教育专题：写作训练 (2).ppt

写 作 训 练（一）漫（一）漫 画画 类类 仿真卷二-书面表达 手机手机是当今社会必备的一种交流交流工具，但对手机的过度依赖过度依赖却成了社会的一种普遍现象。请阅读下面的漫画，按要求用英文写一篇短文。要求：1.描述漫画内容内容2.分析漫画所揭示的问题问题3.提出你的看法看法注意：1.短文开头已给出，不计入总词数2.考生可适当发挥，使文章内容充实连贯3.词数100左右 It is common that we use cell phones as a means of communication for its convenience.However,the fact that people are getting addicted to cell phones cannot be ignored._.写作策略：“三准三准”-确保作文上及格确保作文上及格线线第一步：定体裁 漫画为议论式议论式图画作文开始句：用一句话概括漫画内容开始句：用一句话概括漫画内容 句型一：From the picture we can see.句型二：As is vividly presented in the picture above./As the picture above vividly presents to us,.（用as引导的非限制性定语从句）中间过渡句：用一句话揭示图画的含义中间过渡句：用一句话揭示图画的含义它反映的是当今社会的一个普遍现象：.It shows a common phenomenon nowadays that.结束句：用一句话强调所提建议的重要性结束句：用一句话强调所提建议的重要性（常用（常用only引起的倒装句）引起的倒装句）Only in this way can we/they.第二步：定人称、内容要点、关键词及动词时态。人称要对：本文使用第三人称第三人称时态要准：基本时态为一般现在时一般现在时要点要全：1.描述漫画内容 2.分析漫画所揭示问题 3.提出你的看法核心词汇：1.玩手机 play with cell phones 2.聚餐 have dinner 3.交流 communicate with 4.过度依赖 over-dependence 5.自控 self-control第三步：根据要点提示写句式（表达准确得体，避免汉式英语）In the picture,.The scene can be seen in.I think there are.reasons for this.On the one hand,.on the other hand.As far as i am concerned,I thought.we should.“四美四美”-走出平庸创高分走出平庸创高分第四步：词汇、句式升级（追求高级表达，第四步：词汇、句式升级（追求高级表达，张扬个性发展）张扬个性发展）1.be eager to share ideas with others 2.be unwilling to communicate with people around them face to face.3.Make a balance of our life 4.Try to be self controlled to avoid over-dependence on cell phones./make use of your cell phones wisely.第五步：巧用过渡句（巧用衔接过第五步：巧用过渡句（巧用衔接过渡，读文如沐春风）渡，读文如沐春风）Faced with this problem,I thought.We should spend more time with.And at the same time try to.第六步：正确分段（行文条理清晰，力避一段到底）第一段：描述漫画内容第二段：分析漫画所揭示问题第三段：提出自己的看法第七步：完善成文（书写清晰规范，第七步：完善成文（书写清晰规范，卷面漂亮美观）卷面漂亮美观）Sample writing It is common that we use cell phones as a means of communication for its convenience.However,the fact that people are getting addicted to cell phones cannot be ignored.In the picture,three persons are playing with their cell phones when having dinner.The scene can be seen everywhere in our life.I think there are two reasons for this.On the one hand,people are eager to share ideas with others.On the other hand,not believing in others,they are unwilling to communicate with People around them face to face.Faced with this problem,i thought making a balance of our life is the key.We should spend more time with our family and friends,and at the same time try to be self-controlled to avoid over-dependence on cell phones.