【英语】高考备考英语满分作文赏析.docx

PS：本资料由逗你学拾掇 供应 ，我们 的目标 是用最小的力气 深造 ！网页搜索 ： 使用 市廛 搜索 ：逗你学或者 扫描下方 收看免费的知识 点视频，3分钟提高50分！高考现实上 可以 更复杂 高考备考高考英语总分值作文赏析(背诵佳选)一. 用词精确;表达 地道 【北京卷高考英语】【试题回放】第一节情况 作文(20分)美国中教师 jeff将要来你所在 的红星中学深造 中文，经协商安排 住在你家。假定 你是李华，请给Jeff写一封信，按照以下列图次第 介绍 他来中国后的生活 安排 。留心 ：1. 信的开头 已为你写好。2.词数非常多 于60。Dear Jeff,Im Hua from Beijing Hongxing Middle School. Im very happy to learn that youre going to stay with my family while youre in Beijing.While you are here, well provide you with a room of your own with a bed, a desk, a couple of chairs and a TV. Youll also have your own bathroom. Our school is quite close to our home, so we could go to school together by bike. At noon well eat at the school dining hall. Im sure youll like the delicious Chinese food there, and enjoy talking with friends over lunch. Classes in our school usually finish at 4 in the afternoon. You can then join other students in playing ball games or swimming. Itll be a lot of fun.If you have any questions or requests, please let me know. Well try our best to make your stay here in Beijing a pleasant experience.Best wishes,Li Hua名师点评 这篇文章的特征 仍然 比较明晰 的，第一，作者按照图画 将文章的要点归结综合 残缺，内容充实而丰富 ，结构紧凑，有层次 感;第二，本文不 采用华丽 的辞藻，但用词特不 适当 ，段落过渡自然 ，令人耳目 一新。 【安徽卷高考英语】【试题回放】假定 你是李华，美国一所友好黉舍 准备 与你们黉舍 共同 创办 一份中教师 英文刊物，该校格林教师 来信询征询 有关情况。请你给她写封回信 ，假定 你是李华，美国一所友好黉舍 准备 与你们黉舍 共同 创办 一份中教师 英文刊物，该校格林教师 来信询征询 有关情况。请你给她写封回信 ，要紧内容如下：表示 赞同 。 提出你喜欢 的栏目。 l 简明说明因由 。留心 ：1. 词数100左右 。 2. 新的开头 跟 开头 已为你写好。 3. 适当 增加 细节，以使行文衔接。4. 参考栏目：栏目columnDear Mr. Green,I am very excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine together. That sounds great! And I definitely agree with you on that.Some of the columns which you mentioned in the letter are really my cup of tea. Say, “culture express gives us a better understanding of the world. Since people from different parts of the world have different values, its necessary to learn from each other. This will offer a wonderful chance. Apart from that, “blurt out is pretty good for Chinese students to learn English idioms and improve oral English. Last but not least, “entertainment is so cool! The popular singers, actors and celebrities are so catchy and attractive that you absolutely cant miss it! Teenagers are just fond of the trendy things.Well, I cant list more. I really cant wait to read that magazine!Yours faithfully,Li Hua【名师点评】这是一篇总分值作文。由于 这篇作文的出现，导致 了安徽省该年的英语作文分数普遍 偏低。仔细 分析了这篇文章，写的确实是好，特不 地道 的美式英语，一些词语的英勇 使用 ，让人不得不猜测此人或者 是家人可以有过海外 生活 的经历 ，否那么这么地道 标准的英语，可不是一朝一夕 所能写出来的。比如说：my cup of tea, apart from that, oral English, last but not least, celebrities, catchy跟 trendy的英勇 使用 ，list, can't wait to 简直是perfect! 况且 文章中不 一个差错 ，不管是抄写 仍然 语法。英语可以 学到这种程度，不可谓 不让人服气 。二. 非谓语动词为作文添彩 【北京卷高考英语】【试题回放】情况 作文假定 你是红星中学高三一班的教师 李华，为照应绿化祖国 的呼唤 ，你班四月十二日去郊区植树，请按照以下四幅图的先后次第 ，介绍 植树运动 的全过程 ，给某英文杂志的“绿色举措 专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class为题的英文稿件。留心 ：词数非常多 于60 提示 词：郊区 suburbsApril 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel its our duty to protect and beautify our environment.【名师点评】 本文是方案 奇异 的提大年夜 纲点式作文，与环保结合 ，破 意较好。文章思路 明晰 ，要点衔接，在语言 的表达 上选词新颖 ，同时使用 了分词短语作状语等较好的句式表达 。 【北京卷高考英语】【试题回放】开放作文请按照下面提示 ，写一篇随笔 ，词数非常多 于50In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.What an interesting picture! A western young man, sitting at a table, is ready to eat a bowl of noodles. He is holding two forks the same way as we Chinese hold chopsticks. He is trying so hard to pick up the noodles that he is sweating a lot. At first glance, I think its a bit funny, for we Chinese take for granted that chopsticks are the tools for eating noodles. The man in the picture is trying to copy us. Obviously he is doing it the hard way. Maybe using one fork will do a better job, In my opinion, we dont need to copy others ways of thinking. Sometimes a simpler way of doing things may be a better way.【名师点评】本文是开放性作文，恳求 考生控制 好图画 内容，发散表达 。考生重点要看出谁人 人是卷发高鼻的本国人，要体会到西式刀叉对中式食物 的冲突 性。行文结构十清晰 晰，同时句式使用 得熟练而精确。三. 复合句为写作减色 【世界 卷高考英语】【试题回放】 假定 你是李华，从小喜欢 大年夜 熊猫(panda),不时通过有关网站(website)关注 三年前在美国圣迭哥动物 园降生 的大年夜 熊猫“苏琳跟 她的母亲“白云。现在苏琳立即 三岁。请按照以下要点给动物 园义务人员 写一封信：1、 自我介绍 ;2、 祝贺苏琳生日 ;3、 感谢义务人员 ;4、 索取 苏琳三岁生日 照。留心 ：1、词数100左右 ;2、可以 适当 增加 细节，以使行文衔接;3、开头 语已为你写好。例文：Dear Sir/Madam,Greetings from China!Im Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. Ive been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and Ive been watching her grow on your website,. Now shes going to be three. Id like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.Yours truly,Li Hua【名师点评】本文写作的内容要点如下：1.自我介绍 ;2.信息来源 ;3.祝贺生日 ;4.感谢照顾 ;5.索取 照片;6.适合的开头 。这封信格式 精确 ，行文标准，描画有条不紊 ，称呼 、正文中的开头 及开头 、终了语均表抵达位。文章行文沉闷 ，感情 真挚 ，语言 表述精确，洋溢着作者因大年夜 熊猫掉 掉 落 全心 照顾 而对美方人员 的感谢之情，以及希望 自己愿望 成真，掉 掉 落 照片的希冀 之情。长短 句使用 公正 ，结合 了复杂 句跟 复合句，流畅 自然 ，不露遗迹 ，的确是一篇佳作。 积压 卡片英汉互译好词1.delighted adj.惊喜 的，欢喜 的 2.express v.表达 3.give birth to v.发作，生育 好句Id like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.我祝福 它生日 欢喜 同时对你们的辛劳 义务表达 我的感谢之情，正是 你们的努力 义务让苏琳跟 它的父母 在美国过着幸福跟 健康 的生活 。【高考英语世界 卷II】【试题回放】一家宾馆新开业，为吸引本国宾客 ，希望 在互联网出息 展鼓吹 。请你用英语为其 写一篇文字 介绍 。要紧内容包括 ：1.所在 ：距白山出口 处500米;2.房间及价钞票 ：单人间 (共20间)，100元/天;双人间 (共15间)，150元/天;热水淋浴;3.餐饮：餐厅(中、西餐)，咖啡厅(茶、咖啡);4.拍浮 池：全天免费开放; 5.欢迎预定 。留心 ：1.词数100左右 ，开头 语已为你写好;2.可适当 增加 细节，以使行文衔接。Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides singleperson room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 double person rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.【名师点评】本文开门见山 ，起首 点清楚 主旨。本文最大年夜 的特征 是使用 了特不 多比较复杂 的句式，使文章比较出彩。开头 使用 了独破 结构交代 宾馆位置。which指导 的非限制 性定语从句的使用 也特不 精确 。总地来说，文章句式精炼 ，是篇不错的总分值作文。积压 卡片英汉互译好词1. provide v.供应 2. convenience n.便利好句All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. 所有 这些效力都会 给你带来便利，同时特不 的快乐 。评析：bring great convenience，带来便利。【重庆卷高考英语】【试题回放】据报道，7岁的美国女孩Amy Bruce得知 自己身患肺癌(lung cancer)后处于特不 的痛苦之中，美国抗癌协会(ACS)决定 ，每当Amy收到一封慰征询 信，就给她增加 3美分的治疗款。假定 你是新华中学的教师 李华，请你用英文给Amy写一封慰征询 信，要紧内容包括 ： 自我介绍 得知 的情况 表示 鼓励 方案为她做什么 祝她早日康复 留心 ：1. 信的格式 已为你写好2. 信中不得出现你的真实 情况。3. 词数100左右 。4. 请在答题卡上作答。Dear Amy,Im Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. Im sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! Im sure you will win. It is reported that the America anti-cancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon.Yours,Li Hua名师点评 本文按照恳求 ，涵盖了所有 要点。文章使用 了高中稀有的句式，如Im sorry to hear that., It is reported that.等，都比较好。作者对定语从句的使用 恰到好处 地修饰 了文章，行文自然而 迟滞，值得深造 。积压 卡片好句1. Im sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.我特不 遗憾地得知 你身患肺癌，给你带来了宏大年夜 的痛苦。好处：which指导 限制 性定语从句。2. So, stand up and fight against the disease!因此，坚强地与疾病做让步 吧!好处：掷地有声，语言 精确。 四. 结构明晰 ,句式精确【江苏卷高考英语】【试题回放】2007年4月29日上午10点到11点，世界 亿万教师 阳光体育运动 在各地大年夜 中小黉舍 同时停顿，江苏省1，100万教师 积极 参与 了这项运动 。教诲 部建议教师 ： 每天 锻炼一小时 健康 义务五十年 幸福生活 一辈子请你按照以上提示 ，用英语准备 一份说话 稿，向同学 们讲演 一下阳光体育运动 的有关情况，并就高三教师 是否 需要 每天 花一小时锻炼，谈谈你的见地 及因由 。留心 ： 1、 说话 稿应包括 以上所有 信息，要有适当 发挥 。 2、 词数：120左右 。说话 稿的开头 跟 开头 已经写好，不计入总词数。 3、 参考词汇：阳光体育运动 a national student sports program;教诲 部the Ministry of EducationGood afternoon, everyone,The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10：，2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million students in Jiangsu province participated in this program.The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years. Our whole life will be very enjoyable.In my opinion, we senior high school students should do exercises for one hour a day even though our spare time is limited. Health is a basic condition for our study. If we did not do exercises, we wouldnt be able to get good study records. So every one of you, join the program now!Thank you!【名师点评】本文的结构十清晰 晰，同时句式使用 得熟练而精确。本文分为三段，前两段表达 ，后一段发布 不雅观 念，模范 的作文结构。在句式使用 上，作者用法多样，使用 了独破 结构跟 虚拟 语气，特不 出彩。复杂 的句式是本文的特征 之一。好句1. The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years.教诲 部建议我们 每天 做一个小时的运动 ，可以 健康 地活50年。评析：advocate，其后 接虚拟 语气，可以 省略情态 动词。好句2. If we did not do exercises, we wouldnt be able to get good study records.假定我们 不停顿运动 ，我们 的深造 效果就不会特不 好。评析：虚拟 语气。精选可编辑