人教新课标高中英语一轮复习 写作公开课—— How to polish an article.ppt
How to polish(润色) an article,Learning aims:,To get the knowledge of the structure of “letter for suggestions”; To learn to polish an article by using some advanced sentence structures;,Step 1: Leading in,一、建议信的基本结构： 1.开头开门见山，向对方陈述自己的观点。 先阐述提出建议的原因、理由以及自己的目的、想法。 2.主体提出自己的建议，并陈述提出该建议的理由。 建议的具体内容。围绕对方的困惑、烦恼等问题，委婉地提出自己的建议和方法。 3.结尾呼应开头，重申观点。 表示希望对方采纳建议、礼貌地总结或期盼回复。,二、写建议信要注意的问题。,1. 内容要完整：先判断作文的背景说明部分需不需要写，还要有结尾段； 2. 语言要礼貌中肯，避免命令式语言； 3. 写作句式要多变，多用高级句式和表达； 4. 文章要有逻辑，要用衔接词连接句子。,Step 2: Self-learning (8 minutes),Finish the following exercise according to the requirements. 请写出你在给别人提建议时常用到的表达：,Step 3: Feeding-back 1,Show the answers of step 2.,1.建议信开头常用表达（至少写出三个）： (1) Im sorry/glad to hear that. (2) I am writing to express my views about . (3) Thanks for trusting me. Its my great pleasure to give you some suggestions. (4) It is my pleasure to offer you some advice on.,2.表达建议的常用句式（至少写出四个）： E.g. You should do sth. (1) I would like to suggest/recommend that. (2) If I were you, I would. (3) In my opinion, it would be wise to take the following action. (4) I think it would be more beneficial if you could.,(5)It seems to me that you could. (6) You had better . (7) When it comes to such a situation, I would like to suggest that you can. (8) Why not .?,3.建议信结尾常用句式（至少写出三个）：,(1) In the end, I will be very glad if you find my suggestions useful. (2) I do hope you will find these proposals/ suggestions practical/ useful/ helpful. (3) These are only my personal suggestions. I hope you will find them useful/helpful.,4.请写出你在作文中常用到的衔接词（至少写出三个）： E.g. Firstly,. Secondly,. Thirdly,.,(1) First and foremost,. Besides,. At last/Finally/Last but not least,. (2) For one thing,. For another,. (3) On the one hand,. On the other hand,. (4) To begin with.Besides,.Last but not least,. (5) meanwhile,. (6) at the same time,.,5.请写出你在作文中常用到的高级句式或从句： E.g. There is no doubt that. 毫无疑问,(1) It is +adj./n. (for sb.) to do sth./ that. (2) 主语+think/find/feel/believe.+it +adj./n. +to do sth./ that. (3) As we all know,. (4) not only.but also. (5) so. that. (6) too. to.,(7)否定词放在句首，构成部分倒装 (8)过去分词/现在分词做状/定语 (9) 形容词做状语 (10) with 的复合结构 (11) 定语从句 (12) 主语从句 (13) 宾语从句 (14) 表语从句 (15) 同位语从句 (16) 强调句 (17) 感叹句,分别用it做形式主语和形式宾语翻译以下句子： 我认为你很有必要多做运动。 I think it is necessary for you to do more exercise. I think it necessary for you to do more exercise.,把下列简单句改成复合句。 He likes English. He likes Maths too. He not only likes English but also likes Maths. Not only does he like English but also he liks Maths.,把下列句子改成复合句： He is so nervous. He cant say a word. He is so nervous that he cant say a word. He is too nervous to say a word.,把下列句子改成一个简单句。 After he heard the news, Tom burst into tears. Hearing the news, Tom burst into tears.,把下列句子改成一个简单句。 Because he was anxious, Tom couldnt sleep well last night. Anxious, Tom couldnt sleep well last night.,把with的复合结构改写下列句子。 After I finished the homework, I went to play basketball. With the homework finished, I went to play basketball.,把下列句子合并成一个复合句。 I think you should read English every day. It is beneficial to improving your oral English. I think you should read English every day, which is beneficial to improving your oral English.,Step 4: Discussion,Find out the shortcomings in the following article and polish it with advanced expressions or sentence structures together with your group members so as to make it more native and get higher points . (10 minutes),上周，你班的某同学在英语写作课上写了一篇作文，但是得分非常低，请你根据写作要求对他的作文加以修改和润色，使文章的语言准确、连贯。 假设你是李华，你的好朋友苏珊前不久随父母去了美国，她写信告诉你她很不适应美国的校园生活，感到很孤独。请你根据以下要点用英语给她写一封电子邮件提出建议。 1.学好英语，从而增加和别人交流的机会； 2.多交一些朋友，友情会使她忘记孤独； 3.积极参加各种活动，使自己的生活更加有趣。 注意： 1.词数100左右； 2.可适当增加细节； 3.注意文章的连贯性和语言的准确性。,Dear Susan, Firstly, you should work hard at English. It can give you more opportunities to communicate with others. If you speak English fluently, you will be confident. Secondly, you should make some friends. Friendship can help you forget loneliness. Friendship can help you live happily, too. Thirdly, you should take part in all kinds of activities at school. The activities can make your life more interesting. Yours, Li Hua,Step 4: Discussion,Find out the shortcomings in the following article and polish it with advanced expressions or sentence structures together with your group members so as to make it more native and get higher points . (10 minutes),Step 5: Feeding back,Task 1: What are the shortcomings of this passage?,1.内容缺失：作文的背景说明部分没有写，没有结尾段; 2.句式单一：提建议时只用了you should .； 3.缺乏连贯性:缺少衔接词,文章的逻辑性不强； 4.句式不高级：用太多简单句。,Task 2: Now please polish the article above to make it more native so as to get higher points.,Show time!,Dear Susan, Im sorry to hear that you cant adapt yourself to the new life in America.It is my great pleasure to give you some suggestions on it. First and foremost, you should work hard at English,which can give you more opportunities to communicate with others. Speaking English fluently, you will be confident. Besides, its wise for you to make some friends as friendship can help you not only forget loneliness but also live happily. Last but not least, you had better take,part in all kinds of activities at school,which can make your life more interesting. I do hope that you will find these proposals useful. Yours, Li Hua,Summary,1. 建议信的结构、注意事项。 2. 常用句型。,当堂检测： Combine the two sentences into one with some advanced structures to make it more native.,Group 1: You taught me English knowledge. You taught me life wisdom, too.,You not only taught me English knowledge but also taought me life wisdom. Not only did you teach me English knowledge but also you taught me life wisdom.,Group 2: Tom was tired and exhausted. Tom fell fast asleep.,Tired and exhausted, Tom fell fast asleep.,Group 3: My bike was stolen. It made me really upset.,My bike was stolen, which made me really upset.,Group 4: The box was so heavy. I cant carry it.,The box was so heavy that I cant carry it. The box was too heavy for me to carry it.,Group 5: If you see the city from the top of the mountain, you will find it much smaller.,Seeing the city from the top of the mountain, you will find it much smaller.,
