课件：作文讲评.ppt

周考作文讲评周考作文讲评周考作文题：周考作文题： 假设你是你班班长李华，你班女同学小丽因为身材假设你是你班班长李华，你班女同学小丽因为身材矮胖而缺乏自信，不敢与同学交朋友。请根据下列要矮胖而缺乏自信，不敢与同学交朋友。请根据下列要点给她写一封信。点给她写一封信。1.帮她建立自信心；帮她建立自信心；2.给她提出两点以上的建议。给她提出两点以上的建议。词数：词数：120字左右。字左右。I.自学导入自学导入学生作文审题分析学生作文审题分析该学生作文的主题是：该学生作文的主题是：你认为正确吗？为什么？你认为正确吗？为什么？如何减肥如何减肥不正确。主题应该是如何建立自信，与不正确。主题应该是如何建立自信，与他人交朋友。他人交朋友。II. 互动探讨互动探讨1、审题、审题体裁：体裁： 时态：时态： 人称：人称：结构：结构： 第一段：第一段： 第二段：第二段： 第三段：第三段：应用文：建议信应用文：建议信一般现在时一般现在时第一、二人称第一、二人称表明写信的目的表明写信的目的提出具体的建议（提出具体的建议（2-3点）点）展望建议被采纳后的良好结果或祝福展望建议被采纳后的良好结果或祝福2、赏析句子、赏析句子a. 纠错纠错 ( 找出错误处并更正找出错误处并更正 )1) You are a girl doesnt like to communicate with others. 2) Im sorry to hear that you lack of confident because of you body has short and fat.b. 审美审美 ( 划出亮点处并说明原因划出亮点处并说明原因 )1) I think you should exercise every day, which can help you lose weight and keep healthy.2) When asked why, you say it is your being short and fat that is to blame.a girl who doesnt like/a girl not liking toyou lack confidence because of being short运用了非限定性定语从句运用了非限定性定语从句运用了强调句和非谓语动词运用了强调句和非谓语动词3、美化句子、美化句子1) You want to lose weight by not having dinners. It will damage your health. （使用定语从句）（使用定语从句）2) You have some disadvantages. I have some disadvantages, too.（使用倒装句）（使用倒装句）3) 自信是我们最需要的。（使用强调句及名词性从句）自信是我们最需要的。（使用强调句及名词性从句）dinners, which will damage your health. disadvantages. So do I.It is confidence that is what we need most.4. 范文欣赏范文欣赏请欣赏范文，指出文中的亮点句，每人指出至少请欣赏范文，指出文中的亮点句，每人指出至少2处，并说明理由。处，并说明理由。Dear Xiao Li, I find you are always in low spirits and afraid to make friends. When asked why, you say it is your being short and fat that is to blame. I think everyone is unique in this world and you have your own beauty. Being confident is the most important when you communicate with others. So here I have some advice for you. First of all, you should take an active part in the discussion in class and express your own opinions about different matters. Thus, others will pay more attention to you. Second, always wear a smile and be friendly to others, which will make people around you ready to share their happiness and sorrow with you. Moreover, do try your best to help others so that you can also gain help when in trouble. If you follow my advice, I am sure you will make many friends and be happier. Yours, Li HuaIII课堂检测课堂检测 假如你是李明，你的朋友卫华因为父母工作的原假如你是李明，你的朋友卫华因为父母工作的原因上学期去深圳读高中。由于那里的学习环境还不因上学期去深圳读高中。由于那里的学习环境还不太适应他，他压力很大，成绩持续下滑。他写信给太适应他，他压力很大，成绩持续下滑。他写信给你讲述他的失落和无助。请你根据他的情况给他写你讲述他的失落和无助。请你根据他的情况给他写一封信，给出你的建议来帮助他。一封信，给出你的建议来帮助他。要求：要求： 1. 文章分为文章分为3段。段。 2. 文章要有亮点句式，包括定语从句、倒装句、文章要有亮点句式，包括定语从句、倒装句、 强调句和名词性从句。强调句和名词性从句。 3. 词数不少于词数不少于120词。词。