Unit4TheBodyLanguageWriting慰问信写作反馈-高中英语人教新课标必修四.docx

B4U4 The Body LanguageB4U4 Writing - 慰问信写作反馈一、优秀作品：；（范文）Dear Lin Pei,I noticed this morning that you seemed in great sorrow because your eyes are red, swollen and watery. So I approached you, hoping to figure out what had happened and ease your sadness. Though you put your head down and left immediately, I still want to write this letter to express my deep sympathy and care for you.Is there anything bothering you or even afflicting you? I heard that your mum had been ill for long and that you were really exhausted by doing all the housework at home. Is that true?Anyway, I just want to let you know that I will be always available for having a little heart-to-heart or sharing your housework. Please dont hesitate to pour your sorrow to me. Your sorrow will definitely be reduced by half.Yours,Oscar二、自我评估（适不适合）：Para1: describe the body language that you noticedA: In several days, there was a strange action. I noticing that you always show your refusal by using body language. To my kindness, I want to ask you the reason of it. （全森瑞，2）B: I notice your eyes are red and you look really down today. When you entered the classroom, you were pale and frowning.（包温慧，2）C: This morning, you looked unhappy. I noticed you frowned and slowly came into class. As I wanted to talk with you, you turned your back to me. I didnt say anything at that time. （陈英男，2）Para2: ask if something is wrong; perhaps make some guesses1. 句式结构与正确表达Was your exam or competition failed? Was you fight against your parents? Have any important person for you died? Your mother misunderstood you? Or you had any other excuse? Have you met something wrong make you such depressed? Is the teacher punished you or you havent finished your homework?2. 语气态度与礼貌程度A：If something is wrong, I think perhaps I can make some guesses to you. First of all, forget something wrong. It is the first step to make you happy. If you didnt forget it, you will feel more sorrowful. （吴柏宸，1）B：Anyway, I want to know what has happened.（刘康，1）C：I mean no offence but please tell me something wrong if you can. Is it owning to the recent exam? （吴芝璇，1）D：If you have met some problems, why not asking for some helps? Id like to listen your problems carefully and try my best to give you some suggestions.（林倪宇凡，1）E：Could you make me a explanation about whats wrong with you?.（计鑫波，1）Para3: offer to help; remind him/her that you are a good friendA：Whatever you meet any problem, remember that you are not alone. We are your classmate and your friends. (黄晨炜，1)三、自主修改（正不正确）：1. Everything is ok?2. I asked what happend?3. What is something wrong? Is it reason? Do you worry about it? Is something wrong?4. You shaked your head and sleeped right away. I tried to communicate with you, you putted up your hand as if forbid me close with you.5. Is it something that make some guesses.6. I thinked of it could be something wrong. Because of you are my good friends, There are some advice that I thinked it may can help you.7. We are the best friend, our relationship is better than everyone.8. What the matter with you, why were you looking sorrowful?9. If you fail in the final exam, or your father fought with your mother or other.10. Life is full of difficulties, though we can beat them.11. No matter happened, I am the best friend of you.12. You often openned your mouth, seemed want to say something.13. It was your body language that you made your head down and used fake smile to refuse my communication shows me your sorrow.14. Is there something wrong so that makes you such a sadness?15. Id like to listen your problems and give my suggestions which about study.16. Is it you fail the middle exam and your parents misunderstood you was not study hard? Or somebody do something with you?17. You should believe me can solve the problems.18. When you face the difficult, please remember I can give you a power to help you face it.19. However how hard you worked.