新高考作文讲评课.ppt

新高考作文讲评课 Still waters run deep.流静水深流静水深,人静心深人静心深 Where there is life,there is hope。有生命必有希望。有生命必有希望Six steps for the writing practice:How to get on with our parents Step 1:examine the topicStyle:_ tense:_ person:_Paragraphs:Paragraph 1:Paragraph 2:Paragraph 3:议论文议论文（Argumentative Writing）presentfirstthe common problem:parents care for everythinghow parents care for everythign of usthe way to solve the problemStep 2:list the main points1.the same problem 2.care for everything3.make the generation gap deeper4.worry about everything5.make us grow up healthily and live happily6.more understanding betweenStep 3:make some sentences:1.We have the same problem.2.Our parents care for everything of us.3.They always tell us what we should do.4.They do not let us do what we like to do.5.The generation gap is deeper.6.The purpose is to make us grow healthily and happily.7.We are part of their life.8.We carry their hope and expectation.9.We should understand each other.10.In this way,we can get on well with each other.Step 4&5:connect the sentences and make some appolishment.Step 6:Copy it out carefully and clearly.Proof reading (find out 5 errors)Our parents concern about everything that we have done,which make us annoyed.They always worry about everything and everybody,such as our study,entertainment and friends.As is often the case,they sometimes look our diary without our permit.“Its good for you.”explain they every time we ask them why.Children as we are,there are some basic personal rights,which should be protected.How to get on well with our parents?Its a problem.However,there is no reason for us to be against to our parents just because of it.Only when we try our best to communicate with them can we make each of us understand.Its your sincerity and patience can call their respect on you.Why not have a try?_makes_read_permissionthat Suggestions for making our writing outstanding:1.advanced words and phrases;2.different abundant sentence patterns;3.correct conjunctions.Some copies from our homework:Copy 1:It seems that our parents care too much about us.For example,they are telling us what we should do and what we mustnt do all the time and they also worry about all that we do.In order to keep us growing healthily and happily,they even want us to stay at home for a whole day at weekends if possible.However,we feel it difficult to breathe under such heavy pressure.We want to have more freedom and make decisions by ourselves.All in all,we should give more understanding to our parents.As we know,all the parents love their children.So if we show our love to them properly,they will understand us,too.20(金盛金盛)Copy 2:What we must face with is that our parents always get everything of us under control,which makes us feel rather uncomfortable.To our disappointment,parents always worry about what we wear everyday,how we behave at school and our studies,our meals,even the friends we have made.Whats more,they often say that the intension for these is to let us grow up healthily and happily.For fear of their feeling sad,we have to act as they require,rather than say a word.Child as I am,I entirely understand my parents.I think the key to it is to understand them.On the other hand,we should make our parents understand us,either.With the love between parents and us,we can lead a comfortable and senseful life!24(张武斌张武斌)Copy 3:It is believed that our parents always pay attention to everything we do.They make it a rule that whatever we do,we should tell them.For example,tell them the reason and you can get the money which you ask for.Tell them where you go and then you can go out.They always worry about us.They take it for granted that whatever they do for us is good.They only want us to live happily and healthily.However,hadrdly do they change their mind no matter how we complain.The approach to solve the problem is to understand our parents and make ourselves understood.Only in this way can we get on well with our parents.26(徐佳峰徐佳峰)Copy 4:Our parents care for everything we do.They always tell us what we should do and stop us doing whatever we like to do,which makes our generation gap deeper.However,as our parents,whatever they do is make us grow up healthily and live happily.From the time we were born,they worry about what we eat,how much sleep we get and how we behave at school.In fact,we have been becomg part of their lives and carrying all their hopes and expectations from our birth.It is they who bring our lives as well as comfort in life.Therefore,more understanding between us is a must to shorten our gap and improve our relationship.Only in this way can we get on well with each other and enjoy the companionship.(a possible version)Some wonderful sentences from our homework:1.Not until we understand our parents concern and hope on us can we feel the love deeply from their hearts.(骆东浩骆东浩)2.What really makes us uncomfortable is that our parents worry about everything we have done.(徐航远徐航远)3.The better we understand our parents,the easier it will be to get along with them.(韩振宇韩振宇)4.Only when we try our best to communicate with them can we make each of us understood.(卫晓文卫晓文)5.We have every reason to believe their purpose of our growing up healthily and happily.(王芳王芳)6.Our parents manage everything of us,which is beyond what we can stand.(俞慧峰俞慧峰)7.What they dont know is that it will take away our freedom and make us unhappy.(吴伟健吴伟健)Six principles of making sentences (造造句成文六大原则句成文六大原则)：1.advanced words(高级词汇原则高级词汇原则)2.adverbial advanceed(状语提前原则状语提前原则)3.phrases preferred(短语优先原则短语优先原则)pound sentence,composite sentence and sentence of special kind (并列句、复合句和特殊句式原则并列句、复合句和特殊句式原则)5.long and short sentences alternately (长短句交替原则长短句交替原则)6.passages in paragraphs(短文分段分层原短文分段分层原则则)Five characteristics of outstanding writing:(高分作文的五大特性高分作文的五大特性)1.sense of order(条理性条理性:段落完整，层次分明）段落完整，层次分明）2.accuracy (准确性准确性:语法准确，用词精当）语法准确，用词精当）3.fluency (流畅性流畅性:层次清晰，行文连贯）层次清晰，行文连贯）4.conciseness&variety(简洁、多样性简洁、多样性:语言简语言简洁，不重复）洁，不重复）5.ideological content(思想性思想性:文章立意高，表文章立意高，表达个人观点内容积极向上）达个人观点内容积极向上）Homework:1.Writing practice with the six steps;2.Grammar exercise of adj.&adv.of P148