高三英语复习——读后续写.docx

读后续写（三）（2017.6浙江卷）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (骑行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday. Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, thats a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasnt a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him. Macs heart jumped. He found out his can of bear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Macs relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Macs bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase（追赶）.Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down. He was a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, hed be easy caught up and the wolfs teeth would be tearing into his flesh.At this moment, Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didnt think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1The car abruptly stopped in front of him._Paragraph 2A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived._注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3. 续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好;4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。一、阅读理解能力(一).浅层的信息定位能力：who, when, where, what, why, how等审前文大意以及要点:核心内容解读：Mac 与朋友一起去游玩。一个朋友的自行车坏了，就让他先走，说之后他们会赶上他的。他在前行的时候，却意外被狼追赶了。于是他拼命逃，却得不到援助。这时，一辆车停在了他前面.要点：Who: Mac, his friends, Paul and BeekyWhen: on a bright, warm July afternoonWhere: from his home to AlaskaWhat: took a trip and made an adventureWhy: enjoyed the life (二).深层的文本分析能力：理清故事的发展线索 关注故事的语言风格【情节分析】Mac与朋友骑行朋友车坏，让Mac先行Mac独行，欣赏风景被狼追赶，最初误以为是狗心跳加速，朝狼喷洒喷雾狼后退，一分钟后又赶上，咬破帐篷包再次喷洒喷雾，狼更快地追赶Mac向经过的汽车求助，同时不敢减速Paul和 Becky开车路过，发现险情Mac听到汽车声，拦下汽车，而狼就离他十几码远。二、由读到写的思维能力细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻辑关系；围绕划定的10个关键词，合理创新故事情节。1.抓住首句设问。Para. 1: The car abruptly stopped in front of him.Question 1: Whose car was it?Question 2: Why did it stop?Question 3: How did Mac feel?  Question 4: What would Mac do? Question 5: Did Paul and Becky offered help?Para. 2: A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived.Question 1: After they arrived, what would they do? Question 2: How did they express gratitude?Question 3: Were they to continue the bike trip to Alaska?2. The underlined words: Mac, friends, bicycle, pedaled, home, wolf, jumped, cars, climb, PaulClassify 10 key words into different groups:Characters：Mac, friends, wolf, PaulBehaviors: pedaled, jumped, climbTools：bicycle, carsPlaces: home三、书面表达能力(一). 语言的丰富性1. 词汇、句式、语法的多样性句式结构：简单句，复合句以及强调句、倒装句等特殊句式的使用情况。语法结构：主被动语态、非谓语动词、独立主格结构、with的复合结构、虚拟语气的使用情况。词汇选择：常见初级词汇、高级词汇，以及不同词性的使用情况。修辞手法：比喻、拟人、夸张等修辞格的使用情况。【词汇精炼】赤手空拳bare hands 与斗争 fight with/against靠近approach 危险状况dangerous situation僵持状态deadlock 撤退，逃跑withdraw/run away威胁threat 在远处in the distance【佳句锤炼】他们两手空空，不敢与狼搏斗。With nothing on the hand, they dared not to fight against the wolf.与此同时，狼可能会感觉到周围人的威胁，所以它开始慢慢后退。In the meanwhile, the wolf might feel the peoples threats around, so it began to step back slowly.【句式升级】He saw the wolfs face near him. He used his fist to hit the face of the wolf strongly.Seeing the wolfs face so close to him, he hit it with all his strength/ heavily using his fist.2. 情感表达的多样性Macs feeling：Surroundings: Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal.Thoughts: He thought fondly of his wife“Man, thats a big dog!”Actions: Macs heart jumped.He fired at the wolf a second time, and againMac was pedaling hard now.He waved and yelled at passing cars.He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast,微技能之细节描写（表示感到害怕）【中译英】1、当看到那只凶恶的狼时，Mac感到很害怕。 _2、请你在该句子基础上增加细节描述，注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理。1）Mac吓得直发抖，不敢动弹。 _2）Mac被深深地恐惧感所控制，手心出汗。_3）恐怖的表情掠过Mac的脸庞。_【答案】1.At the sight of the ferocious wolf, Mac felt very scared/ frightened.2. 1）Mac shook with terror, too scared to move an inch.2）Mac was seized by a strong sense of horror and his palms were sweating.3）A look of terror flashed across Macs face.微技能之细节描写（表示感到绝望）【中译英】1、Mac感到很绝望。 _2、请你在该句子基础上增加细节描述，注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理。1）被投入黑暗之中；陷入绝望。_2）Mac认为一切事情都要向前看，要看到积极的一面，但这种想法却抛弃了他。 _3) Mac觉得自己被冷落了，因为孤独而变得绝望。_【答案】1: Mac felt hopeless/desperate.2:1) Mac was thrown into a world of darkness and sank into hopelessness. 2) Macs beliefs in looking forward and seeing the positive in everything deserted him. 3) Mac felt left out and was getting desperate with loneliness.3. 动词使用的丰富性E.g.1:“Another race, another race!” said the little boy. The wise old man stepped forward and presented the little boy with two new challengers, an elderly weak lady and a blind man. “What is this?” said the little boy. “This is no race.” He said. “Race!” said the wise man. The race was started and the boy was the only finisher, the other two challengers left standing at the starting line. The little boy was excited. He raised his arms in delight. The crowd, however, was silent showing no sentiment toward the little boy. “What has happened? Why dont the people join in my success?” he asked the wise old man. “Race again.” said the man, “This time, finish together, all three of you, finish together,” said the wise man.Use more specific words to replace “say”.方式：shout, scream, yell, roar, cry, whisper, add, continue, tell, remark, repeat, guess, imply，态度：refuse, agree, admit, complain, urge, apologize, sigh, beg, explain，promise, comfort, compromise，warn问答：ask, wonder, doubt, answer, reply【中译英】 1 整个公司都在谈论他被免职的原因。_2 我们教练抱怨道：“太槽了，裁判员也站在他们那边。_3 被如此不公正地对待，她痛苦而又愤怒的嚎叫。_【答案】1. The whole company is gossiping about the reason for his dismissal. 2. “Its bad enough that they have refs on their side.” our couch grumbled3. Treated so unfairly, she howled in pain and anger.E.g.2:God felt sad and sighed to the butterfly, “Do you regret for what you have done?” “No!” the butterfly said firmly, without hesitation. “He was your lover, but now he stays with another woman. Without you, he couldnt have recovered.” God said with pity. “I love him.” the butterfly said in a low voice, “although I cant be the one he loves, I want him to be happy. Never will I regret what I have done.” God smiled, “True love is the most invaluable thing in the world.” The butterfly then left the town with the best wishes for the man.Make your “say” more specific.firmly/ excitedly/ seriously/ jokingly/ sincerelyin great surprise/a low voice/a soft voicewith delight/ excitement /embarrassment/ pride/ respect/alarm/satisfaction/caution/ patience/certaintyE.g.3: “Oh yes, Daddy, you know I love you,” the little girl said sincerely. “Well, then, give me your pearls.” “Oh! Daddy, not my pearls!” Jenny refused, shaking her head violently. “But you can have Rosy, my favorite doll. Remember her? You gave her to me last year for my birthday. And you can have her tea party outfit too. Okay?” “Oh no darling, thats Okay.” Her father brushed her cheek with a kiss. “Good night, little one.”Make your narration more vivid with appropriate movement.Head: nod/shake his head violentlyEyes: stare / glare at / look her in the eye / with her eyes shining/ filled with tearsHis eyes sparkle with excitement/ gratitude.Then he jumped up, eyes twinkling as he ran to fetch some of his prized Matchbox cars.Singing happily, she gazed at her surroundings with large, innocent eyes.I watched helplessly, as the woman felt more and more frustrated and hopeless.She had spotted a man pacing down the hall. The woman was staring eagerly at the girl, trying to make a conversation.Dora lifted the lid, tears beginning to blur her vision.Hands: pat him on the shoulder/headgrasp/ hold one's handspoint to sb/ sthwave his handsStunned, I stood up and gave her an awkward hug / hugged her in an awkward way.Speechless, she smiled radiantly and gathered her son into her arms. The nearer it got, the more she waved the yellow blouse wildly.He patted my head, and inquired: “Is there anything particular you want?”Feet: Then Lisa stood up and made her way through the crowd toward me.She managed to climb onto it and waited patiently. Racing home, Reuben burst through the front door.Disappointed and frustrated, the poor man made his way back to his family.Suddenly, the woman stood up and entered the house in tears.The man stepped back/stepped onto the platform to take a good look at the paintings. The elderly man fled away with great panic.I dragged myself through daily chores, feeling exhausted.(二). 语篇的连贯性1. 内容连贯故事大意一致，写作意图一致2. 语句连贯 衔接词的准确使用转折关系：but , however, nevertheless, whereas, although, though, unfortunately, instead, on the contrary并列关系：besides, moreover, furthermore, what's more , what's worse, worse still因果关系：so, thus, therefore, hence, consequently, accordingly, as a result3. 语言连贯 语言风格一致短文语言较为平实，没有过于特别的句式，也没有生僻词，但有一些生动地道的表达语，如the wolfs teeth would be tearing into his flesh. 续写时最好能延续这种风格，用词和句式上可以变化，描写上尽量生动。4. 结构连贯 前后呼应四、题型总结选材特点（1）所需阅读的短文词数在350以内；（2）多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，但是，故事线索的逻辑性比较强。评分参考（1）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；（2）内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况；（3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；（4）上下文的连贯性。续写特点（1）读后续写不是随心所欲，是要在开头语和提示词的帮助下完成续写部分。（2）续写短文多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，但是，故事线索的逻辑性比较强。这样考生能够根据提示词语，顺着原来文章的思路续写文章，并适当发散。（3）读后续写要求读写并重。读后续写需要对本篇文章精确理解，这样所续写部分才不至于偏离主题。（4）所给文章的未完部分的思路和内容并不一定是唯一的，考生可以根据自己对文章的理解，从而对文章的结尾有不同的诠释。【学生习作评阅】Student One:Para1: The car abruptly stopped in front of him. “Come on, get in the car.” Paul shouted and opened the door. Mac jumped off the bike and slided into the car without hesitation as the wolf was about to tear Mac into pieces. What a narrow escape! Though Mac was safe, he still felt the dread stopping the passage of air to his lung, with his legs trembling. After a few minutes, he suddenly shouted, “oh my god, my friends are still repairing the bicycle!” Without a second thought, Paul drove the car quickly back to the two cyclists, only to find they were gone. Being enormously worried, they decided to wait for them at Macs home.Student Two:Para1: The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Paul rolled down the window and yelled, “Man, get in the car!” Without any hesitation, Mac jumped off the bicycle and dashed into the back seat of the car. At the same time, the wolf caught up. Luckily, the cars door was firm enough to stop the wolf. However, they couldnt just stay there. For the wolf was under the protection of the law, they couldnt kill it. So Becky threw some meat out of the window and Paul pressed the button of the horn to make an alert. Finally, the wolf left and disappeared.One possible version：Version 1:Paragraph 1:The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Out of the car came Paul and Becky. They immediately stopped the wolf in front of themselves to protect Mac. One man took out a metal bar from the car at once and started a fight with the wolf, and the other man joined it in no time. The wolf jumped up, and rushed towards one of them, but was beaten back. Seeing that he couldn't win, the wolf ran away down the hill.Paragraph 2:A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. At the sight of the scene, they were aware of what had happened. .They asked whether Mac had been injured, comforted their companion and thanked Paul and Becky. It was because of their help that a disaster was avoided. Meanwhile, they expressed their great regret for Mac. This shows how mankind cares for life, cherishes friendship, and recognizes the importance of cooperation and mutual aid.One possible version：Version 2:Paragraph 1:The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Mac jumped off his bicycle and dashed for the back door of the car. It was locked. He then ran around to the passenger door, but it was locked, as well, so he began to climb through the open window. When spotting this, Paul quickly unlocked the door, and the frightened man dived in, slamming the door behind him. Paul looked out the back window and saw the wolf standing over Macs bike as if it were a kill. Shortly after, the animal ran off.Paragraph 2:A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived .Mac emerged from the car and hugged his friends. “I thought I was going to die,” Mac cried to them. Mac retrieved（取回） his bicycle, and the three men resumed(继续）their road trip, agreeing to keep in one anothers sight line. A few miles down the road, Mac pulled over and burst into tears. “The rest of the trip was amazing, but I had to let the former emotion out.”【课堂练习】（2016.10浙江卷）)One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the