读后续写：野外兄弟合作探险 讲义-高三英语写作专项.docx

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Mr. Taylor checked again: water, food, bandage, medicines, a compass, and a map wrapped in plastic. Bingo! He put all that he prepared for the coming hiking into his backpack.Mr. Taylor was fond of hiking, this time in particular, for it was the first time for him to hike with his two sons, Harry and Joel. Joel liked reading books about explorers and Harry joined the hiking club in his school this term. "It will be an unforgettable experience, definitely." he whispered to himself, unconsciously a smile spreading over his face.Harry and Joel, however, argued for the first three miles of their hiking trip. Harry accused Joel of wearing smelly old shoes. Joel blamed Harry for using all of the bug spray. Harry told Joel he smelled terrible, Joel called Harry a coward."Will the two of you just quiet down and enjoy our hike together? "their father said. "You're missing all of the beautiful scenery! "It was true. Neither Joel nor Harry had taken notice of the bear their father had spied at the start of their trip. They hadn't looked up at the eagle he pointed out overhead. Worst of all, they hadn't paid any attention to the turns and twists along the way while they continued their argument."Joel threw a stick at me!" Harry screamed."That's not true! "Joel shouted back.Mr. Taylor could no longer contain his anger. "And both of you need to stop arguing!" he erupted. As he turned to face them, his left foot caught on a root. He slipped backward and down muddy bank, falling into the river that ran alongside the path.Harry and Joel raced to their father's assistance. They helped him up out of the water, and then dragged his wet backpack up onto land.Fortunately, their wet-through father found himself just slightly injured.注意：续写词数应为 150 左右：Paragraph 1:But his glasses came off when he fell in the water.Paragraph 2:"Just calm down." Mr. Taylor shouted, "Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.01           先读后写，串联文本信息，理清因果关系Who（人物）+what（性格）：·Mr.Taylor：careful；encourage kids to work together··Harry：like hiking··Joel：liked reading books about explorers·What（事件）：Mr. Taylor and his two sons went on hiking，but the two sons argued with each other frequently, and it led to the injury of their father who tried to stop their quarreling.Emotional changes（情感变化）：two sons: excited(准备徒步）- disacouraged（沿途争吵）-regretful(错过美景）-worried （父亲落水）-.Conflict（冲突）：two sons argued all the way and blamed each other;the father fell into water and lost glasses-nobody guided the wayTheme（主题）：cooperation can overcome difficulties02关注原文信息，捕捉续文伏笔原文伏笔续文可能的对照Mr. Taylor checked again: water, food, bandage, medicines, a compass, and a map wrapped in plastic.（para.1)面对爸爸的现状，兄弟俩如何处理呢，准备了哪些工具和设备？Joel liked reading books about explorers and Harry joined the hiking club in his school this term. (para.2)我们为什么会成功成功摆脱困境？they hadn't paid any attention to the turns and twists along the way while they continued their argument.(para.4)可以帮助我们脱险的环境因素是什么？"Just calm down." Mr. Taylor shouted, "Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.(给出续写段2）兄弟俩最后意识到了什么？03研读段首句，合理情节分析首句内在逻辑，合理规划情节（Para2首句暗示Para1的结尾）Tip：conflict（冲突）-action行动-解决方案solutionPara1：Fortunately, their wet-through father found himself just slightly injured. But his glasses came off when he fell in the water.情节线（plot)Deal with the injury-no one guided the way-blame/argue情感线（emotion）Nervous-discouraged&angry-hopelessPara2："Just calm down." Mr. Taylor shouted, "Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.情节线（plot）：With the help of compass & map-analyze-find the way out-lesson：learn to cooperate情感线（emotion）:Excited-delighted/proud04确定四个衔接句S1：首段开头第二句（一定把段首句的名词或动词用在第二个句中，实现语义连贯）But his glasses came off when he fell in the water.·Sighing deeply, Mr. Taylor quickly took off his wet clothes and squeezed the water out.··Mr.Taylor was stunned for a moment, wondering what to do next.·S2：首段最后一句（一定要有与第二段段首句中的同词或同义词，实现无缝衔接）"Just calm down. "Mr. Taylor shouted, "Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way." ·Harry blamed the accident on Joel, glaring at him with burning eyes.··Afterwards, his two sons began arguing with each other again.·S3：尾段开头第二句（和本段首句实现语义连贯）"Just calm down. "Mr. Taylor shouted, "Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way." ·After He mentioned the map and m compass, the boys approached reluctantly .··Joel wiped Harry's tears away and it hit Harry that they had brought a map wrapped in plastic! ·S4：尾段最后一句（一定要呼应原文中体现主题或伏笔的主题词，实现主题升华）From this unforgettable hiking, they realized what matters is cooperation.                                                               05语料积累1.Tears mixed with sweat poured down my cheeks, blurring my vision.2.He yelled, glaring at him with burning eyes.3.They were all in a dilemma and felt a kind of sorrow mixed with regret. (消极情绪）4.“.”, sb murmured, with his heart sinking and his palms sweating. (引出对话）5.All of the sudden, a thought entered his mindlike an electric shock.（想出主意）6.So excited was he that he jumped in the air.（积极情绪）7.Exhausted and terrified, I felt my arms aching and my lung burning.感悟：1.This unforgettable hiking willbe rooted in their minds.2.It dawned me that nothing is more important than cooperation to overcome difficulties.3.What really matters is cooperation.4.There was nothing we could do but work together.                                              06范文赏析But his glasses came off when he fell in the water. Sighing deeply, Mr. Taylor quickly took off his wet clothes and squeezed the water out. Seeing his father wrapping the wound with the bandage, Joel felt that a thought entered his mind like an electric shock. How could they continue hiking if Dad was unable to see clearly? "If only Harry stopped arguing earlier with me!" he murmured, with his heart sinking and his palms sweating. "I hate you!" Harry yelled, glaring at him with burning eyes. Afterwards, his two sons began arguing with each other again.Just calm down. "Mr. Taylor shouted, "Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way." Joel wiped Harry's tears away and it hit Harry that they had brought a map wrapped in plastic! Joel's eyes twinkled with merriment and reached the map out instantly. "I love reading books about explorers, so I can definitely use this map to find our way! Joel screamed out, They tried their best to go back home and their anxiety disappeared and then their bravery started to grow. Eventually, they got home successfully. This unforgettable hiking will be rooted in the two brother's minds, because they realized it is not quarrel but cooperation that help them overcome difficulties.学科网（北京）股份有限公司