教育专题：英文写作辅导.ppt

scribblesrubbishSchool environmentProblems Solutions Learning objectivesBy the end of this period,we will be able to1.enlarge our vocabulary related to a certain topic,the school environment,through reviewing some words,phrases and sentence patterns;2.know how to polish(润色润色)a composition by integrating information and using various regular sentence patterns.Writing 假如你是中学生李华。你校英文报正在就学校假如你是中学生李华。你校英文报正在就学校乱涂乱画（乱涂乱画（scribbles）问题向全校师生征求解决）问题向全校师生征求解决的办法。请你用英语向该报写一封建议信。信的内的办法。请你用英语向该报写一封建议信。信的内容应包括以下方面：容应包括以下方面：1.简单描述现象和个人看法；简单描述现象和个人看法；2.提出解决这一问题的建议（不少于提出解决这一问题的建议（不少于2个）；个）；3.表达你的愿望。表达你的愿望。注意：注意：1.词数：词数：100词左右；词左右；2.信的开头已给信的开头已给 出，不计入总词数。出，不计入总词数。Dear Sir，Dear Sir,When we walk around the school we can see some scribbles on the walls of the school buildings.They have influenced the beauty of our school environment.We have to do something to solve this problem.First,our school should make some rules to forbid students from scribbling.Second,our school should educate students and let them know the importance of protecting our school environment.Third,we should clear the scribbles and make the walls clean again.I hope my advice can help you.I also hope everyone can try to protect our school.By doing so our school can be a better place to study in.Dear Sir,When we walk around the school we can see some scribbles on the walls of the school buildings.They have influenced the beauty of our school environment.We have to do something to solve this problem.First,our school should make some rules to forbid students from scribbling.Second,our school should educate students and let them know the importance of protecting our school environment.Third,we should clear the scribbles and make the walls clean again.I hope my advice can help you.I also hope everyone can try to protect our school.By doing so our school can be a better place to study in.优点：优点：1.要点全要点全2.段落层次清晰段落层次清晰3.连贯性尚可连贯性尚可4.基本无语法错误基本无语法错误5.书写整洁，卷面干净书写整洁，卷面干净需改进的地方：需改进的地方：语法结构语法结构、句式句式表达单一表达单一高分作文评分标准高分作文评分标准（高分高分23-25）卷面美卷面美 要点齐要点齐 无错误无错误 字数够字数够 文字优文字优？Polishing a composition1.Integrating the information写作信息整合写作信息整合 并列连词并列连词主从句主从句非谓语非谓语介词短语介词短语同位语同位语 Examples:1.Some people smoke everywhere.This is harmful to our environment and health.(从句从句)2.When we walk around the school,we can see rubbish everywhere.(非谓语非谓语)3.Im Li Hua who is a student from Nanfang High School.(同位语同位语),whichWalking Im Li Hua,a student from Nanfang High School.(同位同位语语)2.Using various regular sentence patterns1).强调句型强调句型（It is everyones effort that can make our school clean.）2).倒装句型倒装句型（Standing before us is a small but beautiful school.）3).省略句型省略句型（When walking around the school,dont throw rubbish casually.）4).被动句被动句（Measures should be taken to deal with the problem.）5).其它常用句型其它常用句型（Try our best,and well make it a better place to live in.）Lets Polish the compositionDear Sir,When we walk around the school we can see some scribbles on the walls of the school buildings.They have influenced the beauty of our school environment.We have to do something to solve this problem.First,our school should make some rules to forbid students from scribbling.Second,our school should educate students and let them know the importance of protecting our school environment.Third,we should clear the scribbles and make the walls clean again.I hope my advice can help you.I also hope everyone can try to protect our school.By doing so our school can be a better place to study in.We have to do something to solve this problem.Something must be done to solve the problem.First,our school should make some rules to forbid students from scribbling.First of all,rules are supposed to be made to forbid scribbling anywhere.Second,our school should educate students and let them know the importance of protecting our school environment.Second we should educate all the students to raise their awareness of the importance of protecting the school environment.Third,we should clear the scribbles and make the walls clean again.And of course,it is also necessary to clear all the scribbles and make the walls clean again.I hope my advice can help you.I also hope everyone can try to protect our school.By doing so our school can be a better place to study in.I do hope my suggestions are helpful and that everyone can do their part to stand up for our school.Only by doing so will our school be a better place for us to study in.Dear Sir,When walking around the school we can see some scribbles on the walls of the school buildings,which have a bad effect on the beauty of our school environment.We have to do something to solve this problem.First,our school should make some rules to forbid students from scribbling.Second,our school should educate students and let them know the importance of protecting our school environment.Third,we should clear the scribbles and make the walls clean again.I hope my advice can help you.I also hope everyone can try to protect our school.By doing so our school can be a better place to study in.1.Integrating the information2.Using various regular sentence patterns Polishing a composition When walking around the school,we can always notice scribbles on the white walls of the school buildings,which have a bad effect on the beauty of our school environment.Something must be done to solve the problem.First of all,rules are supposed to be made to forbid scribbling anywhere.Second we should educate all the students to raise their awareness of the importance of protecting the school environment.And of course,it is also necessary to clear all the scribbles and make the walls clean again.I do hope my suggestions are helpful and that everyone can do their part to stand up for our school.Only by doing so will our school be a better place for us to study in.Homework1.Polish the composition2.Write a composition