2020年山东卷读后续写讲解课件-高三英语一轮复习.pptx
续写续写2020年山东卷 TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.2020年山东卷 Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.“Iwishyoucouldseehim,”shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.“Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdontseewhathecando.”2020年山东卷 Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,”saidClara.“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”“SodoI,”saidHarry.“Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish(完成).”2020年山东卷 Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone.Illtellyouwhatwecando,”saidJohn.“YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn(爆米花),andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”1.续写词数应为150左石：2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohnsidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Witheverythingready.Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.梳理故事情节 whoMrs.Meredith,John,Harry,Clara,Bernard,Uncle JohnwhenOnemorningwhereIntheroomwhatThefamilyhelpedBernardtoearnmoney.whyBernardsdadwassickandhismomcouldntgoouttowork.howThechildrenmadepopcornandBernardsoldit.写作注意点 续写部分与原文在文体和语言上保持一致时态一致前文中有动作描写（如hesprangtohisfeetandcried.Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.)、对话（如“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney.”“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”)续写时应考虑与前文语言风格一样。首句的解读 第一段首句WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohnsidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.表明Mrs.Meredith同意John提出的建议，因此本段应该描写卖爆米花前的准备工作以及他们所需要的材料。第二段首句Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness表明，Bernard开始要卖爆米花了。此时可以从两方面入手，其中之一是爆米花卖得很快，他很快就赚到了钱；另一方面则是爆米花卖得不顺利，但在孩子们的帮助下，Bernard最终赚到了钱，他非常感激Mrs.Meredith和她的孩子们。写作思路 思路一：孩子们去UncleJohn家里借爆米花机器并学习怎么制作爆米花，而Mrs.Meredith出去买爆米花的纸袋，并把Bernard带了回来。一切准备就绪，Bernard开始时很害羞，John帮助他一起卖爆米花，然后赚到了钱，Bernard高兴并感谢他们。思路二：Mrs.Meredith和孩子们一起去告诉Bernard这个计划。他们买了机器和纸袋，学会了做爆米花。一切准备就绪，Bernard开始卖爆米花，赚到了钱。写作思路微技能之G-N策略 运用Given-New策略，我们根据原文文本和首句（Giveninformation)提供的信息，采用围绕中心词和一些相关问题、回答问题（Newinformation)的方法，拓展我们的思路和角度，最终形成合理的故事情节线。从续写第一段首句WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohnsidea,shethoughtitwasagoodidea,too.我们可以设问：1.WhatdidMrs.Meredithdo?2.WhatdidJohn,HarryandClaradotohelpBernard?3.HowdidtheyletBernardknowtheiridea?4.HowdidBernardfeel?第一段成段 WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohnsidea,shethoughtitwasagoodidea,too.SoMrs.Meredithtookoutthatbigboxofcorn.Thechildrenwereveryhappy.TheywenttoseeUncleJohntoborrowthepopcornmachineandlearnedhowtomakepopcorn.Thechildrenmadepopcorn.Mrs.Meredithwentouttobuythepaperbags.ShebroughtBernardback.Theytoldtheideatohim.Hewasexcited.第二段提问 根据续写第二段首句Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.我们可以这样设问：1.WhenBernardsoldpopcorn,whatproblemwouldhemeet?2.Whatdidthechildrendo?3.DidBernardsellpopcornout?4.WasBernardthankfultothem?第二段成段 Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Atfirst,Bernardwasverytooshy.Johnhelpedhimtoselltheirpopcorn.Thepopcornwasverydelicious.Intheevening,theirpopcornwassoldoutandtheyearnedsomemoney.BernardthankedandhuggedJohn.Everyweek,Bernardsoldpopcornandtookmoneyhome.微技能之准确的动作神态描写：高兴篇 上面这一段文字情节完整，但是存在着字数不足，信息量不够，表达干瘪的缺点，无法准确传达故事类文章的情感因素。为此，我们可以通过情绪情感、心理活动、具体动作、对话独白、场景描写以及修辞等更多方式使得文章血肉丰满，厚实感人。微技能之准确的动作神态描写：高兴篇 一.词的积累动词动词cheer,delight形容词形容词happy,glad,pleased,cheerful,delighted,overjoyed,merry,thrilled名词joy,happiness,excitement,pleasure副词enjoyably,cheerfully,joyfully微技能之准确的动作神态描写：高兴篇 二.词块和句的积累1.BothMarkandIarefeelingonthetopoftheworld.2.BothMarkandIarefloatingonair.3.Hearing/Seeing,hejumpedupanddownwithexcitement/joy.4.Thechildrenwerethrilled/wildwithjoyatthesightof5.Hiseyesglittered/shonewithexcitement.微技能之准确的动作神态描写：高兴篇 二.词块和句的积累6.Shehummedandskippedintheforestlikeabird.7.Thesmileonherfaceshonelikeadiamond.8.Thencameavoicefarfromwherewewere,bathingusinextremejoy.9.Afloodofjoy/pleasurewelledupinhim.10.Anextremehappinessdominatedtheirheartsimmediately.牛刀小试 一.一看到那个大盒子，孩子们高兴地跳起来。1.Thechildrenjumpedupanddownwithjoy_.(运用时间状语从)2._，thechildrenjumpedupanddownwithjoy.(运用非谓语动词结构)3._，thechildrenjumpedupanddownwithjoy.（运用介词短语结构）二.然后他们去拜访了UncleJohn,借了机器，学习了怎么制作美味的爆米花。1.Then,theypaidavisittoUncleJohn,_themostdeliciouspopcorn.（运用三连动句式）牛刀小试 2.Then,theypaidavisittoUncleJohn,_themostdeliciouspopcorn.（运用非谓语动词结构）三.Bernard如此感动，一句话也说不出来。1._thathecouldhardlyspeak.（运用sothat.句型）2._thathecouldhardlyspeak.（运用倒装结构）四.Mrs.Meredith回来了，后面跟着Bernard.1.WhenMrs.Meredithcameback,_（运用主从句）2.Mrs.Meredithcameback,and_（运用并列句）牛刀小试 3.Mrs.Meredithcameback,_（运用非谓语结构）五.天空开始出现闪闪的星星，高兴地向他们眨眼睛。Starsappearedinthesky,_.（运用非谓语动词结构和拟人地修辞手法）六.听到这个好消息，他感到非常高兴。Hearingthegreatidea,_dominatedhisheartimmediately.（抽象名词作主语）七.没过多久，他们便制作出了美味的爆米花。_theycouldmakedeliciouspopcorn.（运用含before的句型）牛刀小试 八.Bernard带着空篮子回来了，手里拿着一些硬币。1.Bernardreturnedwithanemptybasket,_（运用并列句）2.Bernardreturnedwithanemptybasket,_（运用with复合结构）3.Bernardreturnedwithanemptybasket,_（运用独立主格结构）参考范文1 WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohnsidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.SoMrs.Meredithtookoutthatbigboxofcorn.Atthesightofit,thechildrenjumpedupanddownwithjoy.Then,theypaidavisittoUncleJohn,borrowedthepopcornmachineandlearnedhowtomakethemostdeliciouspopcorn.Verysoon,theywerebusyingpoppingthecorn,whileMrs.Meredithwentouttobuythepaperbags.Shecameback,followedbyBernard.Theysharedtheideawithhim.Hiseyesshonewithexcitement.Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Atfirst,Bernardwastooshy.ButJohn,asmartandlovelyboy,helpedhimtoselltheirpopcornfromdoortodoor.Itwasitssweetsmellthatmadeitpopular.Intheevening,theirpopcornwassoldout.Starsappearedinthesky,twinklingtheireyesattheminhappiness.Holdingmoney,somovedwasBernardthathecouldhardlyspeak,buthisbrightsmilingfacespokeforhim.BernardhuggedJohntightly.Sometimesoursmallactioncanmakeagreatdifferencetoothers.参考范文2 WhenMrs.Meredithheardoftheidea,shethoughtitwasagoodonetoo.TheyhurriedtotellBernardthegreatidea.Hearingit,anextremehappinessdominatedhisheartimmediately.ThenMrs.Meredithtogetherwithfourkidsmadetheirwaytoasupermarket,boughtapopcornmachineandsomepaperbags,andwenthome.Itwasntlongbeforetheycouldmakedeliciouspopcorn.Bathedinthesunshine,theyputthepaperbagsfilledwithpopcornintoabasketinexcitement.Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Thepopcornwassosweetthatitwassoldoutinashorttime.Bernardreturnedwithanemptybasket,somecoinsinhishand.Heheldthecoinstightly,tearsrollingdownwithoutcontrol.Sincethen,everySaturdaymorning,Johnsawitthatthecornwasallpopped,thepaperbagsfilledandarrangedinthebasketwhenBernardarrived.ThankstoJohn,allthingswentwell.Evenasmallactofkindnesscanmaketheworldbetter.官方范文 WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohnsidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.So,theywenttothelocalsupermarkettogether.Theyboughtabagofcornandsomespecialbagsforpopcorn.Whentheygothome,theymadealotofpopcornandputitinthespecialbags.Withthepopcorn,theywenttoBernardshome.TheytoldBernardhowtosellthepopcorn.Bernardandhisparentswereverygrateful.AndtheMeredithfamilyalsofeltveryhappytohelpthisfamily.Witheverythingready.Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hetookthepopcornaroundthehousesandsoldallhispopcorn.Heearnedalotofmoney.Then,hewantedtobeself-dependent.Therefore,heaskedMrs.Meredithtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.Afterthat,notonlydidhesellpopcorn,buthealsoaddcreamandsalttothepopcorntomakeittastebetter.Bernardgrewuptobearemarkableman.HedidnotforgetthehelpofMeredith,andhealsodidwhathecouldtohelpthoseinneed.Practice makes perfect!Practice makes perfect!
