高中英语写作扩句.doc

Four short words sum up what has lifted most successful individuals above the crowd: a little bit more.-author-date高中英语写作扩句二 扩句的方法 扩句的方法在学习扩句法之前，先对学生进行五个简单句句型，并列句和复合句的专项训练，打好基础。扩句是在基本句型的基础上，添加各种修饰成分，使句子得到扩展，即根据表达的需求增加定语，状语，同位语等成分，或者举例子补充细节内容，或者添加谚语俗语等。1 1. We arrived in Sanya.- We arrived in Sanya, happily and excitedly. (添加副词)2 2. I like to make friends with my classmates.- I like to make friends with my classmates, who have the same interest as mine. (添加定语从句)3 3. We were happy and returned home.- We were happy and returned home after we had finished collecting all the rubbish.(添加状语从句)4 4. I like reading books.- I like reading books, such as novels, short stories, magazines and newspapers.(通过举例补充细节)5 5. We should study hard.- As we all know, “Practice makes perfect”. So we should study hard.（添加谚语）6 6. I often join in many activities.- I often join in many activities in order to communicate with other students and broaden my mind. (添加目的状语)三 具体应用试题要求：假如你是一名中学生，请以My colorful school life为题，写一篇短文。要求100个字左右。开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总数。要点提示：1：上课认真听讲 2：课后完成作业 3：经常参加体育锻炼 4：去图书馆阅读Im a high school student and I understand what Im studying for. I have been working hard. _ May there always be colorful life around my school. 学生的习作：Im a high school student and I understand what Im studying for. I have been working hard. I listen to the teacher carefully. I finish my homework after class. I often take exercise. I often read in the school library. May there always be colorful life around my school.点评：该学生能完整的写出各个要点，没有出现太大的语法错误，表达通顺，单词拼写无误。但是很明显字数不够，没有达到100个字左右，字数不够是很多学生面临的共同问题。其次，句子的表达过于平淡无奇，没有句式多样化和使用高级词汇，固定搭配、固定短语等使表达地道。而且，没有使用连接词，上下文的连接不够顺畅。 改进方法：步骤一：列要点 把要写的内容要点化，做到要点齐全。 1: Listen to the teacher carefully 2: finish my homework 3:take part in exercise 4: often read in the library步骤二：造简单句 充分利用五个简单句句型对各个要点进行补充，使其变成一个完整的句子。每个句子都要注意句子成分的完整性，语法是否正确，说法是否符合英语表达习惯。 1: I listen to the teacher carefully in the class. 2: I finish my homework after class. 3: I often take part in exercise with my classmates. 4: I do some reading in the school library.步骤三：扩展句子 1: I listen to the teachers carefully in the class so that I can understand what the teachers say.(增加目的状语从句) 2: I finish my homework after class, which is a piece of cake for me.（增加定语从句） 3: I often take part in exercise with my classmates, such as playing football, going swimming and playing badminton etc.（举例说明） 4: I often do some reading in the school library when I have nothing to do after class.（增加时间状语从句）步骤四：润色句子 根据高考（海南）英语作文评分细则，第五档的要求：24-25分，至少有3个复杂句，2种从句形式，语气自然，敬语得体，无中式英语，语言基本功扎实，词汇丰富。这就要求我们在谴词造句方面下工夫。“润色句子包括词语的选择与句型的运用。” 比如可以用高级词汇，短语和固定搭配来替换一般词汇。增加习惯表达句式，倒装句，it当形式主语和形式宾语，非谓语动词等，使用多种句式，使其多样化。 1: It is necessary for me to listen to the teachers carefully in the class so that I can understand what the teachers say. (把第一句换成it当形式主语的用法，使句式多样化。) 2: I take homework seriously and finish it in time, which is a piece of cake for me.(增加了takeseriously和in time两个短语，是句子更加生动) 3: In order to strengthen my body, I often take part in different kinds of exercises with my classmates, such as playing footall, going swimming and playing badminton etc.（增加了in order to do sth目的状语和different kinds of使句子的意思更完整。） 4: Interested in reading books, I develop the habit of going to the library and do some reading on my favourite books.（使用过去分词短语当状语，再添加短语develop the habbit of 使文章增加亮点）步骤五：连句成篇 “过渡词在文章中起着承上启下的作用，它好比一座桥梁，能将全文各句有机地联系在一起，从而使句子不再是孤立的独立的个体。”使用表示转折，并列，递进，因果关系等连词把句子连接起来，“有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑”使上下文更加通顺，逻辑性更强。Im a high school student and I understand what Im studying for. I have been working hard.（原文已给） First of all(过渡词), it is necessary for me to listen to the teachers carefully in the class so that I can understand what the teachers say. Whats more(过渡词), I take homework seriously and finish it in time, which is a piece of cake for me. In addition(过渡词), In order to strengthen my body, I often take part in different kinds of exercises with my classmates, such as playing footall, going swimming and playing badminton etc. Finally(过渡词), Interested in reading books, I develop the habit of going to the library and do some reading on my favourite books. May there always be colorful life around my school.（原文已给） 这篇习作要点齐全，字数符合要求，措辞精美，句式多样化，上下文连贯，符合逻辑和英语表达习惯。因此在写作中，我们可以适当地使用扩句法对学生进行写作训练，提高学生的英语表达能力。-