读后续写---亲情类课件- 高三英语写作专项突破.pptx
Continuation Writing ill MikeIll Mike When Mike was a seven-year-old kid,his parents usually didnt give him money because he liked to buy junk food.They knew such food would be harmful to kids body.But one day Mike strongly wished to buy such food.He knew he couldnt persuade his parents to give him money to buy it,so he was upset.At noon that day,his mom was having a nap in the bedroom while his dad was working out of the home.Mike suddenly found his moms wallet on the sofa in the living room.Usually,his mom would put the wallet close to her-not this time Mike found a good chance to get money.He thought he could secretly take some from his moms wallet without letting her discover it.Then,he slowly walked towards the wallet and opened it.There was lots of money.Mike took a few coins and walked out of the house,going directly to a store in his community He bought a bag of food that was very peppery and a bottle of iced Coca-cola.Instead of returning home,he hung around outside to enjoy the food and the drink in case his mom discovered it.When he opened the food bag,a strong,hot and sweet smell rushed into his nose.He tasted some:it was delicious.But it was too hot and his mouth seemed to be on fire.However he didnt take notice of it.Minutes later,he ate up the bag of junk food and finished the drink.Then he returned home.His mother was still sleeping.In the afternoon that day,Mike began to feel uncomfortable and wanted to vomit.He felt pain in his stomach.At first,he could stand it.However,finally,he couldnt bear it anymore and told his mom that he felt sick.But Mike didnt tell his mom the truth that he had some hot junk food.Not knowing what was wrong with Mike,his mom was worried.Para1:She hurried to drive him to the hospital._Para 2:Mike realized he should admit what he had done._01融洽度高5个以上关键词150字左右Mukbang(吃播)Do you think it is a healthy eating habit？What are the possible negative consequences for the eating habit？Lead in Discussillfattystomachachevomit02融洽度高衔接合理5个以上关键词150字左右Read for the Theme and the Conflict(s)Healthy eating&_Parents_ and kids_to unhealthy foodhonesty opposition ParentsMikedidnt give money to buy junk foodstrongly wished to buy junk foodsecretly take some from his moms wallet bought a bag of food.hung around outside to enjoy the food.didnt take notice of itaddiction addiction ill MikeConflictTCExposition(情节交代情节交代)Rising action(conflict激化激化)Climax(conflict最大化最大化/turning point转折点转折点)Falling action(conflict缓延缓延)Solution(conflict解开解开)Mike seMike secretly cretly take some moneytake some money from his from his moms wallet without letting her discover moms wallet without letting her discover it it.Mikes Mikes parents parents usually usually didnt didnt give give him him moneymoney because because he he liked liked to to buy junk foodbuy junk foodParagraph 1:She hurried to drive him to the hospital.Paragraph 2:Mike realized he should admit what he had done.Theme:heathy diet&honestyConflict:Parents opposition and kids addition to junk foodMike;mom;discover;wrong;tell.Mike;mom;discover;tell;wrong;truth,home,wallet,money.charactersactionsscenes/eventsMike;mom money;wallet;home;truth;wrong discover;enjoy;tell 2KMike Mike felt felt sicksick and and told told his his mother mother his his uncomfortable physical problems.uncomfortable physical problems.03融洽度高衔接合理5个以上关键词结构紧凑150字左右Predict for Possible Continuous Plots Paragraph 1:She hurried to drive him to the hospital.句(承上)句句句句(启下)Paragraph 2:Mike realized he should admit what he had done.Characters?On the way to the hospital,Mikes feeling or actions?Moms feeling or actions?After arriving at the hospital,what did Mike do or say?what did the doctor do and say?On the way back home,Mikes feeling?Why?在去医院的路上，在去医院的路上，MikeMike吐了，他感到更难受了吐了，他感到更难受了看到看到MikeMike这么难受，他的妈妈非常担心，虽然察觉到了一些事，但并这么难受，他的妈妈非常担心，虽然察觉到了一些事，但并没有立刻质问他没有立刻质问他当看医生的时候，迈克告诉了医生出了什么问题当看医生的时候，迈克告诉了医生出了什么问题医生给医生给MikeMike检查了身体，开了点药，并安慰道，不需太要担心检查了身体，开了点药，并安慰道，不需太要担心在回家的路上在回家的路上,看到妈妈仍然面露担忧，看到妈妈仍然面露担忧，MikeMike感到非常内感到非常内疚疚5C04融洽度高衔接合理5个以上关键词结构紧凑150字左右Draft,Translate and Polish句(承上)句句句句(启下)在去医院的路上，在去医院的路上，MikeMike吐了吐了(threw up)(threw up)，他感到更难受了，他感到更难受了.Paragraph 1:She hurried to drive him to the hospital词汇的词汇的准确性准确性和和丰富性丰富性语法结构和句式语法结构和句式多样化多样化看到看到MikeMike这么难受，他的妈妈非常担心，虽然察觉到了一些事，但并没有这么难受，他的妈妈非常担心，虽然察觉到了一些事，但并没有立刻质问他立刻质问他 当看医生的时候，迈克告诉了医生出了什么问题当看医生的时候，迈克告诉了医生出了什么问题医生给医生给MikeMike检查检查(check on)(check on)了身体，开了点药，并安慰道，不需太要担心了身体，开了点药，并安慰道，不需太要担心在回家的路上在回家的路上,看到妈妈仍然面露担忧，看到妈妈仍然面露担忧，MikeMike感到非常内感到非常内疚疚On the way toOn the way to the hospital,Mike threw up,the hospital,Mike threw up,feelingfeeling even worse.even worse.On the way to+地点，“在去.的路上”非谓语动词的使用04融洽度高衔接合理5个以上关键词150字左右Paragraph 1:She hurried to drive him to the hospital句：看到看到MikeMike这么难受，他的妈妈非常担心，虽然察觉到了一些事，但并没这么难受，他的妈妈非常担心，虽然察觉到了一些事，但并没有立刻质问他。有立刻质问他。Seeing Seeing the the severely severely ill ill Mike,Mike,his his mom mom was was increasinglyincreasingly worried.worried.Although Although aware aware ofof something something wrong wrong with with Mike,Mike,she she didnt didnt question him question him immediatelyimmediately at that moment.at that moment.非谓语动词的使用be aware of.意识到.，察觉到.副词的使用：increasingly adv.愈发地immediately adv.立刻,马上Draft,Translate and Polish04融洽度高Paragraph 1:She hurried to drive him to the hospital句：当看医生的时候，迈克告诉了医生出了什么问题当看医生的时候，迈克告诉了医生出了什么问题WhenWhen seeing a doctor,Mike told the doctor seeing a doctor,Mike told the doctor whatwhat was troubling was troubling him.him.时间状语从句Draft,Translate and Polish句：到医院后，医生给到医院后，医生给MikeMike检查了身体，开了点药，并安慰道，不需太要担心检查了身体，开了点药，并安慰道，不需太要担心Having Having checked on checked on Mikes healthy condition,the doctor Mikes healthy condition,the doctor gave some medicine and comforted them,gave some medicine and comforted them,saying saying that they that they didnt need to worry too much.didnt need to worry too much.非谓语动词的使用：having done,强调事件发生的先后顺序 doing，表主动，同时check on 检查，核实宾语从句04融洽度高衔接合理150字左右Paragraph 1:She hurried to drive him to the hospitalOn the way back home,seeingOn the way back home,seeing the worry still hung on his the worry still hung on his moms face,Mike felt even more guilty.moms face,Mike felt even more guilty.句：在回家的路上在回家的路上,看到妈妈仍然面露担忧，看到妈妈仍然面露担忧，MikeMike感到非常内疚。感到非常内疚。SoSo guilty guilty waswas Mike that he lowered his head when seeing Mike that he lowered his head when seeing moms worry still hung on the face moms worry still hung on the face all the way back homeall the way back home.非谓语动词的使用倒装结构的使用V1V2Draft,Translate and Polish05融洽度高衔接合理5个以上关键词结构紧凑150字左右Possible VersionParagraph 1:She hurried to drive him to the hospital On On the the way way toto the the hospital,hospital,Mike Mike threw threw up,up,feelingfeeling even even worse.worse.Seeing Seeing the the severely severely ill ill Mike,Mike,his his mom mom was was increasinglyincreasingly worried.worried.Although Although aware aware ofof something something wrong wrong with with Mike,Mike,she she didnt didnt question question him him immediatelyimmediately at at that that moment.moment.When When seeing seeing a a doctor,doctor,Mike Mike told told the the doctor doctor what what was was troubling troubling him.him.Having Having checked checked on on Mikes Mikes healthy healthy condition,condition,the the doctor doctor gave gave some some medicine medicine and and comforted comforted them,them,saying saying that that they they didnt didnt need need to to worry worry too too muchmuch.Then Then they they left left and and went went home.home.On On the the way way back back home,home,seeingseeing the the worry worry still still hung hung on on his his moms moms face,face,Mike felt even more guilty.Mike felt even more guilty.06融洽度高Conclusion&Continuous Writing for Para 2 non-predicate verbs doing/done/having done（非谓语动词的使用）（非谓语动词的使用）adverbial/object clause（状语（状语/宾语从句的使用）宾语从句的使用）inverted sentences（倒装结构的使用）（倒装结构的使用）with（复合结构的使用）（复合结构的使用）adj.（形容词作状语的使用）（形容词作状语的使用）adv.（副词程度词的使用）（副词程度词的使用）.CK251 ApproachTips for sentence patterns and wordsaccurate&vividContinuation 承上启下（段首句 续写协同效应）Key words 关键词（利于编设情节的关键词）2=theme+conflict（主题+矛盾）5=five points(5个要点 150词数)1=one good ending（呼应主题：正能量）
