61 中考作文题型之材料类 2021年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版）.docx

61 中考作文题型之材料类 2021年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版） 相关话题写作概述材料作文，顾名思义，需要首先对材料进行理解与提炼，对其主题、细节等有一定程度的把握，在此基础上，方能写好文章。同时，在写作中切忌抄袭原材料，在引用时需有相应变化。-般而言，其写作顺序是:引用材料提出观点或想法一论述总结。相关话题作文写作示例指导（一）题目Write at least 60 words about the topic“A one day outing". (请以“一日外出活动”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。) (注意:短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。)The following situation is necessary for your writing:A group of students are coming to your school for an educational visit. And this Saturday,you are expected to go for a one-day outing with two of them. Please plan a visit, tell us whereto go, what to do, and add your reason. Please make your outing exciting and meaningful分析1.既然是one day outing,就必须要注意在时间与地点上的限制。2. "plan a visit"说明全文的时态与“现在”或“将来”相关。3.始终注意材料中的划线部分，所设计的路线或活动必须有趣且有意义。初稿Speaking of a one-day outing, I will invite them to pay a visit to the Bund. When we look at the old and western-style buildings, we can discover the impact of western culture on China. By contrast, when we turn around, the tall and modern buildings may leave a deep impression on us. Since the buildings near the Bund show the history and cultural development of Shanghai, the outing I have planned must be exciting and meaningful.点评:整篇习作言简意赅地说明了该生准备带来访学生去外滩游玩的计划。全文用大量篇幅描写了外滩的景致，似乎与计划相关。然而，若我们进一步思考则会发现， 此文有偏题之嫌。既然选择游览外滩，写作内容更应关注来访学生在外滩的所见所闻及其他们的感受，而非一味地介绍外滩建筑。不仅如此，exciting 和meaningful两词，应通过描述有所体现，而非仅在文末总结。同时，习作中缺乏铺垫，文章略显唐突。其实在构思时，我们应该展开合理想象，除了游玩之余，是否还有美食文化可引起关注。修改稿Speaking of the place rd like to take the two students to visit for a one- day outing ,the Bund is my first choice. There, we can see the old, western- style buildings and the modern ones on both sides of the Huangpu River, They stand for the culture and the development of Shanghai which can help them know more about our city. Then in the afternoon, it must be exciting for us to cruise down the Huangpu River, enjoying some snacks at the same time.After having a delicious dinner, I will also take the students to have a walk. The night view of the Bund will certainly leave them a deep impression. Hope they can enjoy themselves.范文This Saturday, I will take two students from another city to have a one -day outing in Shanghai. I plan to go to the Nanjing Road first. There they will be surprised at the busy street and it might be a good chance for them to buy some souvenirs. Then we can walk to the Oriental Pearl TV Tower, the symbol of Shanghai. I'm sure they must be excited when viewing the city center from over 400m high. After having lunch nearby, we will take the underground to Shanghai Museum where they can get to know the history and development of Shanghai. Our last destination is the Bund. It's relaxing and comfortable to have a walk along the Huangpu River, enjoying the beautiful night view there. It will be an exciting and meaningful outing which they'll never forget.点评:不同于其他只去处游览的文章， 此篇习作更符合one -day outing 的特征，通过路线的制定，让来访学生游览不同地点。南京路东方明珠一 上海博物馆 浦江，其-系列活动包含了购物、景观、文化与历史等各大元素。同时，文中亦提到了美食， 虽在文字处:理方面相对简单，但也足以让人感觉此计划详细得当，考虑细致，使得整个游览活动更加充大， 有趣且有意义。避免了仅在文末通过文字表达体现出游目的的尴尬，在字里行间体现了此次出游计划的成功。相关话题作文真题解析（一）我们生活学习在美丽的甘肃。假设你所在的学校正在组织一个“让世界了解甘肃、让走向世界的活动，请根据以下思维导图的提示，以" The Introduction of Gansu Province"为题，写一篇介绍甘肃的英语短文。要求：1. 文中需包含思维导图中的主要内容； 2. 句子及篇章结构准确、连贯，书写规范； 3. 可做适量拓展； 4. 词数：80词左右。(标题需抄写在答题卡对应作答区域，不计入总词数)The Introduction of Gansu Province_【写作思路】本文属于材料作文，介绍甘肃省。根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑，可适当增加内容。【参考范文】The Introduction of Gansu ProvinceGansu Province lies in the northwest of China. It covers an area of 425,900 square kilometers. There are 26 million people living there. Lanzhou is the capital city of Gansu Province. The weather in Gansu is different from place to place and the temperature is usually quite different from day to night. If you want to go travelling in Gansu，May to October is the best time. Mogao Grotto which is the world famous art palace and Jiayuguan Pass，the western end of the Great Wall，are two of the must-see places of interest in Gansu.【名师点评】这是一篇优秀的作文，很好地完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别使用一些亮点词句，如lie in, there be, the capital city of, be different from, end of, places of interest以及which引导的定语从句，增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。（二）假如你有机会和任何一个名人共进午餐。请根据以下要点和要求用英语写一篇短文。1. 要点：1）这个名人是谁；2）你为什么想和他或她共进午餐；3）你想和他或她谈论什么。2.要求：1）文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；2）词数80左右。_【写作思路】这是一篇材料作文，根据材料中的相关信息介绍一下你想和哪位名人共进午餐。主要从1）这个名人是谁；2）你为什么想和他或她共进午餐；3）你想和他或她谈论什么。这三个方面去介绍。注意时态应为一般现在时或一般将来时。人称为第一人称。注意作文中必须包含材料上的所有信息，并适当发挥。写作时，避免使用汉语式的英语，尽量使用我们熟悉的句子或短语。语法要正确，表达要符合英语习惯，注意时态、时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系，表达具有条理性。【参考范文】Id like to have lunch with Ren Zhengfei, the founder of the well-known Chinese tech company Huawei.Mr. Ren is considered as a great man who always has everything mapped out ahead. And under his leadership, Huawei has become a high-tech giant worldwide. Over the lunch, I will listen to his success story. Then I will ask him what is important to make it happen. If time permits, Ill ask for his advice for us teenagers today.Im expecting this lunch already.【名师点评】【高分句型一】Mr. Ren is considered as a great man who always has everything mapped out ahead. 任先生被认为是一个伟大的人，他总是把一切都安排在前面。句子who always has everything mapped out ahead.是由who引导的定语从句。【高分句型二】If time permits, I'll ask for his advice for us teenagers today. 如果时间允许的话，我今天就为我们青少年征求他的意见。句子If time permits是由if 引导的条件状语从句。（三）学校英语社团正在组织题为“My Family”的征文活动。假如你是李明，请根据以下内容提示用英语完成征文。内容要点如下：1. 三口之家，家庭幸福，邻里和睦；2. 父母为教师，在校深受欢迎；3. 分担家务，周末户外活动；4. 相互陪伴，经常交流，良好家规助我成长；5. 请补充说明一至两点与家庭相关的情况。注意：1文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；2词数：60 80；3内容连贯，不要逐条翻译；4标题和开头已给出，不计入总词数。参考词汇： popular adj. 受欢迎的 activity n. 活动 rule n规矩My FamilyIm Li Ming. _【写作思路】本文属于材料作文，介绍我的家庭。根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑，可适当增加内容。写作时可以从以下几个方面做起：认真审题。审好题是写好书面表达的关键。审题时要注意试题的要求，抓住要点，词数符合要求。构思提纲。有了提纲，我们就可以根据提纲和主题确定相关的写作材料。通常书面表达给出的话题是开放的，而具体的内容要求学生自己发挥，因此选择恰当的素材也是使短文中心突出、明确的关键。初写短文。一切都准备就绪，就可以动笔写作了，在写作的过程中我们要注意句子的准确性、连贯性以及简洁性。使用的词语、短语及句型尽量用自己有把握的词。同时还要注意使用恰当的连词，使句子衔接自然。修改润色。修改润色是获取高分的必要步骤。这一步我们除了检查短文的各种错误外，还要检查语法结构是否合理，有无重复、啰嗦的语言，大小写是否正确，格式是否正确，词数是否符合要求等。【参考范文】My FamilyIm Li Ming. I have a happy family. There are three people in it. They are my father, my mother and me. My parents are teachers, they are popular among students. We get along well with our neighbors. At home, I try my best to do some housework. On weekends, we often go out for outdoor activities. We accompany with each other, communicate with each other. Good family rules help me grow up. I study hard, all the teachers and classmates like me. My home is a warm place.【名师点评】这是一篇优秀的作文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别使用一些亮点词句，如get along well with, try ones best to do, accompany with, communicate with, help sb do以及grow up，增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。（四） 最近，用手机APP买菜的人多了。手机菜场菜品丰富、洗净配好、预约送菜上门外国朋友对此也很感兴趣。请你以A New Use of the Mobile Phone为题，写一篇110词左右的英语短文介绍手机买菜带来的便利，让外国朋友了解中国人民生活中的这个新变化。【小词典】acknowledge v.承认，认可 bone n. 骨骼 chest n. 胸部cipher n. 标记 crowd n. 大众 elect v. 选举，推选franc n. 法国法郎 invisible ad. 不可见的 muscle n. 肌肉profound adj. 深刻的 radio telescope射电望远镜 reflect n. 反射signal n. 信号 stimulate v. 刺激 toe n. 脚趾A New Use of the Mobile Phone_【写作思路】这是一篇给材料作文。要求以A New Use of the Mobile Phone为题，写一篇英语短文介绍手机买菜带来的便利，让外国朋友了解中国人民生活中的这个新变化。首先认真审题，看清题目中的要求和要点；然后根据提示内容，列出写作要点及每个要点中可能要用到的表达；然后紧扣要点，动笔写作。在写作时，注意连句成篇，保持文章的连贯性，要层次清楚，要点分明，中心突出。同时要注意语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯；尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，最好不要写太长的复合句；尽量选取简单的易拼写的单词，确保正确率；词汇、句式要丰富多样，可以为文章增色添彩。最后要细心复核检查，确保正确无误。【参考范文】A New Use of the Mobile PhonePreparing for meals is tiring. You may have to spend hours getting everything ready for cooking. Now in China, new mobile apps are here to help. These apps provide you with meat, fish, and vegetables, almost everything you need for a meal. You, an order whenever you like and decide on the time for them to arrive. If you like. they can be washed, cut and packed for a certain dish. Some apps even guide you to cook step by step, making cooking easier. Compared with the traditional way of going to the market, mobile apps save your time and energy. With such a new use of the mobile phone, you can enjoy a more relaxing life.