高三公开课读后续写.pptx
With a giant tear in her eye,the little girl looked up at him.She forced a smile,saying“Thank you”and walked towards the door.Pappy thought of his daughter and said to the girl loudly,“How much have you got to spend?”Hearing this,the little girl counted money in her purse-two dollars.After thinking for a few seconds,Pappy said,“Today is Christmas Day and this is your lucky day.The bell costs two dollars.”The child went out,holding the special bell in her hand.Grade the story 第1页/共28页 Later that evening when Pappy was closing up the shop,he heard a familiar ringing.He couldnt believe his ears.The girl stood in the doorway,ringing the bell happily.Then Pappy got close to her and asked,“Have you changed your mind,Miss?”“No.My Momma says the present is for you.”said the child.Before Pappy had time to say another word,a young woman walked in.She said to Pappy,“Hello,Dad.”第2页/共28页How to polish your story?第3页/共28页润色文章的技巧 技 巧1.使用较高级的词汇2.使用较丰富的句式3.使用恰当的连接词proper conjunctionsabundant sentence patterns advanced words and phrases第4页/共28页How to polish your words?“小”心思丰满人物内心 Inner thoughts to portray the figures“小”词汇增加表达效果 Detailed verbs to make expressions powerful“小”细节丰富故事情节 Proper adv to enrich your story 第5页/共28页Tip1：“小”心思丰满人物内心悲伤快乐2016年10月高考作文 23分第6页/共28页Tip1：“小”心思丰满人物内心震惊2017年6月高考作文 23分第7页/共28页One day,the Brother,who had become a Monk,forced himself on the same road where he found accommodation years ago.He decided to visit the family.But the shabby cottage was nowhere to be found.He only found a splendid house.He thought the family might die.Suddenly,a man came out.The monk recognized him.It was the father of the family.So he asked,“Have you lived here?”Tip1：“小”心思丰满人物内心第8页/共28页One day,the Brother,who had become a Monk,forced himself on the same road where he found accommodation years ago.Driven by a sense of regret,he decided to visit the family.To his great surprise,the shabby cottage was nowhere to be found.He only found a splendid house.Upon thinking the family might have starved to death,he sighed with guilt.Suddenly,a man came out.The monk recognized him.It was the father of the family.So he asked,“Have you lived here?”Tip1：“小”心思丰满人物内心第9页/共28页Lets compare！He decided to visit the family.But the shabby cottage was nowhere to be found.He only found a splendid house.He thought the family might die.Driven by a sense of regret,he decided to visit the family.To his great surprise,the shabby cottage was nowhere to be found.He only found a splendid house.Upon thinking the family might have starved to death,he sighed with guilt.In conclusion，the description of inner thoughts can make our story more logical,reasonable,creative and powerful.第10页/共28页How to describe your inner feelings?1.Feeling happy/sad/angry/guilty/depressed,2.Driven by curiosity/a sense of regret/sympathy.或者是 Deeply touched/moved by3.,full of regret/anger/fear/gratitude/sadness4.To ones disappointment/surprise/delight/relief/astonishment5.in surprise/relief/anger 或者是with satisfaction/excitement(等于一个副词）6.具体的动作描写 stand frozen,jump with joy,tremble with anger,with tears filling ones eyes,with ones eyes wide open 等等第11页/共28页Lets have a try!1.Pappy said to the girl,“How much have you got to spend?”Driven by a sense of sympathy,Pappy said to the girl,“How much have you got to spend?”2.The child walked out,holding the special bell in her hands.The child went out with great joy,holding the special bell in her hands.第12页/共28页3.Then Pappy got close to her and asked,“Have you changed your mind,Miss?”Feeling puzzled,Pappy got close to her and asked,“Have you changed your mind,Miss?”4.She said to Pappy,“Hello,Dad.”With tears filling her eyes,she said to Pappy cheerfully,“Hello,Dad.”第13页/共28页 With a giant tear in her eye,the little girl looked up at him.She forced a smile,saying“Thank you”and walked towards the door.Pappy thought of his daughter.Driven by a sense of sympathy,Pappy said to the girl loudly,“How much have you got to spend?”Hearing this,the little girl counted money in her purse-two dollars.After thinking for a few seconds,Pappy said,“Today is Christmas Day and this is your lucky day.The bell costs two dollars.”The child went out with great joy,holding the special bell in her hand.第14页/共28页Later that evening when Pappy was closing up the shop,he heard a familiar ringing.He couldnt believe his ears.The girl stood in the doorway,ringing the bell happily.Feeling puzzled,Pappy got close to her and asked,“Have you changed your mind,Miss?”“No.My Momma says the present is for you.”said the child.Before Pappy had time to say another word,a young woman walked in.Tears filling her eyes,she said to Pappy cheerfully,“Hello,Dad.”第15页/共28页Tip 2：“小”词汇增加表达效果Brainstorming:tell saywhisper murmur speaktalk cry out shout respond reply explain scream roar announce declare yell call out 第16页/共28页The government _ a state of emergency.“Get out of my house!”The officer _.He _ something in his sleep.Seeing the film star,the fans _ with excitement.Asked why he was late,Alex _ that his car had broken down.Tip 2：“小”词汇增加表达效果declared roared murmured screamed explained 第17页/共28页1.The girl forced a smile,saying“Thank you.”and turned towards the door.2.Driven by a sense of sympathy,Pappy said to the girl loudly,“How much have you got to spend,Missy?”Lets have a try!murmuring called out 第18页/共28页3.After thinking for a few seconds,Pappy said,“Today is Christmas Day and this is your lucky Day.”4.“No.My Momma says the present is for you.”said the child.5.Tears filling her eyes,she said cheerfully,“Hello,Dad.”announcedexplainedcried out第19页/共28页What you are supposed to bear in mind:只要是记叙文，难以逃脱的动作描写肯定有，动嘴，动手与动脚。除了熟知各种说的表达方式外，请记住各种看，和各种走Eg:see,watch,observe,peep,look around,look back,stare at,glare at,glance at,catch sight of,lose sight of,etcEg:walk,run,wander,dash,stroll around,pace back and forth,step into,make ones way to,dance out,etc第20页/共28页 1.She forced a smile,murmuring “Thank you”and walked towards the door.2 The child went out with great joy,holding the special bell in her hand.3.Before Pappy had time to say another word,a young woman walked in.Tip 2：“小”词汇增加表达效果make her way to danced out stepped in 第21页/共28页 With a giant tear in her eye,the little girl looked up at him.She forced a smile,murmuring“Thank you”and made her way to the door.Pappy thought of his daughter.Driven by a sense of sympathy,Pappy called out,“How much have you got to spend?”Hearing this,the little girl counted money in her purse-two dollars.After thinking for a few seconds,Pappy announced,“Today is Christmas Day and this is your lucky day.The bell costs two dollars.”The child danced out with great joy,holding the special bell in her hand.第22页/共28页Later that evening when Pappy was closing up the shop,he heard a familiar ringing.He couldnt believe his ears.The girl stood in the doorway,ringing the bell happily.Feeling puzzled,Pappy got close to her and asked,“Have you changed your mind,Miss?”“No.My Momma says the present is for you.”explained the child.Before Pappy had time to say another word,a young woman stepped in.Tears filling her eyes,she cried out cheerfully,“Hello,Dad.”第23页/共28页 Topic：a shocking knife attack From Book 5 Unit5First Aid Anne Slade,mother of three,had been stabbed _ with a knife.She was lying in her front garden bleeding very _.Her hands had _ been cut off.Tip 3：“小”细节丰富故事情节 repeatedly heavily almost 第24页/共28页 With a giant tear in her eye,the little girl looked up at him.She forced a smile,murmuring“Thank you”and made her way to the door._,Pappy thought of his daughter.Driven by a sense of sympathy,Pappy called out,“How much have you got to spend?”Hearing this,the little girl counted money in her purse-two dollars_.After thinking for a few seconds,Pappy announced,“Today is Christmas Day and this is your lucky day.The bell costs _ two dollars.”The child danced out with great joy,holding the special bell in her hand.Suddenlyaltogetherexactly第25页/共28页Later that evening when Pappy was closing up the shop,he heard a familiar ringing.He couldnt believe his ears.The girl stood in the doorway,ringing the bell happily.Feeling puzzled,Pappy got close to her and asked,“Have you changed your mind,Miss?”“No.My Momma says the present is for you.”explained the little girl.Then,her mother stepped in.Tears filling her eyes,she cried out cheerfully,“Hello,Dad.”第26页/共28页Thank you for Thank you for your your attention!attention!第27页/共28页感谢您的观看。第28页/共28页
