初中英语写作辅导.ppt

初三英语写作辅导初三英语写作辅导Whatdoesthewordwritingmakeyouthinkof?writingApossibleWRITINGPROCESSA.A.Pre-writingPre-writing BrainstormingBrainstormingClusteringClusteringMakingListsMakingListsAskingYourselfQuestionsAskingYourselfQuestionsOutliningOutliningB.B.PlanningPlanning TimeOrderTimeOrder SpaceOrderSpaceOrder LogicalOrderLogicalOrderC.C.DraftingDrafting D.D.Revising&EditingRevising&Editingwriting在英语学习中，写是学生必须掌握的语言在英语学习中，写是学生必须掌握的语言技能之一。写作体现了一个人的综合语言技能之一。写作体现了一个人的综合语言运用能力。要写好一篇文章，不仅要有扎运用能力。要写好一篇文章，不仅要有扎实的语言基础知识包括语法、词汇、习惯实的语言基础知识包括语法、词汇、习惯用语等，还需要掌握必备的写作技巧。写用语等，还需要掌握必备的写作技巧。写作能力的培养不是一蹴而就的，它需要进作能力的培养不是一蹴而就的，它需要进行知识的积累和技能的训练。行知识的积累和技能的训练。新的课程标准中关于五级水平（即初中毕业要求达到的水平）的要求是：A.能根据写作要求，收集、准备素材；B.能独立起草短文、短信等，并在教师的指导下进行修改；C.能使用常见的连接词表示顺序顺序和逻辑逻辑关系（即文章中用于表示并列，转折，举例，因果，递进，让步，总结等逻辑关系的固定单词或词组）；D.能简单描述人物或事件；E.能根据所给的图示或表格写出简单的段落或操作说明。1.1.新课程标准中关于写的要求新课程标准中关于写的要求上海市初中毕业生统一学业考试上海市初中毕业生统一学业考试写作评分标准写作评分标准（0909年要求）作文共年要求）作文共年要求）作文共年要求）作文共1818分，其中内容分，其中内容分，其中内容分，其中内容7 7分，语言分，语言分，语言分，语言8 8分，分，分，分，组织结构分组织结构分组织结构分组织结构分3 3分。分。分。分。（0808年评分标准）年评分标准）年评分标准）年评分标准）（一）内容：（一）内容：（一）内容：（一）内容：A A内容切题，意思连贯，表达清楚、完整。内容切题，意思连贯，表达清楚、完整。内容切题，意思连贯，表达清楚、完整。内容切题，意思连贯，表达清楚、完整。B B 内容基本切题，意思大致连贯，表达基本清楚、内容基本切题，意思大致连贯，表达基本清楚、内容基本切题，意思大致连贯，表达基本清楚、内容基本切题，意思大致连贯，表达基本清楚、但不够完整。但不够完整。但不够完整。但不够完整。C C 内容不够切题，意思不够连贯，表达不够清内容不够切题，意思不够连贯，表达不够清内容不够切题，意思不够连贯，表达不够清内容不够切题，意思不够连贯，表达不够清 楚、离题目要求较远。楚、离题目要求较远。楚、离题目要求较远。楚、离题目要求较远。DD 文不对题，表达不清。文不对题，表达不清。文不对题，表达不清。文不对题，表达不清。（二）语言：（二）语言：（二）语言：（二）语言：拼写：每错扣拼写：每错扣拼写：每错扣拼写：每错扣0.50.5分，同一错误不重复计数。分，同一错误不重复计数。分，同一错误不重复计数。分，同一错误不重复计数。语法：同语法：同语法：同语法：同。标点符号、大小写：每两处错误扣标点符号、大小写：每两处错误扣标点符号、大小写：每两处错误扣标点符号、大小写：每两处错误扣0.50.5分，但分，但分，但分，但 标点符号和大小写的扣分总和均不得超过一分。标点符号和大小写的扣分总和均不得超过一分。标点符号和大小写的扣分总和均不得超过一分。标点符号和大小写的扣分总和均不得超过一分。语言分最多扣语言分最多扣语言分最多扣语言分最多扣7 7分。分。分。分。（三）词数：（三）词数：（三）词数：（三）词数：词数不足词数不足词数不足词数不足3030词者，得分最多不得超过词者，得分最多不得超过词者，得分最多不得超过词者，得分最多不得超过6 6分；分；分；分；词数不足词数不足词数不足词数不足4040词者，得分最多不得超过词者，得分最多不得超过词者，得分最多不得超过词者，得分最多不得超过9 9分；分；分；分；词数不足词数不足词数不足词数不足5050词者，得分最多不得超过词者，得分最多不得超过词者，得分最多不得超过词者，得分最多不得超过1313分；分；分；分；词数在词数在词数在词数在50-5950-59词之间者，每少词之间者，每少词之间者，每少词之间者，每少5 5个词扣个词扣个词扣个词扣0.50.5分；分；分；分；只写出个别单词、词不成句不给分。只写出个别单词、词不成句不给分。只写出个别单词、词不成句不给分。只写出个别单词、词不成句不给分。（四）组织结构：（四）组织结构：（四）组织结构：（四）组织结构：内容充实、不写废话；上下文连贯；用语规内容充实、不写废话；上下文连贯；用语规内容充实、不写废话；上下文连贯；用语规内容充实、不写废话；上下文连贯；用语规范、表达准确、无或少见语法错误；词汇和句型范、表达准确、无或少见语法错误；词汇和句型范、表达准确、无或少见语法错误；词汇和句型范、表达准确、无或少见语法错误；词汇和句型句式运用恰当，多见好句型和习惯表追用语者，句式运用恰当，多见好句型和习惯表追用语者，句式运用恰当，多见好句型和习惯表追用语者，句式运用恰当，多见好句型和习惯表追用语者，可给可给可给可给2 2分。分。分。分。一般情况下，内容和语言累积得分在一般情况下，内容和语言累积得分在一般情况下，内容和语言累积得分在一般情况下，内容和语言累积得分在1313分以分以分以分以上者上者上者上者(含含含含)，方可得到，方可得到，方可得到，方可得到1-21-2分组织结构分。分组织结构分。分组织结构分。分组织结构分。内容和语言在内容和语言在内容和语言在内容和语言在1212分以下者，如文中有值得肯分以下者，如文中有值得肯分以下者，如文中有值得肯分以下者，如文中有值得肯定的好的句型和表达，可酌情考虑给定的好的句型和表达，可酌情考虑给定的好的句型和表达，可酌情考虑给定的好的句型和表达，可酌情考虑给1 1分组织结构分组织结构分组织结构分组织结构分。分。分。分。通篇句型、句式单一，词汇贫乏者，即使无语法通篇句型、句式单一，词汇贫乏者，即使无语法通篇句型、句式单一，词汇贫乏者，即使无语法通篇句型、句式单一，词汇贫乏者，即使无语法错误，一般亦不予给组织结构分。错误，一般亦不予给组织结构分。错误，一般亦不予给组织结构分。错误，一般亦不予给组织结构分。ApossibleWRITINGPROCESSA.A.Pre-writingPre-writing BrainstormingBrainstormingClusteringClusteringMakingListsMakingListsAskingYourselfQuestionsAskingYourselfQuestionsOutliningOutliningB.B.PlanningPlanning TimeOrderTimeOrder SpaceOrderSpaceOrder LogicalOrderLogicalOrderC.C.DraftingDrafting D.D.Revising&EditingRevising&EditingThingsIhatetodoActionActionR Reason(season(s)g gotothetutorsotothetutorst tiring,boringiring,boringg getupearlyetupearlys stayuplateatnight,tayuplateatnight,haventenoughsleephaventenoughsleeptellliestellliesDishonest,notbeDishonest,notbetrustedandrespectedtrustedandrespectedThingsIhatetodoMost of the time I do things which I enjoy.Most of the time I do things which I enjoy.However,there are still things that I hate to do.However,there are still things that I hate to do.I hate I hate going to the tutors because it is boring and tiring.I going to the tutors because it is boring and tiring.I always stay up late and I dont get enough sleep.So always stay up late and I dont get enough sleep.So getting up early is also what I dont like.But the thing getting up early is also what I dont like.But the thing I hate most is telling lies.You will feel guilty after I hate most is telling lies.You will feel guilty after cheating others.You will never be trusted if you often cheating others.You will never be trusted if you often tell lies,and not respected as well.I hate being tell lies,and not respected as well.I hate being dishonest,and I hope that everyone will be honest to dishonest,and I hope that everyone will be honest to others.others.Keeptheminmind:WhoWhereWhenWhyWhatHowAskyourselfmorequestions:Askyourselfmorequestions:1)1)Whooftengivesyoulove/whodoyouoftenWhooftengivesyoulove/whodoyouoftengetlovefrom?(parents,friends,strangers)getlovefrom?(parents,friends,strangers)2)2)Whendotheygivelovetoyou?(everyday,Whendotheygivelovetoyou?(everyday,inneed,introuble)inneed,introuble)(08(08年中考）年中考）年中考）年中考）“Love around me”“Love around me”Use the following points as a guide.Use the following points as a guide.（短文须包（短文须包（短文须包（短文须包含下列要点）含下列要点）含下列要点）含下列要点）Is there any love around you?(Give one or Is there any love around you?(Give one or two examples.)two examples.)How do you feel when you get love from him/How do you feel when you get love from him/her/them?her/them?What are you going to do to show your love?What are you going to do to show your love?Lovearoundme LoveLove isis everywhereeverywhere inin mymy life.life.MyMy parentsparentslovelovememeandandmymyfriendsfriendscarecareaboutaboutme.me.WhenWhenI Iamaminindifficulty,difficulty,theytheywillwillpullpullmemeout.out.WhenWhenI Ifeelfeel sad,sad,theythey willwill cheercheer meme up.up.I I feelfeeldelighteddelightedandandthankfulthankfulwhenwhenI Igetgetlovelovefromfromthem.them.I I alsoalso wantwant toto dodo somethingsomething toto showshowmymy lovelove toto others.others.WhenWhen theythey havehave somesomeproblems,problems,I Iwillwilltrytrymymybestbesttotohelphelpthem.them.I Idodobelievebelieve ifif wewe allall lovelove eacheach other,other,ourour worldworldwillbecomemoreandmorebeautiful.willbecomemoreandmorebeautiful.e.g.Writeapassageaboutyourfriend.e.g.Writeapassageaboutyourfriend.Para1:IntroductionPara1:IntroductionIntroduceyourfriend.HowdoyouIntroduceyourfriend.Howdoyouknowhim/her?Whatdoyouthinkofknowhim/her?Whatdoyouthinkofthefriendship?thefriendship?Para2:PhysicaldescriptionPara2:Physicaldescriptiondescribeyourfriendphysically:age,colordescribeyourfriendphysically:age,colorofhair,eyes,face,body,clothesetc.ofhair,eyes,face,body,clothesetc.Para3:Descriptionofpersonality(giveoneortwoPara3:Descriptionofpersonality(giveoneortwoexamples)examples)Para4:ConclusionPara4:ConclusionConcludewithyourfriendsfutureplans.Concludewithyourfriendsfutureplans.GiveyourfeelingsaboutyourfriendsGiveyourfeelingsaboutyourfriendsfuture.future.Bodye.g.Writeapassageaboutyourfutureplans.e.g.Writeapassageaboutyourfutureplans.Para1:Introduction:presentandgoalPara1:Introduction:presentandgoalWhatdoyoudonow?ThinkaboutyourWhatdoyoudonow?Thinkaboutyourfuture,whatjobdoyouwanttohave?future,whatjobdoyouwanttohave?Para2:ActivitiestoreachgoalPara2:ActivitiestoreachgoalTellabouthowyouwillprepareforthejob.Tellabouthowyouwillprepareforthejob.Whatwillyoustudyordo?Whatwillyoustudyordo?Para3:FeelingsaboutgoalPara3:FeelingsaboutgoalTellhowyou(oryourfamily)willfeelwhenTellhowyou(oryourfamily)willfeelwhenyouhavethejob.Tellhowyouwillfeel.Willyouhavethejob.Tellhowyouwillfeel.Willyouberich?Happy?Famous?youberich?Happy?Famous?Para4:Conclusion:HowothersfeelaboutyourPara4:Conclusion:HowothersfeelaboutyourgoalgoalTellhowyourfamilywillfeelaboutyourTellhowyourfamilywillfeelaboutyourfuture.future.Bodye.g.Writeapassageaboutapasttrip.e.g.Writeapassageaboutapasttrip.Para1:IntroductionPara1:IntroductionWheredidyougoonyourtrip?WhenWheredidyougoonyourtrip?Whendidyougo?Whydidyougothere?didyougo?Whydidyougothere?Howdidyougo?HowlongdidthetripHowdidyougo?Howlongdidthetriptake?take?Para2:ArrivalPara2:ArrivaltellaboutyourarrivaltellaboutyourarrivalPara3:ActivitiesPara3:ActivitiesWhatdidyoudoafteryouarrived?Whatdidyoudoafteryouarrived?Para4:ReturnPara4:ReturnTellaboutyourreturnhomeTellaboutyourreturnhomePara5:ConclusionPara5:ConclusionTellyourfeelingsaboutthetripTellyourfeelingsaboutthetripbodyTimeorder:First,Firstofall,Second,Third,Next,Afterthat,ThenFinally,Spaceorder Ontheright,Ontheright,Ontheleft,Ontheleft,Inthecenter,Inthecenter,Inthemiddle,Inthemiddle,Nexttothe,Nexttothe,Besidethe,Besidethe,Oppositethe_,Oppositethe_,Nearthe_,Nearthe_,Underthe_,Underthe_,Abovethe_,Abovethe_,Ononesideofthe_,Ononesideofthe_,Ontheothersideofthe_,Ontheothersideofthe_,Transitionsignals1 1、递进：、递进：、递进：、递进：besides,inaddition,whatsmorebesides,inaddition,whatsmore2 2、转折和对比：、转折和对比：、转折和对比：、转折和对比：but,however,ontheotherbut,however,ontheotherhand,hand,3 3、总结：、总结：、总结：、总结：inshort,inbrief,forthesereasonsinshort,inbrief,forthesereasons4 4、因果和结论：、因果和结论：、因果和结论：、因果和结论：asaresult,dueto,becauseof,asaresult,dueto,becauseof,thus,thereforethus,therefore5 5、强调：、强调：、强调：、强调：really,indeed,surelyreally,indeed,surely6 6、其它插入语：、其它插入语：、其它插入语：、其它插入语：worsestill/whatsworse,afterworsestill/whatsworse,afterall,ifpossible,all,ifpossible,培养英语思维培养英语思维-词的搭配词的搭配大雨大雨大桥大桥大楼大楼大错大错大写大写大病大病大地震大地震heavy rainlong bridgehigh rise/large buildingbig/terrible/serious mistakecapital letterserious illnessmajor earthquake句的表达句的表达注意汉英差异：注意汉英差异：一、状语一、状语e.g.她一周有三个下午在一家百货公司做兼她一周有三个下午在一家百货公司做兼职。职。Sheworksparttimeinadepartmentstorethreeafternoonsaweek.在我十岁那年我和家人经历了一次奇妙的在我十岁那年我和家人经历了一次奇妙的旅行。旅行。ItookafantastictripwithmyfamilywhenIwastenyearsold.二、谓语动词二、谓语动词二、谓语动词二、谓语动词汉语：无动词或多动词汉语：无动词或多动词汉语：无动词或多动词汉语：无动词或多动词英语：单动词英语：单动词英语：单动词英语：单动词e.g.e.g.我妈妈很漂亮。我妈妈很漂亮。我妈妈很漂亮。我妈妈很漂亮。Mymotherispretty.Mymotherispretty.我们又唱又跳。我们又唱又跳。我们又唱又跳。我们又唱又跳。Wesanganddanced.Wesanganddanced.我们邀请他们到上海来玩。我们邀请他们到上海来玩。我们邀请他们到上海来玩。我们邀请他们到上海来玩。WeinvitedthemtocometoShanghaiforaWeinvitedthemtocometoShanghaiforavisit.visit.你上课常常缺席所以我想要提醒你。你上课常常缺席所以我想要提醒你。你上课常常缺席所以我想要提醒你。你上课常常缺席所以我想要提醒你。YouareoftenabsentfromclasssoIwantYouareoftenabsentfromclasssoIwanttoremindyou.toremindyou.三、主语三、主语三、主语三、主语 e.g.活到老，学到老。One is never too old to learn.很难说谁对谁错。Its hard to tell who is right and who is wrong.昨天找到了丢失的钢笔。The lost pen was found yesterday.上饭店吃饭很贵。Its expensive to eat out.乘飞机旅行更舒适、便捷。Travelling by plane is faster and more convenient.四、定语四、定语四、定语四、定语汉：常常是前置定语汉：常常是前置定语汉：常常是前置定语汉：常常是前置定语英：前置和后置定语英：前置和后置定语英：前置和后置定语英：前置和后置定语e.g.e.g.我们学校的所有学生我们学校的所有学生我们学校的所有学生我们学校的所有学生allthestudentsinourschoolallthestudentsinourschool左边数第五个男孩左边数第五个男孩左边数第五个男孩左边数第五个男孩thefifthboyfromtheleftthefifthboyfromtheleft英国人的日常生活英国人的日常生活英国人的日常生活英国人的日常生活everydaylivesoftheBritisheverydaylivesoftheBritish在中国骑车的人数在中国骑车的人数在中国骑车的人数在中国骑车的人数thenumberofcyclistsinChinathenumberofcyclistsinChina几种气体的混合物几种气体的混合物几种气体的混合物几种气体的混合物amixtureofseveralgasesamixtureofseveralgases介词短语作后置定语介词短语作后置定语介词短语作后置定语介词短语作后置定语三到六岁的孩子三到六岁的孩子Childrenfrom3to6yearsofage隔壁的音像店隔壁的音像店themusicstorenextdoor用英语写的信用英语写的信theletter(s)inEnglish晚上最晚一班返回的公交车晚上最晚一班返回的公交车thelastbusbackintheevening城市生活的嘈杂、脏乱城市生活的嘈杂、脏乱thenoiseanddirtofcitylife玩玩/放松的时间放松的时间timetoplay/relax当一个音乐家的计划当一个音乐家的计划planstobeamusician出国学习的机会出国学习的机会thechancetostudyabroad供人坐着休息的安静场所供人坐着休息的安静场所aquietplaceforpeopletositin/rest找到任何一个可以询问的人找到任何一个可以询问的人findanyonetoask动词不定式作后置定语动词不定式作后置定语动词不定式作后置定语动词不定式作后置定语城市用水城市用水城市用水城市用水waterusedbycitieswaterusedbycities不乱扔垃圾的习惯不乱扔垃圾的习惯不乱扔垃圾的习惯不乱扔垃圾的习惯thehabitofnotthrowingawayrubbishthehabitofnotthrowingawayrubbish我曾经生活的村庄我曾经生活的村庄我曾经生活的村庄我曾经生活的村庄thevillagewhereIstayed/livedthevillagewhereIstayed/lived我昨晚吃的某样东西我昨晚吃的某样东西我昨晚吃的某样东西我昨晚吃的某样东西somethingIatelastnightsomethingIatelastnight到月球去的宇航员到月球去的宇航员到月球去的宇航员到月球去的宇航员astronautswhotraveledtothemoonastronautswhotraveledtothemoon孩子们喜欢吃的食物孩子们喜欢吃的食物孩子们喜欢吃的食物孩子们喜欢吃的食物food(which)childrenlikefood(which)childrenlike分词、定语从句等作后置定语分词、定语从句等作后置定语分词、定语从句等作后置定语分词、定语从句等作后置定语Writingtips:1.1.时态一致时态一致时态一致时态一致必须注意所用时态符合上下文。如果用过去时叙必须注意所用时态符合上下文。如果用过去时叙必须注意所用时态符合上下文。如果用过去时叙必须注意所用时态符合上下文。如果用过去时叙述一个故事，就要保证通篇都用过去时，不要述一个故事，就要保证通篇都用过去时，不要述一个故事，就要保证通篇都用过去时，不要述一个故事，就要保证通篇都用过去时，不要在作文中间变成现在时。同样，如果是在谈论在作文中间变成现在时。同样，如果是在谈论在作文中间变成现在时。同样，如果是在谈论在作文中间变成现在时。同样，如果是在谈论普遍问题、现状或日常习惯，就要用现在时，普遍问题、现状或日常习惯，就要用现在时，普遍问题、现状或日常习惯，就要用现在时，普遍问题、现状或日常习惯，就要用现在时，而不要用过去时。而不要用过去时。而不要用过去时。而不要用过去时。e.g.YesterdayIdidmyhomework.Ittakesmee.g.YesterdayIdidmyhomework.Ittakesmethreehours.threehours.Hisfatherthoughtheisgoodatmath.Hisfatherthoughtheisgoodatmath.Shestartedhernewjoblastweek.SheShestartedhernewjoblastweek.Shelikedit.likedit.Wedidntgototheparty.Wearentinvited.Wedidntgototheparty.Wearentinvited.tooktookwaswaslikeslikeswerentwerentWritingtips:2.2.主语一致主语一致主语一致主语一致应该保持全文人称一致，这样读者才能跟随一个应该保持全文人称一致，这样读者才能跟随一个应该保持全文人称一致，这样读者才能跟随一个应该保持全文人称一致，这样读者才能跟随一个逻辑思维顺序。否则读者会感到困惑。逻辑思维顺序。否则读者会感到困惑。逻辑思维顺序。否则读者会感到困惑。逻辑思维顺序。否则读者会感到困惑。e.g.Althoughyoumayfailtheexam,hee.g.Althoughyoumayfailtheexam,hecanstillbeusefultothecountry.canstillbeusefultothecountry.ItnotonlyprovidesyouwithlotsofItnotonlyprovidesyouwithlotsofknowledgebutalsodevelopshisknowledgebutalsodevelopshisinterests.interests.youyouyouryourWritingtips:3.3.主谓一致主谓一致主谓一致主谓一致/人称一致人称一致人称一致人称一致确保语法正确。确保语法正确。确保语法正确。确保语法正确。e.g.e.g.ThingsIhatetodoisThingsIhatetodoisdoinghomework.doinghomework.WhatIhatetodoWhatIhatetodoisisEverypeoplestarttolearnEnglish.EverypeoplestarttolearnEnglish.EveryEverypersonpersonstartstarts stolearnEnglish.tolearnEnglish.Theactivitiescanrelaxourselves.Theactivitiescanrelaxourselves.TheactivitiescanhelpTheactivitiescanhelpususrelaxrelaxourselvesourselves./We./Wecanrelaxourselvesbytakingpartinthecanrelaxourselvesbytakingpartintheactivities.activities.Writingtips:4.4.词序词序词序词序/语序语序语序语序它能够帮助准确表达作者本意并并避免意义含糊它能够帮助准确表达作者本意并并避免意义含糊它能够帮助准确表达作者本意并并避免意义含糊它能够帮助准确表达作者本意并并避免意义含糊不清。注意要让句子尽量保持英语的表达习惯。不清。注意要让句子尽量保持英语的表达习惯。不清。注意要让句子尽量保持英语的表达习惯。不清。注意要让句子尽量保持英语的表达习惯。e.g.Ialreadyhavehadlunch.e.g.Ialreadyhavehadlunch.ShewithhermumtraveledtoItaly.ShewithhermumtraveledtoItaly.IalwaysbethewinnerofthepianoIalwaysbethewinnerofthepianocontest.contest.InChina,heknewtherewerebigfloods.InChina,heknewtherewerebigfloods.IjustwonderwhatdoesmyfuturelikeandIjustwonderwhatdoesmyfuturelikeandwhatshouldIdo.whatshouldIdo.havealreadyhavealreadyShetraveledtoItalywithhermum.ShetraveledtoItalywithhermum.amalwaysamalwaysHeknewtherewerebigfloodsinChina.HeknewtherewerebigfloodsinChina.IjustwonderwhatIjustwonderwhatmyfatherlikesandwhatmyfatherlikesandwhatIshoulddo.Ishoulddo.Writingtips:5.5.并列句并列句并列句并列句用并列句能使文章更生动流畅，它包含两个独立用并列句能使文章更生动流畅，它包含两个独立用并列句能使文章更生动流畅，它包含两个独立用并列句能使文章更生动流畅，它包含两个独立分句和一个连词，如：分句和一个连词，如：分句和一个连词，如：分句和一个连词，如：and,but,or,soand,but,or,so等。等。等。等。e.g.Theyknowwhatisbetterandtheye.g.Theyknowwhatisbetterandtheyarealwaysright.arealwaysright.Itwascrowded.Wewereabletoseehim.Itwascrowded.Wewereabletoseehim.ItwascrowdedItwascrowdedbutbutwewereabletoseehim.wewereabletoseehim.Sheisatopstudent.SheisatalentedSheisatopstudent.Sheisatalentedmusician.musician.SheisatopstudentSheisatopstudentandandatalentedatalentedmusician.musician.Thoughhedoesnthavemuchmoney,butThoughhedoesnthavemuchmoney,buthisheartisfulloflove.hisheartisfulloflove.两个分句不要重复同一个单两个分句不要重复同一个单词。每个分句都必须有一个词。每个分句都必须有一个动词；每两个分句组成的句动词；每两个分句组成的句子只能使用一个连词。子只能使用一个连词。Writingtips:6.6.复