊写在规定的地方。 卷面不工整要扣分!改连扩抓审书面表达小结审题，抓点造句，成文改错，誉写Practice makes perfect.Practice makes perfect.Thank you for your attention!