托福写作话题解析及范文：关于20年后.docx

托福写作话题解析及范文：关于20年后 为了帮助大家高效备考托福，熟识托福写作范文，下面我给大家带来托福写作话题解析及范文：关于20年后，希望对大家托福备考有所帮助。 托福写作范文:20年后人们将运用比现在更少的车 首先，综合写作改套路了，听力不再去反对阅读了，而是去回答阅读中的问题。而独立写作的题目里竟然出现了一行小字： Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized example. 哦买尴!这简直就是继乒乓球由小改大后专为沦陷亚洲人而设计的规则变更嘛!帝国主义亡我之心不死啊! 宝宝们别慌。今日，我们就来给各位献上高分作文剖析。 (阅读提示：请大家先整体读一遍TPO35的题目及范文，后面会有我的分段解析) TPO 35 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 大神文章： The Earth today faces many problems. Among these problems, the top three, in some people's perspective, are probably global warming, pollution and energy crisis. All three, if we really look into them, can be connected with the pervasive use of private cars. It is because of this, I agree with the statement that there will be fewer cars in twenty years comparing with today. First of all, people will definitely use fewer cars. If we look at the global media, we are seeing an increasing consciousness on environmental problems. Be it the famous documentay by Al Gore, An Inconvenient Truth, or the "Earth One Hour" movement. They all indicate a global consensus: "We need to help the environment". So what's the easiest way to help? Using fewer cars. According to a survey conducted by the Ministry of Environmental Conservation in China, more than 40 percent of carbon dioxide produced by individuals are from private cars. If the trend of eco-friendly consciousness continues to grow in the next 20 years, people will, without a doubt, use fewer and fewer cars. So, in a nutshell, the first reason why people will drive less in twenty years is because they will be more environmentally-concerned. Another key aspect is that, in twenty years, there will be fewer people in the world. If there are fewer people in the world, of course there will be fewer cars. If we are sensitive to global trends, we can see that a lot of countries in the world are facing a decrease in population. The biggest contributors to population growth, China and India, are also experiencing a decrease in the rate of population increase. In 20 years, I am confident that there will be, without a doubt, fewer people in the world. In this case, there will be a decrease in the needs of transportation. So, it is logical to assume that there will be fewer cars in the world twenty years from now. A final argument I want to make is based on the ever developing technology. In the past twenty years, we have seen tremendous innovations taken place in the field of transportation. From high-speed trains to cars that run on electric, there is simply no telling what might happen twenty years from now. Considering how much we have achieved in the past twenty years, it is not so improbable for me to say that we might not even need cars in the near future. Who's to say that we won't be traveling on more efficient vehicles? Or maybe public transportation may become so convenient that we won't even consider using private transportation ever again? The fact is, we cannot deny these possibilities for they are very likely to happen. In this light, I am definitely supportive of the view that there will be fewer cars in the future. From my arguments above, I think I am very optimistic about the future. I believe that, in twenty years, we will be living in a society with much fewer cars. And I am looking forward to that future. 首先我们来破题。 这是传统的独立写作题型，由三句话组成：第一句 “Do you agree or disagree with the following statement”是考生要完成的task，其次句 “In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today”是写作话题topic，第三句 “Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer” 是题目给你的requirement。全部考生都知道一篇作文必需“扣题”，在托福作文里就是去扣这三句话。这样一说，你是不是立马理解了5分标准里的前两条了? 第一条“Effectively addresses the topic and task”，就是指扣题目里的前两句话。 其次条“Is well organized and well developed, using clearly appropriate explanations, exemplifications and/or details” 就是扣题目里的第三句话。读到这里，请各位宝宝们反思一句：扣题，你真的做到了吗? 因此，我们在写这道题时，就肯定要紧紧扣住“20年后人们将运用比现在更少的车”这个话题，并呈现这样的分段：开头段肯定要提出自己是否同意这个观点，正文段用reasons和examples去论证自己的观点，再用结尾段收束整篇文章，搞定。 再看看姚神的，啊呀，与我的分段方式不约而同呢!开头段立论，3个正文段发展，结尾段收束完备!有没有发觉很好地符合了5分标准其次条里面的“is well organized”?童鞋们现在还敢不敢乱分段了?哼(傲娇脸)。哈哈，接下来再细看每一段吧 文章分析 01 The Earth today faces many problems. Among these problems, the top three, in some people's perspective, are probably global warming, pollution and energy crisis. All three, if we really look into them, can be connected with the pervasive use of private cars. It is because of this, I agree with the statement that there will be fewer cars in twenty years comparing with today. 开头段最核心的功能是“立论”，也即回答题目的第一句话，表明自己的观点是同意还是不同意。姚神开头段的最终一句就是个明确的立论：同意题目观点。当然姚神在立论前还做了lead-in，作用是告知大家写这篇文章的背景，引起读者爱好。不过请留意，各位同学可别硬拽高端写法。假如你的打字速度呵呵哒，那么为师剧烈建议第一段干脆立论;否则正文段没时间好好写，那可就得不偿失啦。 02 First of all, people will definitely use fewer cars. If we look at the global media, we are seeing an increasing consciousness on environmental problems. Be it the famous documentay by Al Gore, An Inconvenient Truth, or the "Earth One Hour" movement. They all indicate a global consensus: "We need to help the environment". So what's the easiest way to help? Using fewer cars. According to a survey conducted by the Ministry of Environmental Conservation in China, more than 40 percent of carbon dioxide produced by individuals are from private cars. If the trend of eco-friendly consciousness continues to grow in the next 20 years, people will, without a doubt, use fewer and fewer cars. So, in a nutshell, the first reason why people will drive less in twenty years is because they will be more environmentally-concerned. 正文段的作用是啥?论证你的观点。换句话说，论证你的第一段立论。你第一段立的啥论，后面就要一门心思去证明它。假如正文段与第一段没有完备印证，而是走歪了，那就违反了5分标准里第三条的第一个词 “unity”(统一、一样)。此外，用啥论证?题目要求里不说了么，reasons and examples. 看看姚神这段，以段落中部的according to a survey为分界点，前面是reason，后面是example，是不是正中5分标准的下怀呢?曾经有同学问我：“老师，肯定要写example吗?我觉得老写my cousin Tom好low啊”答案请见姚神作文，example不肯定非要写cousin Tom或者隔壁老王嘛，你也可以写一个survey啊。当然，前提是，你真真实切地了解一个真实的survey，你可别到考场上自己胡编乱造啊。胡编乱造的最大特殊就是细微环节缺失，而考场临时凑出来的survey肯定会细微环节缺失，一看就是假的，想给你分都难啊! 最终，嘿嘿，不得不请大家留意一下，有木有发觉姚神第3句的documentary打错了，少了个字母 “r”?哈哈，其实呢，这种不影响读者理解的小笔误，就是5分标准里第四条的minor lexical errors(微小的单词错误)，是不会影响你拿满分哒! 03 Another key aspect is that, in twenty years, there will be fewer people in the world. If there are fewer people in the world, of course there will be fewer cars. If we are sensitive to global trends, we can see that a lot of countries in the world are facing a decrease in population. The biggest contributors to population growth, China and India, are also experiencing a decrease in the rate of population increase. In 20 years, I am confident that there will be, without a doubt, fewer people in the world. In this case, there will be a decrease in the needs of transportation. So, it is logical to assume that there will be fewer cars in the world twenty years from now. 再看姚神的其次个正文段。大家细看一下我挑出来的这些词：another key aspect, if, in 20 years, in this case, so. 有没有发觉有啥共同点?没错，它们都有连接作用，凸显前后文逻辑。许多同学在表达观点时，不擅长运用连接词，导致观点之间逻辑不紧密，让人感觉不到在一步步论证自己的观点。这就与5分标准第三条里的两个词 “progression(进展)”和 “coherence(连贯)”相悖。当然，假如你写了一堆连接词，但其实句意根本不是那层逻辑，那也是完全没用的。比如：“我喜爱吃苹果，所以我妈种了许多桔子。”这个句子里的确有连接词“所以”，然而这逻辑这位同学是在逗我吗?你好歹也要加个背景“我是捡来的”吧! 04 A final argument I want to make is based on the ever developing technology. In the past twenty years, we have seen tremendous innovations taken place in the field of transportation. From high-speed trains to cars that run on electric, there is simply no telling what might happen twenty years from now. Considering how much we have achieved in the past twenty years, it is not so improbable for me to say that we might not even need cars in the near future. Who's to say that we won't be traveling on more efficient vehicles? Or maybe public transportation may become so convenient that we won't even consider using private transportation ever again? The fact is, we cannot deny these possibilities for they are very likely to happen. In this light, I am definitely supportive of the view that there will be fewer cars in the future. 第三个正文段说到这会有同学打断我：“老师，我能不能只写两个正文段?”可以呀，大家看姚神这篇作文511个字，是大家在考场上能望其项背的么?能打400字就是考神附体了好么!所以，只写两个正文段，只要扣题了，发展清晰了，没有问题哒另外说下姚神这段的语言，用了两个rhetorical questions修辞性疑问句，在汉语里我们称之为“反问句”或“设问句”。这特别好地满意了5分标准里第四条的syntactic variety句法多样性。说到这里，有没有发觉姚神这篇作文真的是360度全景符合5分标准呢! 05 From my arguments above, I think I am very optimistic about the future. I believe that, in twenty years, we will be living in a society with much fewer cars. And I am looking forward to that future. 再看最终一段，最终一段其实在托福写作中的作用不大，收束全文再次点题即可。姚神的这段结尾除了中规中矩地收束以外，还加了句对将来的展望 “I am looking forward to that future”。但是还是提示大家别在展望上写太多哈，为师担忧你把展望写成了一个新观点，但却没有绽开它，那可就违反了well developed这一点啦。还是那句老话，高端写法别硬拽，乖乖把时间留下来去发展正文段吧 托福写作题目分析：20年后人们将有更多休闲时间 今日须要练习的写作题目: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In twenty years, people will have more leisure time. -2007.6.9 先针对如上写作题目写句子 在我看来，人们将来确定会拥有更多的休闲时间。因为科技发展速度惊人，以至于处理许多工作时都会更加地高效、省时、便捷。 翻译： 答案： In my point of view, people will definitely have more leisure time in the future, because technology has been developing at so fast a rate that it will be more efficient and, hence, time-saving for people to deal with most of their work. 汉英翻译练习对应的段落： 模拟主干段 (1)在我看来，人们将来确定会拥有更多的休闲时间。 (2)因为科技发展速度惊人，以至于处理许多工作时都会更加地高效、省时、便捷。 (3)二十年前的人们不敢想象每个人的办公桌上都有一台强大的电脑-须要用手填写的一天的表格，现在用计算机往往只须要一小时就能完成;尽管我并不知道，二十年后我们将用什么样的高科技工具来提高工作效率，但进一步提高闲暇时间是确定的。 (4)假如你回顾中国公共假日的历史，从每周休息一天，到一天半，最终演化到现在的双休日-你就会赞同社会进步对人们闲暇时间的增加的确很有促进。 托福写作语料库：20年后学生们是否不再运用纸媒书籍 【观点类】 In twenty years from now, students will not use printed books any more. 20年以后，学生们将不再运用纸媒书籍，是否认同? (2009年3月29 日) 【题目解析】20年以后，学生们不再运用纸媒书籍 = 电子书籍可以完全取得纸媒阅读，是否同意? 【作家立场】电子书籍有其优势，但是，纸媒书籍依旧不会被代替，尤其是对于学生而言。 【写作思路】让步反对：三分让步;七分反对 【新东方网薛鹏思路拓展】 纸媒书籍存在的理由和不行替代性： 1. 无论电子阅读多么便利和好玩，许多学生变更不了用纸媒书籍学习的习惯。例如，我的同龄人，他们不习惯也不喜爱电子书，尤其是以电子书作为教科书，因为电子阅读极其不便，无法随时地做标记和笔记。 2. 对比其他的电子读物，传统的纸媒有其优势。详细而言，许多电子小说可随意发表，质量难保证，但是，纸媒书籍，比较而言，内容优质。 例如，作为文学爱好者，我喜爱阅读文学作品， 网络小说很少吸引我，因为其内容比较庸俗，文笔很差，极少带来阅读快感。相反，我自己喜爱阅读一本名为作家的杂志，我不读网络杂志，因为拿到一本新书的感觉很踏实，淡淡的墨香激发我立即阅读的爱好。 手机阅读或网络阅读的利好：(让步段) 我承认，电子阅读也有其流行的理由，例如：储存量大，携带便利，价格低廉，资源丰富，比较环保。但是，我想反对的是：电子阅读也有其弊端。比如，长期接触电子辐射有害视力，另外，电子书库信息量很大，有时候，我们反而无从选择自己的喜爱的书籍。 【尾段总结】电子阅读仅仅是传统阅读的一种有效的补充，而非替代品。 【新东方网薛鹏原创语料库】 【基础写作语料库】 1. printed books n印刷书籍 2. e-reading n电子阅读 3. deeply rooted reading habit n 根深蒂固的阅读习惯 4. can never replace traditional way of reading v恒久无法代替传统的阅读方式 5. A and B are not mutually exclusive 和 不是相互排斥的 【新东方网薛鹏原创语料库】 1. The past century has witnessed tremendous technological progress and these changes re-shaped some peoples reading choices. 一百年来，科技在进步，这种进步也变更了许多人的阅读选择。 解析：tremendous = great 巨大的 2. People still read, however，some people might have different preferences such as on-line reading or appreciating their favorite books via the cell phone 人们依旧在阅读，但是，人们的喜好或许在改变，例如许多人喜爱网络阅读和手机阅读。 解析：via prep通过 3. Some people argue that if the popularity of e-reading keeps expanding at current rate, our reading will be dominated by on-line or cell phone reading two decades later 有人认为假如电子阅读以这样的速度上升，20年后，手机阅读和网络阅读最终将会占据主导地位。 4. It is true that the number of reading printed books is， to some extent，declining, but, this trend does not necessarily indicate conventional way of reading will give way to e-reading. 的确，那些阅读印刷书籍的人数在肯定程度上削减，但是，这不肯定意味着电子阅读会取代传统阅读。 5. The quality of many e-books cannot be ensured because almost every individual can publish articles on line，conversely，reading printed books with excellent contents can stir readers imagination, tap their creativity and deepen their insights into their lives. 因为几乎人人可以发表网络文章，所以，许多电子读物的质量难以保障，相反，阅读内容优质的纸媒书籍可以激发人的想象力，开发人的创建性，加深人对于生活的洞察。 6. Indeed，I have to concede that many readers，especially teenagers, seem to be drawn to the popular e-reading.我承认，许多人，尤其是青少年读者，好像被被流行的电子阅读所吸引。 7. Nonetheless，I want to rebut that on no account can we neglect the downsides triggered by e-reading. 但是，我想反对的是任何状况下我们不能忽视电子阅读带来的弊端。 8. First，as for some of my peers，it is hard for them to change deeply rooted habit of reading printed books or newspapers. 对于我的许多同龄人而言，他们很难变更根深蒂固的阅读纸媒的习惯。 9. No matter how convenient or amusing e-reading is，I still have a preference for reading printed newspapers and magazines.无论电子阅读多么便利和好玩，我依旧喜爱阅读印刷版的报纸杂志。 10. For example，as a literature fancier，I take keen interest in reading a magazine entitled Writer，I can either read printed book or and enjoy on-line magazine， however， I still have a sentimental attachment to the traditional way of reading 例如，我是文学发烧友，很喜爱阅读一本名为作家的杂志，我可以选择购买书籍，也可以选择网络阅读，但是，我始终对于传统的阅读方式更加依靠. 解析：have a sentimental attachment to 对于有情感的依恋 11. The ink fragrance of the book never fails to make me feel at ease, when holding a newly published magazine, I usually have an impulse of browsing the book and make some personal notes immediately .一本新书散发着墨香，拿在手里，比较踏实，我可以随时笔记。 解析：make me feel at ease v使我感到心安 12. E-books enjoy their unique merits. To name just a few, e-books have large storage room, are easy to carry, have rich on-line resources and so on 电子阅读有其独有的利好, 例如，电子书存储量大，携带便利，资源丰富等等。 13. Seen from the perspective of health, chronic exposure to the screen might impair ones eyesight 从健康的角度而言，长期接触电子辐射有害视力。 解析：chronic adj 长期的 解析：impair ones eyesight v 有害视力 14. With the availability of an ocean of e-books，sometimes，it is hard for readers to select their favorite books. 电子书库信息量很大，有时候，读者反而无从选择他们的喜爱的书籍。 15. The ideal learning effect created by printed books can never be matched by e-reading. 运用纸媒书籍，效果更佳，电子阅读，难以实现。 托福写作话题解析及范文：关于20年后本文来源：网络收集与整理，如有侵权，请联系作者删除，谢谢！第21页 共21页第 21 页 共 21 页第 21 页 共 21 页第 21 页 共 21 页第 21 页 共 21 页第 21 页 共 21 页第 21 页 共 21 页第 21 页 共 21 页第 21 页 共 21 页第 21 页 共 21 页第 21 页 共 21 页