如何让你的作文瞬间变得“高大上”分析.ppt

如何让你作文瞬间变得如何让你作文瞬间变得“高大上高大上”?How to polish our sentences?1.要点可适当整合，用一个句子表达要点可适当整合，用一个句子表达。1)姓名：钱学森姓名：钱学森 出生年月出生年月：1911年年 出生地：上海出生地：上海 被誉为被誉为“中国航天之父中国航天之父”2)纽约中央公园位于曼哈顿的中央。面积为纽约中央公园位于曼哈顿的中央。面积为340万平方万平方米米。QianXuesen,_“father of Chinas space program”,was born in 1911 in Shanghai.Central park,_ the centre of Manhattan,covers an area of 3.4 million square metres.regarded as located in 3)Many students spend a lot of time playing computer games.Its a waste of time and energy.Many students spend a lot of time playing computer games,_.which is a waste of time and energy_,they participate in programs that help society.setting out to YunnanTo stand out2)They want to stand out,so they participate in programs that help society.Before _,we were very excited.2.运用非谓语动词，使句子更简洁，更有文采运用非谓语动词，使句子更简洁，更有文采。1）Before we set out to Yunnan,we were very excited.3)The film is set in the ancient China.It is worth seeing.4)When you face difficulty,you should never give up.The film _ is worth seeing.set in the ancient ChinaWhen facing difficulty _,you should never give up._,they were frightened.When trapped in the liftThey dont know what _.to do next.5)They were frightened,when they were trapped in the lift.6)They dont know what they shall do next.7)After they settled in the city,they began to hunt for jobs._,they began to hunt for jobs.Having settled in the city3.运用运用with结构，使句子更加简洁生动。结构，使句子更加简洁生动。1)Since elvas photo album is coming out this month,teens talked with her about her career and life.2)Our society is developing,different modern news media have come into being.With_,teens talked with her about her career and life.With_,different modern news media have come into being.Elvas photo album coming out this month the development of our society4.借助介词或介词短语巧妙衔接句子。借助介词或介词短语巧妙衔接句子。1)Because the Internet is developing quickly,I can talk to my friends far away.2)Youd better take your own cups and chopsticks.You mustnt use paper cups._,I can talk to my friends far away.Youd better take your own cups and chopsticks _.Thanks to the internet instead of using paper cups5.运用恰当的连接词（并列连词、从属连词、和连接运用恰当的连接词（并列连词、从属连词、和连接副词），增强句子间的逻辑性和紧凑性。副词），增强句子间的逻辑性和紧凑性。1)Newyork city is a fantasy world.You can do almost anything there.2)Pauls nickname is cp3.He established the cp3 foundation in 2005.Newyork city is a fantasy world_you can do almost anythingPaul_ nickname is cp3 established the cp3 foundation in 2005.whosewhere4)The journey is tough,but I will never give up.apart from/besides/as well as/although/even though/even if/meanwhile/so/however/also _,I will never give up.No matter how tough it is6.巧用倒装句、感叹句、强调句等，增强语意。巧用倒装句、感叹句、强调句等，增强语意。1)He knew little that five years later he would be playing alongside his childhod hero.2)People will begin to understand something about copyright protection only when people have to pay.Little_ that five years later he would be playing alongside his childhod hero.Only when people have to pay_to understand something about copyright protection will people begin did he know3)The way they play together makes Manchester United popular.(强调主语强调主语)4)On May 12,2008 a terrible earthquake happened in Wenchuan.（强调时间）（强调时间）It is _a terrible earthquake happened in Wenchuan.5)This creature taught me a beautiful lesson.(感感叹句型叹句型)It is_ makes Manchester United popular.the way they play together that on May 12,2008 that_this creature taught me!What a beautiful lesson Do you want to have a further knowledge of Chinese culture?Here comes your opportunity:the Student Union will organize a Chinese Character Dictation Competition.Id like to share with you some details.As scheduled,the competition is to be held on May 15th,2016.You are supposed to get prepared before the competition.Above all,its recommended that you should read the Four Great Classical Novels and focus on the Chinese characters in them.Whoever feels interested and has a passion for Chinese culture,please sign up for the competition as soon as possible.If you want to go,please call Li Hua at 12345678910,stating your name and nationality.Dont miss the chance of being the winner,and the appealing prize“a set of the four Great Classical Novels”is eagerly waiting for you.Come on,dont hesitate to take part!Im sure you will benefit a lot and your Chinese will gain much progress.7.运用对称、排比句式，使句子节奏感强，运用对称、排比句式，使句子节奏感强，富有音韵美。富有音韵美。My father grew up in a very small village in China.In those days,not many villagers could read.So my father opened a night school to teach them how to read.With his help,many people learned to write their own names;with his help,many people learned to read newspapers for the first time;with his help,many women were able to teach their children how to read.