03 读后续写：亲情类（故事构造“三板斧”）-2022年高考英语读后续写技巧与训练（新高考专用）.docx

读后续写：亲情类Part1：经典例文（送花）1Part2：亲情类故事构造“三板斧”3第一板斧：冲突构造（误会、犯错等）3第二板斧：冲突化解（解释、道歉、弥补、回忆等）4第三板斧：亲情升华（诚实、珍惜等）6Part3：亲情类场景描写（七大关系）7一、母子关系7二、父子关系9三、 父女之间12四、 姐妹之间13五、 兄弟之间14六、 祖孙之间15七、 夫妻之间16Part4：灵活应用:17例1：圣诞节的礼物17例2：爸爸带我体验生活19Part 5： 高考真题再现：母亲节的惊喜21Part1：经典例文（送花）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Recently I graduated from high school, and as a gift I received a huge hunch of flowers, 40 to be exact! I had so many that I didn't know what to do with them. The next weekend my niece and nephew, Sue and Mike, aged 6 and 7, came and suddenly I had an idea. I might let them give out these flowers to people they met on the street, and in this way they could learn how to be friendly to others. So I told them about my plan and explained that these flowers would make people feel happy and smile. They loved the idea and were eager to have a try. So at once we took every single flower and tied a smile card to it. We then went to the street with the flowers.The first flower went to a policeman. As soon as she saw the policeman, my niece ran up to him and handed him a flower. His smile was so big, but hers was even bigger!In no time, we neared the end of our flowers. It was lunch time and we went to Subway for lunch. There the kids gave a flower to the waitress, who was really excited to receive the flower. As we were eating our lunch, the waitress came up to the kids with two big chocolate cookies! She said the chocolate cookies were for them and that she really liked the flower! As they ate the cookies, my niece and nephew looked at me with the biggest smiles I had ever seen.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。With just one flower left, I said it should be given to the person who needed it most._It turned out to be a great day for us._【答案】With just one flower left I said it should be given to the person who needed it most. Just then, my nephew caught sight of an old woman in a wheelchair nearby. “I think shes the very person for the flower. She lives a hard life because of bad health. She needs smiles most,” said my nephew. With these words, my nephew, followed by my niece, took the flower up to her. You can imagine how happy the old woman looked! She smiled, and gave each of the kids a big kiss.It turned out to be a great day for us. We spread a lot of smiles by giving out flowers, and received a lot of smiles in return. The flowers not only made us feel good about ourselves, but also made 40 other people feel happy. I feel there is nothing more enjoyable than being friendly to people. Meanwhile, the kids learned an important lesson in the process. In fact, they cant wait until next time they have such a chance again. They want to give out more flowers!【详解】通过阅读所给文章可知，作者高中毕业时收到了很多鲜花，他打算让侄子侄女们把花送给别人，用这样的方式让他们知道如何对别人友好。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：只剩下一朵花了，我说应该给最需要的人，所以应该写谁是最需要这朵花的人。要详细描述为什么这个人是最需要这朵花的，同时要刻画当这个人收到花时的感受与表现等。第二段开头是：这对我们来说是伟大的一天。本段应该写我和侄子侄女通过送花这件事的感受及明白的道理。【点睛】续写部分描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：catch sight of；morethan；cant wait ；give out等高级词汇；With these words，followed by my niece复合结构作状语等高级句式。Part2：亲情类故事构造“三板斧”第一板斧：冲突构造（误会、犯错等）只有冲突才能体会亲情的弥足珍贵。冲突原因大致有：疏于陪伴、理念不合（代沟）、误会等。1、生气1. 我妈妈瞪着我，这是在我有一个重组家庭之前她从未做过的事。 “你可以捡起来的。”她说。“那才对。”（本可以，虚拟语气）My mother glanced at me. Something she never did before I had a stepfamily. “You could have picked it up. ” she said. “That would have been the kind thing to do.”2. 他生气地握紧拳头，但是弟弟却激动地挥着手。He folded his fist angrily, but his younger brother waved his hands excitedly.3.Jackson试着说什么，但Carter太生气了，他一个字也听不进去。（对比，夸张）Jackson kept saying something, but so angry was Carter that he couldnt even hear a word . 2、后悔1. 我意识到我裙子上的蝴蝶结打得很不好。我本应该请妈妈帮忙的。I realized how poorly I tied the string on my skirt which was over leggings. I should have asked mom for help.3、内疚1. 一想到我对他所做的一切，遗憾和内疚就像没休止的潮水一样向我袭来。Thinking about what I had done to him, regret and guilt overwhelmed me like endless tides. 2. 每当我想到亨利湿了的书，我的脸都会变红了。Whenever I thought of Henrys wet book, my face turned red. 4、烦恼Watching Shirleys smile fading away, Peter frowned.看着雪莉的微笑渐渐消失，彼得皱起了眉头。（2020-2021年汕头市高三第一学期质量监测）5、伤心当她望过她三岁妹妹的桌子时，Amanda感觉她的心情像天空一样灰暗。（比喻）Amanda felt as gray as the sky outside when she looked across the table at her three-year-old sister. 6、犯错1. To cover his terrible action（为了掩盖他糟糕的行为，不定式作状语）, the terrified boy glued the pieces together hastily and put the vase back to its place.（2021 广一模）2. Fearing punishment（害怕惩罚，现在分词作状语）, the suddenly inspired boy said that a neighbours cat jumped in from the window and he couldnt drive it away no matter how hard he tried.（2021 广一模）3. Glancing at the chocolates with hesitation,(犹豫地看着着巧克力,非谓语), the boy timidly raised his head before his mother. （2021 广一模）第二板斧：冲突化解（解释、道歉、弥补、回忆等）1、道歉1.“对不起，”他说到，轻轻的摸摸Jackson的头。（2021.4 湖丽衢三地联考）“Im so sorry.”he said, gently petting Jacksons head.2.他放下手，小心翼翼的看了Carter 一眼，然后低下了头。（动作链）（2021.4 湖丽衢三地联考）He put down his hand, glanced cautiously at Carter and lowered his head.3.To her surprise, she smiled at me and expressed her apology for ignoring my loneliness （为她忽略我的孤独道歉）as well as my difficulty with English communication.（2021年沈阳市一模）2、原谅1. 他妈妈把手指放在他嘴唇让他停止说话，在他额头上吻了一下，然后走出了书房。（动作链）（2021 广一模）His mother silenced him by gently putting her finger on his lips，gave a soft kiss on his forehead and walked out of the study. 3、开心1. “我想给你一个惊喜！”他指向一个包装精美的盒子，眼里闪烁着光芒。（with结构）（2021.4 湖丽衢三地联考）“I wanted to surprise you!” he pointed at a neatly wrapped box with his eyes gleaming.2.看到他的家人围坐着，和谐地待在一起，卡特感觉到一种幸福感。（doing非谓语）（2021.4 湖丽衢三地联考）Seeing his families sitting together and staying together harmoniously, Cater felt a surge of happiness.3. 欢快的歌唱飘荡在房间里，两姐妹沉浸在音乐的美中。（独立主格）（2020.11温州一模） Cheerful singing floating in the room, the two sisters immersed themselves in the beauty of the music. 4、感激1. 如果没有亨利的帮助，我就不会顺利地完成我的演出了。（2021年南通市二模）But for Henrys help, I wouldnt have finished my performance smoothly. 2. I looked at her, tears of love and gratitude welling(well) up in my eyes.(独立主格结构)（2021年沈阳市一模）3. Afterwards, it was my turn to give a small lecture,in which I expressed my sincere gratitude to my mom and friends, bowing(bow) to them several times. （定语从句，非谓语）5、回忆1. 在这时，毫无预料地，Carter突然想起Billy躺在地上哭的回忆，一直在他脑海回旋，提醒着他一些事情。（无灵主语句；doing非谓语；and连接两个同时进行的动作）（2021.4 湖丽衢三地联考）At that moment, unexpectedly, the memory of the sight of Billy crying on the ground occurred to Carter, hovering in his mind and reminding him something .2.看着Jackson，Carter忍不住想象他的弟弟花整天小心涂好那辆车的情景。（2021.4 湖丽衢三地联考）Looking at Jackson, Carter couldnt help imagining his little brother spending the whole day carefully painting the car.（2021.4 湖丽衢三地联考）3. “I just wish I knew how to help her,” Amanda said to herself, thinking of Lis frightened eyes（想到Li害怕的双眼）. （2020.11温州一模）第三板斧：亲情升华（诚实、珍惜等）1. From then on, the three chocolates rang the alarm in his heart every time he intended to lie, reminding him to be honest提醒他要诚实(非谓语).（2021 广一模）2. I nodded firmly, knowing a flower of kindness and friendship began to blossom（善良和友谊之花开放） in both of our hearts.（2021年南通市二模）3.This experience transformed my attitude towards Henry and our relationship has also been harmonious（我们的关系变得和谐） since then.（2021年南通市二模）4. 正是亨利的善良让我感受到了我们家庭的温暖。我会用心珍惜它的。（2021年南通市二模）It was Henrys kindness that made me feel the warmth from our family. I will treasure it with all my heart. Part3：亲情类场景描写（七大关系）一、母子关系1.Do you mean that eve flower has its own beauty asked my mother thoughtfully.I nodded without hesitation, as if a second wasted could deprive the dandelions of thei life."The same to you," she added, her voice soft""Not everyone can be a rose,and it is also an honor to be a dandelion." Knowing that my mother had realized my pain, I took off the mask that I had worn for the whole lunch time and poured out my unease heartily She listened to me patiently and patted me on the back tenderly.Suddenly she stopped, as if to say something.“你的意思是那朵夜花有它自己的美丽吗？”妈妈沉思地问。 我毫不犹豫地点点头，仿佛一秒钟的浪费就能剥夺蒲公英的生命。 “你也一样，”她又说，“不是每个人都能成为一朵玫瑰，成为蒲公英也是一种荣誉。” 我知道妈妈已经意识到了我的痛苦，我摘下了我整个午餐时间戴的面具，尽情地倾诉我的不安。她耐心地听着我的话，温柔地拍了拍我的背。 突然，她停了下来，好像在说什么。"But you will be a beautiful narrator." Mom said. She reminded me of how fluently I could deliver my part at home.It was at that time that I understood that maybe I was more suitable for a role back stage like a narrator. From then on, I practiced my lines heart and soul with my mother at lunch time for weeks. And the performance approached ultimately Standing backstage, nervousness came flooding in me.What encouraged me to overcome it was the inspiration from the beautiful yellow dandelions. The performance that night was eventually a big success.Hearing the thunderous applause, I took pride in my role and firmly believed that even a dandelion had its own beauty.“但你将会成为一个美丽的叙述者。”妈妈说。她让我想起了我在家里可以多么流利地扮演我的角色。正是在那个时候，我明白也许我更适合像叙述者这样的角色。从那时起，我在午餐时间和母亲一起练习了好几周。演出最终站在后台，紧张情绪涌上心头。鼓励我克服它的是灵感来自于美丽的黄色蒲公英。当晚的演出最终大获成功。听到雷鸣般的掌声，我为自己的角色感到自豪，坚信甚至蒲公英也有自己的美。2."Do you mean that every flower has its own beauty?" asked my mother thoughtfully. My lips parted with nothing uttered, my eyes drooped to the ground. The dandelion blossom spread in the air, light and all silent. I felt a sinking in my heart, and my heart in my throat.A mixed sentiment of fear and desire clung upon my mind."Similarly, every individual has his own beauty," said my mother in a comforting voice. My eyebrows furrowed, my fists clenched, I murmured timidly, "but I failed playing the princess for the lines despite all the practice."“你是说每一朵花都有自己的美丽吗？” 妈妈若有所思地问。 我的嘴唇张开了，什么也没说，我的眼睛下垂到地上。 蒲公英的花朵在空中蔓延开来，淡淡的，所有的寂静。 我感到我的心在下沉，我的心在我的喉咙。 一种恐惧和欲望混合在我的脑海里。 “同样，每个人都有自己的美丽，”母亲安慰地说。 我的眉毛皱了起来，我的拳头紧握着，我胆怯地喃喃地说，“但我没能在所有的练习中扮演公主。 “"But you will be a beautiful narrator," mom said.My glance steadily resting on the blossom, when I raised my head, I hardly resisted the impulse to take a glimpse.In an instant our eyes met, and it was a reflective look. The tender breeze of early spring blew my cheeks flush. Mom lowered her lean shoulder, reached out and patted on my head. A gentle smile slipped from her lips."You are the dandelion blossom, the best narrator in our garden." A faint whisper came into my ear. The perfume of grasses and bushes and,all flowers scented the mellow atmosphere.“但你将会成为一个美丽的叙述者，”妈妈说。我的目光坚定地停留在花朵上，当我抬起头来时，我几乎无法抗拒要瞥一眼的冲动。刹那间，我们的眼睛相遇了，神情也在沉思。早春的微风使我的脸颊红晕了。妈妈放下她瘦削的肩膀，伸出手来拍了拍我的头。她嘴里露出一丝温柔的微笑。“你是蒲公英的花朵，是我们花园里最好的叙述者。”我耳边传一阵耳语。草和灌木丛的芳香，所有的花朵都散发着柔和的气氛。3.Approaching the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath. When she knocked at the door, she found the door was locked and her mother was not in.Tired and sad, she sat down in front of the house."Where could my mother be?" she wondered,"Was she stil angry with me?" Again, the scene of the quarrel appeared in her mind. She remembered her rudeness to her mother. Realizing that all the scolding from her mother was due to the fact that her mother really cared a lot about her, she felt rather ashamed, and tears began to roll down her cheeks.走近门口，珍妮深吸了一口气。 当她敲门时，她发现门被锁着，她的母亲不在。 她又累又伤心，坐在房子前面。 “我妈妈在哪儿？” 她想，“她还在生我的气吗？” 再次，争吵的场景出现在她的脑海里。 她记得她对母亲的粗鲁。 意识到母亲所有的责骂都是因为她母亲真的很关心她，她感到相当羞愧，眼泪开始从她的脸颊滚下来。A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back. She raised her head and saw the familiar face of her mother."Here you come! I've been looking for you, she said, tired and relieved.Jenny couldn't help throwing herself into her mother's arms."Mum, I'm so sorry and thank you for all you have done for me." She expressed her sincere apology and great gratitude. Hearing this, her mother smiled patting her back gently.她的头发上轻轻的一碰，使她的思想恢复了。 她抬起头，看到了母亲那张熟悉的脸。 ”“你来了！ 我一直在找你，她说，累了，松了一口气。 珍妮忍不住扑进妈妈的怀里。 “妈妈，我很抱歉，谢谢你为我所做的一切。” 她表示真诚的道歉和极大的感谢。 听到这话，妈妈笑着轻轻拍了拍她的背。二、父子关系1.The man, seeing that the boy already had money started to get angry again."How can you be so selfish?Why do you want more money since you already have these bills?" the father could hardly hold his anger back and inquired with two eyebrows knitted into one. With held-back tears in his eyes, the little boy slowly and carefully counted out his money, and then looked up at his father, replying,"Because I didn't have enough before, but now I do." with big blue eyesshining with tears.那个男人，看到那个男孩已经有钱了，又开始生气了。 “你怎么这么自私？ 既然你已经有了这些账单，你为什么还要更多的钱？” 父亲几乎不能忍住他的愤怒，用两个眉毛编织成一个。 小男孩含着泪水，慢慢地小心地数出他的钱，然后抬头看着他的父亲，回答说：“因为我以前没有足够的钱，但现在我有了。” 带着蓝色的大眼睛眼泪闪闪发光。Not knowing what his son meant, the father just stood there, waiting for his boy's explanation.Wiping away his tears and an innocent smile appearing on his face, the boy requested in a relieved voice,"Daddy, I have $20 now. Can I buy an hour from you?Please come home early tomorrow.I want to have dinner with you." Hearing the boy's small but sincere request, the father couldn't hold back his tears.Realizing he was too busy with his business to spare some time with his beloved ones, he gathered his son into his arms and apologized again and again,"Sorry., and I promise I'Il be back early tomorrow."他不知道儿子的意思，父亲就站在那里等着儿子的解释。男孩擦去眼泪，脸上露出天真的微笑，用松了一口气的声音问道：“爸爸，我现在有$20了。我能从你那里买到一个小时吗？请明天早点回家。我想和你共吃晚饭。”听到男孩小而真诚的请求，父亲忍不住流住了眼泪。意识到自己忙了，没有时间和心爱的人在一起，他把儿子抱在怀里，一遍又一遍地道歉：“抱歉。我保证明天早点回来。”2.The bird dropped like a rock,one wing flopping behind as it fell.I heard it thump into the dirt.Before lowering the gun,I realized what I'd doneI'd killed my first animal. "Oh no," My stomach was tied in knots and I prayed,"Oh God, please don't let it be dead." The bird lay there with blood streaming from its beak, feathers large and small scattered about.I reached out and rolled it over, but its head drooped lifelessly to the side. After burying it,I hurried home, hiding my BB gun in the closet.那只鸟像石头一样落下，一只翅膀在它落下的时候扑向后面。 我听到它砰的一声撞到泥土里。 在放下枪之前，我意识到我做了什么我杀了我的第一只动物。 “哦，不，”我的胃结成结，我祈祷，“哦，上帝，请不要让它死了。” 鸟儿躺在那里，鲜血从它的喙流出来，羽毛大大小小散落在周围。 我伸手把它翻过来，但它的头毫无生气地垂到一边。 埋了它之后，我急忙回家，把我的BB枪藏在壁橱里。When my dad got home that evening, he asked me how my day was.I hesitated, and was momentarily uneasy that guilt crossed my face. My dad,a man of keen perception, quickly went into confrontation mode, asking what really happened.I replied, as if I had to choke the words out of my throat, tears streaming down my face. He didn't say anything but just looked at me, hand resting on my shoulder. That evening, my dad made me vow to never kill a thing again, explaining that once I got bored of animals, thenext target could be something even more priceless.那天晚上我爸爸回家时，他问我今天过得怎么样。 我犹豫了一下，一时感到不安，内疚掠过我的脸。 我的父亲，一个敏锐的感知，很快进入对抗模式，问到底发生了什么。 我回答说，好像我不得不掐住喉咙里的话，眼泪从我脸上流下来。 他什么也没说，只是看着我，手放在我的肩膀上。 那天晚上，我爸爸发誓再也不杀任何东西，解释说一旦伊戈特厌倦了动物，下一个目标可能是更无价的东西。2.The bird dropped like a rock,one wing flopping behind as it fell. A surge of excitement ran through me, as ifI were the king