读后续写微技能之 环境描写 课件.pptx
Continuation Writing Surroudings,Enjoy a song and think about the following questions.,What s the feeling expressed in the song?2. Pay attention to the lyrics in red and think about the functions of them.,The snow blows white on the mountain tonight白雪发亮铺满我的过往Not a footprint to be seen没有脚印的地A kingdom of isolation孤立国度很荒凉And it looks like Im the Queen我是这里的女皇The wind is howling like the swirling storm inside漫天飞霜像心里的风暴一样Couldnt keep it in ,heaven knows I tried只有天知道，我受过的伤Dont let them in ,dont let them see别让别人，进来看见Be the good girl you always had to be做我自己就像我的从前Conceal ,dont feel ,dont let them know躲在现实梦境之间Well, now they know不被发现Let it go ,Let it go随它吧，随它吧Cant hold you back anymore回头已没有办法Let it go，Let it go随它吧，随它吧Turn my back and slam the door一转身不再牵挂And here I stand ，and here Ill stay悬崖上，让我留下Let it go ，Let it go随它吧，随它吧,1.The composer try to express the emotion of ,confidence/ determination,2. The functions of describing the surroundings is.,to express feelings/emotions vividly,环境描写，可以起到融情于景的效果，衬托人物的内心世界。适当的环境描写可以让文章读起来有画面感、立体感和真实感。,Basic knowledge,I.Use some adjectives.,5._sky,4._stars,1._sunshine,6._moonlight,7._mountains/hills,8._river,warm/amber-like/ burning,2._wind3._breeze,sparkling/shining/twinkling,gentle /soft,an icy/strong/violent /dreadful,bright /pale,high/steep/lofty,winding /sweeping/running,deep blue /cloudless/dark,come out/rise/set/kiss/be bathed in,sun(shine),wind,howl/whistle/blow/roar/kiss,shine/sparkle/twinkle/wink/blink/hide/decorate,star,dance/float/fall/melt away/blanket/cover,snow,beat against/pour down/fall/rain cats and dogs,rain,flow/travel/move/enter/wind,river,II. Use proper verbs,Writing skills,Tip I 融情于景,1.Every inch of my skin (沐浴在)the amber-like sunshine. 我的每一寸肌肤沐浴在琥珀色的阳光中。2.The breeze gently my cheeks. 微风轻柔地亲吻着她的脸庞。3. The sky sparkling stars. 天上繁星点点。4. The feathery snowflakes in the night air, making a beautiful picture.鹅毛般的雪花在空中飞舞，像一幅美丽的图画。,Feeling,Surroundings,was bathed in,kissed,was decorated with,danced,Feeling,delighted/relaxed/eased/relieved,5.The icy wind started , cutting my face like a sharp knife. 寒风开始咆哮，像锋利的小刀一样刺痛了我的脸。 6. The chilly wind was _ dreadfully with a mixture of rain _from the heaven, _ against the branches of lined trees.风可怕的咆哮着，雨从天上倾盆而下，拍打着成排的树枝。7.Immediately, an absolute darkness_ the forest. 顷刻间，黑暗统治了森林。,howling,roaring,pouring down,beating,ruled/dominated,Feeling,scared/frightened/upset/depressed,2020年新高考读后续写In the evening, their popcorn was sold out. _,Stars appeared in the sky, twinkling their eyes,at them in happiness.,Tip II.概括性描述+细节描述,写作思路：第一步，先尝试概括性描述（总体描述）。第二步，在概括描述的基础上增加细节描述，注意逻辑关系及语意的合理。,I have grown so crazy about everything to do with nature.I can well remember that there was a time when a deep blue sky, the song of the birds, moonlight and flowers could never have kept me spellbound.(M1U1),关于雨的描写,1）下起了大雨。（概括描写）,It was raining cats and dogs.,2)下起了大雨,溪水上涨，风拍打着房子。（细节描写）,It was raining cats and dogs, with the streams _(rise) and the wind _(beat) against the house.,rising,beating,It was raining cats and dogs. The icy wind started _, cutting my face like a sharp knife.,3)下起了大雨。寒风开始咆哮，像锋利的小刀一样刺痛了我的脸。（细节描写）,howling,总（概括描写）分（细节描写）,1)The weather was so hot._,2)The weather was so hot. _,and it seemed as if it would melt.,The earth is sweating,There was no wind, and,the thick air seemed to be frozen.,关于热的描写,Summary,vivid,emotion,summary+details,adjctives,verbs,Surroundings,Discussion and writing,2016.10 浙江高考真题Para 1 But no more helocopteres came and it was getting dark again._,2017.11 浙江高考真题Para 2 We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way._,The sun hid himself behind the mountains, making it hard to see anything in the thick darkness.,2016.10 浙江高考真题Para 1 But no more helocopteres came and it was getting dark again._,She had no choice but to stop for another night. A gust of cold wind blew and she started to miss the warmth of Toms hug.,1. We saw lots of great sights along the way. (增加细节描写),2017.11 浙江高考真题Para 2 We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way._,The dark, rainy evening, the wind, the thundering clouds held me entirely in their power. Book1 “Annes Best Friend”,I closed my eyes in the speeding car. Winding rivers, lofty mountains, deep valleys and sunny beaches held me entirely in their fascination.,Homework 认真阅读所给材料，尽可能运用环境描写句子完成第二段续写。 We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. ,【2018浙江高考真题】It was summer, and mydadwanted to treat me to a vacation like never before.He decided totake me on a trip to the Wild West. We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of NewMexico.We reachedAlbuquerque in the late afternoon.UnclePaul,my dadsfriend,pickedus up from the airport anddrove us up to his farm in Pecos.His wife Tina cookedus a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle.My dadand I spent the night in the guestroom of thefarm houselistening to the frogs and water rolling downtherivernearby.Very early in the morning,Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast.“The daystarts at dawn on my farm,”he said.After breakfast,I went to help Aunt Tinafeedthe chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take thesheepout tograze (吃草). I was impressed to seemy dad and Uncle Paul riding horses.They lookedreally cool. In the afternoon,I asked UnclePaul if I could take a horse ride,and he said yes,as long asmy dad went with me.I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway.So,my dad and I puton our new cowboy hats,got on our horses,and headed slowly towards the mountains.“Dont belatefor supper,”Uncle Paulcried,“and keep to thetrackso that you dontget lost!” “OK!”mydadcried back.After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out ofsight.It was so peacefulandquiet and the colors of the brownrocks,the deep green pinetrees,and the late afternoon sunmixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautifulwoven (编织的)blanket spread out uponthe ground just for us.【答题时需注意】1.所续写短文的词数应为l50左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse. _Paragraph2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark. _,
