开放作文写作方法-初中英语作文写作教学课件.ppt

高考开放作文评分标准高考开放作文评分标准第一档第一档 13-15 13-15分分完全完全完成完成试题规定的任试题规定的任务。务。内容内容充实充实,体现了活跃体现了活跃的的思维思维和清晰的和清晰的逻辑逻辑；交际得体交际得体,表达时充分表达时充分考虑到了考虑到了交际对象的需交际对象的需求求；语法或用词方面有语法或用词方面有个个别错误别错误，但为尽可能表，但为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；体达丰富的内容所致；体现了较强的语言运用能现了较强的语言运用能力。力。第二档第二档 9-12 9-12分分基本基本完成完成试题规定试题规定的任务。的任务。内容、逻辑和交内容、逻辑和交际等方面际等方面基本符合基本符合要求要求；所用语法和词汇所用语法和词汇满足了任务的要求满足了任务的要求；语法用词方面语法用词方面有有一些错误一些错误，但，但不影不影响理解响理解。第三档第三档 4-8 4-8分分未恰当未恰当完成完成试题规定试题规定的任务。的任务。表达表达未能切题未能切题；所用词汇所用词汇有限有限，语，语法或用词方面的法或用词方面的错误错误影响影响了对写作内容的了对写作内容的理解理解；第四档第四档 1-3 1-3分分未未完成完成试题规定的任试题规定的任务。务。写了写了少量相关少量相关内容内容；语法或用词方面的语法或用词方面的错误较多，严重影响错误较多，严重影响了对写内容的了对写内容的理解理解。Points that make a good composition 内容充实内容充实思维活跃，思维活跃，逻辑清晰逻辑清晰 交际得体，考虑交际对象需求交际得体，考虑交际对象需求表达方式丰富，错误较少表达方式丰富，错误较少4分分:对图片仅有非常简单的描述，讨论部分能对图片仅有非常简单的描述，讨论部分能看出一些与描述的相关性，但逻辑比较混乱。看出一些与描述的相关性，但逻辑比较混乱。As is seen in the picture.A pen is running.But the circle instrument is appreciate himself.This picture seeds is thinking a lot.Nowadays more and more people only appreciate themselves but ignor other ones effort.We should learn from other people.The harder we study,the more we learn,we should keep ourself advance as long as possible.Everyone have advantage.I should study each other.6 分分:虽然文章给人第一印象不错虽然文章给人第一印象不错,但细看之下但细看之下,描述与描述与讨论之间关系松散讨论之间关系松散,且讨论部分逻辑上有前后矛盾的方且讨论部分逻辑上有前后矛盾的方面面 In the picture,there is a pencil drawing a straight line and there is a circle drawer drawing a circle.It seems that the stright line is very hard to draw and the circle is very easy.I think we can get a lesson from the picture that different person has different ability,and we shouldnt judge all the people only one method.When we try to judge a person whether he is good,we shouldnt only see the thing he does,but also think if he is doing his best.The most important thing for a person is that he will try his best to do whatever he has to.The harder we work,the better we get.So,we should pay more attention to the hard working people and cheer for them.6分分:解释部分与描述部分之间的逻辑联系不够解释部分与描述部分之间的逻辑联系不够紧密，且语言表述不够清楚。紧密，且语言表述不够清楚。What an interesting picture!In the picture,we can see that a pencil keep drawing hard and a circler only draws a circle but is proud of itself.We can learn a lot form the picture.I think we should do more,like the saying goes.“No pains,no gains”.Only we do things can we get what we want.And at the same time,wed better not think highly of ourselves.Thats a good way for us on not only our study and work,but also our lives.8分分:图片描写基本清楚图片描写基本清楚,论述部分与描写部分之间没有论述部分与描写部分之间没有令人信服的有机逻辑联系令人信服的有机逻辑联系,理解比较牵强理解比较牵强,但考虑到语言但考虑到语言质量还可以质量还可以,因此给出第三档的中上分数。因此给出第三档的中上分数。As can be seen from the picture,the modern math tool is drawing the circle easily and the traditonal pencil is running to draw the lines with sweat falling from its face.I think this picture reflects an unusual social phenomenon that people with modern knowledge can solve problems in a more effective may and are more welcomed by the companies.I think it attempts to tell us that possessing and stubburn method can not keep the pace of the society.As far as Im concerned,in order to meet the need of society,we must learn knowledge as much as we can from now on.Only in this way,can we be the leader of the society.8分分:对图片有基本清楚地描写，与下文的讨论之间有一对图片有基本清楚地描写，与下文的讨论之间有一定联系，但讨论部分语言表达不够清楚，且过于简单。定联系，但讨论部分语言表达不够清楚，且过于简单。As is shown from the picture,there are two tools which we often use them.one is used to draw circles and the other one is used to draw everything.The one which is used to draw circles id proud of its perfect circles.And the other one is making its great effort to draw lines.In my opinion,the one draws circles like someone who is always satisfied with their things and the other one likes someone who never gives up and makes his effort to reach better.I have learned a lot from the picture that we should make our effort to do everything although we have got a little mark in some areas.Dont be addicted to the great past.10分分:对图片有基本描述，但描述与讨论之间没有自然对图片有基本描述，但描述与讨论之间没有自然过渡，后文的观点显得突兀。过渡，后文的观点显得突兀。As we can see from the picture,theres a pencil runing ahead,leaving long lines behind and theres another tool drawing circles and being proud of itself.This pictures really meaningful,I think the pencil stands for hard-working people while the tool is for lazy bones.Hard-working people stand on earth.They never stop and are productive and useful.They make contribution to our society and make our country stronger.But the lazy people just know how to relax and entertain themselves.They are useless and have negtive effect on our society.I prefer hard working people to lazy people.So although the NMET is over,we should still keep learning.Only in that way can we become hardworking and truly make a difference.As can be seen in the picture,there are two kinds of tool for drawing.The first one which can draw a perfect circle seems to be proud of him.The second one,looks like a pencle,keeps running roundly and draw a long line.This reflects a common phenomenon in our society.There exist many people who are satisfied with what they have now and remain the same instead of going ahead.On the contrary,some people are always ready for the new challenges and keep working hard.Obviously,these people can make greater contribution to the society.I think the picture is trying to tell us to be the second kinds of people,just like the pencle.The12分分:对图片有基本清楚地描述，且描述与下文对图片有基本清楚地描述，且描述与下文讨论之间有相对自然有机的联系，但讨论部分有讨论之间有相对自然有机的联系，但讨论部分有的地方逻辑有点牵强。的地方逻辑有点牵强。more we work,the greater progress we will make,its no doubt that we can not make any difference if we keep stepping at the same place.Whether we can achieve our goal depends on what effort we will make,so lets work like the pencle.13分分:图片描述清楚，议论部分与描述部分有机图片描述清楚，议论部分与描述部分有机自然地结合，且论述比较充分语言流畅，无严重自然地结合，且论述比较充分语言流畅，无严重影响表达意思的错句。影响表达意思的错句。dont know how to do,just like the tool used in drawing circles,he can never draw a square that easily.While those“silly”people,though with great,can achieve their dreams in many subjects because of their self-awareness and perseverance(坚持坚持).Just like the little pencil,who can draw various shapes.So dont be proud when you can do something well.Be patient and work hard,youll achieve more goals,especially in studying.In this picture,a tool,specially designed for drawing circles,easily draw a circle on the paper,taking pride in itself.While with sweat dropping down,a pencil tries arduously but persistently to draw a large square.The picture indicates that pride limits our ability.When we are proud of own advantages,we become reluctant(不情愿的)to better ourselves.As a consequence,our potential and ability stop accumulating(积累积累),but remain where they were.However,once we cast aside the pride and continue cultivating(培养培养)our ability,well realize how much knowledge there is waiting for us to obtain.Thats why many famous people never stop learning,ever though they have achieved countless achievements.One possible version In the picture I can see a pair of proud compasses and a hard-working pencil.The compasses are big,drawing a circle with ease,while the pencil is small,drawing a line with great efforts.I think the compasses are reasonable to be proud because no one else can do the job better.At the same time,however,he should realize the pencil has his own advantages.The pencil can do other shapes better than the compasses,even pictures.So in my opinion,while we are confident in ourselves,we should recognize strengths in others and show proper respect for them.强调强调切题切题和和逻辑性逻辑性评分时最重要的一点是评分时最重要的一点是describe和和explain之之间不能分家间不能分家，要有，要有有机的逻辑上的联系有机的逻辑上的联系切切题与否？与否？问题：写写图与与议论无无联系系 逻辑上上牵强 叙述叙述简单，与理解形不成清晰的，与理解形不成清晰的逻辑 不写不写图 讲故事故事 只只讲一方（一方（对图理解没有全局性），没能理解没有全局性），没能 看到两者看到两者间的的联系系