高一英语写作训练课件.ppt

1A连贯与句式的运用连贯与句式的运用2A连贯连贯(coherence)指文章语意的通顺和语言形式的紧密衔接并符合一定的逻辑关系。要使文章前后衔接紧密，可采用以下方法：提示1：恰当使用关联词 如when，so，if，because，so that等。提示2：巧妙使用意思有联系的词或短语 如First,Second,Third,Soon,Whats more,As a result等。提示3：适当使用过渡性语句 The reasons are as follows.Every coin has two sides.On the other hand,On the contrary,3A连接词、句型的选择连接词、句型的选择1、递进关系递进关系（肯定）（肯定）（否定）（否定）2、时间时间一一就就不久不久然后然后同时同时Besides/Whatsmore/Also/Inaddition/FurthermoreWhatsworse/Evenworse/Worsestill/TomakemattersworseThemoment/Ondoing/assoonas/immediately/directlyItwasnotlongbefore/Afterawhile/SoonAfterthat/Then/So/NextAtthesametime/Meanwhile4A3、转折转折4、顺序顺序5、条件条件6、强调、强调however,/but/onthecontrary/Ontheotherhand/yetFirst/Second/Third/Last/Next/ThenIf/Aslongas/Solongas/onconditionthatItwasthat/who/Soshedid./Idohope/Shedidhelpme./Itreallyworked.5A7、其它其它不得不做某事不得不做某事havetodosth./havenochoicebuttodosth./havenothingtodobutdosth.有必要做某事有必要做某事Thereisnoneed(forsb.)todosth./Itisnecessary(forsb.)todo最好做某事最好做某事Youdbetterdosth.Itsbettertodosth.做某事没困难做某事没困难havenodifficultyindoingsth./havenotroubleindoingsth.感谢某人感谢某人thanksb./bethankfultosb./expressonesthankstosb./begratefultosb./Thanksto6A求助某人求助某人turntosb.forhelp/asksb.forhelp/withthehelpof/withoneshelp惊奇惊奇Toonessurprise/Insurprise/Surprisingly/only+不定式（表意外结果）不定式（表意外结果）原因如下（很多）原因如下（很多）Thereasonsareasfollows.Therearemanyreasonsforit.浪费金钱（时间）浪费金钱（时间）Itsawasteofmoney/time结果结果Asaresult/Therefore/Thus/So总结总结Inaword/Inshort/Aboveall/Afterall表达观点表达观点Inmyopinion/Ithink/Ibelieve/Imsure/Iguess7ATask 1 请在下列句子中（间）填上恰当的关联词或意思有联系的短语。1.XiaoMingwaswalkinginthestreetheheardsomeonecryforhelp.2.HeadvisedthatIhireacarIcouldtravelaroundinthewest.3.Itwasnotlongthepolicecame.4.heheardthecryforhelp,hejumpedintothewatertosavethegirl.5.Doyouagreewithmyarrangement?,dowritetomesoon.6.Wecangodowntownanddosomeshopping.,7.wecanpayavisittosomeplacesofinterest.7.Isharedthecostofthegaswithmyfriends.,Isaved$80.8.Eatingsugarisbadforourteeth.,9.itmaymakeusfat.Whatsmore/Besides/Also/Furthermore/Inaddition whensothat/inorderthatbeforeAssoonas/Immediately/Directly/ThemomentIfnotAsaresult/ThereforeWhatsworse/Evenworse/Tomakemattersworse8A句式的运用句式的运用：利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思，能增加文章的文采。：利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思，能增加文章的文采。基本句型：基本句型：1、感叹句感叹句e.g.1)HowhappyIwaswhenIreceivedyourletter.2）Whatakindboyheis!3）Howdisappointedhewas!2、强调句强调句e.g.Itwasthisyoungboythathelpedtheoldgranny.3、倒装句倒装句e.g.1)Onlyinthiswaycanyousolvethisproblem.2)There comesthepolicecar.3)Hardlyhadtheygottothestationwhen theymettheyoungman.9A句式的运用句式的运用：利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思，能增加文章的文采。：利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思，能增加文章的文采。基本句型：基本句型：4、省略句省略句e.g.Theyreadwhilewalkingorridingonabus.5、with短语短语e.g.Isawayoungladywalkingslowlyinthestreetwithahandbaginherhand.6、定语从句定语从句e.g.Inmyopinion,cybercafesshouldbeaplacewherewecanfindmuchusefulinformation.7、各种名词性从句各种名词性从句e.g.ThatswhatIshoulddo.8、各种状语从句各种状语从句e.g.Timepassedquicklybeforeweknewit.10ATask2按要求改写下列句子按要求改写下列句子,使其更具文采。使其更具文采。1.Tomsavedthedrowninggirl.(强调强调)2.IhopeIcanpayavisittoyounextyear.（强调）（强调）3.Tomwaspuzzled.（感叹）（感叹）4.Itisgreatfuntoclimbthehill.（感叹）（感叹）5.TomandMarylikesingingsongs.（肯定倒装）（肯定倒装）6.Johnlikestostudyandplay.（否定倒装）（否定倒装）7.Soonthefirefighterscame.（表时间句型）（表时间句型）It was Tom that/who saved the drowning girl.I do hope I can pay a visit to you next year.How puzzled Tom was!What great fun it is to climb the hill!Tom likes singing songs,so does Mary.Not only does John like to study,but(also)he likes to play.It was not long before the firefighters came.11ATask3WritingPractice请你给中国日报写一篇稿件，谈谈农村儿童失学的主要原因及你的看法。原因：1、家庭贫穷，供不起儿童上学，他们不得不在家赚钱养家。2、部分家长认为女孩上学无用，不愿让她们上学。3、部分儿童对功课不感兴趣，不愿上学。看法：1、每个儿童包括女孩都应有受教育的机会。2、全社会都应重视儿童教育，他们对国家的未来将起到重要的作用。要求：1、不要逐字逐句翻译。2、语句要连贯通顺。3、字数100个左右。12A Now in the country areas,there are many children out of school.Most families are poor and cant afford their education.They have to stay at home and make money.Some parents think daughters neednt go to school.They dont let them go to school.Some children are not interested in their studies and wouldnt like to go to school.All the children including girls should be educated.The whole society should pay attention to it.Theyll play an important part in the future of our country.13A诊断：优点缺点药方1、词能达意；2、语句表达基本正确。语句不够连贯1、使用常见句型；2、每两个句子之间使用关联词或过渡词。14ANow in the country areas,there are many children out of school.。，most families are too poor to send their children to school.,they have no choice but to stay at home and make money.,some parents think there is no need for their daughters to go to school.,they dont let them go to school.,some children are not interested in their studies.,some wouldnt like to go to school.,all the children including girls should be educated.,the whole society should pay attention to it theyll play an important part in the future of our country one day.ThereasonsareasfollowsTherearemanyreasonsforthis.FirstAsaresultSecondSo/ThereforeThirdWhatsworse/WorsestillEvenworse/TomakemattersworseInmyopinionWhatsmore/Besidesbecause15ATask 4 Writing by yourselves 下列图画描述的是两位少先队员上星期日去少年宫的途中经历的事情.请据此写一篇短文,参加由英语组组织的英语作文竞赛。16A练习一、练习一、（一）简单句翻译（一）简单句翻译1我们在学习怎样用电脑。我们在学习怎样用电脑。Were learning how to use the computer.2他和他的朋友经常查字典。他和他的朋友经常查字典。He and his friend always look up in the dictionary.17A 3请给我一杯水请给我一杯水,好吗？好吗？Please give me a cup of water,will you?4老师让我回答了这个问题。老师让我回答了这个问题。The teacher asked me to answer the question.18A 5我们的国家变得越来越强大。我们的国家变得越来越强大。Our country is getting stronger and stronger.6你的到来使我很高兴。你的到来使我很高兴。Your arrival makes me very happy.19A 7村庄里有许多绿树和湖泊。村庄里有许多绿树和湖泊。There are many green trees and lakes in the village.8我们不应该歧视弱者。我们不应该歧视弱者。We should not look down upon the weak.20A(二二)并列句翻译并列句翻译1.我我 喜喜 欢欢 读读 书书，他他 喜喜 欢欢 玩玩 玩玩 具具。（while）I like reading while he likes playing with toys.2.孩孩子子们们非非常常高高兴兴，或或者者至至少少看看起起来来很很高兴。（高兴。（or）The children are very happy or at least they look happy.21A 3.中中国国是是发发展展中中国国家家，而而美美国国是是发发达达国国家。（家。（but/while）China is a developing country,while the United States is a developed one.4.这里常下雨，有时有暴风雨。这里常下雨，有时有暴风雨。(and）It often rains here,and storms sometimes.22A 5他他不不但但受受到到我我们们的的鼓鼓励励而而且且受受到到老老师的表扬。（师的表扬。（notonlybutalso）He was not only encouraged by us but also praised by the teacher.6我我们们周周围围的的东东西西不不是是固固体体、液液体体就就是气体。是气体。(eitheror)Everything around us is either solid,liquid or gas.23A 7一个人既应该有勇气也应有毅力。一个人既应该有勇气也应有毅力。（bothand)A man should have both courage and perseverance.24A8.新新中中国国的的妇妇女女在在政政治治生生活活和和家家庭庭生生活活方面享有和男子同等权利。方面享有和男子同等权利。(aswellas）In new China women enjoy equal rights with men in political life as well as in family life.9.我喝咖啡要加奶加糖。我喝咖啡要加奶加糖。When I drink coffee,I prefer to add sugar as well as milk.25A(三三)复合句翻译复合句翻译1我相信你一定能成功。我相信你一定能成功。Im sure youll succeed.2北京再也不是北京再也不是20年前的样子了。年前的样子了。Beijing is no longer what was 20 years ago.26A 3这个城市是我出生的地方。这个城市是我出生的地方。This is the city where I was born./The city is the one which I was born in.4他和以前不一样了。他和以前不一样了。He is not what he used to be.27A 5为了明天赶上早班车，我要早起。为了明天赶上早班车，我要早起。I have to get up earlier so that I can catch up the early bus.6.虽然他年轻，但是经验很丰富。虽然他年轻，但是经验很丰富。Although he is young,he is very experienced./He is young but he is very experienced.28A 7如果有困难，请来找我。如果有困难，请来找我。Please turn to me if you are in trouble.8.老师所讲的都记在笔记本上了。老师所讲的都记在笔记本上了。What the teacher said was all taken down on the notebook.29A9众所周知，中国是人口大国。众所周知，中国是人口大国。It is well-known that China is a country with a large population.10据据报报道道，他他是是来来自自新新西西兰兰的的一一位位学者。学者。It is reported that he is a scholar from New Zealand.30A11他他与与我我们们到到别别时时留留下下了了他他的的姓姓名名和地址。和地址。He left his name and address when he said good-bye to me.12李秘书被解雇是因为他受贿。李秘书被解雇是因为他受贿。Secretary Li was dismissed because he took bribe.31A13盗贼没等警察抓捕，就逃逸了。盗贼没等警察抓捕，就逃逸了。The robbers had escaped before the police arrived.14他读过信后就把信毁掉。他读过信后就把信毁掉。He destroyed the letter after he read it.32A15自开店以来，我们赢获大利。自开店以来，我们赢获大利。We have made large profits since we opened this shop.16如如果果我我知知道道它它在在哪哪，它它就就不不会会丢了，是不是？丢了，是不是？If I knew where it was,it wont be lost,would it?33A17一一直直向向前前走走直直到到一一所所新新的的蓝蓝色色大楼。大楼。Go straight on until you come to a new blue building.18他不照别人告诉他的去做。他不照别人告诉他的去做。He wont do as hes told.34A19按按照照她她的的要要求求，她她被被埋埋葬葬在在花花园里。园里。She was buried at the garden,as she had requested.20我们一到达那里就给你打电话。我们一到达那里就给你打电话。Well ring you as soon as we get there.35A练习二、改正错句练习二、改正错句(一一)修修改改下下面面的的句句子子，去去掉掉多多余余的词。的词。1.Doyouknowwhofirstinventedthetelephone?Do you know who invented the telephone?36A2.Inmyopinion,IthinkJapanisfaraheadofSpaininscience.In my opinion,Japan is far ahead of Spain in science.37A3.The first up train leaves awayfromthestationat6:00.The first up train leaves at 6:00.4.No sooner had I left the housethanitbegantorainimmediately.No sooner had I left the house than it began to rain.38A5.Listentomespeakingcarefully.Listen to me carefully.6.Every day Tom and I walk toschoolonfoottogether.Every day Tom and I walk to school together.39A7.EverySundayIgotopayhimavisit.Every Sunday I pay him a visit.8.George is entirely different invariouswaysfromhisbrother.George is entirely different from his brother.40A9.That famous football team fromBrazilwhichwonthematch.That famous football team from Brazil won the match.10.Henry is still too young not tohandlethisimportantjobalone.Henry is still too young to handle this important job alone.41A11.Maryhasmadeuphermindtodecidetogoabroad.Mary has made up her mind to go abroad.12.Thereisamistakeinyourwrongsentence.There is a mistake in your sentence.42A13.Isuggesthowabouteatingoutthisweekend.I suggest eating out this weekend.14.Please look the papers overfrombeginningtoend.Please look the papers over.43A15.Though she has six children,butshelivesbyhimself.Though she has six children,she lives by himself.16.You will find his house easilywithoutdifficulty.You will find his house easily.44A17.I always have eggs forbreakfastinthemorning.I always have eggs for breakfast.18.Hong Kong is an islandsurroundedbywateronallsides.Hong Kong is an island.45A19.Mrs Hill is old-fashioned in thedress,butyoungattheheart.Mrs Hill is old-fashioned in dress,but young at heart.20.Mr.Liisanhonestmanwhonevertellslies.Mr.Li is an honest man.46A（二）改正下面句子中的词语错误：（二）改正下面句子中的词语错误：1.Dontbediscouraged;goahead,andmakeothertry.2.Dont be discouraged;go ahead,and make another try.2.MrCooperwouldtellyouthetruthifhewashere.Mr Cooper would tell you the truth if he were here.47A3.Thereisnotmoremuchtimebeforeourvacation.There is not much more time before our vacation.4.Apersonshouldalwaysbereadytomakeachangeinhabits.A person should always be ready to make a change in his habits.48A5.Everychildlikessurprise.Every child likes a surprise.6.Ifthebookyouwillwantisoutyoumayaskforit.If the book you want is out you may ask for it.49A7.Hewalkedslowly,stoppedfrequentlytorest.He walked slowly,stopping frequently to rest.8.Thenumberoftheticketsthattheboxofficesellwasverylarge.The number of the tickets that the box office sold was very large.50A9.The final plan differed greatly withtheoriginalone.The final plan differed greatly from the original one.10.That package is too heavy to becarried.That package is too heavy to carry.51A11.Weallknowthenewswhichwewonthefootballmatchyesterday.We all know the news that we won the football match yesterday.12.Thesuggestionoftheworkerprovedfarmorevaluablethatwehadexpected.The suggestion of the worker proved far more valuable than we had expected.52A13.Itwasnotuntil1920sinceregularradiobroadcastbegan.It was not until 1920 that regular radio broadcast began.14.Theystayedatahotelinfrontofitwasabeautifulgarden.They stayed at a hotel in front of which was a beautiful garden.53A15.Sosurprisedhewasthathecouldhardlysayaword.So surprised was he that he could hardly say a word.16.Is this necessary to buy a new mobilephonewhiletheoldoneisstillworking?Is it necessary to buy a new mobile phone while the old one is still working?54A17.Ourteacherinsistedwewouldgothereonfoot.Our teacher insisted we go there on foot.18.Thoughhehasalotofworktodo,however,heoftenhelpsus.Though he has a lot of work to do,he often helps us.55A19.ThisisthedatewhenIwillneverforget.This is the date(that)I will never forget.20.Youcanstaytheplacewhereyouare.You can stay in the place where you are.56A练习三、练习三、（一）（一）改正句子中非谓语动词形式的错误改正句子中非谓语动词形式的错误1.Getuplateisabadhabit.2.Getting up late is a bad habit.2.Bediligentisoneofthekeystosuccess.Being diligent is one of the keys to success./Diligence is one of the keys to success.57A3.My hobby is reading and goshopping.My hobby is reading and shopping.4.Comparewiththesekindsoftheone-child families,my family is rare atpresent.Compared with these kinds of the one-child families,my family is rare at present.58A5.A good housewifes love can makeevery member in the family feelshappy.A good housewifes love can make every member in the family feel happy.6.Becomeagoodteacherismydream.Becoming a good teacher is my dream.59A7.I want to buy a lot of beautifuldresses,aslovebeautyisanatureofagirl.I want to buy a lot of beautiful dresses,as loving beauty is a nature of a girl.8.LetslearnEnglish,beginwithABC.Lets learn English,beginning with ABC.60A9.Closethedistancebetweenthem,shepressedherfacetohisheart.Closing the distance between them,she pressed her face to his heart.10.She watched the trees in the yard,regretthatspringhadsosoonpassed.She watched the trees in the yard,regretting that spring had so soon passed.61A11.Limitingbythetime,Icouldnotvisitsomanyplaces.Limited by the time,I could not visit so many places.12.Itintroducedthatthefounderoftheclubwasayoungman.It is introduced that the founder of the club was a young man.62A（二）改正句子在结构上的错误（二）改正句子在结构上的错误1.Ilikebytrain.2.I like traveling by train.2.Iverymuchlikethere.I like there very much.63A3.HerdreamisshecangiveperformanceinBeijing.Her dream is that she can give performance in Beijing.4.Only do that,can we improve ourwritingskills.Only by doing that can we improve our writing skills.64A5.Iwouldsaveeachcoincanbesaved.I would save each coin that can be saved.6.Iwasstillthinkingiflethimknowit.I was still thinking if I should let him know it.65A7.Mostofthepeoplebuyvegetablesinthemarketarewomen.Most of the people who buy vegetables in the market are women.8.Thewayofpeoplespendtheweekendisdifferent.The way people spend the weekend is different.66A9.Asanairhostesscanoftenstayinthesky.As an airhostess she can often stay in the sky.10.In the countryside,there are toomanychildrencantgotoschool.In the countryside,there are too many children who cant go to school.67A11.InthestreetofBeijingwecanoftenmeetforeignerscomefromallovertheworld.In the street of Beijing we can often meet foreigners coming from all over the world.12.Thereasonforthisisbecausetheydidntrealize the importance of career for awoman.The reason for this is that they didnt realize the importance of career for a woman.68A13.He likes to help others either heknowsorhedoesntknow.He likes to help others whether he knows them or not.14.Illreadthepaperswhichplacedonmydeskbymysecretary.Ill read the papers which were placed on my desk by my secretary.69A15.BecauseIadmirehimverymuch.SoIdecidegotothiscollege.Because I admire him very much,I decide to go to this college.16.My brother is 12 years old andstudyingina