读后续写：救援类---漂流瓶求救讲义-高三英语写作专项.docx

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Rescue in a BottleCurtis Whitson had rafted down the Arroyo Seco, a river in central California, several times before.    This year, Curtis Whitson knew the water-fall was coming. He figured he would get out of his raft into the shallow water, get down the rocks along ropes on either side of the falls, and continue on his way, as he had on a previous trip.But this year was different. Heavy snow and spring rains had turned the usually manageable falls into something fierce. And this year, instead of his friends, Whitsons companions were his girlfriend, Krystal Ramirez, and his 13-year-old son, Hunter. As the three of them approached the falls late in the afternoon of the third day of their camping trip, Whitson could tell from the increasing roar of water in the narrowing canyon(峡谷) that they were in serious trouble. There was no way theyd be able to get down the rocks as planned.  “The water was just roaring through there with tremendous force,” recalls Whitson, 45.   They had no smart phone service, and they hadnt seen a single person in the past three days. And Whitson knew that theyd be sharing the ground there with rattlesnakes and mountain lions.   As he was thinking what to do, Whitson hit on a bit of luck-he heard voices coming from the other side of the falls. He yelled, but the sound of the rushing water drowned him out.   “We have to get these people a message,” Whitson thought.   He grabbed a stick and pulled out his pocketknife to carve “Help” in it. Then he tied a rope to it so the people would know it wasnt just any stick. He tried throwing it over the falls, but it floated away in the wrong direction.   “Weve got to do something!” Whitson yelled to his son. “Have we got anything else?”   Then he spotted his water bottle. Whitson grabbed it and carved “Help!”on it. Ramirez also reminded him that he had a pen and paper in his backpack.   Whitson knew it was a slim hope. But he wrote “6-15 19:00 We are stuck here the waterfall. Get help please” and pushed the note into the bottle. This time, his throw over the waterfall was perfect.   “All right, thats all we can do,” Whitson told Hunter.   注意：    1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；Paragraph 1:It took 30 minutes to get back upstream to the beach where theyd had lunch.  _Paragraph 2:  The next morning, the helicopter returned. _文本大意：本文中，Whitson一家前往峡谷漂流并预计漂流结束可从山上爬下回到安全地带。由于冬雪融化和春雨如注被困在峡谷内。尝试了各种办法均已失败告终，由于没有携带任何通讯工具，无奈之下只得把求救纸条塞进瓶子扔进河流中希望能够获救。  分解故事情节：这篇续写关键的解题句是第二段的开头句，一个return便能提醒学生在第一段必须要写的内容-直升飞机来了又走。第一段也是先定下结尾走向。再根据首句提示，写好下一个情节：筋疲力尽到营地度过难熬的一个晚上听到直升飞机来的声响呼救失败（讨论原因：天黑和水咆哮声）直升飞机又走了。此处可让学生讨论，引导学生去抓主要动作。其次结尾的定格可让学生自行选择-是由人物说出口还是通过场景描述来定格。提纲：切勿把故事复杂化。飞机来了发现他们仨他们被救得知自己如何获救点题结尾。情节走向：第一段：细节一方面描述人物如何面对难熬的黑夜和飞机来了又走了情绪变化。此处穿插合适的夜色描写。配图帮助学生构建画面感。带着学生一句一句去添加细节和过渡句子。给予学生两种不同的结尾。    第二段：细节着重于直升飞机降落营救环节。此处需注意，在峡谷中飞机无处降落，唯一可行的营救方式便是救回飞机上。同样配图提示营救所需的动作描述。并需要通过合理的方式点出标题的主题，引出这个关键的瓶子。语言激活：Details related to a helicopterThere were two helicopters circling around.A helicopter hovered overhead as one of the gang made a run for it.·那伙人中的一个逃跑的时候，一架直升飞机在头顶上空盘旋。The helicopter circled about the area, looking for a proper landing field.·直升飞机在洪水地区上空盘旋，想找一处适合降落的地方。Overhead, the chopper roared the big blades churned the air.直升飞机在头顶上轰响着，巨大的浆叶搅动着空气。The rescue helicopter made another sweep over the bay./The helicopter rose into the air .We sat tight and waited to be rescued .Survivors waited for the rescue boats,dazed and frightened.Guided by periodic shafts of light, rescue teams made their way through the pitch-black as they searched for survivors.在忽明忽暗的竖井灯光的指引下，援救队伍在黑暗的废墟中开辟道路寻找幸存者.The natural environmentthe darkness of night &roaring water·the blackness of the night with darkness falling under the cover of night .The night was pressing up.As the night wore on/deepened exhaustion overcame their discomfortParagraph 1:It took 30 minutes to get hack upstream to the beach where they'd had lunch.Tired as they were, they had to strengthen up to spend a night there.After lighting up a camp fire, the three huddled in their tent on such a chilly night.However , late in the night , they heard a helicopter hovering just above them.Wild with joy, Whitson, Ramirez, and Hunter flew out the tent, waving and yelling.Unfortunately, the darkness and the roaring water drowned everything.Ending 1:The helicopter circled around and got back.Ending2 :The night brooded over the motionless hills and melted the noise of the helicopter Whitson consoled his son and girlfriend,“It'll be back.”Paragraph 2:The next morning, the helicopter returned.After the three were spotted, the helicopter lowered a crew member on a cable.The rescue worker got to the ground and helped the three get saved.The rescuers lifted Hunter, Ramirez, and Whitson out of the mountain one by one.It was not long before they were taken to safety.That was a moment of pure happiness as the three chatted with the rescue workers.Just at that time Whitson learned that a hiker spotted the bottle with the message asking for help.Ending 1:It was exactly that bottle that saved them all!Ending 2:“This is too good to be true!” Whitson exclaimed.学科网（北京）股份有限公司