高三英语写作专项读后续写讲解课件.pptx

读后续写第一讲读后续写读后续写之明暗线、主次线结构之明暗线、主次线结构1234题型分析写什么？怎么写？作品展示1 1.题型分析题型分析 读后续写是一种将阅读与写作紧密结合的考查形式，旨在考查考读后续写是一种将阅读与写作紧密结合的考查形式，旨在考查考生的综合语言运用能力。读后续写的阅读材料一般以生的综合语言运用能力。读后续写的阅读材料一般以记叙文记叙文记叙文记叙文和和夹叙夹夹叙夹夹叙夹夹叙夹议文议文议文议文为主。一般来说，记叙文浅显易懂，但故事情节多曲折动人，故为主。一般来说，记叙文浅显易懂，但故事情节多曲折动人，故事线索的逻辑性也较强。要求考生续写的部分多是事线索的逻辑性也较强。要求考生续写的部分多是故事发展的高潮或故事发展的高潮或故事发展的高潮或故事发展的高潮或结局结局结局结局。情节曲折跌宕，。情节曲折跌宕，线索性和逻辑性较强线索性和逻辑性较强线索性和逻辑性较强线索性和逻辑性较强。考生要抓住故事的叙事。考生要抓住故事的叙事线索，依据原文的写作思路续写文章，并适当发散。线索，依据原文的写作思路续写文章，并适当发散。写什么？写什么？怎么写？怎么写？2 2.写作指导写作指导(写什么写什么?)?)重点划红重点划红关键词关键词六要素六要素“前中后前中后”明暗线明暗线 Josh loved country music and had a dream of holding a concert one day.But the only place where he could get people to listen to his songs was on the streets.Often people would stop to listen and leave a few dollars in his guitar box.Josh was saving up for a concert of his own.One afternoon,Josh was singing on a street corner outside a small restaurant,and the owner stopped to enjoy his music.The man filmed Josh with his phone and smiled.“Thats a great song,”he said.“Come in for lunch!I will give you a discount on your meal.”Josh thanked him and walked into the restaurant.Unlike her boss,the waitress didnt seem friendly.She was sour-faced.“Please bring me a hamburger and some apple pie,”Josh said and gave her his best smile.To his shock,the woman didnt smile back.She just nodded and left,saying to herself,“Apple pie.Isnt that just wonderful?I wish my kids life were apple pie.”Later,Josh could see that she was cold towards other customers too.When Josh finished his meal,the waitress brought him his bill with the promised discount.Josh took out his wallet and was about to leave a tip.But thinking about her coldness,he decided not to leave her a cent.He put back his wallet and was about to leave.But suddenly,a poster caught his eye.The poster showed a sad mom and her little boy.The words below explained Luke(the boys name)had a rare disease.And his only hope was an expensive treatment.Readers were encouraged to support Luke by donating money through a website.Josh was surprised to find the sour-faced waitress was the kids mom in the photo.He realized that she actually wasnt unfriendly.She was just sad and worried about her sons illness.时间：时间：one afternoonone afternoonone afternoonone afternoon地点：地点：a street cornera street cornera street cornera street corner,a small restaurant a small restaurant a small restaurant a small restaurant人物：人物：JoshJoshJoshJosh；the owner of the restaurant;the waitress;Luke(the waitress son)the owner of the restaurant;the waitress;Luke(the waitress son)the owner of the restaurant;the waitress;Luke(the waitress son)the owner of the restaurant;the waitress;Luke(the waitress son)事件：事件：事件：事件：Josh Josh wanted wanted to to realize realize his his dream dream of of holding holding his his own own concert.concert.He He sang sang on on the the street corner to save money for it.street corner to save money for it.(Beginning)(Beginning)The The owner owner enjoyed enjoyed his his music,music,filmed filmed a a video video and and promised promised to to give give him him a a discount discount on on his his meal.meal.Josh Josh went went into into the the restaurant restaurant and and met met a a sour-sour-faced faced waitress.waitress.He He wanted wanted to to leave leave a a tip tip but but changed changed his his mind mind because because of of her her cold cold attitude attitude to to the the customers.customers.But But before before leaving,leaving,he he found found in in a a poster poster the the reason reason why why she she was was sad sad and and worried.worried.Her Her son son Luke Luke had had a a rare rare disease disease and and needed needed a a lot of money so donating money was through website.lot of money so donating money was through website.(Development)(Development)关键词六要素：关键词六要素：说明：说明：“前前”要衔接已给首句；要衔接已给首句；“后后”衔接第二段首句。衔接第二段首句。1.1.确定第一段段落大意及情节推断确定第一段段落大意及情节推断根据两段已给首句的关键词（标红色）和主题（根据两段已给首句的关键词（标红色）和主题（helphelp）确定第一段的主）确定第一段的主要内容：要内容：Paragraph 1:Josh then took out his wallet again._Paragraph 2:That night,the waitress posted the video of Josh singing on the Internet._明暗线明暗线Josh left the waitress all the money he had saved.(a note.)The waitress was amazed and wanted to know who he was.The waitress got to know him and regretted her attitude.She then got the video of his singing.She posted the video on the Internet and gained attention.He was popular and realized his dream.The boy was cured.Happy ending!Happy ending!Show kindness!Show kindness!Feel regretted!Feel regretted!Find him!Find him!Show gratitude!Show gratitude!win-win!win-win!Josh then took out his wallet againJosh then took out his wallet again.由所给的第一段首句由所给的第一段首句由所给的第一段首句由所给的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第与第二段首句确定第与第二段首句确定第与第二段首句确定第一框的主要内容；一框的主要内容；一框的主要内容；一框的主要内容；一框首句呼应所给的一框首句呼应所给的一框首句呼应所给的一框首句呼应所给的第一段首句，一框尾第一段首句，一框尾第一段首句，一框尾第一段首句，一框尾句呼应所给的第二段句呼应所给的第二段句呼应所给的第二段句呼应所给的第二段首句；首句；首句；首句；二框的首句呼应所给二框的首句呼应所给二框的首句呼应所给二框的首句呼应所给的第二段首句，二框的第二段首句，二框的第二段首句，二框的第二段首句，二框尾句由正能量的结尾尾句由正能量的结尾尾句由正能量的结尾尾句由正能量的结尾来确定。来确定。来确定。来确定。在已定框架范围内，在已定框架范围内，在已定框架范围内，在已定框架范围内，依据情节推断故事中依据情节推断故事中依据情节推断故事中依据情节推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所人物所见、所闻、所人物所见、所闻、所人物所见、所闻、所思、所说、所做等给思、所说、所做等给思、所说、所做等给思、所说、所做等给每段增加每段增加每段增加每段增加5 5 5 5至至至至8 8 8 8个具体个具体个具体个具体细节，我们称之为叫细节，我们称之为叫细节，我们称之为叫细节，我们称之为叫“58“58“58“58细节添加法细节添加法细节添加法细节添加法”。怎么写？怎么写？外貌描写外貌描写1 1.Indeed.Indeed,his sunburnt face and arms and his slim his sunburnt face and arms and his slim,strong body are just like those of millions of strong body are just like those of millions of Chinese farmersChinese farmers,for whom he has struggled for the past five decades.for whom he has struggled for the past five decades.2 2.The tramp.The tramp,a poor a poor,homeless man with a moustache homeless man with a moustache,wore large trousers wore large trousers,worn-out shoes worn-out shoes and a small round black hat.and a small round black hat.1 1.关于关于“笑笑”的表达：的表达：-The smile froze on her lips.她脸上的笑容僵住了。-In spite of his disappointment,he managed a weak smile.他还是勉强露出一丝淡淡的微笑。-Alee became happy now and a gentle smile spread over her face.整张脸洋溢着温和的微笑。-His face split into a wide smile.他的脸上绽放出灿烂的笑容。神态描写神态描写 2 2.关于关于“哭哭”的表达：的表达：With tears streaming down her face,words failed her.眼泪顺着她的脸流下来，她说不出话来。动作描写：有关动作描写：有关“看看”的表达的表达：He didnt shout,and he just glared at me silently.他只是默默怒视着我。He gazed at the.,unbelievable.他难以置信地盯着.看。He turned to her with a frightened air.他害怕地看着他。He was glaring down at me again,his black eyes full of disgust.他又盯着我看，黑眼睛里充满了厌恶。Her eyes were glued to the screen.她目不转睛地盯着屏幕。He gave a glimpse of.from the corner of his eye.他用眼睛的余角瞥了一眼。Hearing the unexpected news,the woman froze with shock,as if rooted on the ground.The moment I opened the box,my eyes grew wide in great astonishment/surprise.He straightened up and looked at me,open-mouthed.A spark of surprise flashed across his face.He froze/was stunned there,staring at me with wide eyes.Everyone gasped in astonishment as she drove around the last bend.The car was gone in seconds,leaving Alice shaking her head in disbelief.Nina looked at me with amazement,“I dont believe you.”she said.动作描写动作描写+情感词汇情感词汇:吃惊惊讶吃惊惊讶句式升级：神态描写十情感词汇句式升级：神态描写十情感词汇1.She held the letter,her hands shaking/shivering and her eyes showing deep sorrow of being totally forgotten.她拿着信，双手颤抖，眼睛流露出被完全遗忘的深深悲伤.2.He shook his head miserably/sadly,tears pouring/flowing/running/streaming/rolling down his cheeks/face.他难过地摇摇头，潸然泪下。3.With heart ached,she felt seized by a burst of sadness and couldnt help crying/sobbing bitterly.她的心好痛，她悲伤得忍不住哭泣。4.Tears welled up in her eycs,and her heart seemed to be torn.她泪如泉涌，心都要碎了。部分优秀作品：When the waitress came to clean up the table,words on the tip flashed through her eyes.He dived his hand into his pocket,took out a sum of money and left it on the table cautiously.Warm and appreciative tears were streaming down her cheeks.Tears filling her eyes,the haze on her face was swept away.“The tip!”Josh added hastily.“But its too much.Its not easy for you to make money in this way.”She stammered back.Josh then took out his wallet again.He placed all the cash he had saved for months on the table and left with a note.It read,“This is for Luke.I hope it may help a little.”Later,the waitress found the money and the note.She hurried to thank Josh,but he was gone.The waitress stood there,feeling regretted that she was so worried about Luke that she didnt even wear a smile.After knowing Joshs kind act,the waitress boss showed her the video of Josh singing outside.That night,the waitress posted the video of Josh singing on the Internet.And she left words of gratitude for his kind act.Soon,Josh gained many fans.A company even held a concert for him and many people showed up.Days later,Josh returned to the restaurant and gave the waitress all the money he got from the concert.He said sincerely,“Please take it.Thank you for making my music known and helping me realize my dream.”Month later,Josh held another concert,with two special guests:a little boy and a smiling mom.