读后续写与概要写作微技能九-高分开头课件.ppt
浙江高考读后续写已经进行了多次。如何写好读后续写在高考中博取阅卷老师的眼球获得梦寐以求的高分，如何让学生的作品在高考中脱颖而出，获得20高分这是很多老师和学生一直不懈努力的课题。如何写好读后续写的开头？可以使用哪些写作技能和手法？我们一起来探究一下一个好的故事开头就好比是一堂成功的课的导入，能够迅速抓住学生和老师们的兴趣，并且愿意听下去，跟着授课老师的思路走。一个好的故事开头就好比是一个带着香味十足的诱饵，诱使读者上钩并且饶有趣味地读完。而一个拙劣的故事开头，定会让读者大倒胃口，恹恹欲睡。“Well begun is half done！”可见，写好一个故事的好开头是多么的重要。微技能九高分开微技能九高分开头头语言输入素材积累，为续写奠基下面介绍12种常见的开头方式。1巧用副词Carefully,he stepped over all the broken glass.Joyfully he skipped up the street.(10月浙江卷)Para.1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Immediately,an absolute darkness ruled the forest.(时间副词衔接环境描写)2巧用形容词短语Curious to know what was inside,he tiptoed into the dark cave.(10月浙江卷)But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Desperate and hopeless,Jane knelt down,tears streaming down her face.(并列情绪形容词)(10月浙江卷)It was daybreak when Jane woke up.Weak as she was,she struggled to her feet,continuing searching for assistance.(状态形容词as/though 引导的倒装句)(20186月浙江卷)Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.Afraid that I might hurt the lovely small creature,I automatically let out a cry to stop my horse.(情绪形容词从句)(20186月浙江卷)Para.2:We had no idea where we were and it got dark.Exhausted and hungry,I wondered if we could find our way back.3巧用分词短语Looking around him cautiously,he slipped into the room and softly closed the door.Exhausted,he was glad the race was finally over.(10月浙江卷)But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Feeling disappointed,Jane had to stay alone for another night.(现在分词情绪形容词)4巧用连词As he walked,he whistled.Although he was afraid,he jumped right in.5巧用介词短语At the end of the lane he suddenly stopped.6巧用对话或独白“Lets see who gets there first！”Rachel shouted,as she pedaled fast and zoomed past Jenny.“Hold on tight！”My father yelled.We just finished bucking in as the coaster jerked into motion.This was my first roller coaster ride.(20176月浙江卷)The car abruptly stopped in front of him.“Get into the car.”Paul shouted at Mac.7描述人物性格Mark is a studious boy who loves reading.His classmates often tease him for being too hardworking and they call him Mr.Smart.One afternoon,while studying at home.8描述感情The moment she saw how she did for her science test,tears started welling up in Tinas eyes and falling down her cheeks.9描写环境I closed my eyes to enjoy the gentle breeze and the sounds of the clashing waves.Gently opening my eyes,I saw my parents taking a relaxing stroll along the beach.(201711月浙江卷)Para 2:We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.I looked out of the car window,winding rivers,lofty mountains,sunny beaches and deep valleys holding me entirely in their fascination.(视觉环境描写拟人)10描写动作Furry started wagging his tail and running around in circles when he saw his master taking a leash out from the drawer.Furry was all ready for his evening walk.(201711月浙江卷)The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.Dad exchanged a glance with me.Why not camp to satisfy mom？(动作描写问句衔接)11描写声音BOOM,CRASH!The wind was howling outside of my house.We were having a terrible thunder storm.I was very scared.12问题引入Why does trouble always follow me around?Do I have a“kick me”sign on my back or something?.基础练习补全句子1_(说不出一句话)，he was rooted to the spot.2It was daybreak when Jane woke up._(感到神清气爽),she continued to walk along the stream to find the way out.3_(一看到这条蛇)，the little girl screamed at the top of her voice.Unable to say a wordFeeling refreshedAt the sight of the snake语言输出层级训练，让续写添彩4_(山洞很黑)and everything was silent.I couldnt even see my hand in front of my face.I knew this adventure was going to be something that I would never forget.5_(你曾经自驾游吗)？Let me tell you an exciting trip my family took this summer.The cave was darkHave you ever been on a self-driving trip.综合演练完成读后续写，注意开头方式阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。I still remember it，like it was yesterday when my parents told me the newsIt was the week before Christmas on Thursday morning when my parents said,“Stacy,start packing your things so we can go to Florida for the holidays”“Okay，”I responded.We do this every year for Christmas and New Year.Its kind of a family tradition we have.We go every year because we like to visit some family members living in Florida.There has never been a year when weve missed a trip to Florida for the holidays.I was so excited to go on this trip because Christmas is my favorite holiday,but to top it off I was going to get to celebrate it with my family.The next morning，my mother entered my room.“Stacy,wake up！We need to go to the airport so that we can get our plane tickets to Florida before they sell out.”I jumped out of bed and got ready as fast as I could.When we were on our way to the airport，I couldnt stop talking and smiling because I was too excited about getting our tickets.“Arent you just excited to go to Florida？”I asked.“Yes,I am.We can finally catch up with the family and drink hot cocoa，”responded my mother.The airport was so crowded.Some people were leaving to other countries and others were just visiting for the holiday.There was such a huge line in the airport because so many different people were buying plane tickets.When it was our turn,my mother said，“Three tickets to Florida on Christmas Eve please.”The lady working there responded，“Well,you guys are lucky.You got the last three tickets to Florida.”My mother and I both smiled in relief and paid for our tickets and went back home to finish packing.【根据提示完成范文】Paragraph 1：When we arrived home,we found father was lying on the floor,bleeding._.(尽管我们很诧异，我们还是把他立即送往医院。)With the help of doctors,my father came back to life on Christmas_Eve,which made our family pleased.My parents loved each other very much,so my mother kept my father company day and night，completely forgetting the trip to FloridaAfter my father woke up,he said sorry to us and told us everything that had happened to him.Though we felt very surprised,we sent him to hospital at once.Paragraph 2：After we left for the airport to buy tickets,a man climbed into our house to steal money.My father caught him and bravely fought with him,but unfortunately the man hurt my father.Hearing the news，we were proud of him.On Christmas Eve,we held a party in hospital for my father.Everyone got together around the Christmas tree and sang Christmas songs to him.That Christmas Eve was quite unusual and meaningful.I will never forget the time I spent with my father on Christmas Eve in hospital.
