高二英语 模块6 Unit16 Communication workshopPeriod1课件 北师大选修6.ppt
The Day When Everything Went WrongPeriod 12021/8/11 星期三1 In this lesson you will be able to1.Learn to polish by comparing two writings2.Write a story;3.Use linking wordsObjectives:2021/8/11 星期三2Lead-inDo you love stories?What factors should be included in a story?Story Who When Where What 2021/8/11 星期三3Lead-inWhat will you write about when you see the title A Day When Everything Went Wrong?2021/8/11 星期三4 Sample:tell what happened in the pictures Last Monday,my alarm clock didnt ring,so I got up one hour late.When I hurriedly ran to the bus stop,the bus had left.As a result,I was late for school.2021/8/11 星期三5Write three or four sentences on one bad event that you have experienced,including who,when,where and what.Stage One2021/8/11 星期三6 Read Draft A of a students composition on the topic A Day When Everything Went Wrong.Question:How many events are mentioned in the story?2021/8/11 星期三7Events in Draft A1.I Walked to school;2.I came last in the poetry reading competition;3.I spilled water on my pillow2021/8/11 星期三8Write two or three events on the topic A Day When Everything Went Wrong.You can write about every bad thing you have experienced,such as losing something important,hurting your leg,being late for school,failing an examShare your writing with your partner.Stage Two2021/8/11 星期三9What other factors should be included in a story?Story Who When Where What Why How How to endHow you feel2021/8/11 星期三10Why:Feelings:No school bus;not prepared the competitionTiresome;awkwardRead Draft A and find the other factors of the story2021/8/11 星期三11Put why and feelings in your writings.Share your writing with your partner.Stage Three2021/8/11 星期三12Read Draft B and tell which one is better.What does the writer add in Draft B?In Draft B,the writer uses linking words and adds some details and specific information to attract the attention of the reader.Besides,the order of events is clearer and the language is more vivid.Stage Four2021/8/11 星期三13Order of events:A:1.Because the school bus did not 2.At school,Mr.fan 3.When I got into bed that night,I B:1.First,I had to wait 30 minutes for the school bus 2.The next problem happened when I arrived at school.3.The last problem of this terrible day happened when I got intoFirst,next,lastWhen2021/8/11 星期三14Vivid language:A:1.It was hot and tiresome.2.Mr.fan,the English teacher reminded me of the This surprised me 3.I came last in the competition.B:1.The day was hot and tiring.2.Mr.Fan,the English teacher,a large but friendly man,gave me a nasty surprise.He reminded me in his loud voice that 3.I was not surprised when I came last in the competition.Adjectives are used.2021/8/11 星期三15Use linking words and adjectives in your writing,referring to information on page97.2021/8/11 星期三16Linking words1.并列并列 2.转转折折 3.因果因果4.其他其他and,bothand but,however,so,because when,suddenly,as soon as,unfortunately,sothat,first,in the end,as a result2021/8/11 星期三17 Writing 1.体裁体裁：2.时态时态：3.人称人称：4.主题主题：记叙文体记叙文体一般过去时一般过去时第一人称第一人称描述过去个人经历描述过去个人经历Write your story A Day When Everything Went Wrong,using colourful language.(referring to Writing Help1 on P97)2021/8/11 星期三181、几天前、几天前the other day;several days ago2、使人感到意外、使人感到意外to ones surprise3、就在这时、就在这时at that moment;at that time4、两小时后、两小时后two hours later常用表达法常用表达法2021/8/11 星期三19aspectsYour evaluation 评价人评价人contents Excellent Good Acceptableorder of eventsExcellent Good AcceptablelanguageExcellent Good AcceptablelinkingExcellent Good AcceptableEvaluation(评价）2021/8/11 星期三202021/8/11 星期三212021/8/11 星期三22
