广东省汕头二模英语读后续写思路讲解.docx

高考英语写作训练5月3日 汕头二模文章续写：正负正The average present merely satisfies a temporary desire; the great one becomes more precious with time going by. 回忆When I was a boy of fourteen, I needed to have 80 hours of community service per year and I used to take care of Mrs. Longs garden, which was near the Presbyterian Church. As a junior high school student, I devoted myself to it, sweeping the fallen leaves and mowing the lawn (修剪草坪). There I learnt how to cut away dry branches and even helped to plant a sapling (小树苗). Tired as I was every time I finished my work, I did enjoy the time there for learning something new. I clearly remembered that Mrs. Long, a nice and caring elder, always treated me to delicious meals and drinks. She also loved taking photos, always with an old camera in hand. It was said that the camera was passed down from her father and she cherished it a lot. 主线：做社区服务照顾花园她给我吃喝我开心支线/伏笔/铺垫：拍照/照相机 Several days before Christmas, she whispered to me, “When Christmas comes, I shall have a present for you.” I spent much time wondering what it would be. The boys I played with had baseball gloves, ice skates and bicycles, and I was so eager to acquire any one of these that I convinced myself that she intended to choose from among them. But at the same time, I had some doubts whether she would buy me such things because she was not that well-off.The day before Christmas, I went there as before. With the work done, I was going to leave when she pulled me aside. “Kid, wait for a minute,” she said, leading me into her living room. She seated me on a chair, went to another room, and in a moment stood before me holding a small package that under no circumstances could hold a bicycle or a pair of skates or even a baseball glove. It weighed almost nothing.随时间经历更宝贵+拍照/照相机+小盒子+没重量= 照片+信/文字 主题I took the package with disappointment.我心理：展开失望、掩饰失望、愧疚、自责我动作：感谢、回家、开始打开她心理：看出来我的失望、不介意、微笑她动作：让我回家打开l 一个人的场景比两个人的场景好写Opening the package, I was totally astonished.环境/事物：什么照片、为什么惊讶动作：握着礼物心理：感动、流泪、感激主题：随时间推移更加宝贵心理活动描述65-AStill, I bowed to the elder with appreciation. I also expressed my greatest gratitude towards her caring treat to me. Mrs. Long gave me a warm smile, which made me feel a bit guilty at the thought of acquiring expensive gift from her. We bit farewell to each other with “Merry Christmas”. Then I got home and couldnt wait to unwrap the package.10-AStill, I sincerely expressed my appreciation for Mrs. Long, though how desperate I wished my reward on Christmas day would be my dream present! Mrs. Long smiled. As my grateful word was heard, her eyes shined with joy, seeming really expected to grasp my delight when I opened the present. In that moment, a shameful feeling suddenly appeared in my heart. “That is her love for me.” I thought.101-PWaving goodbye to her mechanically, I left for home, casually shoving the package into my pocket. Wasnt a whole years labor for her worth just a baseball glove? What was it for to spend 80 hours per year in that ruddy garden only to receive something weightless? But come to think of that, I did gain pleasure working in the garden. And although the package weighed nothing, it didnt indicate whats inside worths nothing. Once again curious to know whats inside, I sat down, brought the package out of my pocket.88-YIt was such a small package that couldn't contain any my dream present. So I attempted to mask my depression, and conveyed my wishes on Christmas to her. Apparently, I left ahead of schedule and turning for fun with my friends, ignoring the existence of the present. To my disappointment, all my friends were showing off the presents they had received, which made me felt a little envious, driving me rushed to the corner to see what would inside the package on earth.65-AIt was the proceeded scene that I would remember lifelong. Inside the package were a series of photos, which were taken during my community service the day I learnt how to cut dry branches and mow the law. Even the memorable day that I planted my first sapling was captured by Mrs. Long! I hugged these photographs tightly on my chest, tears rolling down my cheeks, for they logged my growth. As I matured into an adult and studied abroad, I cherished this precious gift which rooted in my memory forever and ever.10-AIn the package, some photos laid in it, which were memories of the summer and fall. Looking my past efforts, such as planting the sapling or cutting away dry branches, I could feel my satisfaction dancing all the way into my heart. Mrs. Long used her old camera grasping many meaningful moments this year. “A wonderful gift, Mrs. Long.” I expressed my appreciation again. She smiled and asked kindly, “I want to bake the cake in the afternoon. Would you like any taste? My child?” 101-PIn it were delicate fallen leaves collected from each sapling I help planting. Together with several photos of me, the oldest dating back to four years ago when I started the service. A note with Mrs. Longs neat handwrite read: “The gift for your time spent for me can be no better than time itself. I wish these can keep forever the joyful time weve spent together in our garden. Merry Christmas!” Reading the notes, my eyes misted. Indeed, time weighs nothing, but it is worth everything. 内容设计环境88-YThere are several photos in it, recording many scenes when I was working for the garden. Mrs. Long always focused on me, expressing her love to me through these meaningful photos! Looking back to myself, I just kept thinking of some temporary desires, overlooking such a sincere love in the near distance. Out of regret, I said farewell to my friends and dashed to Mrs. Long's garden. To my surprise, she seemed as if she knew I would come in advance, throwing a sweet glance to me. Just at the moment, I came to realize that small package was so precious that couldn't be weighed by anything.学科网（北京）股份有限公司