备战2023年高考英语一轮复习全国通用考点47 读后续写12 高分结尾技巧：主旨升华（原卷版）.docx

考点47读后续写12高分结尾技J5:主旨升华（原卷版）【命题解读】结尾句是全文的收尾处，需要起到点睛的作用，给读者留下深刻的印象。怎么做到呢？今天老师就带 着你灵活运用首尾呼应、直白叙述、应用名言等多种方法进行结尾，对故事主题进行深化，使人物情感得 到升华，让你的文章的结尾更加出彩！今天分享三个常见的方法：收尾呼应法：名言结尾法和情感升华法。【思维导图】方法一：首位呼应法写出彩收尾设计L 方法二：名言式结尾法 方法三：情感升华法助人型主旨升华句成长型主旨升华句脱险型主旨升华句模拟演练请看第一例子，2017年高考真题，讲述的是与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。文章的开头，是这么写的：1 had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because of my mother-loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful.我有一个有趣的童年，充满 J惊喜和 娱乐，都是因为我的母亲可爱，却心不在焉，健忘。那么续写结尾的时候可以回到文章的开头再次重申妈妈的性格，来深化主题。文章结尾可以用首尾呼应的写作手法，请看这一句：Despite mom's being absent-minded and forgetful, she was still a kind and nice mom.尽管妈妈总是心不在焉，健忘，但她仍然是一个和蔼可亲的妈妈。再来看第二个例子，2018年高考真题，讲述的是爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事。遇到危险后，勇敢面对，才能解决问题。这个句子突出了“勇敢”这个核心，这在“脱险型”的故事里，是非 常恰当的。这句话使用了倒装的结构和强调结构结合的方式，也属于高分亮点句。【主旨句三：高级句】It was this unique experience that made me understand whatever difficulty we are faced with （= we may face）, we mustn't give up our hope.“正是这种独特的经历使我理解了我们所面临的任何困难，我们不能放弃我们的希望。”这个句子也是把强调句，定语从句，宾语从句结合在一起，句式结构比较高级。同学们不妨挑战一下？【主旨句四：综合型】即把前几种方式进行组合，我们可以记住这个组合公式：结果+难忘的经历+体悟我们再说具体点儿，“结果”指的是获救的结果，如走出森林，获救后见到家人等。“难忘的经历”就是我们 刚刚学到的第一个主旨句。“体悟”在这种“脱险型''里，无非就是突出冷静，勇敢，不放弃希望等信念的重 要性。我们来一个例句：Finally, we did sth. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there's always a way out of any plight as long as we stay calm.最后，我们做某事。（这里写结果）多么难忘的经历啊！（这是一个万能句）事实证明，只要我们保持 冷静，就总有办法摆脱困境。（作者的体悟，可以把“保持冷静”，换成“不放弃希望”等。）我们看2018年高考英语浙江卷的读后续写，爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事。文章的最 后，我们可以用这句：Finally, we went out of the forest that trapped us. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there's always a way out of any plight as long as we stay calm.最后，我们走出了困住我们的森林。多么难忘的经历啊！事实证明，只要我们保持冷静，就总有办法摆 脱困境。我们也可以把第一句改成：Finally, wc arrived home safely just in time for supper （我们安全回家，正 好赶上吃晚饭），也就是说，不管怎么写，第一句是脱险后的结果。我们再看2016年10月高考英语浙江卷的读后续写，夫妻俩野外露营，因小事发生争执，女主人 独自走进森林迷路的故事。文章最后，我们也可以用上这句：Finally, she saw her husband. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything.What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there's always a way out of any plight as long as we never give up our hope.最后，她看到了她的丈夫。她尽可能地紧紧地抱着他，激动得说不出话 来。多么难忘的经历啊！事实证明，只要我们不放弃我们的希望，任何困境都有出路。2017年高考英语的读后续写，和朋友一起骑车游玩，途中遇狼的故事。我们可以这样写：Finally, the wolf ran away off the road and disappeared in the distance ."We are safe!”Mac said in a pleasant tone. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there's always a way out of any plight as long as wc stay calm. 最后，狼从路上跑开，消失在远处。“我们很安全！ ”麦克以一种愉快的语气说。多么难忘的经历啊！事 实证明，只要我们保持冷静，就总有办法摆脱困境。【模拟题1】（2022辽宁实验中学模拟预测）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。I sat at my desk and stared at the screen. I waited patiently for ideas to come to me as I tried to think up exam questions for a test I would give my English students. My wife was off to a party somewhere, but I was not alone. Meghan, our 22-month-old angel, kept my company. Yet her plans seemed to go against mine.She followed a daily routine that was both time-consuming and challenging. It included certain basic tasks: watching the fish, sweeping the floor in her room, climbing up and down on her bed.Al first I was able to concentrate on designing my test paper. But I was soon distracted. I had not expected the arrival of the “bib-bibs"一“bib-bibs” were birds. ”Bib-bibs!” Meghan screamed excitedly, her eyes alive with expectation. She insisted that I come with her to the window.“In a minute. Just let me finish this question.'' I said. She pulled me by the hand （two fingers, actually） toward the window. I saw myself as a fool, being led to watch the “bib-bibs”. They sang and leaped back and forth on the lawn just outside our apartment window. Meghan was absorbed, but as I watched them, I still thought about my work. With her attention off me, I left the window and went back to my desk.Five minutes later, she returned. She reached up to my keyboard and pressed a bunch of keys, adding a long line of scrabbled （舌L的）letters to my question. I struggled to bring my annoyance under control. 4*No, thank you, Meghan. Daddy's seen your work. I'll do it myself." She backed off.注意：1.词数150字左右；2.按照格式在答题卡相应位置作答。Paragraph 1:A few minutes later, she stood in front of me with her shoes and socks in her hand.Paragraph 2:I finally decided to take Meghan to the park.【模拟题2 （2022广东广州三模）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。People use the proverb “seeing is believing” lo describe situations where it's hard to believe something is possible if you haven't seen it happen. 1 am here today to tell you that the proverb is true and to share with you how a girl and her grandmother made a positive transformation in a community.It was a year ago when 1 was studying life cycles in my science class. I wrote a paper about the life cycle of the monarch butterfly （帝王蝶）and received a perfect score. I was so thrilled; I called my grandmother Nana and told her the exciting news. My talk recalled memories from Nana's childhood. UI remember when I was a girl,“ she said, “those orange and black butterllies were a common sight. Come late summer, （here would suddenly be hundreds of them, and before long there were so many it felt like you were standing in an orange cloud.''“It sounds like you witnessed a migration （迁徙），but what happened to them?” I asked. "To be honest, Tve never known," Nana admitted. "But there do seem to be fewer monarchs around the neighborhood." Nana and I decided to investigate.That weekend, we met at the public libraiy Our research produced plenty of information: some fascinating and some concerning. Apparently, （he number of monarchs has been in decline fbr the last several decades. Housing developments have destroyed much of their habitat （栖息地）.Some information was hopeful, though, like how conservationists are working to save them.The best was this it doesn't take lots of money or equipment to do so. It takes only a little bit of land, some seeds, and dedicated people to create what's called a Monarch Way station （驿站）.“What if we set up our own Monarch Waystation? I suggested. "We'll need people to help. Nana responded immediately and didn,t waste time to get started.注意：1 .续写词数应为150左右;2 .请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。The next day, Nana presented （he idea to her garden club and I talked to my friends.Nana and I created a blog and frequently updated about the community's efforts.【模拟题3】（2022湖北荆州中学三模）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节和给定段落开头语进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。When I was six years old, I visited my grandfather's farm in Kansas and he sent me into the woods to gather pecans （胡桃）fbr us to enjoy later. The pecans were about the size of a man's thumbnail and just about the tastiest snack I'd ever had.However, pecan picking was really tiring and my little bucket was only half full after working hard for a long time. I thought I wouldn't let Grandpa down. Just then something caught my eye. A large brown squirrel was a few feet away. I watched as he picked up a pecan, hurried to a tree, jumped up to the trunk and disappeared in a large hole. A moment later the squirrel popped back out and climbed down to the ground to pick up another nut. Once again, he took the pecan back to his hiding place inside the hollow of the tree.Not so secret anymore, I thought. I dashed over to the tree and looked into the hole. Il was filled with pecans! Golden pecans were right there for taking. This was my chance. Handful by handful, I scooped all of those pecans into my bucket. Now it was almost full! I was so proud of myself that I couldn't wait to show Grandpa all the pecans.I ran back and shouted, 4tLook at all the pecans!” He looked into the bucket and asked,44 Wei I, well, how did you find so many?” I told him how I'd followed the squirrel and taken the pecans from his hiding place.Grandpa congratulated me on how smart I'd been in observing the squirrel and his habits. Then he did something that surprised me. He handed the bucket back to me and put his arm gently around my shoulders. 注意：L续写词数应为150左右；3 .请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph 1:“That squirrel worked very hard to gather his winter supply of fbod,“ he said.Paragraph 2:I picked up that little bucket full of pecans and carried it back to the tree.【模拟题4 （2022湖南师大附中三模）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。My daughter and I were fans of Mister Rogers 'Neighborhood, an educational children's television series that was created and hosted by Fred Rogers, more commonly known as Mister Rogers.Around iny daughter's second birthday, I had a Mister Rogers-inspired idea. Why not invite one key person in my daughter's world to dinner each month? The local children's librarian could visit one evening, and perhaps the borough mayor （区长）could drop by a few weeks later.But I wanted to start at the top.“Let's invite Mister Rogers himself "1 said to my wife. 4tAftcr all, he lives just a few neighborhoods away. I bet he'd come.She looked at me as if I wanted to invite the President. t4You really think Mister Rogers would come to our house fbr dinner? Fat chance.”Undeterred （不气馁的）,I sent a letter to Mister Rogers that fall, telling him of my newfound delight in his show and my idea for inviting neighborhood people over to talk about their lives, and asking him and Mrs. Rogers to be our guests.I told my daughter about the letter. Her eyes glistened （发光）.“Misler Rogers coming? Really, Daddy?”One month later, no reply. My daughter hadn't forgotten and periodically asked when Mister Rogers would be visiting. I always told her that he hadn't called yet and that it was a good opportunity to learn about patience.Two months later, no response. At the three-month mark, my wife simply rolled her eyes when I raised the topic. I was beginning to lose optimism. Mister Rogers had let me down.Sadly, Mister Rogers passed away in late February of the following year. I was unaware of his illness and now understood why our invitation had gone unanswered. Mister Rogers would not be coming to dinner after all. Yet, even after his passing, Mister Rogers gave us a far greater gift than I ever could have imagined.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如卜格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。A week later, I was surprised to find a letter in our mailbox from Mister Rogers.The letter is a treasured gift and his kind words touched my life and my daughter.文章的开头，是这么写的：It was summer and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.那是夏天，我爸爸想像以前一样请我去度假。他决定带我去 西部荒野之旅。文章结尾可以用苜尾呼应的写作手法，请看这一句：Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerous vacation before. The special trip to the Wild West was deeply engraved in my mind.我从来没有过这么刺激又危险的假 期。那次去西部的特别旅行，深深地印在我的脑海里。再来看第三个例子，2016年浙江高考样题开头：A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.一 大，亚瑟在上班的路上发 生了一件有趣的事情。结尾： What a funny day. Arthur couldn't stop laughing whenever he looked back on this hilarious experience.多 么有趣的一天啊，每当亚瑟回想起这次欢乐的经历，他就忍不住笑个不停。【方法二：名言式结尾法】使用名言结尾往往能给文章增添文采，同时也能起到凝炼中心，深化主旨的作用，这样的结尾可以引 出结论，即时抒情，凸显主旨渲染氛围等，合理使用名言可以为续写文章画龙点睛，因此在平时我们不仅 要多加积累，也要明白名言蕴含的道理，以便使其用在合适的语境中。需要注意的是：不可生搬硬套名言 警句，一定要具体文本具体分析。例 1： Don*t judge each day by the harvest you reap but by the seeds that you plant.（不要根据你每天的收获来判断每天，而是根据你每天播种了多少。）这则名言采用了比喻的手法，将人的付出和回报比作耕种和收获。本质上，是过程和结果之间的比较，强 调过程的重要性大于结果，可以用于习惯养成类和或者长期活动类叙事的结尾，提升思想境界。例 2： It is during our darkest moments that we must focus to see the light.（越是在最黑暗的时刻，我们越要寻找光明。）这则名言通过前后反复概念的对比，突出光明的重要性，引申为在困境中保持积极乐观的生活态度，可以 用于主要人物经历重大坎坷，最后凭借乐观心态度过艰难岁月的文章。例子 3： Tell me and I forget. Teach me and I remember. Involve me and I learn.（告诉我，我会忘记。教给我，我会铭记。让我参与，我会掌握。）这则名言通过排比和对比，揭示了学习的规律，阐明了实践出真知的道理，可以用于总结学习经历，反思 技能掌握的过程等。例 4： In the end, it's not the years in your life that count. It*s the life in your years.（最后，重要的不是你生命中的岁月，而是你如何度过这些岁月的。）这则名言通过巧妙的词汇调换，改变句意，揭示了生活的真谛：只有认真对待生活，人生才不会留下遗憾， 由r本句涉及的时间跨度较大，写作中最好有最好从长者的视角提出。我们来看下面的实战演练，故事里，主人公在柔道比赛中，通过向对手暴露自己的弱点，充分发挥自 己的力量，最终赢得了比赛。故事结尾，借用教练对他的鼓励，完成了升华，其中就用到了名言警句。我 们以前来看一下。It is your biggest weakness that makes you win the match. As a proverb says, * Every coin has two sides/ 是 你最大的弱点让你赢得了比赛。正如谚语所说，“每枚硬币都有两面性。"Making full use of your strength is your achievement. Please remember that in no case will you give up especially in trouble. God is fair to everyone.'' 充分利用你的力量就是你的成就。请记住，无论如何你都不会放弃，尤其是在麻烦中。上帝对每个人都是 公平的。”【方法三：情感升华法】每一个故事的创作不止为了讲清楚一件事情的来龙去脉，还要包含作者想要表达的寓意，想与读者分 享的感悟，这种思想往往贯穿全文，并在故事结尾时得到升华，在读后续写的结尾部分可以采用情感升华 的方式，让读者产产生情感上的共鸣，激发读者思考。情感升华的结尾要求，要有较高的立意，它是故事的灵魂所在，这样的结尾能够产生强烈的艺术感奥 力，通常我们可以通过表现人生感悟、生活真谛、生活哲理、人生观或价值观来达到结尾部分的情感升华。请看第一例子，仍然是2017年高考真题，讲述的是与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。刚才我们用“首尾呼 应''法，现在我们试一试用“情感升华''法：在结尾处，表达母爱对我的深远影响。Everyone has one person they look up to as a role model, lb me there is none other than my mom, 每个人都有一 个榜样。对我来说，不是别人，正是我妈妈。She has beauty, brains, and one of the best hearts I know.她很漂 亮，很聪明，而且是我认识的最用心的人之一。Without her in my life, I would have no idea whether I can be a famous dancer. Someday, when I am older and have children of my own, I hope I can be just as great a parent as my mom.如果没有她，我不知道我能不能成为一个著名的舞者。有一天，当我长大了，有了自己的孩子， 我希望我能成为像我妈妈一样伟大的母亲。我们来看看第二个例子，主人公在故事的结尾处，表达自己对价值观：“幸福”的理解。来看看下面的表 达：【举例 2 I am extremely unhappy about it. I think money doesn't equal happiness.我对此非常不高兴。我觉 得金钱不等于幸福。And free life style also docsn equal happiness.自由的生活方式也不等于幸福。The real happiness is that everyone loves each other, and does everything useful for our society. Most of my classmates support me.真正的幸福是每个人都有“爱”，为我们的社会做一切有益的事情。大多数同学都支持我。But some of them think money is everything. In my opinion, money can't take the place of everything, such as your life, your time and your happiness.但有些人认为钱就是一切。在我看来，金钱不能代替一切，比如你的生活，你 的时间和你的幸福。【情感升华万能句】Seeing sth , I felt as if it had been doing and saying,"”看到某物，感觉某物好像在做某动作，并且说“（突出主题的话）这个句子的亮点在于：首先该句是虚拟语气句型结构，需要注意，动词时态需要用had been doing,其次 seeing sth是非谓语动词做伴随状语，另外句型中加入对话；最后，从修辞的角度，使用了“拟人”的手法。需要明确的是seeing sth.中的sih.到底是什么呢？我们知道，在故事发展中，一股都会有一两个线索词。这 些线索词要么贯穿始终，要么是在推动故事发展过程中，起到非常重要的作用。比如2020年新高考卷中， 描述的是万圣节尴尬事：主人公的头卡在了南瓜中。于是南瓜就是整个故事的线索词。八省联考中，主人 公的车在路上坏了，遇一家人的热心帮助。在主人公即将开车离开时，热心的小女孩还递给他一个纸袋， 纸袋里有食物。那么“纸袋paper bag”在推动剧情发展中，就起到了的重要作用。所以，“南瓜”和“纸袋”可 以用在seeing sth中。我们先看第一个例子。主人公"我''是老年人，想回到学校学习识字，但是连字母表都不会读。最终战胜了 自我怀疑，成功能识字看报纸。升华主题的时候，我们怎么用这个万能句型来表达呢？请看这句： Seeing the alphabet again, I felt as if it had been encouraging me and saying, " it's never too late to learn”.再次看 到字母表，我觉得它好像在鼓励我并说，“学习永远不会太晚”。看第二个例子。主人公“我”是个颓废少年，无意中通过自己的专长“扔标枪”，找到了自信，并成功逆袭。 我们怎么通过万能句型来升华呢？Seeing the javelin, I felt as if it had been encouraging me and saying, "You've found your talent and I've found you” 看到标枪，我觉得它好像在鼓励我，并说，“你找到了你的天赋，我找到了你”。这句话中，javelin是“标枪”， talent是“天赋”第三个例子。2016年高考真题，讲述了夫妻俩野外露营，因小事发生争执，女主人独自走进森林迷路的故 事。最后如何用万能句升华呢？Seeing the helicopter, Jane felt as if it had been comforting her with its thunderous voice, <4Your waiting pays off.” 看到那架直升机，简觉得它好像在用雷鸣般的声音安慰她，“你的等待是有回报的。”第四个例子，2016年高考样题，讲述了主人公亚瑟遇到了银行抢劫，他巧妙把可能藏有赃款的行李箱 suitcase运到了警察局的故事。最后的升华句，能不能借用我们今天用到的句型呢？我们一起来看看 Seeing the suitcase, Arthu