【读后续写】2018年6月份浙江省新高考读后续写课件.pptx

2018年年6月份浙江省新高考月份浙江省新高考读读后后续续写写叙事类记叙文读后续写写作技巧思维导图续写六要素续写六要素时间，地点，人物（一致）时间，地点，人物（一致）情节（完整性，合理性）：情节（完整性，合理性）：事情的起因事情的起因事情的经过事情的经过事情的结果事情的结果场景描写场景描写心理描写心理描写动作描写动作描写人物描写人物描写有效对话有效对话内容一致：照应内容一致：照应关联关联词汇复现词汇复现结尾：结尾：哲理式结尾（立意）哲理式结尾（立意）自然结尾自然结尾情感结尾情感结尾以景结情以景结情写作手法写作手法 Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydadsfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze(吃草吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasntgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.Dontbelateforsupper,UnclePaulcried,andkeeptothetracksothatyoudontgetlost!OK!mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.201806浙江高考如何读？如何读？InterpretationoftheText文本解读AstoryhowwherewhenwhywhowhatUnclePaulInterpretationoftheText文本解读(Who)brotherIDadStep1:解读前文解读前文一：体裁_ 人称_ 时态 _二：5WWho:_When:_Where:_What is the main idea of each paragraph?(sb did sth)Why:_Lesson：_Para1Para2Para3Para4My dad took me a vacation to the Wild West in summer.My dads friend,Uncle Paul took us to his farm.I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horse on the farm.In the afternoon,my father and I rode a horse towards the mountain.记叙文第一人称过去式My dad,Uncle Paul and IOne summerOn Uncle Paul s farm houseWe came across a little rabbit and got lost because it was dark.Keep calm no matter what happened.InterpretationoftheText文本解读(When)(background)onesummerday(background)onesummerday(Para.1)Para.1)(the1stday)inthelateafternoon,spentthe(the1stday)inthelateafternoon,spentthenightnight(Para.2)(Para.2)(the2ndday)veryearlyinthemorning,afterthe(the2ndday)veryearlyinthemorning,afterthebreakfast,intheafternoon,afterawhilebreakfast,intheafternoon,afterawhile(Para.3)(Para.3)InterpretationoftheText文本解读(How)故事情故事情故事情故事情节线节线节线节线：根据以上的：根据以上的：根据以上的：根据以上的时间线时间线时间线时间线，我，我，我，我们们们们可以梳理出各个可以梳理出各个可以梳理出各个可以梳理出各个时间时间时间时间点的点的点的点的故事情故事情故事情故事情节节节节。大背景：父大背景：父大背景：父大背景：父亲带亲带亲带亲带一家人去一家人去一家人去一家人去UnclePaulUnclePaul的的的的农场过农场过农场过农场过暑假。暑假。暑假。暑假。第一天：下午第一天：下午第一天：下午第一天：下午uncleuncle到机到机到机到机场场场场接我接我接我接我们们们们，晚上在，晚上在，晚上在，晚上在农场农场农场农场听青蛙叫和潺潺听青蛙叫和潺潺听青蛙叫和潺潺听青蛙叫和潺潺的水声。的水声。的水声。的水声。第二天：一早吃第二天：一早吃第二天：一早吃第二天：一早吃过过过过早早早早饭饭饭饭，体，体，体，体验验验验了了了了农场农场农场农场的生活，和的生活，和的生活，和的生活，和TinaTina一起喂一起喂一起喂一起喂鸡鸡鸡鸡，看着父看着父看着父看着父亲亲亲亲和和和和uncleuncle一起放羊，同一起放羊，同一起放羊，同一起放羊，同时时时时看到父看到父看到父看到父亲骑马觉亲骑马觉亲骑马觉亲骑马觉得很酷，也想得很酷，也想得很酷，也想得很酷，也想试试试试一一一一试试试试。在。在。在。在“我我我我”的的的的请请请请求之下，父求之下，父求之下，父求之下，父亲亲亲亲答答答答应应应应陪陪陪陪“我我我我”一起去一起去一起去一起去骑马骑马骑马骑马。出。出。出。出发发发发前，前，前，前，uncleuncle叮嘱叮嘱叮嘱叮嘱“我我我我们们们们”要沿着足迹走并在晚要沿着足迹走并在晚要沿着足迹走并在晚要沿着足迹走并在晚饭饭饭饭前赶回来，不然会迷路。前赶回来，不然会迷路。前赶回来，不然会迷路。前赶回来，不然会迷路。于是，于是，于是，于是，“我我我我”和父和父和父和父亲亲亲亲就出就出就出就出发发发发了。了。了。了。Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读(G-N策略）1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para.1Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.GivenInformationIaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andheIaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.saidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.（Para.4)Para.4)Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）NewInformationWhatwastherabbitlike?Whatwasmyreactiontotherabbit?Whatwouldweseewhilechasingtherabbit?Whathappenednext?1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para.1Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para.2We have no idea where we were and it got dark.Intheafternoon,.ificouldtakeaIntheafternoon,.ificouldtakeahorseridehorseride.(Para.4)GivenInformationInterpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）NewInformationHowdidIfeelandwhatdidDadreact?Didwefindthewayout?How?Whomaycometoourrescue?Howaboutthesurroundingsinthedarkness?1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para.2We had no idea where we were and it got dark.2.Interpretationofunderlinedwords下划线词解读：dad,UnclePaul,farmhouse,river,feed,sheep,late,track,getlost,sightInterpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读划线词和续写首句解读Characters 人物类dad,Uncle Paul,sheep,Places 地点类farm house,river,trackTime 时间类lateAction动作类feed,get lost,sight如何写？UnclePaul Interpretationofwritingideas写作思路解读 1Ihadtoldussuggested,unexpectedlyreceivinghispromptagreement wasalsostunnedbythisspecialrabbit,gawkingatitmotionlesslyDadTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表达微技能：之之环境描写篇环境描写篇读后续写的语言表达要生动形象，离不开对人物动作的准确描写，情绪、神态的生动刻画，以及环境的渲染烘托。特别是环境的描写，它服务于文章的主题和人物刻画，不仅给读者一种身临其境的感受，有时候还可以推动故事情节的发展，烘托人物的心理活动，让文本的语言更丰富，读者的体验更深刻。真可谓“一切景语皆情语”（王国维）。借景抒情、寓情于景是写作中常用的手法。环境描写也可分为客观环境和主观环境。这里主要聚焦客观环境（自然环境）的描写。1.描述天气的形容词stormy,warm,hot,rainy,cloudy,snowy,windy,foggy,misty,frosty,damp,wet,humid,freezingcold,clear,changeable,wild,moderate,calm,terrible,awful,sweltering2.天气描述的名词fog,snow,drizzle,lightrain,shower,storm,downpour,blizzard,snowstorm,thunder,typhoon,tornado,hurricaneTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表达微技能：表达微技能：之之环环境描写篇境描写篇3.自然环境词块(在一般的自然环境的词前加入描述性的词，让环境描写更加具体)high/steep/snowed-cappedmountains/hillsgrand/wide/deep/lowvalleyrunning/shallow/deepwater/stream/creekspectacularsunriseandsettingsunthethunderingcloudsthefragile/fragrantflowersthedark,rainingeveningthegreengrassthefragrantrosesTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表达微技能：表达微技能：之之环环境描写篇境描写篇如何得高分？Haveatry牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换1.1.受到惊吓，马突然跑了起来，跑的如此之快，以至于我受到惊吓，马突然跑了起来，跑的如此之快，以至于我什么也看不见只能听见风在耳边呼啸。什么也看不见只能听见风在耳边呼啸。_Frightened by the rabbit,the horse began to race.It ran so fast that I could hardly see anything but heard the wind whistling in my ear2.时间一点点过去，夜幕开始降临，天空开始出现一闪闪的星星，同情地看着我们。_As time went by,the night began to fall and the stars appeared in the sky,twinkling their eye at us with sympathy.4.随着太阳下山，天色渐暗，岩石和松柏都看不清了。随着太阳下山，天色渐暗，岩石和松柏都看不清了。_当黑暗追逐着最后一丝阳光，那些岩石和松柏也渐渐被夜色吞噬。当黑暗追逐着最后一丝阳光，那些岩石和松柏也渐渐被夜色吞噬。_5.随着夜幕的降临，风吹得我有点冷。随着夜幕的降临，风吹得我有点冷。_当黑夜笼罩了大山，风开始吹得冻骨了。当黑夜笼罩了大山，风开始吹得冻骨了。_3.时间一点点过去，夜幕开始降临，天空开始出现一闪闪的星星，同情地看着我时间一点点过去，夜幕开始降临，天空开始出现一闪闪的星星，同情地看着我们。们。_As time went by,the night began to fall and the stars appeared in the sky,twinkling their eye at us with sympathy.As the sun set,it was getting darker and I could hardly see the rocks and pine trees clearly.As the darkness was chasing the last ray of daylight,the brown rocks and deep pine trees were swallowed by the night.As the night fell,I felt a bit cold when the wind blew.When the darkness enveloped/ruled the mountain,the wind began to creep into our bones.7.更糟糕的是，更糟糕的是，树林里开始起雾了，周围的一切都被蒙上了一层纱，这无疑增加树林里开始起雾了，周围的一切都被蒙上了一层纱，这无疑增加我们的困难，让我们更加无助。我们的困难，让我们更加无助。_6.为了取暖，父亲生了一堆火。一切万籁俱寂，只有呼呼的风声和噼噼啪啪的火为了取暖，父亲生了一堆火。一切万籁俱寂，只有呼呼的风声和噼噼啪啪的火苗声相伴。苗声相伴。_To keep warm,father built a campfire.Everything was in silence,only the howling of the wind and the flames of the fire for company.Whats worse,fog crept in without being noticed.Everything around us was veiled,which undoubtedly added to our difficulty and left us even more helplessPossibleversion1Paragraph1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.“Whatalovelyrabbit!”Ishoutedwitheyesglitteringwithterrificexcitement.ItwasquitedifferentfromthoseIsawinourcity,thusimmediatelystimulatingmyinterest.Dadwasalsostunnedbythisspecialrabbit,gawkingatitmotionlessly.“Dad,letscatchitasourpet!”Isuggested,unexpectedlyreceivinghispromptagreement.EntirelyforgettingwhatUnclePaulhadtoldus,wechasedafterthatprettyrabbit,franticwithrapture.Unfortunately,socleverandswiftwasitthatitdisappearedintheforestbeforelong.Notuntilthendidwerealizethatthelastrayoftwilightwasquicklydisappearingamongthenumeroustreesandwecouldntfindourtrackatall!Wedidgetlost.Possibleversion1Paragraph2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Thebone-chillingwindhowledfiercelylikeawolf,makingthedarknessevenmoresuffocating.“Dad,whatcanwedo?”Ithrewmyarmsaroundhimtightly,quiveringandseizedbystarkhorror.“Allisgoingwell!”Dadansweredinagentlevoice,calmandmollified.Wewanderedinthescaryforestanddidntknowwhathorriblethingswouldhappentous,hopingtofindthewayback.Suddenly,weheardthesoundofwaterrollingdowntheriver.Wewereoverthemoonanddecidedtofollowtheriver.Afterawhile,weheardthefamiliarsoundofsheepandthencaughtsightofthefarmhouse.Thefamilywerewaitingforusinthedistance.Seeingthis,aradiantsmilelitupbothofourfaces.评点：光线的消退暗示了时间的流逝和黑夜的到来，推动了故事情节的发展，与下文的getting dark衔接；bone-chilling,scary,horrible词的运用以及比喻修辞的运用，渲染了阴森恐怖的气氛，也烘托了主人公内心的害怕、恐惧；同时，河流和羊的声音也为故事的结局提供了线索和出路，给故事画上了圆满的句号。Possibleversion2Paragraph1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Myhorsewassoafraidthatitbeganrunningferociously.Icouldfeeltheairhittingmyfaceheavilyandhearmydadshystericalcryfromadistance.Myheartwaspumpingwildlyandmybloodwaspulsingthroughmyveins.Ipulledbackthereins,distractedthehorseandtriedeverymeanstostopthehorsebutinvain.Afterwhatseemedaneternity,mydadcaughtupwithmebreathlesslyandmanagedtostopmyhorse.Butwefoundthatwewereindistress,withnotrackbesideus.Possibleversion2Paragraph2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Theriverbesideuswasstillandsereneunderthelastrayofsunshinebutwedidnthavethemoodtoenjoyit.Suddenly,itoccurredtousthattherewasalsoarivernearbythefarmhouse.Realizingtherivermaybeaguideback,ourspiritssoaredandwebegantotrotbrisklyalongtheriver.Justafewminuteslater,catchingsightofthesilhouetteofthehouse,Ifeltafeelingofreliefandrelaxationsurgedthroughme.IcouldpictureUnclePaulssmilingfaceandourdelicioussupperandIthoughttomyselfthatourbeinglostaddedaspecialtastetomyadventurousvacationwhichIwouldrememberallmylife.评点：这篇文章的环境描写较少，但是出现的几句却在文章里起到了画龙点睛的作用。比如空气击打着脸充分表现了马跑之快和当时情况的紧急。河流的平静和作者内心的不平静形成对比，凸显了主人公迷路后的焦虑不安，后来农场房子的出现又让主人公顿时柳暗花明。因此，不难发现这些环境描写看似漫不经心，其实在推动故事情节的展开，并和主人公的言行和心理息息相关。人物描写；场景描写；人物描写；场景描写；心理描写；动作描写；有效对话；心理描写；动作描写；有效对话；细节描写：细节描写：文中的细节描写：文中的细节描写：场景描写：场景描写：1.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.2.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.场景描写：场景描写：1.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.2.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.心理描写：心理描写：IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.动作描写：动作描写：MydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.有效对话：有效对话：Dontbelateforsupper,UnclePaulcried,andkeeptothetracksothatyoudontgetlost!OK!修辞：修辞：Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.Step2：分类划线关键词：分类划线关键词Characters:_Noun:_Verb:_Adj/Adv_Dad,Uncle PaulFarm house,river,sheep,track,sightFeed,get lostlateStep3：Considertheplotdevelopmentswithquestions（情节推理）（情节推理）dad,Uncle Paul,farm house,river,sheep,track,sight,feed,late,get lostPara1:Suddenly,alittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhouse.1.Seeing the running rabbit,how did the writer or the horse feel/react?2.How did the writers father react to the writers situation?3.How did they get lost?What was their feelings about being lost?Para2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.1.When they got lost,what were their feelings?2.What difficulties did they meet?How to overcome them?3.How could P2 be ended reasonably and happily?step4读后续写模式之读后续写模式之八法八法（1）情绪：消极情绪（有时积极）情绪：消极情绪（有时积极）（2）细节：进一步解释描写）细节：进一步解释描写（3）转折：个人的努力或借助外界）转折：个人的努力或借助外界（4）转机转机：事情似乎有了转机，并抱有希望，感：事情似乎有了转机，并抱有希望，感到欣慰到欣慰（5）失望：但是问题还是没有解决或出现了新问）失望：但是问题还是没有解决或出现了新问题题（6）新法新法：突然有了一个想法（一句话说明这个：突然有了一个想法（一句话说明这个想法）想法）（7）结局：过了一段时间；事情有了最后的转折）结局：过了一段时间；事情有了最后的转折（8）总结：点题，呼应前文）总结：点题，呼应前文Paragraph 1:Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.续写思路1.It was so quick that my horse was scared.A wave of nervousness swept over me especially when the horse ran like crazy.（情绪）2.My heart pounding and my palms sweating,an inner voice told me that I had to calm down.（细节：进一步解释描写）3.Though in a panic,I plucked my courage to pull on the reins.（转折：个人努力）4.Luckily,it didnt take long before I settled down the horse.（转机：成功，希望来了）5.Just at that moment,Dad ran over,gasping for air.（失望：但是问题还是没有解决或出现了新问题）有效对话（衔接）6.“Boy,we are way off the track.”He said seriously,a look of concern spreading across his face.Paragraph 2:We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.续写续写思路思路1.Hungry and frustrated,we tried to find a way out but in vain.I called hard and loudly,but the only answer was the rustling of the wind in the trees.(努力失败努力失败)2.Suddenly dad said,“Do you hear the river nearby?We can back along it”（突然有了办（突然有了办法）法）(修辞手法修辞手法)3.Unexpectedly,the river brought us to the familiar track at last.（开始做）（开始做）4.After what seemed two hours,Uncle Pauls farm house did come into sight.（成功了）（成功了）5.My fathers face brightened up,so did mine.How wise my dad was!（感受）（感受）6.Keep calm no matter what happened,then you can overcome everythingthats what I learned from.哲理结尾6.We eventually heard the familiar frogs，and saw the comforting sight of the old farm house.自然结尾6.What a thrilling but memorable experience it was.情感结尾6.As we got closer we saw Uncle Paul in the yard with a flashlight waving us over.At that moment,all of us burst into a sweet smile.以景结情(总结总结)1.It was so quick that my horse was scared.A wave of nervousness swept over me especially when the horse ran like crazy.2.My heart pounding and my palms sweating,an inner voice told me that I had to calm down.3.Though in a panic,I plucked my courage to pull on the reins.4.Luckily,it didnt take long before I settled down the horse.5.Just at that moment,Dad ran over,gasping for air.6.“Boy,we are away from the(keeptothetrack)track.”He said seriously,a look of concern spreading across his face.1.Hungry and frustrated,we tried to find a way out but in vain.I called hard and loudly,but the only answer was the rustling of the wind in the trees.(the deep green pipe trees)2.Suddenly dad said,“Do you hear the river nearby?We can back along it”3.Unexpectedly,the river brought us to the familiar track at last.4.After what seemed two hours,Uncle Pauls farm house did come into sight.(his farm out of sight)5.My fathers face brightened up,so did mine.How wise my dad was!6.Keep calm no matter what happened,then you can overcome everythingthats what I learned from.照应，关联，词汇复现照应，关联，词汇复现随堂演练PPT2021-9-10一、翻译下列词或词块。（每题一、翻译下列词或词块。（每题3分，共分，共36分）分）1.潺潺的水声_2.呼呼的风声_3.刺骨的风_4.恐怖的森林_5.最后的一缕阳光_6.风在耳边呼啸_7.被黑夜吞噬_8.黑夜笼罩了大山_9.夜幕降临_10.一切都被蒙上了纱_11.