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读后续写ANoteoftheNicestThingsA Note of the Nicest ThingsHe was in the first third grade class I taught at Saint Marys school.All of my students were dear to me,except Mark Eklund.He often talked constantly.I had to remind him again and again that talking without permission was not acceptable.One morning my patience was growing thin,and then I made a new teachers mistake.I looked at him,saying,“If you say one more word,I am going to tape your mouth shut!”It wasnt ten seconds later when Chuck,another student,blurted out,“Mark is talking again.”Since I had stated the punishment,I had to act on it.I took a roll of tape out of my drawer.Without saying a word,I proceeded to Marks desk,tore off two pieces of tape and made a big X over his mouth.When I walked back to Marks desk and removed the tape,his first words were,“Thank you for correcting me,Sister.”A Note of the Nicest Things One Friday,I asked the students to list the names of the other students,leaving a space between each name.Then I told them to write down the nicest thing they could say about each of their classmates.As they left,each one handed me the paper.That Saturday,I wrote down the name of each student and listed what everyone else had said about that individual.On Monday I gave each student his or her list.Before long,the entire class was smiling.“Really?”I heard the whispers.“I never knew that meant anything to anyone!”“I didnt know others liked me so much!”Then Mark said,“Thank you for teaching me,Sister.”Years later,after I returned from vacation,my parents met me at the airport.My father cleared his throat as he usually did before saying something important.“The Eklunds called last night,”he began.“Really?”I said.“I havent heard from them in years.I wonder how Mark is.”Dad responded quietly.“Mark was killed in Vietnam,”he said.“The funeral is tomorrow,and his parents would like it if you could attend.”I had never seen a serviceman in a military coffin before,so handsome,so mature.Readingforstructure01Readingforinformation02Cluestowriting03Continuationwriting04CONTENT1ReadingforstructurePART ONEA Note of the Nicest Thingsfalling actionclimaxrising actionintroduction(setting)conclusion(evaluation)plot Markwasatrouble-makerinmyclass.(Para.1)Markthankedmeformypunishmentandteaching.(Para.2-5)Yearslater,IgotthenewsaboutMarksdeathandattendedthefuneral.(Para.6-7)2ReadingforinformationPART TWOMy general impression about MarkAll of my students were dear to me,except Mark Eklund.I had to remind him again and again that talking without permission was not acceptable.He often talked constantly.Conclusion:Mark was a trouble-maker in my class.Mark was my headache.A Note of the Nicest ThingsMark got punished.When did it happen?One morning my patience was growing thin,and then I made a new teachers mistake.What did Mark do?I looked at him,saying,“If you say one more word,I am going to tape your mouth shut!”It wasnt ten seconds later when Chuck,another student,blurted out,“Mark is talking again.”What did I do?Since I had stated the punishment,I had to act on it.I took a roll of tape out of my drawer.Without saying a word,I proceeded to Marks desk,tore off two pieces of tape and made a big X over his mouth.What was his reaction?When I walked back to Marks desk and removed the tape,his first words were,“Thank you for correcting me,Sister.”A Note of the Nicest ThingsRegardless of/Turning a deaf ear to/Ignoing my warning,Mark still offended the rule and talked in my class.His misbehavior was reported by a classmate.So,in order to maintain my authority,I implemented the punishment of taping his mouth shut,for which Mark thanked me.A Note of the Nicest ThingsUse your own words to retell this incident A Note of the Nicest ThingsI made a new teachers mistake.When I walked back to Marks desk and removed the tape,his first words were,“Thank you for correcting me,Sister.”Thank you for correcting me,Sister.Thank you for teaching me,Sister.A Note of the Nicest Thingsask to list the names,leaving a space.write down the nicest thinghand me the paperOne FridayI wrote downand listed That SaturdayI gave each.his or her list.On Monday123A Note of the Nicest ThingsThe reaction of the classBefore long,the entire class was smiling.“Really?”I heard the whispers.“I never knew that meant anything to anyone!”“I didnt know others liked me so much!”The reaction of MarkThen Mark said,“Thank you for teaching me,Sister.”A Note of the Nicest ThingsThe reaction of the classBefore long,the entire class was smiling.“Really?”I heard the whispers.“I never knew that meant anything to anyone!”“I didnt know others liked me so much!”The reaction of MarkThen Mark said,“Thank you for teaching me,Sister.”Whatcanweinferfromit?They didnt know their image in others eyes.They were glad to know their image in others eyes.The list meant a lot to the whole class.It made a difference to Mark,in particular.1234I got the news about Mark from my parents.Mark was killed in Vietnam/killed in battle.Years later,after I returned from vacation,my parents met me at the airport.My father cleared his throat as he usually did before saying something important.“The Eklunds called last night,”he began.“Really?”I said.“I havent heard from them in years.I wonder how Mark is.”Dad responded quietly.“Mark was killed in Vietnam,”he said.“The funeral is tomorrow,and his parents would like it if you could attend.”I had never seen a serviceman in a military coffin before,so handsome,so mature.A Note of the Nicest ThingsMarks parents invited to the funeral.I attended Marks funeral.3CluestowritingPART THREEAfter the funeral,Marks mother and father found me.Why did Marks parents invite me to attend the funeral?Why did Marks parents find me after the funeral?What would they say or do?A Note of the Nicest ThingsMarks classmates started to gather around us.Why did they gather around us?What would they say or do?A Note of the Nicest Things4ContinuationWritingPART FOUR01020304误区1 续写第二段中大量对话来写当年Mark借过我橡皮，帮我做过值日生，替我修过自行车，Mark真是一个好人啊。误区3 重点在写老师年轻的时候范了错，给幼小的Mark心灵上造成了无法弥补的创伤，老师去葬礼上乞求原谅.误区2对话中直接用“Teacher”来称呼我，非常Chinglish.两段续写中前面一段出现的全是Mark父母和我的对话，后面一段全部是同学们之间的对话。误区4 A Note of the Nicest Things解释Mark怎么死的,没看明白是在越南战争中死的,强行编了一个见义勇为,勇斗小偷牺牲的故事。估计对Vietnam,military coffin,serviceman这些词都忽略了。beintears含泪，泪流满面Mostofuswereintearsbythetimehedfinishedhisstory.他讲完故事时，我们大多数人都已泪流满面。havetearsinoneseyes眼里含着泪水Janeturnedtomewithtearsinhereyes,andbeggedmetohelpher.简眼里含着泪水转我,恳求我帮帮她。burstintotears放声大哭，突然哭起来Lauraburstintotearsandranoutoftheroom.劳拉突然哭了起来，然后从房子里跑了出去。A Note of the Nicest ThingsHowwouldyoudescribegrief?Ifeltalumpinmythroatasthesorrowswentthroughmymind;mytearsgatheredandfloweddownmyface.Tryingtofightbackthetears,IwantedtostaycalmwhenIsawthenotewiththenicestthingonit.A Note of the Nicest ThingsHowwouldyoudescribegrief?Shebitthelowerliptostopitfromtremblingandthentearsfilledhereyesandstartedrunningdownherwrinkledface.Theneighborsuddenlychokedwithsobs,hertearsgushingfromhereyes.Swallowinghard,hemumbledtothecoach,Myfatherdiedthismorning.IsitallrightifImisspracticetoday?Shetriedtocontainhergriefbuteveryonearoundhercouldsenseit.A Note of the Nicest ThingsHowwouldyoudescribegrief?A Note of the Nicest Thingsfalling actionclimaxrising actionintroduction(setting)conclusion(evaluation)plot Markwasatrouble-makerinmyclass.(Para.1)Markthankedmeformypunishmentandteaching.(Para.2-5)Yearslater,IgotthenewsaboutMarksdeathandattendedthefuneral.(Para.6-7)MarksparentsthankedmeformakingMarkabettermanwithamagicnote.(Para.8)Withallthecherishednotesfromthestudents,Irealizedthevalueofbeingagoodteacher.(Para.9)A Note of the Nicest ThingsAfter the funeral,Marks mother and father found me.“We want to show you something,”his father said.“They found this on Mark.We thought you might recognize it.”Opening a billfold,he carefully removed two worn pieces of notebook paper that had obviously been taped,folded and refolded many times.I knew that the pieces of paper were the ones on which I had listed all the nicest things that Marks classmates had said about him.“Thank you so much for doing that.”Marks mother said.“As you can see,Mark behaved better and better at school.Its all because of you and your list.A Note of the Nicest ThingsMarks classmates started to gather around us.Charlie smiled,“I still keep the list in the top drawer of my desk at home.”Chucks wife said,“He asked me to put this in our wedding album.”Then Vicki,another student,reached into her pocketbook,took out her wallet and showed her worn list to the group.“I carry this with me at all times,”Vicki said.“I think we all saved our lists.”Thats when I finally sat down and cried.Sometimes the smallest things could mean the most to others.Compliment the people we love and care about,before it is too late.THANKSFORYOURWATCHING