高考英语复习备考：“读后续写类”写作思路点拨及优秀范文示例.docx

高考英语复习备考：“读后续写类”写作思路点拨及优秀范文示例真题链接2022年全国新高考I卷第四部分写作；第二节读后续写（满分25分）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构 成一篇完整的短文。注意:1 .续写词数应为150左右；2 .请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route (路线)through thick evergreen forest.I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.What was wrong? He had worked so hard fbr this event!I quickly searched the crowd fbr the school's coach and asked him what had happened. "I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him J he explained uncomfortably. "I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide."I bit back my frustration (ft®). I knew the coach meant well 一 he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, 1 turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer 一 that's all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.Paragraph 1: We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me.Paragraph 2:I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.【题目解读】本文讲述了作者鼓励自己因患有脑部疾病而行动不便的 学生参加跑步比赛的故事。要求考生根据所给故事情节以及 续写的两段开头语写一篇150词左右的读后续写。选材上， 文章题材为老师鼓励残疾学生参加越野跑步比赛，贴近学生 生活，主题积极向上；体裁为记叙文，已给出的文段为308 词，共有6个段落，故事发展脉络清晰，逻辑通畅，便于考 生进行续写。【文本意图】 读后续写选文的主题语境依然是人与自我，2021年主题为家庭生活，2022年主题为患脑部疾病的学生在老师的鼓励下坚持参加越野跑步比赛，贴近学生校园生活，立意积极向上，体现了对考生社会主义核心价值观、语言表达能力、创 造性思维能力的考查。【解题步骤】Step 1:快速阅读获取文章已知情节Step 1:快速阅读获取文章已知情节1 It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven 越野跑当天，来自不同学校的参赛选手在热身.熟悉线路。wn were warming up and walking the route （路线）through thick evergreen forest.2 I looked around and finally spottecCDavid>vho was standing by 作者发现Da vid表情凝重，交谈得知他犹豫着要不要参加越野跑。ears old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and 此显D；v；d异常萎现而犹豫给 wasn* t with the other children. HeCfigsitateB2and the 后文续写埋下了伏笔，让作 notto run.者的劝说有了意义。3KfiZhat was wrongHe had worked so hard for this event!【4】I quickly searched the crowd for the schooK s coach and asked him happen2>，l was afraid that kids from other schools would laughAt him " ha PvnHinad iinrnmfnrthlv " him the choice to run Of not. 作者深知David为比赛做出的努力找教练询问情况。Step 1:快速阅读获取文章已知情节5 I bit back my frustration作者才发现原来David因脑部疾病，行动不便，而教练 thought he was doing the riq也是担心他破同学嘲笑,让他在自己决定要不要参加 run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.J6】David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or runninglike other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regulardoing VSKtaas why none of the children thought it unusuat£B3t David haddecided to join the cross-countsy team. It just took him longer that* s all. DavickCSaiiot missed a single pra<cj£gand although he always finished his rim long after the other ch”（尽管患有脑部疾病，但David尽全力参加各种活动，同 teacher at the school I was f学们也没有戴有色眼镜看他。作为一名特殊教育老师， proud of his strong determir作者深知David所面临的挑战也为他的坚强感到骄傲。Step 2:有逻辑地推断故事的发展Step 2:有逻辑地推断故事的发展We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn1 t look at作者做了什么？说了什么？ David对此有什么反应?作者和David坐下后发生了什么促使David下了决心Da'vid最终决定去参加比赛I watched asDavid moved up to the starting linejwith the otherrunners."step 2:有逻辑地推断故事的发展|0饺萋琮H券I watched asDavid moved up to the starting linejwith the other runners.受到鼓舞后的David决定要去赛跑，走到了起跑线语言描写写心理描写David在比赛过程中表现如何？会遇到什么?预测比赛结果，人物的感受或收获升华主题：顽强拼搏、挑战自我【参考范文】Paragraph 1:We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn, t look at me. I quietly said, “If you5 re not runn i ng just because you5 re af ra i d you wi I I be I aughed at, that5 s not a good reason. The rea I quest i on i s whether you are go i ng to I et those few peop I e stop you from do i ng someth i ng you rea I I y want to do. Are you go i ng to Iet them get i n your way?” I held my breath as Dav id took th i s i n. Then he looked at the field and said with a determination, m go i ng to run.Paragraph 2:I watched as David moved up to the starting I ine with the other runners. He Iooked back at me and I s ignaIed to him with a thumb-up, fee I i ng proud of him. He smi I ed, took a deep breath and got ready for the race. When the runn i ng began, he ran with a I I h i s strength, i n sp i te of h i s abnorma I steps. Eventua I I y, he f i n i shed the runn i ng. Near I y out of breath, he wa I ked to me and then gave me a hug. "Thank you!” he uttered, “Without you, I wou I d never taste such sense of ach i evement of chai I enging myself.”实战演练阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成 一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。On a perfect summer afternoon, I took a bike r ide with my fami Iy to our I oca I park. I was riding my pretty p i nk b i eye I e i n a I i ne of fami ly members, just I i ke ducks.Final I y, we ar r i ved at our dest i nat i on. After park i ng our b i kes, my younger s i ster and brother rushed away to slide across, climb upon, and r i de on the i r be Ioved pIayground equ i pment. I s i I ent Iy mi ssed the i nnocence of be i ng a young ch i I d. The wor I d was just one b i g p I ayground and the cha I I enges of h i gh schoo I were not anyth i ng to be concerned about yet. I wa I ked over to the swi ngs set i n the center of the b i g park. Seated on one of them, I pushed myse I f and moved gent I y back and forward, enjoy i ng the wonderfu I t ime of peace and re I axat i on. Sudden I y, I glanced to my I eft and saw a sma I I child on the swing bes ide me. However, I cou Idn5 t see any parents around her. She I ooked up at me with her eyes shining i n the br i ght sun.“Can you push me?” she asked i nnocent I y. I fol I owed her obv i ous stare and saw my mother push i ng my s i ster up i n the sky. There were fami I i es off i n the d i stance, and I wondered wh i ch was hers. D i dn5 t she have a loving mother to push her on the swi ng? And I di dr? t want this girl5 s parents to th i nk I was try i ng to do someth i ng that wou I d hurt her. But how cou I d I refuse her sweet smi Ie, showi ng two t i dy rows of baby teeth?“Sure, ” I rep I i ed with a smi Ie. I tr i ed to match her smi Ie' s own sweetness, but my meta I-mouth smile most I i keIy feI I short. I jumped off my swi ng and began to push her. "What' s your name?” she asked gent I y as she f I ew backward. "Mary, “ I rep I i ed, push i ng her forward. "My name i s Chloe," she i nformed me as her go I den ha i r danced i n the warm a i r.I nodded and cont i nued to push her forward, I ook i ng down at thepink dress she was wear i ng.Paragraph 1:“I I i ke your dress, Chloe," I sa i d.Paragraph 2:“Chloe,“ I asked, "where are your parents?”【文本结构】本文属于故事类体裁，通过开端一发展一高潮一结局的顺序讲述了 作者与Chloe在公园的一次偶遇经历。开端：作者与家人一起骑自行车来到了 o在看着自己的弟弟妹妹 的过程中，作者怀念起自己小时候的情景。然后，作者坐到秋千上，慢慢地享受那份宁静和悠闲。发展：这时，作者注意到了 Chloe o Chloe问作者是否可 以,作者想答应，但又担 心 o然而，当看到Chloe甜甜的微笑时，作者感觉自己无法拒绝。于是笨应了 Chloe的请求，然后帮 着 o这时,Ch I oe 主动问 o为此，作者和Chloe展开了简单的交流。高潮：作者因为好奇问起了 Chloe的父母，那么这两个人会聊些什 么呢？结局：得知Chloe父母的故事后。作者会有什么感触？【参考范文】Paragraph 1:“I I i ke your dress, Chloe,“ I said. "Thank you, “ she answeredcons i derate I y. A smile began to cross her face. Ch I oe began to ask me quest i ons I wouId norma I Iy not answer with a stranger quest i ons about my fami I y and f r i ends, where I I i ved and some other th i ngs. I became amazed at the pIeasant conversat i on I was hav i ng with her. After push i ng Ch Ioe on the swi ng for a Iong wh i Ie, I gIanced around the park. There were still no parents around her.Paragraph 2:“Chloe,“ I asked, “where are your parents?” Ch Ioe was I ook i ng at me ser i ous I y. 11 was a strange way for a sma I I chi Id, who shou I dn5 t have a care i n the wor I d. "They' re i n the army, serv i ng as guards i n a faraway p I ace. They can rare I y stay by my side, “ she wh i spered. My eyes were sudden I y wet. I was sorry for her, with apprec i at i on and respect for her parents. Just then, I found an old woman was I ook i ng at us a I I the t ime with a smi Ie. She was Ch Ioe5 s grandmother.