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高州一中高州一中梁琼凤梁琼凤教学目标：教学目标：1.了解书面表达的重要性：了解书面表达的重要性：中考取胜之关键，中考取胜之关键，接着学习之所需；接着学习之所需；2.领悟书面表达的步骤。领悟书面表达的步骤。教学重点、难点：教学重点、难点：驾驭书面表达发散思维的方法驾驭书面表达发散思维的方法议一议议一议假如今年暑假你在乡下度过了一个有意义的假期，假如今年暑假你在乡下度过了一个有意义的假期，请依据以下要点写一篇短文，介绍你的暑假生活。请依据以下要点写一篇短文，介绍你的暑假生活。1.帮助祖父母干农活；帮助祖父母干农活；2.有时去村西的小河游泳；有时去村西的小河游泳；3.帮助邻里的孩子补习英语。帮助邻里的孩子补习英语。词数词数100左右；可适当补充微小环节以使行文连贯。左右；可适当补充微小环节以使行文连贯。作品作品1Ihadanunforgettableholidaythissummer.First,Ihelpedmygrandparentswithworkinthefield.Itleftadeepimpressiononme.Atthesametime,Irealizedthatthefarmersarehard.Sometimes,wewentswimmingintheriverofthewestofthevillage,andwecaughtalotoffish.Suddenly,thedarkcloudsgatheredanditrainedheavily.Wehurriedlyranuptoourhouse.Althoughwewerewetthrough,westillenjoyedourselves.Then,IalsohelpedneighborschildrenwithEnglish.Ibelievethisisthebestholidayofmine.Ihadanunforgettableholidaythissummer.First,Ihelpedmygrandparentswithworkinthefield.Itleftadeepimpressiononme.Atthesametime,Irealizedthatthefarmersarehard.Sometimes,wewentswimmingintherivertothewestofthevillage,andwecaughtalotoffish.Suddenly,thedarkcloudsgatheredanditrainedheavily.Wehurriedlyranuptoourhouse.Althoughwewerewetthrough,westillenjoyedourselves.Then,IalsohelpedneighborschildrenwithEnglish.Ibelievethisisthebestholidayofmine.要点齐全，语言基本正确，要点齐全，语言基本正确，105字，但偏离要点。字，但偏离要点。作品作品2Thissummerholiday,Ihelpedmygrandparentstodofarmwork.Sometimes,Iwentswimmingintheriverofthewestofthevillage.IalsospentsometimehelpingneighborschildrenlearnEnglish.要点齐全，语言正确，要点齐全，语言正确，但过于简洁，只有但过于简洁，只有35个字。个字。书面表达六步法：书面表达六步法：1 1、细致审题，看好提示；细致审题，看好提示；2 2、抓内容要点；抓内容要点；3 3、连词成句；连词成句；4 4、适当发散思维：适当发散思维：5 5、连接成文；连接成文；6 6、抄写。抄写。增加时间增加时间增加地点增加地点增加微小环节增加微小环节想一想想一想文章开头：开宗明义，直奔主题文章开头：开宗明义，直奔主题1)介绍我的家庭，就可以这样开头：介绍我的家庭，就可以这样开头：Ihaveaveryhappyfamily.或或Ihaveaveryspecialfamily.2)以健康为主题，我们就可能这样开头：以健康为主题，我们就可能这样开头：Healthisveryimportanttoallofus或或Everyonehopestohaveahealthybody等等3)e-mail的回信，可礼貌地写一句：的回信，可礼貌地写一句：Imverygladtoreceiveyoure-mail.或或Happytogetthee-mailfromyou!学一学学一学如何发散思维如何发散思维?1)1)围绕要点，增加时间围绕要点，增加时间e.g.e.g.外出购物外出购物 Im going out shopping.Im going out shopping.Im going out shopping,and wont be Im going out shopping,and wont be back until about 5:00 pm.back until about 5:00 pm.2 2）围绕要点，增加地点）围绕要点，增加地点e.g.e.g.替小米还书替小米还书 I have taken the books Xiaomi asked I have taken the books Xiaomi asked me to return.me to return.I have taken me the books Xiaomi asked me to I have taken me the books Xiaomi asked me to return to the City Library.return to the City Library.3 3）围绕要点，增加微小环节）围绕要点，增加微小环节Ilikesportsverymuch,A:我宠爱体育运动我宠爱体育运动suchasbasketballandfootball.B:青少年应尽我们所能疼惜环境挽救地球青少年应尽我们所能疼惜环境挽救地球We teenagers should do what we can to protect the environment and save the earth.For example,we can use recyclable bags instead of plastic bags,refuse to use single-use products,plant more trees and save water and energy.列举具体的实例来补充说明列举具体的实例来补充说明总结方法一总结方法一:A:有时去村西的小河游泳有时去村西的小河游泳拓展：河水特殊清澈拓展：河水特殊清澈 背景渲染背景渲染 I went swimming in the river of the west of the village now and then.The water in the river was very clear.I found some bad behavior.B:我看到了一些不良行为。我看到了一些不良行为。I felt sad,Ifoundsomebadbehavior.心理心理添加与所给信息有关的动作、心理描写及添加与所给信息有关的动作、心理描写及背景渲染等内容背景渲染等内容方法二：方法二：A:Tracy 来电话留言：咖啡屋（来电话留言：咖啡屋（Bolton Coffee）见面取消）见面取消。拓展：因为她有重要的事情处理。拓展：因为她有重要的事情处理。缘由缘由 as she has something important to do with.B:帮助邻里的孩子补习英语。帮助邻里的孩子补习英语。拓展：孩子们进步很快，我也受到他们父母的赞扬拓展：孩子们进步很快，我也受到他们父母的赞扬。结果结果 To my joy,they made rapid progress and their parents thought highly of me.Tracy called,saying that she couldnt meet you at Bolton Coffee.I also helped children in the neighborhood with their English lessons.方法三：方法三：添加与所给信息有关的缘由，结果，添加与所给信息有关的缘由，结果，条件，让步，手段，目的等内容条件，让步，手段，目的等内容Although I was very tired this summer holiday,I felt very happy for what I did.As a student,its our duty to protect our school environment and make it clean.I think such activities are necessary and meaningful.In a word,if she would like to learn Chinese,I hope she will do it well.结尾发挥：写你的感受，评价，愿望，倡议等。结尾发挥：写你的感受，评价，愿望，倡议等。链接中考：链接中考：假定你是李华，希望通过外籍老师假定你是李华，希望通过外籍老师Peter找一个英语笔友。请写一封短信，找一个英语笔友。请写一封短信，描述一下你志向中笔友的条件，并说明为描述一下你志向中笔友的条件，并说明为什么选这样的笔友。具体条件包括：什么选这样的笔友。具体条件包括：1 年龄；年龄；2 性别；性别；3 爱好（旅游、运动、宠物等）。爱好（旅游、运动、宠物等）。练一练练一练Task 1 爱好运动爱好运动Task 2 爱好旅游爱好旅游Task 3 宠爱养宠物宠爱养宠物 Improve it!爱好运动爱好运动I am a healthy boy full of energy so I like sports very much,especially outdoor activities.Whenever I have time,Ill go hiking or mountain climbing with my classmates.So I hope my pen friend like sports too.Improve it!Iliketoseekapenpalwhoisinterestedintravellingjustlikeme.Ifpossible,wecantraveltogetherorsharetravelingexperiencesinoure-mails.Iwilltellhersomethinginterestingabouttheplacesthatshewantstotravel.爱好旅游爱好旅游 Improve it!Ihaveanotherhobbythatiskeepingpets.IhavekeptalovelydognamedBeibeifor3years.Ioftenplaywithher,Iloveherverymuch.IhopeIcansharethehappinesswithmypenfriend.宠爱养宠物宠爱养宠物参考范文参考范文DearPeter,Imwritingtoaskwhetheryoucandomeafavour.Iwanttohaveagirlpenfriendabout15yearsold,Iwillbehappierifshehasthesameinterestsasmine.Iliketravelingverymuch.SoIhopesheisinterestedintraveling,too.Ifpossible,wecantraveltogetherorsharetravelingexperiencesinoure-mails.Iwilltellhersomethinginterestingabouttheplacesthatshewantstotravelto.IbelieveIwillimprovemyEnglishbymakingsuchagoodpenfriend.Ilookforwardtohearingfromyousoon.Yours，LiHua（2013年中考）假设你是Tony Li,在英国一所中学就读已大约一年，须要找一位家庭老师，条件要求如下表所示，请你向你的老师Mr.Roger Fike 写一封邮件，请他帮忙。性别，年龄，外貌 女，20-25，漂亮职业中小学英语老师或大学生性格热心助人，有耐心爱好读书，旅游特长说标准英语，熟悉英国历史、地理品一品品一品金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 25实力提升实力提升请适当增加微小环节请适当增加微小环节 Yesterday I went to the Friendship Store.I saw a foreigner buying clothes.He spoke English.The shop assistant couldnt understand him.I translated for them.They said thanks to me.I think the shop assistant should know foreign language.
