英语四级考试作文技巧.ppt

TEM 4Write on ANSWER SHEET TWO a note of about 50-60 words based on the following situation：You have got to know that your classmate,Michael,is organizing a weekend excursion for the class.And you are thinking of joining the trip.Write him a note expressing your interest in the excursion and asking for information on two details related to the excursion.Marks will be awarded for content,organization,grammar and appropriateness.Note-writing1格式（2分)其中日期与称呼共1分;结尾为1分，（不论大小错误都扣1分）。正确日期（Date）：位置在右上角或左上角，如：April 23rd,2006;April 17th,2010;April 17,2010;23/4/2006;4/23/2006;Apr.23;etc.正确称呼（Heading）：位置在日期下一行左侧，如：Dear Michael,(:)/Michael,(:)正确结尾（Ending）：如：Yours sincerely,/Sincerely yours,/Truly yours,/Yours,etc.(若在一行，名字没写或人名等扣1分)格式需前后一致，如全左或全右，若不符合，则扣1分。凡不符合上述正确格式或要求均扣1分。内容（3分）：Organizing+interest+two details(少一点扣一分，最多扣3分，two details需要有所展开，若只是提到when and where 扣一分)3语言（4分）：严重错误1分，一个句子或同类错误扣1分，拼写等小错误两个扣一分，最多扣4分。4语言得体性（1分）：总分在8分及以上可考虑加此分。评分总体要求：1）语言没有错误，格式对，内容完整，语言得体，字数符合要求 （50，80）；2）便条总字数（包括三部分格式）要求在5060字，不到50或多于80（9行或9行以上）扣1分；3）该部分总分为10分，6分为及格线Dear Michael,Do you remember me?I am Mary.I heard a trip which I want to join it very much.I am So interested in it.And you have joined it too.So would you help me to join the trip?I am really want to join it.Thank you!yours turly _ Mary_ score 3 format 2 language 3 content-2 April 23rd,2006 Dear Michael,Ive heard from that you are organizing a weekend excursion for the class.I m interested in it and want to join the trip.Could you tell me where shall we go and how much should I pay for this excursion.I hope that you can give me an answer before this Thursday.Thanks a lot.Sincerely yours,Franny 3.score 7 format 1 language-1 content 0Apr.23,2006 Dear Michael,Ive got to know that you are organizing a weekend excursion for the class.Im interested in it,and want to take part in the trip.I want to know how much the excursion will cost and what I should do to prepare for it.If you can give me such information,Ill be very appreciative.My phone number is 1343324839.Im looking forward to your reply.Thanks.yours,score 9 format 1 language-0 content 0妙语锦句Make an appointment:Id like to see you if you have time.How about coming to?What do you say if we talk about it at?I wonder if it would be possible for us to meet at Could I see you sometime next week,as Id like to Id like to make an appointment to see you.Would it possible for us to talk to in person about that?When is it convenient for you?What time would be convenient for you?Make an apology:I must apologize for I do apologize for I am very/really/extremely/awefully/terribly sorry about I can assure you that we willInvitation:I am pleased to invite you to I was wondering if you could comeI would like to invite you to I would be very happy if you could come Make a requestI am sorry to trouble you,but nobody would come into my mind to help me except you.I would like to seek help from you.I would greatly appreciate it if you could help me.Express thanksMany thanks for yourPlease accept my sincere appreciation/thanks forI am truly grateful to you for CongratulationsCongratulations on your success/achievements!Im so glad to hear of your winning the prize in the contest.Please accept my heartiest congratulation on your graduation fromI want to congratulate you with all my heart.Please allow me to congratulate you on Please allow me to extend my hearty congratulations to you.SympathyOur deepest sympathy is with you.We wish to express our sympathy with you in your loss and to let you know that our thoughts are with you.Im most grieved to learn of I would like to express my sorrow at We were shocked at the sad news that Exercises Your classmate,Jimmy,is head of the universitys swimming club.He has invited you to join the club,but you like some other sport.Write him a note,declining his invitation and explaining why.Suggested answerApril 22nd,2007Dear Jimmy,Its very kind of you to invite me to join the universitys swimming club.I am most grateful to be asked.However,Ive already joined a basketball club.You know I like playing basketball very much.Im afraid I do not have enough time to take part in two sports.I am very sorry for that and really regret that I would miss such an excellent chance of enjoying swimming with you.Yours,Mike Yesterday you failed to turn up for the appointment with your teacher,Professor Wang.Write him a note of apology and make a request for another meeting.You should also suggest the time for the requested meeting.Suggested answerMay 15,2010Dear Professor Wang,I am terribly sorry that I missed the appointment with you.Yesterday,my grandma suddenly went ill,and my parents were not at home,so I had to take her to hospital.When I got to your office,it was too late,and you had already left.Please forgive me.I know youre busy these days,but I wonder if you could agree to meet me at 2 oclock on Friday afternoon.Im looking forward to your early reply.Your truly,Li Ping Marking system in TEM4 composition marks are given according to overall impression.Basically,four elements are taken into consideration.Firstly,content should be to the point.All ideas and details should be closely related to the topic and the main theme which is often clearly stated already.Secondly,all ideas and details should be logically and smoothly connected by careful arrangement,by using connectors or other transitional devices.Thirdly,the composition shows no mistakes in grammar and usage.Lastly,the paper exhibits a lucid and neat layout,which includes appropriate title,identifiable handwriting,proper capitalization,indention of each paragraph,proper punctuation,correct spelling.TEM4作文评分标准（作文评分标准（2009）说明说明：该项目满分15分。根据考生的思想思想与表达、语言运用能力和写作规范与表达、语言运用能力和写作规范分别打分。分项可以打0.5分。“思想与表达思想与表达”满分为满分为7分，按考生的表现分，按考生的表现赋分：赋分：1234567较差 一般 良好 优秀“语言运用能力语言运用能力”满分为满分为6分，按考生的表现赋分：分，按考生的表现赋分：123456较差 一般 良好 优秀“写作规范写作规范”满分为满分为2分，按考生的表现赋分：分，按考生的表现赋分：0.511.52较差 一般 良好 优秀（I）思想与表达（）思想与表达（ideas and arguments）（满分：（满分：7分）分）思想内容（思想内容（idea content）内容切题内容充实观点明确论据支持论点有独到见解表达效果（表达效果（effectiveness）表达清晰流畅有说服力篇章组织结构篇章组织结构(rhetorical organization)每段有主题句句间衔接自然段间过度自然第一部分明确提出观点最后一部分自然得出结论段落排列自然合理（II）语言运用能力）语言运用能力(Language use)(满分：满分：6分分)准确性（准确性（correctness）语法正确句子结构正确固定搭配正确习语正确用词准确丰富性丰富性(richness)词汇丰富句子形式多样得体性得体性(appropriateness)语气恰当语言地道流利度（流利度（fluency）完成规定词数（III）写作规范（）写作规范（Mechanics）(满分：满分：2分分)单词拼写正确标点符号正确大小写正确书写美观卷面整洁 Pattern of a Typical Miniature TEM4 Writing The introductory paragraphWith a view to piquing the readers curiosity,arousing the reader interest and drawing their attention to the topic,you should usually include in the introductory paragraph the following:1)offering some basic background information about the topic;2)referring to the topic;3)stating your point of view on the topic the body The body is the main part of an assay,which clearly and logically presents your facts,ideas and examples.In this part,you should fully discuss what is introduced in the opening,and your discussion should be a natural and logical follow-up of the beginning.the concluding paragraphThe conclusion of an essay should be concise,emphatic and forceful.It is often made up of a summary of the main points discussed,a restatement of your viewpoint,and,if possible,a naturally extended proposal.Remember to leave a deep impression on your readers.A well-organized essay should be properly-proportioned.It is advisable that the largest portion should be devoted to the body(70%),for the discussion of the topic is the most informative and important part.The introduction and conclusion in an essay are normally brief(15%each).Turning off TV:A Quiet Hour It is reported that Americans watch TV almost for more than ten hours on average every day(事实陈述作引言).I would like to propose that for sixty minutes each evening,all television broadcasting in the United States be prohibited by law(引出中心思想 作者的观点).Let us take a serious,reasonable look at what the results might be if such a proposal were accepted(段落主题句与全文中心思想紧密相关).Families might use the time for a real family hour(层次1).(举例说明)Without the distraction of TV,they might sit around together after dinner and actually talk to one another about their problemsfrom the generation gap to the high divorce rate to some forms of mental illness.By using the quiet family hour to discuss their problems,they might get to know each other better,and to like each other better.Free from TV,families could rediscover more active pastimes(层次2).(举例说明)They might take a ride together to watch the sunset.Or they might take a walk together and see the neighborhood with fresh,new eyes.With free time and no TV,children and adults might rediscover reading(层次3).(进一步解释)There is more entertainment in a good book than in a month of typical TV programming.Many things are often learned from reading.A more literate new generation could be a product of the quiet hour.The idea of an hour without TV is not radical.During the quiet hour,Americans can talk,read,play games and invent new activities(总结).Why not have a tryTurn off TV for a quiet hour(提出倡议)Television as a Better Source of News Among the three mass mediatelevision,newspaper and radio,I regard television as a better source of news(表明自己的观点).My statement that television is a better source of news(段首句用同位语从句与首段中心思想衔接)is based on the following two reasons(对全段内容加以限定).The first reason is that television can report news more quickly(层次1).We can get the news at the same time when something is happening or immediately after something happened(拓展句).However(转折,引出其它媒体的缺点),newspapers can only offer the news that happened a day or two days ago.The second reason is that television can report news more vividly and impressively(层次2).With sounds and pictures on TV,we can be deeply impressed by the news as if we were personally on the spot(拓展句).But(转折,指出其它媒体的不足)when we try to get news from the newspaper or radio,we have to make efforts to form a concrete image,which is always tiresome and time-consuming.According to the above mentioned reasons,we can easily draw a conclusion that television is really superior to other media for obtaining news.The Main difference Between My College Life and My Middle School LifeEvery college student would agree that campus life in college is different from that in middle school.But what is the main difference between college life and middle school life after all?(提问式作引言句)My answer is always the same:in college I enjoy a greater degree of independence(表明观点).I prefer college life to middle school life mainly because I am independent both in daily life and in my academic studies(段首句表原因,随后作比较).In college I will arrange my daily life by myself and make decisions of my own will.As for academic study,I have a plenty of free time after class for self-study and learn whatever I am interested in.To be successful in all the courses I have to learn,I even can have a workable plan of my own.In contrast,I lived a dependent life in middle school.My daily life was arranged all by my parents.I even could not decide what to eat and what to wear,for my parents usually had the final say.And I was jammed with what the teachers wanted to feed me,without considering whether I really liked to learn or not.In short,my college life is quite different from my middle school life.In college,I am much more independent in my daily life and study.To those new comers,I would suggest that they rely on themselves and be an independent man(通过比较得出结论,并提建议).Will Tourism Bring Harm to the Environment?With the improvement of our life standard,people have more money to spend on tourism.Now,tourism is a booming business in China.But,some people worry that too many tourists could bring harm to the environment,while others oppose.For my part,I agree with the first opinion.There are several reasons for my opinion.Firstly,it is difficult to tell too many tourists to obey the rules of the place they visit.And,although they learned this rules,most of them dont want to obey the rules.They want to do everything at will.Moreover,more people in one place will cause more argues.When they have a argue with each other,the argue always will convert into fight.And,they may damage the public resource.Finally,too many people have a travel will lead to a crowed in bus,trans and planes.This sistuation is very obious in the goldern week.For many people,they dont visit for a true purpose.So,I think we should have our own activities,not always have a tour.Even if we have a tour,we should obey the rules,and protect our environment.得分：4评语：部分跑题，论据荒唐，语言差。Will Tourism Bring Harm to the Environment?Currently,theres much talk about whether tourism bring harm to the environment.Some people think tourism doesnt damage the environment seriously,while others hold the different opinions.They think tourism bring us more damage than its benefits.As far as I am concerned,I side with the former,in the belief that tourisms benefits are larger than its shortages.Admittedly,tourism bring harm to the environment,as advocated by many,has its important role to play in protecting the environment.As is known to all,more tourism means more damage to the environment.However,there are numerous merits for tourism that giving us.First things first,tourism brings us a lot of advantages in economy.That is to say,the better the tourism is,the more money we will make.Take 2008 Olympic Games as an example,the Games attract sounds of tourists all over the world to Beijing,which give a push to Beijings shops and places of interests.As a result,Beijing develops its markets largely.Second,tourism contributs a lot to environment protecting.All of us know that we should pay much attention to environment protecting as to make a progress in tourism.Its necessary to have a lasting development.For instance,Beijing had made a lot of preparation to protect the environment during the Olympic Games.Obviously,there was not much damage in Beijing because of tourism booming.Taking all these considerations into account,we can safely draw the conclusion that tourism can not bring much damage to our environment.And to make sure of it,our governments should take kinds of measures to protect the environment.得分：7评语：观点混乱，论据不够充分，表达较生硬，词汇，语法，和拼写错误多Will Tourism Bring Harm to the Environment?As the rapid development of market economy and increasing income,it is natural for people in China to seek for material enjoyments.And many of them choose to travel,which can both relax themselves and broaden their minds.However,as far as Im concerned,as tourism brings a lot of good to modern people,it can also bring harm to our environment.To begin with,when we travel to a famous place,we often buy those food that are especially produced only in that area.It is often the case that we drop wasted food around after finishing eating it.For example,we can often find food that is used to feed animals thrown on the ground in a zoo.In addition,many symbolic buildings of places of interest are easy to be damaged by people of low awareness.They may write on them to recollect his or her trip.Whats more