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考点39读后续写04修辞手法突破（解析版）【命题解读】适当的修辞可以让我们的句子增光添彩。试着比较一下，下面两个句子：第 1 个句子：Jenny was very happy. （Jenny 彳艮开心。）第 2 个句子：Jenny couldn't resist her inner joy, flying into the door like a bird.（Jenny控制不住内心的喜悦，像小鸟一样飞进了家门。）是不是感觉第二个用了比喻后，Jenny开心的画面跃然纸上，非常生动。今天我们就学习简单的几个修辞 手法的技巧，分别是比喻，拟人和夸张。这三种在我们的读后续写中，用的较多。【思维导图】比喻比喻将具有具备共同特征的两种不同事物连接起来的一种修辞手法。分为明喻和暗喻。他们之间有什 么区别呢？请看下面两个句子。（B月喻）Shenzhen is like a melting pot where new ideas are mixed.深圳就像一个混合了新想法的大熔 炉。（暗喻）Shenzhen is a melting pot where new ideas are mixed.深圳是一个混合了新思想的大熔炉。说通俗点儿，明喻就是用明确的标志词来表达比喻。这些标志词就是“比喻词经常有：like,as,asas,as ifo而暗喻中找不出像like, as之类的喻词，通常直接用“be, become等词”。我们来看2021年1月高考浙江卷，故事中的“我”万圣节中遇到尴尬事，头被卡在了南瓜里，请看下面的描【解析】【分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了主人公James在圣诞节的时候认为自己的车丢了，心情变得沮丧，没有 给家人买圣诞礼物，天下着雨，雨伞也丢了，心情非常糟糕，浑身湿透的回到家里，后来发现车在车库 里，警察也找到了丢失的伞，心情变好的故事。【详解】1 .段落续写：由第一段首句内容“詹姆斯打开车库门，发现了什么东西，惊讶地僵住了。”可知，第一段可描写James 发现自己的车在家里，也找到了给妻子的礼物，以及他的心情变化。由第二段首句内容“詹姆斯很高兴知道他的车就在那里，他带着礼物进了房间。”可知，第二段可描写 James愉快地和妻子在一起，警察找到了雨伞，James非常高兴，沐浴在圣诞节温暖的气氛中。2,续写线索：找到了车发现了小猫给妻子送礼物警察找到了雨伞高兴起来3 .词汇激活 行为类冲上楼：rush upstairs/dash upstairs/go upstairs hurriedly.突然想起：strike /occur to/hit情绪类.高兴：oveqoyed/very delighted/extremely happy【点睛】高分句型 1. He suddenly remembered that it wouldn't start this morning so he just took a taxi to work.（运用 了 that引导宾语从句，so连接并列句式）高分句型 2. Putting the phone down, James gazed at Jessica, joy welling up inside him.（运用 了现在分词作 状语，独立主格结构）高分句型 3 . Bathed in the warm Christmas atmosphere, James walked over to Jessica and hugged her tightly. （运用了过去分词作状语）【模拟题31 （2022.湖南株洲.一模）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文.DRUMMING WITH GRANDPARoger was filled with excitement as his mother told him his grandfather was on his way over. He always had fun together with his grandfather who once drummed in a band. They could make the whole house shake with their joyful music. Roger got excited and practiced drumming all morning.Finally, Dad's car pulled up in front of the house. Upon hearing the car door opened. Roger shouted for joy from his bedroom window, "Hi, Grandpa! Listen to this!” Taking a deep breath, he raised his drumsticks and began rocking and rolling, just like Grandpa had taught him. Jumping up. he raced outside to his grandfather and asked, nGrandpa. what do you think? Are you ready to drum together?n Grandpa, giving Roger a hug, said. nIt was wonderful, but I'm afraid I can't play right now." Dad smiled at Roger, telling him some of Grandpa's finger joints were hurting him and that maybe he would want to play after a short rest. Roger didn't ask again.After lunch, Roger went to his room to get his skateboard, finding someone had already stepped into the room. It was Grandpa who stood near the drum set. He picked up a drumstick and began to play. Thump! Thump! But just with two thumps, the drumstick fell onto the floor. Grandpa reached for it, trying to pick it up, but the drumstick fell out of his hand. He tried again and the same thing happened. Grandpa moved his red and swollen fingers, looking upset. Seeing this, Roger shut the door noiselessly. He walked to the sitting room where Dad was reading and asked Dad to drive him to his friend*s house. nDavid has a drum with the pedal （踏板）and Fd like to borrow it," Roger told Dad about his plan. Dad got the car keys and off they went. 注意：1 .续写词数应为150左右；2 .请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。“Grandpa, a surprise!” Roger shouted when they returned with a big box.Slowly, Grandpa reached out his foot and pushed the pedal as Roger did.参考答案："Grandpa, a surprise!n Roger shouted when they returned with a big box. Roger led Grandpa to his room in delight. Dad followed, carrying the big box. With great joy Roger opened the box together with Dad. When Grandpa saw the drum with the pedal, his eyes were shining with excitement. "Grandpa, you can play this drum with your foot/' Roger said and then pressed the pedal with his foot. The drumstick swung forward. Thump! Thump! Thump! The pedal worked smoothly and the thumps filled the whole room. "Would you like to have a try?*' Roger turned to Grandpa with his eyes full of expectation.Slowly, Grandpa reached out his foot and pushed the pedal as Roger did. Thump! Thump! Grandpa smiled and continued with greater enthusiasm. "Join in, Roger!11 Grandpa shouted to Roger excitedly and his cheerful voice was even louder than the drum rolls. Roger grinned from ear to ear as he picked up his drumsticks. He rocked and rolled, and so did Grandpa. With the drums beating merrily, their joyful music shook the whole house like before, not only the whole house, but also the hearts of the grand father and the grandson.【解析】【分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了罗杰想和爷爷一起打鼓，但是爷爷手指关节疼，拿不起鼓槌，不能打 鼓，罗杰看见了以后想起来大卫有一个带踏板的鼓，于是叫爸爸开车送他去大卫家借鼓。【详解】1 .段落续写：由第一段首句内容“爷爷，一个惊喜!”当他们拿着一个大箱子回来时，罗杰喊道。”可知，第一段可描写 罗杰给爷爷示范怎么打带踏板的鼓。由第二段首句内容“爷爷慢慢地伸出脚，像罗杰一样踩踏板。”可知，第二段可描写爷爷和罗杰一起打 鼓。2 .续写线索：打开示范爷爷打鼓罗杰加入3 .词汇激活 行为类打开：open/unfold踩下：press/step on敲打：beat/strike震撼：shake/quake 情绪类高兴：joy/delight欢快地：merrily/joyfully【点睛】高分句型 1 When Grandpa saw the drum with the pedal, his eyes were shining with excitement.（由连接词 when引导的时间状语从句）高分句型 2With the drums beating merrily, their joyful music shook the whole house like before, not only the whole house, but also the hearts of the grand father and the grandson, （with 复合结构）【模拟题4 （2022重庆一模）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。It was one of those days when nothing seemed to go right. I dragged myself out of the bed and all of the routines began early. I dropped my two older children at school with relief and unwillingly headed to the supermarket to buy groceries with my youngest. T wasn't feeling any sense of appreciation for my comfortable home or lovely family.I was getting mad with this early day, and my son, just four years old at that time, was being difficult. I raced around to pick the items with no regard to cost, while trying to control my naughty child whose behavior had now added to my complete displeasure. Yes, I was that mother, threatening, and roaring at a small child.We eventually made it to the checkout and stood in the queue waiting for our turn. After a short time, I noticed that someone had joined the line behind us. I turned and saw an old man. He wore a dirty overcoat. His shoes were worn out, and his trousers tapped around sockless ankles on this cold, wet day. In his hands he just carried a small box of long-life milk.I had too many groceries. 1 asked him if he*d like to go ahead of me. It wasn't an act of kindness on my part, also not my automatic reaction. Perhaps I just did out of a sense of guilt, or I just wanted him gone. After all, his presence made me uncomfortable. In the same way, I felt uncomfortable and avoided my eyes when passing a homeless person.He didn't respond to me as if I had said nothing to him. I looked at him and repeated my words. This time, Iwas sure that he had heard what I said.注意：L续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。He looked surprised and uncertain.I had to find him and gave back the change.参考答案：He looked surprised and uncertain. He asked me quietly, "Madam, I possibly couldn't do it. Are you sure?” “Sure!” I confirmed, nodding at him unwillingly. He went ahead slowly, paid fbr the milk, and took his change. Then, to my amazement, he turned to my child and pressed the change into his hand. Without any more words, he turned around and disappeared into the crowds. Seeing this, a sense of guilt flooded into my mind. I looked around anxiously, hoping that he hadn't walked away.I had to find him and gave back the change. Out of the supermarket, an old man with a dirty overcoat and sockless ankles caught my attention. I ran to him quickly, pressing back the change into his hand with a big bag of bread for his kindness. I hurried away before he expressed his thanks. At this moment, my guilt gave way to the relief. Also, I felt comfortable about my home, family, and even my life, rather than being mad. A gentle breeze softly kissed me. I went home with my lovely child happily as well as gratefully.【解析】【分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者对家庭生活感觉并不舒适，带四岁的儿子去购物时，儿子非常顽 皮，使作者感觉不快。在收银台排队时，作者因为感觉不舒服，让一位衣衫褴褛的老人先结账，老人开 始没有回应，作者又重复了一遍之后，确定老人听到了自己的话。【详解】1 .段落续写：由第一段首句内容“他看上去既惊讶又不确定。”可知，第一段可描写老人重新确认作者的话，结账之后 把零钱给了作者的孩子，然后走了，作者感觉内疚。由第二段首句内容“我必须找到他并把零钱还给他。”可知，第二段可描写作者找到老人，表达感激，作 者对家、家庭和生活都感觉舒适了。2 .续写线索：老人惊讶老人送零钱给孩子内疚还钱离开感觉舒适3 .词汇激活 行为类询 问：ask/inquire/question环顾四周：look around/look about引起我的注意：catch my attention/catch my eye 情绪类不情愿地：unwillingly/reluctantly焦急地：anxiously/worriedly【点睛】【高分句型 1 I looked around anxiously, hoping that he hadn't walked away.（由连接词 that 弓【导宾语从句作 hoping的宾语）【高分句型2 I hurried away before he expressed his thanks.（由连接词before引导时间状语从句）【模拟题5 （2022.福建莆田.一模）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Back in the early 1980s, the idea of home computers was catching on. I wasn't keen on getting one. Somehow, I evolved and have owned several computers over the years. Some days, I loved my computer, but more often than not, I hated it. I didn't grow up with them, and they were a challenge to my mental health. Dealing with modern technology was my introduction to stress, and I know who to blame: my children.They weren't satisfied that their dad and I finally bought a computer and learned to send e-mails. We were quite happy with that, but next came a cellphone. Then just talking on the phone was not acceptable; they insisted we learn to text as well. We couldn*t get a break.I remember well the night that Facebook became a household word around here. Those kids of ours were determined to set up a joint account for us. It took some convincing. We felt no guilt for grating on （激怒）their nerves considering the drama they'd sometimes created for us during their teenage years. A little payback wouldn't hurt those two.More recently, my husband and I were forced into getting rid of our flip phones and getting smartphones. I will admit that I progressed into appreciating mine. I liked speaking to Siri and finding out what I needed to know in an instant. I enjoyed having Internet access everywhere I went. I felt a sense of accomplishment; my husband- not so much. To this day, he would happily take back his flip phone.Last Christmas, our children surprised us with yet another popular form of technology-Alexa. The girls took our smartphones in hand and got us programmed. Before we fully understood what was happening, we could tell Alexa to turn our lamp on or off, and she would. To be honest, we were a bit annoyed at having to learn how to use yet another device, but we decided to keep it. We mastered turning the lamp on and off, and once again I got the hang of it sooner than my husband did. I became his Alexa coach. 注意：1 .续写词数应为150左右；2 .请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。One night, Alexa did not turn on the lamp when I gave the command.We should thank our children and grandchildren.参考答案：One night, Alexa did not turn on the lamp when I gave the command. I tried to say "Turn on the lighf, to it countless times, but Alexa didn't work. "New technologies are always unreliable.my husband complained. I searched the Internet and immediately found the reason why Alex couldn't work. I just needed to tell Alex to set the light color to white or whatever color I wanted, and then it would turn on the light. Then Alex turned on the light itself.We should thank our children and grandchildren. It was our children and grandchildren that taught us to use technology so that I could find a solution on the Internet by myself. Without them, our life is always invariable and boring. Our children and grandchildren “fbrce“ us to accept and use technology, which seems to put us under pressure. However, the fact is that our children and grandchildren let us really accept and use technology to make our life more convenient.【解析】【分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者的孩子们为自己和丈夫推荐了许多现代科技产品，作者从很有压力 变得喜欢上它们，有一种成就感，但是作者的丈夫不太喜欢。去年圣诞节，孩子们给作者的智能手机安 装了 Alexa程序，可以打开或者关闭灯。【详解】1 .段落续写：由第一段首句内容“一天晚上，当我发出命令时，Alexa没有开灯。”可知，第一段可描写作者和丈夫对 此的不同反应，作者用孩子们教会的技能想到办法解决问题。由第二段首句内容“我们应该感谢我们的子孙。”可知，第二段可描写作者感受到孩子们教会的科技是有 用处的，感谢孩子们。2,续写线索：Alexa不工作丈夫抱怨作者想办法Alexa被修好感谢孩子们科技的用 处3 .词汇激活 行为类 打开：turn on/switch on 教：teach/instruct 找到：find/seek out 情绪类感谢：thank/叩preciate压力:pressure/stress【点睛】【高分句型 11 I searched the Internet and immediately found the reason why Alex couldn't work.（由关系副词 why引导限制性定语从句）【高分句型 2 However, the fact is that our children and grandchildren let us really accept and use technology to make our life more convenient.（由连接词 that 引 导表语从句）【模拟题61 （2022.辽宁模拟预测）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。One of my most memorable trips took place during the summer vacation about three years ago, when my sister, my aunt and I took a trip to Spain because we were moving. On the day of the trip, I lay in bed thinking about my friends whom I was going to leave behind and thoughts were flooding in.When we arrived at the hire station, we seemed to have some problems with our luggage because it was too much for a taxi, so we had to book a van （厢式送货车）to take our luggage to the airport. We waited for a long period to find a perfect van that would fit our luggage.Before leaving, I felt very bad because I was going to a different country and was going to miss all my friends and family. I was not comfortable and cried.The journey was almost perfect at the beginning, but soon it began to rain. Because of the rain, the drivers could not see far away, which caused a huge traffic jam. I was sitting by the window with a can of Coke that I had bought in the store earlier. My aunt and sister fell asleep, and during this time. I felt bored and thought about other things that bothered me. My eyes turned to the mountain in front of us.A bus suddenly appeared in the picture. It was very close to us. Cars sped past us without any speed limit. Beside me was a very deep lake: I wondered to myself what if something or someone fell inside it. Suddenly, a bus in front of our van stopped, and because it was raining heavily and the van was going fast, no one could see what was going to happen. Then, bang, we bumped into each other. Our van overturned, but luckily, it didn't fall into the lake. People came to help us get out of the van because we were blocked and the driver was half-dead. 注意：1 ,续写词数应为150左右；2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。We struggled to get out of the van and everything we had was gone.I was losing a lot of blood and then the emergency aid came.参考答案：One possible version:We struggled to get out of the van and everything we had was gone. Everything was very strange. I had never had that kind of experience before. It was like watching a horror movie. Some people who were also in theaccident started crying, looking for their children, tears beginning to increase. My leg was badly injured. My aunt was calling to seek some help, and my sister was full of in