高考英语建议信写作课件材.pptx
Letter of SuggestionsLetter of Suggestions嘉祥一中 马腾作文题目和要求作文题目和要求01审题审题02文本分析文本分析03中国学生写作常见错误分析和解决方法中国学生写作常见错误分析和解决方法04目录目录05优秀范例优秀范例+下水作文下水作文06实践操作实践操作Letter of SuggestionsLetter of Suggestions作文题目和要求作文题目和要求（济宁市第二次模拟考试试题）假定你是李华，你的英国朋友Alex来邮件说他下个月将参加学校Chinese Club组织的“中文诗歌朗诵会”（Chinese Poetry Recital），他已经初步挑选了Dawn of Spring和Saying Good-bye to Cambridge Again两首诗歌，希望你能推荐其中一首。请给他回复邮件，内容包括：1、推荐的诗歌及其理由；2、参赛建议。注意:1词数80左右；2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯审题类型建议信建议信主题为外国朋友推荐中国诗歌参赛和提供参赛建议对象朋友要点1.写信目的2.推荐诗歌，并阐明理由3.参赛建议4.表达祝愿时态一般现在时+一般将来式Alex下个月将参加学校Chinese Club组织的“中文诗歌朗诵会”，他已经初步挑选了两首诗歌，希望你能推荐其中一首background+purposeBeginningBeginning1.Suggestions on the choice as well as your reasons.wishes文本分析BodyBodyEndingEnding2.Suggestions on the competition.BeginningBeginning1.推荐的诗歌及其理由:1.The poem I strongly recommend is.2.As for the two poems,I prefer the former.3.Personally,the former could be a better choice.文本分析BodyBodyEndingEnding二选一的推荐用语：二选一的推荐用语：BeginningBeginning1.推荐的诗歌及其理由:二选一之后，阐述理由有两种思路二选一之后，阐述理由有两种思路文本分析BodyBodyEndingEnding思路一：着重赏析这首诗歌的内容、修辞手法和意境情感思路二：着重突出被选择的这首诗歌的优势Dawn of Spring：the scenery in spring/the rhyme/the affection and cherishSaying Good-bye to Cambridge Again:the scenery in Cambridge/the delicate description/the attachment and memoryDawn of Spring：easier to recite/cause more imaginationSaying Good-bye to Cambridge Again:clearer expression/more vivid descriptionVSBeginningBeginning2.参赛建议:参赛建议有两个方面：参赛建议有两个方面：文本分析BodyBodyEndingEnding一：赛前准备二：赛中心态1.get to know some background information about the chosen poem on books/internet(texts/pictures/videos)2.exercises and practice 1.stay calm 2.stay focused提建议的常用句式：1.If I were you,I would.2.I think it would be more beneficial if you could.3.It seems to me that doing.would make sense.BeginningBeginning1.Knowing that you.,I am writing to give you some suggestions2.I am glad to receive your letter with regard to.here are a few suggestions 文本分析BodyBodyEndingEnding建议信开头常用句式：建议信开头常用句式：1.I do hope you will find these suggestions useful2.Good luck in.建议信结尾常用句式：建议信结尾常用句式：Common Problems on the Letter of Suggestions Common Problems on the Letter of Suggestions Common Problems on the Letter of Suggestions Common Problems on the Letter of Suggestions with the Writings of Chinese Studentswith the Writings of Chinese Studentswith the Writings of Chinese Studentswith the Writings of Chinese Students3 Types of the Common ProblemsLexical InefficiencySyntactical IncompetenceDiscourse FailureUnnecessary repetitionFailure to use1.inanimate subjects2.passive voice1.Thought patterns:spiraling vs linear2.Failure to focus on the topic3 Types of the Common Problems and Solutionslexical inefficiency1 unnecessary repetition2 redundancy学生习作1(推荐诗歌)：As for the poems that you have chosen,i prefer Saying Good-bye to Cambridge Again better to be performed分析问题1：1第一个定语从句犯了多余的毛病，可以用chosen取代2 后面的better to be performed和prefer在语义上是重复的，可以直接删除解决问题1：As for your chosen poems/of the two poems,I prefer Saying Good-bye to Cambridge Again.3 Types of the Common Problems and Solutionssyntactical incompetencefailure to use1.inanimate subjects2.passive voice学生习作2（推荐理由）：Because of its rhythm，you can recite it more emotionally.分析问题2：这一句是想强调诗歌的客观优势，重点应放在诗歌上，在英文中用诗歌做主语可以突出强调诗歌并保持客观。解决问题2：it can be recited with a strong emotion for its rhythm.3 Types of the Common Problems and Solutionsdiscourse failure1.thought pattern:spiraling vs linear学生习作3（建议信开头）：Im glad to know that you will join in chinese poetry recital,which will be held by your school next month.i have know that you have chosen two poems-Dawn of Spring and Saying Good-bye to Cambridge Again and you ask for my suggestions.Here are my suggestions.分析问题3：用了40多字做铺垫，才说清楚自己的写信目的。啰啰嗦是表象，英汉思维差异才是根本原因。在英语中，用开门见山的直线型思维表达出的语言才地道。3 Types of the Common Problems and Solutionsdiscourse failure1.thought pattern:spiraling vs linear解决问题3（建议信开头）：Im glad to know that you will join in chinese poetry recital and I will make some suggestions for your preparation.3 Types of the Common Problems and Solutionsdiscourse failure2.failure to focus on the topic学生习作4（推荐理由）：I would like to choose Dawn of Spring.Li Bai,who is the poems writer,is my favorite poet.His poem is full of romance,which suits his charactor.分析问题4：要想说明白为什么推荐这诗歌，重点要讲述诗歌的美。但该生从春晓引出了对春晓作者的具体描述，这个点的主旨就此跑偏，失去了原本的主题。解决问题4（推荐理由）：I would like to choose Dawn of Spring.The poem,written by my favorite poet-Li Bai,is a representative of romanticism.优秀范例Dear Alex,Im glad to receive your email telling me that you are to participate in the Chinese Poetry Recital.Im writing to recommend one.The poem I strongly recommend is Dawn of Spring written by Meng Haoran,a notable poet of Tang Dynasty.Short as it is,it features the breathtaking scenery after raining on a spring morning.Moreover,it sounds rhyming,making it accessible to Chinese language learners.It makes sense to watch some videos to get deep insights into the Tang Poetry.With abundant preparations and commitment,your performance will be a great success.Good luck to you!Yours，Li Hua下水作文Dear Alex,Knowing that you are to participate in the Chinese Poetry Recital,I am writing to give some advice.As for the two poems,I prefer Saying Good-bye to Cambridge Again written by Xuzhimo.Compared with Dawn of Spring,this well-known modern poem is clearer in expression with its vivid description about Cambridge.Thus,audience are more likely to be evoked by your emotional recitation.Both exploring some experiences of this romantic writer and continuous exercises and practice beforehand will make sense.I do hope you will find my suggestions useful.And good luck.Yours,Li Hua 实践操作假如你是高中生李华,你的美国笔友Jack热爱中国传统文化,最近打算来中国工作生活一段时间,但是不确定应该去往哪个城市,写信向你咨询。请你给他写一封回信,内容包括:1.你推荐的城市及推荐的理由(不少于两条)2.来中国前做准备的建议3.美好祝愿。注意:1词数80左右；2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯THANKS
