2023年读后续写&描写对话.docx

2023年读后续写&描写对话 读后续写&描写对话 ;对话;何时用？如何写？写多少？写哪里？听完今日的讲解，你会有一个比较明晰的答案。 首先留意下面几个要点： 1对话描写必需为推动故事情节服务，是情节进展的一个环节，每段出现一两句即可； 2对话描写必需反映人物的心理与情感，刻画人物的性格； 3对话描写不宜过长，侧重口语化词汇，避开生僻词汇； 4对话描写要尽可能结合动作描写，明确对谁说，具有画面感； 5对话描写中要学会使用几个感叹词，表示说话人的喜、怒、哀、乐等心情； 一、对话标签的三个位置 她说，;我想和你一起去，但我还没有完成家庭作业。;这句话用英语，从句式结构的角度来看，怎么表达呢？特殊是对话标签she said的位置改变。 1.对话标签在前 She said,;I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.; 2.对话标签在后 ;I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.;She said. 这两句是最常见的形式，大家写出来，应当问题不大。我们来看第三种形式。 3.对话标签在句子中间 ;I would like to go with you,;she said, ;but I haven’t finished my homework.; 留意：对话标签在后或者在句子中间时第2,3种状况，假如主语是名词，则可以倒装。而代词不行以倒装，said she是错误的。 ;I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.;said Emily或者Emily said. ;I would like to go with you,;said Emily/ Emily said, ;but I haven’t finished my homework.; 二、读后续写对话"四大误区" 1.废话连篇，对情节进展和刻画人物性格没有关心。 ;Hey, how are you?; ;I’m fine, how are you?; ;How is the weather?; ;Terrific! Nice day for a walk, isn’t it?; 这样的对话在现实生活中很真实，但是小说毕竟是艺术加工，无助情节推动的，不能刻画人物性格的日常寒暄和偏离文章主线的对话肯定不用。 2.追求花哨，过度使用对话标签 ;That is fantastic news,; he said happily. 此句中完全没有必要加上一个happily来表达说的方式，因为句中的fantastic一词足以说明说话人了表情，过度强调会让读者的留意力集中在;说话的方式;而不是;说话的内容;。 建议改为：;That is fantastic news！; he said/screamed/exclaimed. 一个感叹号和一个fantastic已经足以让读者想象当时的情景。适当的;艺术留白;也是需要的，这样会留给读者想象的空间。 还有一种避开过度的dialogue tags的方法是运用;动作描写;，尤其是表情上动作来取而代之。 如：Her eyes reflected the candlelight as she smiled at her son. ;Everyone is unique. Just follow your heart and be yourself!;当她对儿子微笑时，她的眼睛反射着烛光。;每个人都是独一无二的。只要跟随你的心，做你自己！; 3用词不当，错误使用对话标签 "I can&39;t believe it," Emma gasped. (gasp意思为;喘气;) "That&39;s funny," Henry chuckled. (chuckled.意思为;轻笑;) 评析：以上两句话也是在大量的学生习作中发觉的。这里把动作描写和动作标签混淆了，试想谁能gasp喘息、chuckle轻笑出一句话？除非他或她有特异功能。 纠正方法如下： "I can&39;t believe it," Emmasaid with a gasp. 对话标签Emma said+ with介词短语 Emma gasped."I can&39;t believe it." 动作描写+句号 "I can&39;t believe it."Emma gasped. 对话句+动作描写,留意对话句式句号 "That&39;s funny!"Henrychuckled. 感叹句结束+动作描写 "That&39;s funny," Henrysaid, chuckling. Question tag+分词做伴随状况 请特殊关注以上对话的标点符号。 4对话标签多此一举：对话对象十分明确，仍使用对话标签 ;I told you already,; I said, glaring. 评析：此句貌似豪华，其实对话中的主语;I;已经清楚地说明了说话者，完全没有必要用对话标签;I said;来说明说话对象。纠正方法：加上一点动作描写就可以避开这种错误，并且提升语言的生动性。 I glared at him.;I told you already.; 三、让你的对话标签不平凡四个小技巧 在对话标签中加入语气，嗓音，情感让你的描写更生动传神。 第一种：加语气 ;I would love to,; said Emilyin a pleasant tone. ;我很愿意这样做，;艾米丽用一种开心的语气说。 这里用到了;in a pleasant tone. ;，即;用一种开心的语气;，基本结构为：in a/an+形容词+tone 如：in apleasant愉悦的/firm坚决的/rude粗鲁的/sad哀痛的tone 也可以用in a tone of +名词的搭配 如：in a tone ofsurprise用一种惊异的语气 in a tone ofcuriosity用一种好奇的语气 in a tone ofimpatience用一种不耐烦的语气 in a tone ofcommand用一种指令的语气 第二种：加嗓音 ;I didn’t mean to,; she murmuredin a low voice. ;我不是有意的，;她低声说。 这里用到了;in a low voice;，即;小声地说道;或者;用一种.声音;，基本结构是：in a/an+形容词+voice 如：in ahigh /low / sweet/loud/soft /weakvoice 用一个高/低/甜/洪亮/软/弱的声音 第三种：加情感 ;I.I. don’t think I’m right for the part,;I repliedwith embarrassment.;我.我.认为我不适合这个角色，;我尴尬地回答。 这里用到了;with embarrassment;，即;伴随着尴尬;，基本结构是：with +情感名词。如with excitement 伴随着兴奋。 加副词 ;我再也不会那样做了，;我回答。如何丰富这句话里的对话标签呢？ ;I will never do that again,; I answeredfirmly. 加上了副词firmly坚决地 这句话也可以这么写：可将副词提到句首。 Firmly，I answered，;I will never do that again.; 素材积累：好词好句赏析 1. He stiffened(僵硬) for seconds and thenshuffled (拖曳、渐渐走) his feetforward,eyes red with fury(生气) but without any fear or hesitation. 2. George and I stood there dumbfounded(哑然失声的，发楞的) watching him finishing the whole job,gratitude and admiration rushing in my heart感谢和仰慕涌入我心. 3. Hearing the bad news, Mary fainted away on the spot and fell into unconsciousness.(当场晕倒，陷入昏迷) 4. His eyes widened further and his mouth opened. He took a huge breath as if winded喘不过气. He looked tortured-vulnerable. 他的眼睛瞪大了，嘴巴张开。他深深地吸了一口气仿佛呼吸困难，他看起来饱受折磨，特别脆弱。 5. Approaching me with a great deal of obvious discomfort, Tommy looked up at me with pleading恳求的eyes. 6. There was a light touch on my hand; looking down, I saw my son looking at me, curious.我感觉到有人轻轻碰触我的手；低头一看，是我的儿子好奇地在看我。 7. Every knock on the door fills me with expectation(让我充满期盼). I immediately picture him walking through(想象某人做某事) the door. 8. He looked out of the window, biting his lips, as if thinking.他一边看着窗外，一边咬着嘴唇，仿佛在思索。9. At the sight of the ferocious wolf, I was seized by a strong sense of horror and my palms were sweating.(被深深地恐惧感所掌握，手心出汗) 10. Upon hearing the bad news, her heart ached, tears streaming down her cheeks.(伤心，眼泪直流) TAG标签：对话 PREV ARTICLE2023读后续写动作描写语料积累NEXT ARTICLE描写小满节气的诗句 小满祝愿语