高中英语写作总体指导.pptx

Students Book 11 Writing Class桦甸四中：于芝甸四中：于芝Assessment&practice of Writing高中英语复习高中英语复习写作讲评课写作讲评课我我们一起研究高考一起研究高考系列之系列之写作写作英英语高考第高考第II卷卷(满分分35分分)第一第一节 短文改短文改错（10分）分）第二第二节 书面表达（面表达（25分）分）(如何找到有效的增分点？如何找到有效的增分点？)Assessment:S高考英高考英语评分原分原则：1.本本题总分分为25分，按分，按5个档次个档次给分。分。2.评分分时，先根据文章的，先根据文章的内容和内容和语言言初步确初步确定其所属档次，然后以定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确档次的要求来衡量，确定或定或调整档次，最后整档次，最后给分。分。3.词数数少于少于80和和多于多于120的，从的，从总分中分中减去减去2分。分。4.评分分时应注意的主要内容注意的主要内容为：内容要点内容要点，应用用词汇和和语法法结构构的的丰富性丰富性和和准确性准确性及上下文的及上下文的连贯性性。高考英高考英语评分原分原则：5.拼写与拼写与标点符号点符号是是语言准确性的一个方面。言准确性的一个方面。评分分时，应视其其对交交际影响的程度予以考影响的程度予以考虑。英，。英，美拼写及美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。用法均可接受。6.如如书写写较差差以至影响交以至影响交际，将其，将其分数降低分数降低一个档次一个档次。7.语言首先要求准确通言首先要求准确通顺。8.鼓励写出新鼓励写出新颖词汇，顺畅连接和复接和复杂结构。构。老老师阅卷看什么？卷看什么？一看字体（字体工整）二看语言（语言高级）三看内容（要点齐全）四看结构（三段式结构）一看字体一看字体二看二看语言（言（语言高言高级）高级词汇与句式修辞手法有效的连词名人名句、谚语的运用 1.高高级词汇短短语基本原则1.词组优先原则2.避免重复原则3.后高长原则后学到、较高级、较长词汇1.词组优先原先原则【原文】Anewrailwayisbeingbuiltinmyhometown.修正Anewrailwayisunderconstructioninmyhometown.原文Ilikereadingwhilemybrotherlikeswatchingtelevision.【修正】Ilikereadingwhilemybrotherenjoyswatchingtelevision2.避免重复原避免重复原则后学到、较高级、较长词汇原词：HardVeryPayattentiontoHappyMoreandmore替换词：DiligentlyRather,extremelyAttachimportancetoDelightedenjoyableTheincreasingnumberof3.后高长原则eg:电脑在我们的生活中是十分重要的。1.Computersareveryimportantinourlife.2.Computersplayaveryimportantroleinourlife.3.Computersareofgreatimportanceinourlife.1.为了学习音乐，她去了美国ShewenttoAmericainordertostudymusic.ShewenttoAmericaforthepurposeofstudyingmusic.2.我突然想到了个好主意lSuddenlyIthoughtoutagoodidea.lSuddenlyIcameupwithagoodidea.lAgoodideasuddenlystruckme.3.他昨天下午来的。lHecamehereyesterdayafternoon.lHedidntcomehereuntilyesterdayafternoon.lNotuntilyesterdayafternoondidhecomehere.lItwasyesterdayafternoonthathecamehere.（强调句）二二.使用非使用非谓语动词使句子使句子简洁高档高档三三.尝试多多样化表达方化表达方式式一一.使用使用较高高级词汇使文章增加吸引力使文章增加吸引力强调句句emphaticsentenceWith短短语复合复合结构构定定语从句从句attributiveclause，名名词性从句性从句(主主宾表同从句表同从句)各种状各种状语从句从句adverbialclauses被被动语态the passive voice 倒装句invertedsentence，省略句ellipticalsentence虚拟语气subjunctivemood，Game:连词滚雪球雪球每人拿一每人拿一张写有写有连词的的纸条，向后一个条，向后一个同学同学传达自己的达自己的连词，后一个同学，后一个同学给后面的同学后面的同学传达达时需要先需要先讲前面同学前面同学的的连词再再讲自己的自己的连词。最后一个同。最后一个同学，把自己一学，把自己一组所有的所有的连词讲出来，。出来，。首先首先：first of all ,to begin with,to start with,in the first place,此外此外：in addition,besides,furthermore,moreover,on the other hand，whats worse最后最后：finally,eventually,in general,in a word,in short,on the whole,to sum up,last but not least Concusion:一：高中英一：高中英语中表中表层次的次的连接接词because of,on account of,as a result/consequence of due to,owing to,thanks to三三.英英语作文中表作文中表转折的折的连接接词however,but,nevertheless,on the contrary,on the other hand二二.英英语作文中表作文中表因果因果的的连接接词therefore,thus,hence,consequently,since,as,because,名人名言、谚语Thereisanoldsayingthat.(常言道，）Game:将打乱的单词组成一句完整的名言或谚语。抢答!1.mothersuccessofisthefailureFailureisthemotherofsuccess.失败是成功之母。2.willaistheretherewhere,wayaisWherethereisawill,thereisaway.有志者事竟成。3.RomeroadstoleadallAllroadsleadtoRome.条条大路通罗马。4.louderspeakthanwordsactionActionspeaklouderthanwords事实胜于雄辩5.impossible,nothing,willing,to,a,mind,isNothingisimpossibletoawillingmind世上无难事，只怕有心人6.ishalfwelldonebegunhalfWellbegunishalfdone好的开端是成功的一半7.thandonesaideasierEasiersaidthandone说起来容易做起来难DISCUSSION:What is a good writing？How to catch the experts eye?DISCUSSION:What is a good writing？Content:everything needed included which is related to your view.(内容要完整内容要完整)（内容要点一个也不能（内容要点一个也不能丢，如果人家，如果人家给的是文字的是文字提示，可以用笔在提示，可以用笔在试题处标出出1,2,3,4，如果人，如果人家家给的是的是图，那要先看懂，那要先看懂图的意思，六个的意思，六个图都都要看看再要看看再动笔，不要看了一个笔，不要看了一个马上就写。）上就写。）DISCUSSION:What is a good writing？Structure:*Good beginning and ending(好的开好的开头结尾尾)*Well organized and smoothly developed (结构合理构合理,行文流行文流畅)Language:*No Chinglish(避免中文式英文避免中文式英文)*No Grammatical mistakes(没有没有语法法错误)*With exactly used words and relatively changed sentence patterns (词语的准确运用和句式的富于的准确运用和句式的富于变化化)Eg:第二第二节 书面表达面表达（满分分25分分）假定你是某中学的学生李假定你是某中学的学生李华。请用英用英语给出版社的出版社的编辑写写一一封信封信，表达你表达你对现在使用的英在使用的英语材料的看法材料的看法，内容主要包括内容主要包括：1.话题广泛广泛；2.图片丰富片丰富；3.有助于提高有助于提高 学学习兴趣。趣。建建议：适当降低适当降低词汇难度。度。注意注意：1.词数数100左右左右；2.可以适当增加可以适当增加细节，以使用文以使用文连贯；3.开开头语已已你你写好写好，不不计入入总词数。数。How to write a good composition?1)Use proper linking words(恰当使用恰当使用连接接词）As a result;In addition;To begin with;However使用恰当的连接词使用恰当的连接词 Use proper linking wordsDear Editor,As a student reader,I am writing to talk about the English textbooks published by your house.These books have many advantages._ One of them is that we can find a variety of topics,such as science,culture and history.These topics,I think,are very popular with us students.To begin with In my opinion;Therefore;However;whats more_,along with the texts there are many beautiful and colorful pictures,which can help us understand English better.Even the students who used to dislike English have turned out to be interested in the subject._,some of the texts have too many new words and expressions which are hard for us._,Id like to suggest changing them into easier ones.whats moreHoweverThereforeAvoid Chinglish!1)Traffic in Shanghai is too crowded.2)There has a highway connected with Beijing.3)Though shes almost 40，but she still plans to compete.4)I forgot my dictionary at home.5)It will cost us much money to buy one.heavy.leftistake改错I cant understand them when I meet new words,so I have to refer to them in the dictionary.The ability to read English passages is slowly.There is no doubt that English Study need lotsof time and efforts.Only by this way,can we keep up with otherstudents.Im LiHua,a new student of you.meet withlook uplowlearninginLi HuayoursMy English level is common and I cant speak verywell.I believe we can get alone well with each other.Besides,I think speaking English is as important aswriting English.I study English for 12 years so I think I know Englishvery well.There are some advice in teaching English.averageitalongspokenwrittenhave studiedisAdopt a variety of sentence patterns 使用较丰富的句式使用较丰富的句式1.They even threw rubbish into the lake.They totally ignored the noticeable sign No littering nearby.(使用使用V-ing形式形式)They even threw rubbish into the lake,_ the noticeable sign No littering nearby.(福建福建)totally ignoringAdopt a variety of sentence patterns 使用较丰富的句式使用较丰富的句式Not long ago I won the first prize in the English contest_in our school.(山山东)held2.Not long ago I won the first prize in the English contest.It was held in our school.(使用使用过去分去分词)3.To his surprise,the little girl knows so many things.(使用名使用名词性从句性从句)4.People suggest that the conference be put off.(改被改被动语态)_ the little girl knows so many things.What surprises him is that_the conference be put off.It is suggested that5.He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.(使用使用强调句型句型)6.I passed the physics exam because of your help.(用虚用虚拟语气）气）_he had read the news in the newspaper _ he knew what had happened._the physics exam _your help.It was not until I couldnt have passed thatbut for/withoutPlease learn to Your compositionyou finish from now on.书面表达评价表书面表达评价表 项目目 自自评 他他评1.书写工整写工整吗？有没有乱涂乱划？有没有乱涂乱划?2.句子开句子开头注意大小写了注意大小写了吗?3.有没有注意有没有注意标点符号点符号?4将文章分段了将文章分段了吗?分成了几段分成了几段?5有有单词拼写拼写错误吗?几个几个?6.有有时态错误吗?误用了哪种用了哪种时态?7.注意主注意主谓一致了一致了吗?8.有没有有没有语态的的错误?9.有没有使用关有没有使用关联词?使用得当使用得当吗?10.有没有有没有词性的性的错误?哪一种哪一种?11.简单句表达正确句表达正确吗?12.是否注意使用了复是否注意使用了复杂的句子的句子结构构?13.表达方式是否多表达方式是否多样化化?注意注意长短句搭配了短句搭配了吗?14.有没有用好有没有用好词好句好句?用了哪些用了哪些?Appreciate:ALetterofApp;ication假定你是学生李华，所在城市将举办国际文化交流活动，正网上招募志愿者。请你写一封申请书，志愿为此活动提供服务。注意：可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯，词数100左右。Followexcellence,successwillchaseyou追求卓越，成功就会跟随而至追求卓越，成功就会跟随而至Summary:1.Howtowriteagoodcompositionm2.Practice3.HowtoassessourowncompositionandothersThank you Homework：Homework:Book11WritingtheletterofApplicationHave a happy day!Have good luck in the College Entrance Examinations!AGametotestyourreaction:考考反应力：Dotheopposites!老师说lookup,同学就lookdown；老师说sitdown,同学就juststand；老师说raiseyourighthand,同学raiselefthand;老师说raiseyourlefthand,同学raiserighthand。语言高言高级高级词汇与句式修辞手法有效的连词名人名句、谚语的运用Summary:一看字体（字体工整）二看语言（语言高级）三看内容（要点齐全）四看结构（三段式结构）建建议:1.积累单词2.熟读，熟透课文3.学会积累好词好句4.练字Practice makes perfect!