英语写作课件(教育精品).ppt
高三英语写作复习讲评课高三英语写作复习讲评课Assessment&Practice of WritingBy Money from Longwan High School 一个周六的下午，一个周六的下午，“绿眼睛绿眼睛”环保组织成员李华环保组织成员李华和王平在河边开展环保行动时发现了一只小鸟受伤了，和王平在河边开展环保行动时发现了一只小鸟受伤了，在地上无法飞行，于是他们展开了抢救行动。你就此在地上无法飞行，于是他们展开了抢救行动。你就此事写一篇新闻报道。要点如下：事写一篇新闻报道。要点如下：1、时间、地点、情景、时间、地点、情景2、描述处理方法，包括救助，治疗、描述处理方法，包括救助，治疗3、简要谈谈你的感想。、简要谈谈你的感想。注意：字数注意：字数100120；参考词汇：绿眼睛环保组织：；参考词汇：绿眼睛环保组织：Green Eyes.ASSESSMENTstructureThe article is divided into parts.contentAll the details are includedEverything is to the point(切切题题).LanguageTry to use some linking/transitional words(过过渡渡词词).Few mistakes.Advanced vocabulary（高（高级词汇级词汇）.Some good sentence patterns（句式）（句式）.HandwritingSaving The Wounded Bird One Saturday afternoon,Li Hua and Wang Ping,members from Green Eyes,are carrying out an environmental protection activity along the riverside when they found a bird lying on the ground._,they picked it up and found it wounded.In no time,they took out a piece of cloth and then dressed the wounded part.Having_(perform)a series of first aid,they held the bird in their hands._,it came to life and started moving.What appearanced on their faces was the happiness of saving a life._Obviously _their kindness _ saved the wounded bird,and it increases our awareness of environmental protection because the earth is home to all the animals as well as human beings.没有犹豫没有犹豫 Without hesitationit is thatwhichwereI think 令他们高兴的是令他们高兴的是To their delight 很很值值得去做得去做这这事情事情 its worthwile for them to do such a thing.performedHaving dug a square pit first,the foreigners put a sapling into it.Having done/doing something.,sb.种了几棵种了几棵树树，我感到非常的高，我感到非常的高兴兴。_several trees,I feel delighted.一一到那里，大家到那里，大家就就开始种开始种树树了。了。_ there,everybody began planting trees.看他看他们们甜蜜的微笑，我能想象他甜蜜的微笑，我能想象他们们是多么的开心是多么的开心。_,I can imagine how delighted they are.PracticeHaving planted ArrivingSeeing the sweet smiles_surprises me most is that so many enthusiastic _surprises me most is that so many enthusiastic people participate in it.people participate in it.WhatWhat我想说的是我们必须要保护环境。我想说的是我们必须要保护环境。_ is that we must protect the environment.What I want to say_ that there are many foreigners planting trees.To my surprise,It surprises me a lot that.hold the sapling carefully and.put the earth back to the pit.It is his mother who helps the little boy plant a tree.这这个好的个好的传统传统活活动应该传动应该传承下去。承下去。_ the good traditonal activity _should be passed down from generation to generation.It is/wasthat/whoIt is that 在植树节这天种树是很有意义的。在植树节这天种树是很有意义的。_to plant trees on Tree-planting Day.It is+adj.(for sb)to do.It is _ for the boy to plant trees with his mother.It is meaningful unforgettable 3月月12日早上在温州会昌河畔举行保护温瑞塘河为主题的植日早上在温州会昌河畔举行保护温瑞塘河为主题的植树节活动。你就此事写一篇新闻报道。要点如下；树节活动。你就此事写一篇新闻报道。要点如下；1.时间、地点、情景；时间、地点、情景；2.描述图片内容，包括师描述图片内容，包括师(外教外教)生、母子种树等生、母子种树等3.简要谈谈你的感想（至少简要谈谈你的感想（至少2点）。点）。注意：字数注意：字数100120 参考词汇：植树节参考词汇：植树节 Tree-planting Day 树苗树苗 sapling 3月月12日早上在温州会昌河畔举行保护温瑞塘河为主题的植树节日早上在温州会昌河畔举行保护温瑞塘河为主题的植树节活动。你就此事写一篇活动。你就此事写一篇新闻报道新闻报道。要点如下；。要点如下；1.时间、地点、情景；时间、地点、情景；On the morning of March 12th.Near the Huichang Riverside._ an activity to protect the Wenrui River.Its theme is to protect the Wenrui River.There was an activity held near the Huichang Riverside with the purpose of protecting the Wenrui River on the morning of March 12th.A good many people were planting trees there.In order to protect the WenRui River,an activity whose purpose was to plant trees was carried out by plenty of students as well as some foreign teachers along the Huichang River on Tree-planting Day.There was 3月月12日早上在温州会昌河畔举行保护温瑞塘河为主题的植树日早上在温州会昌河畔举行保护温瑞塘河为主题的植树节活动。你就此事写一篇新闻报道。要点如下；节活动。你就此事写一篇新闻报道。要点如下；1.时间、地点、情景；时间、地点、情景；2.描述图片内容，包括师描述图片内容，包括师(外教外教)生、母子种树等生、母子种树等3.简要谈谈你的感想（至少简要谈谈你的感想（至少2点）。点）。注意：字数注意：字数 80左右左右 参考词汇：植树节参考词汇：植树节 Tree-planting Day 树苗树苗 saplingTips:try to use the sentence patterns/linking words/advanced vocabulary.In order to protect the WenRui River,an activity whose purpose was to plant trees was carried out by plenty of students as well as some foreign teachers along the Huichang River on Tree-planting Day.What most surprised me was that there were foreign teachers and students planting trees together.Some were digging holes,while others were putting saplings into the holes.Having planted some trees,they smiled.Besides,a hard-working mother with her son planted trees happily,which left me a deep impression.As we know,it is the environment that is getting worse.Therefore,its high time that we should take actions to save it and pass on the tradition.And only by putting it into practice can the earth grow more beautiful.(117words)Help me,help you,help everyone.Return GREEN to the earth!Help me,help you,help everyone.Return GREEN to theEarth!英文写作英文写作“四步走四步走”1）动笔之前一般都要先打腹稿。在确）动笔之前一般都要先打腹稿。在确 立中心上、运用材料上、篇章结构上，立中心上、运用材料上、篇章结构上，充分酝酿。充分酝酿。2）考虑好想写多少句子，该用哪些动词和）考虑好想写多少句子，该用哪些动词和 词组等。词组等。3）边写边思考内容的连贯性，语言和句子）边写边思考内容的连贯性，语言和句子 的准确性。的准确性。4 4）写完后一定要再细看一遍。）写完后一定要再细看一遍。连词成句时要注意：连词成句时要注意：1、句子与句子的衔接是否自然。、句子与句子的衔接是否自然。2、开头和结尾是否恰当。如果必要，、开头和结尾是否恰当。如果必要，加入开头句和结尾句；如果试卷给出加入开头句和结尾句；如果试卷给出了开头和结尾，则要注意自己的句子了开头和结尾，则要注意自己的句子和试卷上的句子的自然衔接。和试卷上的句子的自然衔接。认真检查、减少错误。认真检查、减少错误。检查时注意以下方面的问题：检查时注意以下方面的问题：、句子完整吗？、句子完整吗？、名词是否该加、名词是否该加s/es；是否要用冠词？；是否要用冠词？、动词时态是否正确、前后一致？、动词时态是否正确、前后一致？、此动词是否作谓语？形式对吗？、此动词是否作谓语？形式对吗？、此词该用形容词、此词该用形容词/名词、形容词名词、形容词/副词、副词、动词动词/名词形式？名词形式？、标点正确吗？、标点正确吗？、用了衔接词吗？、用了衔接词吗？、要点全了吗？、要点全了吗？What you can see on their faces is happiness and satisfaction.Their faceTired but happilyAn activity with the topic of protecting river carried out along the.What surprised us most was that many person varied children from the elder join in it.They digged a/the hole in order to put the trees into the soil.We also could see that many parents carried their children to join in the activity.Picture 1:It is in the Huichang River that has been held an activity.1月 January Jan.2月 February Feb.3月 March Mar.4月 April Apr.5月 May May 6月 June Jun.7月 July Jul.8月 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