Unit5AstorybyMarkTwain.pptx
How to polish our essaysYufang YaoYufang Yao 2019.4.11 2019.4.11Step1比较以下两篇文章，比较以下两篇文章，分析第一篇文章存在分析第一篇文章存在的问题的问题 学生习作学生习作Imrespectpeopleareteacher,why?Becauseteacherwereoftenhelpthestudent.SometimeIsawmanystudentweregototheoffice.teacherhelpfulthestudent.SoIveryrespecttheteacher.参考习作参考习作Ofallmyteachers，MsWangistheonewhoIrespectmost.Thoughsheisforty-five,shelooksveryyoungforherage.Becauseofhereducationalwisdom,shebecomesoneofthemostpopularteachersinourschool.Comparedwithotherteachers,shepaysmoreattentiontoherwayofteaching.Shetriesvariouswaystomakeherclasseslivelyandinteresting.Inheropinion,weshouldnotonlyknow“what“,butalsounderstand“why”.Soinsteadofgivingusanswersimmediately,sheencouragesustothinkbyourselveswheneversheputsforwardquestions.Withherhelp,wehavelearnedhowtoanalyzeandsettleproblems.Whatawonderfulworldof“why”sheleadsusto!Suchawiseteacherisshethatweallrespectherverymuch.ThepersonwhoIrespectmost(myteacher)本篇文章可完善之处：本篇文章可完善之处：1.要明晰要写的内容1）Who is your most respectable person?2）What personalities lead you to respect him/her most?3）Why do you respect him/her most?要围绕具体事情展开4）What is your feeling or comments?2.文章导入要自然 3.要首尾呼应4.语言素材缺乏，词汇、句子不丰富，表达不完整。5.衔接过渡缺少技巧 Step2分析第二篇文章分析第二篇文章的成功之处的成功之处 Whoisyourmostrespectableperson?An introduction Of all my teachers，Ms Wang is the one who I respect most.（开篇点题，导入自然）（开篇点题，导入自然）Abody1.Whatpersonalitiesleadyoutorespecthim/hermost?2.Whydoyourespecthim/hermost?具体事情展开具体事情展开性性格格特特质质：She is a wise teacher.（老师的智慧教学赢得了我们的尊重）具体事情展开具体事情展开:Compared with other teachers,（使用分词结构作状语）she paysmoreattentionto her way of teaching.（pay more attention to固定搭配使用得当）She tries various ways to make her classeslively and interesting.(使用高级词汇various、lively)In her opinion,we should not only know“what“,but also understand“why”.（用not only but also用表示强调）So instead of giving us answers immediately,(instead of介词词组使用恰当),she encourages us to think by ourselves whenever she puts forward questions.（高级短语encourage sb.to do sth.的使用及whenever高级状语从句的使用）Anending Whatisyourfeelingorcomments?With her help,we have learned how to analyze and settle problems（高级词汇analyze 和settle的使用）What a wonderful world of“why”she leads us to!（句型变化，使用感叹句表示强调）Such a wise teacher is she that we all respect her very much.(使用了倒装句结构表示强调)Step3选出可以体现老师高贵品格的形容词(与主题相匹配的形容词)，并填入椭圆形内 Optimistic(乐观的乐观的)independentaggressive(有进取心的有进取心的)activeableout-goingambitiouscarefulcooperativecreativedependable well-educated efficient energetic faithfulgenerous gentle impartial（公正的）（公正的）Methodicalmodest（谦虚的）（谦虚的）responsible sweet-tempered tireless（不知疲倦的）（不知疲倦的）attractive cheerfulconfidentconsideratewarm-heartedknowledgeable open-minded passionate（充满热情的）（充满热情的）reliable（可信赖的）（可信赖的）unselfishinspiringStep4分析该学生想表达的分析该学生想表达的令他尊敬的老师的性令他尊敬的老师的性格特质格特质Imrespectpeopleareteacher,why?Becauseteacherwereoftenhelpthestudent.SometimeIsawmanystudentweregototheoffice.teacherhelpfulthestudent.SoIveryrespecttheteacher.helpfulresponsibleStep5分分析下列析下列语段所表达段所表达的令人尊敬的老的令人尊敬的老师的的性格特性格特质，用合适形，用合适形容容词填入下列横填入下列横线上上IrespectherbecausesheistheteacherIhavemet.She always encourages me when I meet a difficulty.Once I had a problem,she gave me a smile and said:“Dont give up.I believe that you can do it well.”She always gives me some helpful suggestions.mostinspiringIrespectherbecausesheistheteacherIhavemet.Whenever I was in trouble,you always stood around me to comfort me.You taught me how to be a good person and give me the courage to face difficulties.You are strict in my study but you are friendly to me.You are my friends so I want to say here,I love you,my dear teachers!mostcharmingmostconsideratemostinspiringIrespectherbecausesheistheteacherIhavemet.She is a very charming and pretty lady.I like her not because of her beauty but her kindness.Last week I was ill and asked for a three-day leave,she gave up her lunch time to help me with the classes.kindestIrespectherbecausesheistheteacherIhavemet.She likes her teaching work very much.She has a lot of good teaching methods.She can always make her class enjoyable and complicated things easy for us to understand.mostmethodicalmostpassionateIrespectherbecausesheistheteacherIhavemet.She is not only our teacher but also our friend.Often she has lunch with us and talks with us as a good friend.But she is very strict with us in class,so we have made great progress in our study of physics with her help.mostfriendlyIrespectherbecausesheistheteacherIhavemet.As an experienced teacher,she always makes her class lively and interesting,which greatly benefits us students.mostexperiencedIrespectherbecausesheistheteacherIhavemet.He is also a warm-hearted man with a very good sense of humor.He gets along well with us.Whenever we are in trouble and ask him for help,he is always ready to lend us a helping hand.mostwarm-heartedmosthumorousStep6帮助帮助该同学完成写作同学完成写作提提纲的的body部分部分性格特质：性格特质：Sheisateacher.请结合具体事情展开请结合具体事情展开:IrespectherbecausesheistheteacherIhavemet.Step7如何如何导入主入主题？如何开如何开头？1.Of all my teachers，Ms Wang is the one who I respect most.2.I met a lot of people in past thirteen years,such as my parents,my teachers and my friends.Of all of them，Ms Wang is the one who I respect most.3.In my daily life,I come across many people whom I respect,like my parents,teachers and friends.But the person I respect most is Ms Wang.4.I have had many teachers since I began school.Among them,Ms Wang is my English teacher,whom I respect most.Not only is she knowledgeable,but also she is patient and helpful.5.Tell you the truth,I respect many people:my father,my mother,even my sister,but the person I respect most is my English teacher:Ms Wang.6.Everyone has his respectable person,so do I.Step8如何如何结尾？尾？如何点如何点题？1.Ms Wang gave me courage,confidence and hope.I learned a lot from her and I will respect her forever.2.Ms Wang is my most respectable teacher and I like her very much.To thank her,I have decided to study English well in the future.3.I have learnt a lot from her,I have learnt that we shouldnt give up when we meet difficulties.Through Ms Wangs smile,I saw the kindness from her even the truth of life.4.She loves teaching so much and has the eagerness to devote her life to education.Because of her,I want to be an excellent teacher in the future.5.This affected me deeply,so I study hard so that someday I could be a person like her.6.I would like to give my thanks to my teachers for teaching me that how I can become a good student in the past four years.I hope my teachers will be happy and healthy forever.7.My four-year middle school life will come to the end,I am so lucky to have such a good teacher like you.I wont forget you and I will love you forever!8.I feel grateful to have such a good teacher.I hope that she will still be our teacher next term.9.Ms Wang is such a good teacher that I respect her forever.Homework分析两篇文章的问题与优点，并修改完善第一篇文章分析两篇文章的问题与优点，并修改完善第一篇文章 ThepersonwhoIrespectmost(mymother)感谢聆听，批评指导THANK YOU
