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v第五档第五档(很好很好):(21-25分分)v第五档第五档(很好很好):(21-25分分)v第四档第四档(好好)：(16-20分分)v第三档第三档(适当适当)：(11-15分分)v第二档第二档(较差较差)：(6-10分分)v第一档第一档(差差)：(1-5分分)书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求 第五档第五档(很好很好):):(21-2521-25分分)v完全完全完成了试题规定的任务。完成了试题规定的任务。v1.1.覆盖覆盖所有所有内容要点。内容要点。v2.2.应用了应用了较多较多的的语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇。v3.3.语法结构或词汇方面有语法结构或词汇方面有个别个别小错误，但为尽量使用小错误，但为尽量使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。能力。v4.4.有效有效地使用了地使用了衔接手段衔接手段衔接手段衔接手段，全文结构紧凑，内容连贯。，全文结构紧凑，内容连贯。v完全完全达到了预期的写作目的。达到了预期的写作目的。第四档第四档(好好)：(16-2016-20分分)n完成了试题规定的任务。完成了试题规定的任务。n1.1.虽漏掉虽漏掉1 1、2 2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。n2.2.应用的应用的语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇能满足任务能满足任务的要求。的要求。n3.3.语法结构或词汇方面应用语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确基本准确，少许错误主要，少许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。n4.4.应用应用简单简单的语句间的的语句间的衔接手段衔接手段衔接手段衔接手段，使全文结构紧凑，使全文结构紧凑，内容较连贯。内容较连贯。n达到了预期的写作目的。达到了预期的写作目的。评分原则评分原则 n1.1.先根据文章的内容和语言初步先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定档次确定档次，然后，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分给分。n2.2.词数低于词数低于130130或高于或高于170170，扣，扣2 2分分。n3.3.评分时注意的主要内容为：内容要点、评分时注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词应用词汇汇、语法结构的数量和准确性语法结构的数量和准确性及上下文的及上下文的连贯性连贯性。n4.4.拼写与标点拼写与标点是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。n5.5.如如书写较差书写较差以致影响交际，将分数以致影响交际，将分数降低一个档降低一个档次次。3 3.修改文章并誊写。修改文章并誊写。（6-86-8分钟）分钟）1.1.认真审题立意，确定写作中心。认真审题立意，确定写作中心。（1 1分钟）分钟）2 2.列出写作提纲，扩展成篇。列出写作提纲，扩展成篇。（8-108-10分钟）分钟）一、一、作文的卷面与作文的卷面与书书写；写；二、二、语语言表达的言表达的层层次性与丰富性；次性与丰富性；三、三、行文的行文的逻辑逻辑性与流性与流畅畅性；性；四、四、文章的思想性与开放性；文章的思想性与开放性；整洁、规范的书写是写作得分的亮点整洁、规范的书写是写作得分的亮点 规范策略规范策略 A.A.词汇词汇的选择灵活多样；的选择灵活多样；词汇策略词汇策略 B.B.句型句型结构运用灵活多变结构运用灵活多变;句式策略句式策略 A.A.突出文章段落中的突出文章段落中的主题句主题句；B.B.归纳各种功能的归纳各种功能的连词；连词；行文策略行文策略 写作策写作策 略略1.我们将尽力按时完成任务。我们将尽力按时完成任务。词汇策略词汇策略2.我突然想到了一个好注意。我突然想到了一个好注意。.Welldoourbesttofinishourtaskintime.Welldowhateverwecantofinishthetaskintime.Wellmakegreateffortstofinishthetaskintime.Welldevoteoureffortstofinishingthetaskintime.Wellsparenoeffortstofinishthetaskintime.SuddenlyIhadagoodidea.Allofasudden,Ithoughtofagoodidea.Allofasudden,Icameupwithagoodidea.Allofasudden,agoodideaoccurredtome.Allofasudden,agoodideaflashedacrossmymind词的讲究词的讲究简单词汇简单词汇建议使用词汇建议使用词汇naboutconcerning,involving,withregardtonbebeingdiscussed/builtbeunderdiscussion/constructionncausebringabout,giveriseto,resultin,leadto,contributetonexplain accountfornhavepossess/beequippedwith/bearmedwith句子的丰富性句子的丰富性n学会用一些常见句型学会用一些常见句型n用不同形式表达同一句意用不同形式表达同一句意n学会使用复杂句学会使用复杂句n掌握几种表达技巧掌握几种表达技巧n学会机智、巧妙地借鉴和运用试卷完形或阅学会机智、巧妙地借鉴和运用试卷完形或阅读中的语言表达与观点读中的语言表达与观点n熟读好词好句，熟读乃至背诵书面表达题范熟读好词好句，熟读乃至背诵书面表达题范文，所谓文，所谓“它山之石，可以攻玉它山之石，可以攻玉”。常用句型常用句型Asthesayinggoes,allworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.nThereisnodenyingthatnDifferentopinionsareasfollows.nItiswidelyacknowledgedthatcontributedto.ExpertsarguethatButIdoubtwhetherwillAnumberoffactorscouldaccountforthedevelopmentinnThereareseveralpossiblereasonsforthatexceptthat复杂句复杂句（定语从句、名词性从句、状语从句）（定语从句、名词性从句、状语从句）1）Tomwasborninasmallvillage.HereceivedagoodeducationinNewYork.HebecameasuccessfulbusinessmanlaterinNewYork.Thoughborninasmallvillage,TomreceivedagoodeducationinNewYork,wherelaterhebecameasuccessfulbusinessman.2）Ifyoucomebackbeforesixoclock,youcangoout.Youcangooutonconditionthat/providedthatyoucomebackbeforesixoclock.名词性从句名词性从句他没有出现，使每个人失望。他没有出现，使每个人失望。Toeveryonesdisappointment,hedidntturnup.(简单句简单句)Whatdisappointedeveryonewasthathedidntturnup.Itdisappointedeveryonethathedidntturnup.Thefactthathedidntturnupdisappointedeveryone.合并句子合并句子他喜欢踢足球，也喜欢打篮球。他喜欢踢足球，也喜欢打篮球。Helikesplayingfootball.Healsoenjoysplayingbasketball.Notonlydoeshelikeplayingfootball,butalsoheenjoysplayingbasketball.不要总是以有生命的名词和不要总是以有生命的名词和人称代词开头人称代词开头nPeoplehaveseengreatchangesinShanghaiinrecentyears.Shanghaihaswitnessedgreatchangesinrecentyears.改变语态改变语态ManypeoplethinkbirthcontrolisquitenecessaryinChina.Itiswidely(commonly)thought/believed/(accepted)thatbirthcontrolisquitenecessaryinChina.非谓语动词非谓语动词1.IwouldliketobeavolunteerforthemeetingwhichwillbeheldnextMonday.2.WhenIfoundthatsomanypeopleweresittingintheclassroom,Iwasverynervous.Findingsomanypeopleseatedintheclassroom,Iwasverynervous.IhaveastrongdesiretobeavolunteerforthemeetingtobeheldnextMonday.名词结构名词结构lThestyleoflivinghasbecomemoreandmorepopularandacceptedbymoreandmoreyoungpeople.Thestyleoflivinghasfounditsgrowingpopularityandacceptanceamongyoungpeople.n起起n目前、当前、现在目前、当前、现在n_ _ _n首先，起初首先，起初n_ _ n当提到当提到，当考虑到，当考虑到.n_ _n承承n并列、递进并列、递进n_ _ _nowadays,atpresent,currentlywhenitcomesto,consideringbesides,whatsmore,furthermore,firstofall,inthefirstplace,行文策略行文策略(常见过渡性词语）常见过渡性词语）n转转n弱转折、弱对比弱转折、弱对比 _ _ n强转折、强对比强转折、强对比 _ _ _n坏中有好坏中有好 _ 每况愈下每况愈下_n合合n结果结果 _ _ _n总之、综上所述总之、综上所述n_ _ _n就我而言、在我看来就我而言、在我看来n_ _ _ though,instead(of)however,incontrast,onthecontraryfortunatelywhatsworsetherefore,asaresult,consequentlyallinall,onmypersonalnote,inconclusioninaword,inmysight,asforme假如你是王明，是一名高三的学生假如你是王明，是一名高三的学生，你的朋友李，你的朋友李华华来信来信询问询问你高三的你高三的学学习习和生活情况。和生活情况。请请根据下表中的要点根据下表中的要点给给他写一封回信他写一封回信。总总体情况体情况学学习习方面方面压压力大（作力大（作业业多、考多、考试试多等）；多等）；与老与老师师、同学的关系、同学的关系生活生活方面方面心声和打算心声和打算（自（自拟拟两至三点以上）两至三点以上）注意：注意：根据所提供的要点逐一根据所提供的要点逐一陈陈述，适当述，适当发挥发挥；词词数数150左右左右文章开文章开头头和和结结尾已写好，不尾已写好，不计计入入总词总词数。数。DearLiHua,IamwritingtotellyouaboutmylifeinSeniorThree._Lookingforwardtohearingfromyousoon!Yoursever,WangMing随堂训练随堂训练与老师的关系与老师的关系压力大压力大同学间关系同学间关系考试多考试多作业多作业多学校生活学校生活家庭生活家庭生活 自自 己己老老 师师 政政 府府学学 校校父父 母母想想 法法做做 法法作业多，考试多作业多，考试多 压力大（因果关系）压力大（因果关系）非限制性定语从句非限制性定语从句 名词性从句名词性从句 状语从句状语从句 with 结构结构 强调句强调句定语从句定语从句名词性从句名词性从句 状语从句状语从句I have so many exercises and exams that I feel stressed.I feel stressed because there are so many exercisesThere are a large number of exercises and exams,which leave me under great pressure.What makes me feel stressed are too many exercises.with 结构结构 强调句强调句With too much homework to do and too many exams to sit for,I feel stressed.It is too many exercises and exams that leave me under great pressure.I am writing to tell you about my life in Senior Three.Just as you know,my life now is tiring but meaningful.We are kept busy all the day and there is too much pressure upon me.With too much homework to do and too many exams to take,I feel stressed and almost break down,but I have made progress recently.Fortunately,my classmates help and learn from each other.Whats more,not only do my teachers encourage me to build up my confidence,but also they help me improve my study.Whenever I am in trouble,they are willing to help me without hesitation.Busy and tired as I am,I feel happy and grateful to everyone around me.In order to reduce pressure,I often play basketball or surf the Internet,which makes me relaxed.In addition,my parents prepare a variety of delicious food to keep me energetic.I think a happy school life requires the joint efforts from my parents,my teachers and myself.I do hope my parents dont expect too much of me.Instead they should give me more encouragement so that I can study efficiently with less pressure.Besides,I sincerely hope my teachers will give me less homework,allowing me more free time to focus on what I am weak in.You know the last year of high school is demanding and challenging,so I will spare no efforts to study hard no matter what difficulties I may meet with.Im confident that my hard work will pay off in the near future.书面表达得高分必须做到：书面表达得高分必须做到：总总 结结n在保证文章在保证文章语法结构和词汇基本正确语法结构和词汇基本正确的前提下：的前提下：q-恰当使用恰当使用衔接手段衔接手段，使文章结构紧凑、内容连贯；，使文章结构紧凑、内容连贯；q-适当地变换使用适当地变换使用较复杂的句型结构和较高级的词较复杂的句型结构和较高级的词汇，汇，尽量避免重复和单调；尽量避免重复和单调；q-主题句主题句的内容要明确具体，语言简洁，开门见山；的内容要明确具体，语言简洁，开门见山；q-书写要认真，卷面要整洁！书写要认真，卷面要整洁！注意：注意：1.根据所提供的要点逐一根据所提供的要点逐一陈陈述，适当述，适当发挥发挥；2.词词数数150左右左右；3.文章开文章开头头和和结结尾已写好，不尾已写好，不计计入入总词总词数。数。DearLiHua,IamwritingtotellyouaboutmylifeinSeniorThree._Lookingforwardtohearingfromyousoon!Yoursever,WangMing请根据下列表格的内容提示，写一篇题为请根据下列表格的内容提示，写一篇题为SAVEEARTH,SAVEUS的公益广告解说词。的公益广告解说词。污染的原因污染的原因人类的生产和生活活动（请自行列举）人类的生产和生活活动（请自行列举）污染类型污染类型1空气污染空气污染2.噪音污染噪音污染3.水污染水污染造成后果造成后果1.物种减少物种减少2.人类健康受损人类健康受损3.环境恶化环境恶化建议措施建议措施(请自己列出若干条请自己列出若干条)巩固训练巩固训练