读后续写：人与动物--我的小瘸狗讲义-高三英语二轮复习写作专项.docx

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。    When I adopted him, he had been rescued from death inside a tightly tied black trash bag  abandoned right beside a garbage truck on the road. An alert garbage man noticed the bag moving and used a metal rake (耙子)to tear open the bag to look inside. There was my shaking puppy dog. The rake damaged the nerves in his back so he limped a little, but he could run as fast as lightning.    For my dog's first birthday, I entered him in a fun run sponsored by our local Society for the Prevention of Cruelty to Animals(SPCA). Tm not much of a runner, but the run was only 3 kilometers, so I thought it would be fun for both of us.We practiced for weeks. On our practice runs, he was always eager to go and usually dragged me along behind him.I worked on his leash (拴狗链)manners so that he wouldn't trip me on the big day.I felt we were ready for anything.    The fun run was downtown among the big buildings, so the noise of barking dogs all around us rose to a deafening pitch at the start of the race. My dog was frightened when the starting tone went off. He had trouble running in the right direction with all the confusion around us. Soon the runners began to thin out, and my dog was running straight and fast. We were passing people and making great time. I was dreaming of a gold-medal finish.    However, when we were six blocks from the finish, my dog suddenly stopped and dropped to the ground like a sack of potatoes. 1 almost dislocated my shoulder from the sudden stop as I was pulled backward by the leash.    He was lying flat on his belly with his head down in the middle of the crossroads. At first I thought something bad had happened to him. He was shaking and sobbing. I did a quick check and couldn't see anything wrong. I tried to get him up, but he refused. The police officer doing traffic control impatiently signed me to move away so he could release the cars.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。But I couldn't get my seventy-five-pound dog to get up.Another half-block of carrying him brought the answer a moving garbage truck.下水文：But I couldn't get my seventy-five-pound dog to get up. I squatted down, stroked his shaking body gently, and whispered,“Hey, buddy, could you please stand up?” My dog, however, with his eyes shut tight, was still rooted to the spot. With the other runners and their dogs passing by, shouting, and the cars honking, a mixture of embarrassment and frustration swept over me. Taking a deep breath, I carried him with all my might, staggering to the roadside. Putting my dog down, I wiped away the beads of sweat and collapsed onto the ground. My dog, now, was cowering by my ankles, breaking my heart. I had to lift him on my shoulder, ready to go back home.(111w) Another half-block of carrying him brought the answer - a moving garbage truck. His body became tenser and began to bark fiercely as we drew closer to the truck. At that moment, it occurred to me that the presence of garbage truck must have triggered the traumatic memory in him. Realizing that, I quickened my pace to take him away from his scary garbage truck. With the sound of the moving garbage truck fading away my dog gradually calmed down and we stopped for a rest. Sitting on the ground, I hugged him in my arms tightly, saying softly,“I will never, ever abandon you.”My dog, seemingly understanding my words, lifted his head staring at me, with a drop of tear rolling down his eyes.(113w)解题思路：step1: 根据读原文时所划关键信息确定故事问题/矛盾（读原文时需划的关键信息主要包括：负面否定信息 反复出现信息 问题信息 转折信息）1 小狗不起来的原因2 比赛是否完成 / 得奖step2:根据已给段首句确定每段发展到什么程度P1: 我扛着小狗走了半个街区, 同时心里疑惑究竟是何原因P2: 我帮助小狗走出恐惧，虽然比赛没有得奖，但是与小狗之间的感情更进一步 （或是具体感悟）。最后也可以设计成小狗出乎意料地在平静之后快速向比赛终点跑去，试图继续完成比赛。因为我原本以为胜券在握，期待着金牌，中途因为小狗的意外不得不离开比赛而失望。最后若能这样设计，就能让结局更加圆满，也让人与动物之间的心灵相通更加突出。虽然有点神奇，但适当的神奇还是很有意思，耐人寻味，增加故事可读性和精彩性。step3：每段具体设计：（确定描写对象，从行为动作、心理感受两方面交替描写各个对象，必要处添加环境等其他描写）P1： 描写对象我、 小狗、 交警我：行为动作继续试图让它起来 使劲拉绳        感受反应着急（直接内心描写，也可以通过神态表情等体现 比如出汗）狗：不动 （利用原文中的描述）交警：再次催  不耐烦我：行为动作下决定 扛起狗 离开比赛 走过半个街区        感受反应失望 沮丧 疑惑 究竟是何原因P2: 描写对象我 、小狗小狗：更加害怕 发抖 吼叫等我：轻拍它的头 加快步伐 跑 离开 （尽管很累）        情绪转变，不再失落，理解小狗 想要帮助小狗平静 走出恐惧远离卡车后小狗：恢复平静 摇尾巴 快速奔跑起来 跑向比赛终点我：惊讶 感动感悟：能体现人与动物之间的美好情感的方向谨记：必写高级句式 非谓 、独立主格、 定从、 倒装、 名从、 强调           参考：P1：But I couldn't get my seventy-five-pound dog to get up.Anxiety tearing me into pieces and sweat dropping down from my forehead, I pulled his leash with no strength spared, attempting to get him up. However, he was still lying as if he was fixed to the ground. Meanwhile, the police officer yelled and urged me to move away again. I had no choice but to lift him up and carry him back, which meant it was impossible to finish our run race, not to mention to win the dreamed gold medal. Dispirited and discouraged, dragging my heavy feet, I passed half block and wondered what on earth caused his stop.P2: Another half-block of carrying him brought the answer - a moving garbage truck.As the truck moved closer, he shook and sobbed harder, obviously swallowed by unimaginable terror. Instantly, everything was clear, sweeping away all of my disappointment and discouragement. I patted him on his head (或：fondled his head) and started to rush, despite my exhaustion, expecting to get away from the truck within the shortest time. Several minutes later, there we were, at a safe place （或a safe place came into our sight）. He finally recovered and wagged his tail warmly to me. But, then came another astonishing picture. He started to run towards the race destination, （或what astonished me was that he started to run towards the race destination,）as fast as lightning. Never could I imagine that my puppy could be so human, so sensitive, so determined and even cared so much about me. (或：Never could I imagine that some mysterious and amazing connection between humans and animals does exist. 或Never could I imagine that my tiny efforts to relieve him out of terror would be paid off by/rewarded with his attempt/endeavor to win our race.) It was at this moment that I realized my puppy himself was exactly my most precious gold medal.  (run as fast as lightning ,  gold medal, 这些都起到了与原文前后呼应的作用).学科网（北京）股份有限公司