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大学生英语作文赏析关于如何看待大学生上网的英语作文Internet Surfing-因特网冲浪Nowadays,there is a growing popularity of Internet surfingon college campus.An increasing number of students,majoringeither in science or engineering or in liberal arts,spend manyhours surfing the Internet with keen interest everyday.Internet surfing has attracted college students 1 ikemagnets because it is the world of Internet and the world ofglobalization.First,with the global coverage of Internet,wecan reach out and touch anyone at any place of the world.ViaInternet,we can send and receive E-mai 1 s at any t ime much faster,cheaper and more effective than conventional means such astelephone,telex and fax.Next,via access to the home pages oflibraries,universities,journals and news agencies,andresearch organizations,we can easily acquire al 1 kinds ofinformation,to know what is going on all over the world.Finally,by clicking the mouse,we are capable of doing suchimportant things as shopping,finding jobs,making friends,down-loading files and programs,doing business,publishingpapers and freely airing our opinions on al 1 sorts ofinteresting issues.What is more,Internet offhrs manyopportunities.For example,we can work,educate ourselves andcommunicate with others at home via Internet.In the Information Age,it is diff icuh to imagine modern lifewithout Internet.With the rapid development of InformationTechnology industry,successful dot-com companies mushroomedeverywhere.Internet is revolutionizing our economy,oursociety and our life.关于大学生压力的英语作文Directions:For this part,you are al lowed 30 minutes to writea composition on the topic How Should College Students RelievePressure?You should write at least 150 words,and base yourcomposition on the out 1ine（given in Chinese）below:1）当今的大学生要面临很多来自不同方面的压力2）大学生缓解压力的方式有3）你一般都是如何排解压力的？How Should College Students Relieve Pressure?关于大学生压力的英语作文-行文思路本题属于提纲式文字命题。提 纲 第1点指出一个问题，提纲第2点要求说明如何解决该问题，提 纲 第3点要求阐述“我”的做法，由此可判断本文应为问题解决型作文。根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：指出当今的大学生主要面临哪些压力；列举大学生缓解压力的方式;谈谈“我”是采取哪种方式排解压力的。关于大学生压力的英语作文-高分范文How Should College Students Relieve Pressure?Today s college students f ace many pressures,ma inly f romparents,expectation,study,economy,employment and all kindsof competition.1 Although pressure t o some extent can providemotivation,overdue pressure has a serious negative effect.Pressure can destroy a student5 s confidence.2 More seriously,i t might make some students lose control of their emotions andbehaviors.3 Considering the great damage of overdue pressure,college students should learn to how t o relieve pressure.2First,we should have a right evaluation of ourselves 4soas t o 5make use of advantages and avoid disadvantages.2 Second,we should 6set a clear aim of a struggle.The aimcan give us motivation,and make us become act ive.2 Third,7 attending collective activities is an effective way torelieve pressure.2Finally,if you find pressure is nearly8beyond your control,you d better turn to professionalpsychological guidance.2 As to me,my pressure is mainly from future employment.4In order to reduce i t,I asked my parents help me analysemy advantages and disadvantages,and produce a more practicaljob objection.2So my employment pressure was relievedgreatly.Now I become confident in my future,and I 9 dobelieve I can get an ideal job after my graduation.【亮点点评】1 although引导让步状语从句。2过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。“考虑到,鉴于”，介词。4表示目的。5 “扬长避短”。“设立一个明确的奋斗目标”。7 动名词短语作主语，用不同于前两点的句式提出缓解压力的第三种方式。8 “超出范围或能力”。9强调动词believe。佳句临摹1.佳 句：Although pressure to some extent can providemotivation,overdue pressure has a serious negative effect.临摹：尽管兼职工作能够带来很多好处，但我们不应该在它上面花费太多的时间。2.佳句：Attending collective activities is an effective wayto relieve临摹：学会如何与人沟通是步入社会的第一步也是最重要的一步。3.佳句：In order to reduce it,I asked m y parents help meanalyse m y advantages and disadvantages临摹：为了在激烈的竞争中获得优势，大学生们必须全面发展自己的能力。KEY1.Although a part-time job does much good to us,we shouldnot spend too much time on i t.2.Learning how to deal with people is the first and themost important step to enter into the society.3.In order to get their priority in the fierce competition,college students have to develop their abi1ities关于大学生使用信用卡的英语作文 Directions:For this part,you are al lowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topicCredit Cards on Campus.You should write at least 150 words,and base your compos i t ion on the out line（given in Chinese）below:1）近年来越来越多的大学生开始使用信用卡2）分析产生该现象的原因3）针对大学生使用信用卡提出你的建议Credit Cards on Campus关于大学生使用信用卡的英语作文-行文思路本题属于提纲式文字命题。提 纲 第1点指出一种现象，提纲第2点要求分析产生该现象的原因，提 纲 第3点要求针对该现象给出“我”的建议，由此可判断本文应为现象解释型作文。根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：描述大学生使用信用卡的现状；分析大学生信用卡用户增加的原因；针对大学生使用信用卡提 出“我”的建议。关于大学生使用信用卡的英语作文-高分范文Credit Cards on CampusIn recent years,credit cards have 1gained morepopularity among college students.2With banks more focuson col lege market,3 an increasing number of college studentshave applied for a credit card and begun to consume by i t.4The following three factors can account for thepopularity of credit cards in col lege.5Firstly,a creditcard provides overdrawing service,6which is 7a bigattraction for those students who have no much money for theirdomination.5Secondly,a credit card can help releasefinancial burdens on those poor students,and 8hence reducethe risk of their dropping school for lacking money.5 Besides,many banks make some preferential policies on credit cards,1 ike sending a gift,lowering year cost.7Drawn by thesepolicies,many college students apply for credit cards.5As far as I am concerned,it is not a bad thing forcollege students to own credit cards.5However,there i smisuse of credit cards among college students.Many studentsuse credit cards to buy luxurious things they don,t need really,and even some of them owe a big credit cards debt.5 Therefore,schools and banks have responsibi1ity to let college studentslearn how to use credit cards properly.9 Only in this way cancollege students enjoy really the advantages of credit cards.关于大学生使用信用卡的英语作文【亮点点评】1 “越来越流行”。“随着”，介 词。3 “越来越多的”。4用于引出原因。5过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。6which引导非限制性定语从句。7表 示“吸引”的两种不同的方式，用词富于变化。8 “由此，因此”。9 “only+状语”位于句首，引起句子部分倒装。关于大学生使用信用卡的英语作文-佳句临摹1.佳 句：With banks more focus on college market,anincreasing number of college students have applied for a creditcard.临摹：随着市场经济的快速发展，金钱在社会中扮演着越来越重要的角色。2.佳句：A credit card can help those poor students paytheir tuition and fees,and hence reduce the risk of theirdropping school.临摹：一些同学希望通过社会实践提高自己的能力，并由此来增加就业机会。3.佳句：Drawed by these policies,many college studentsapply for credit cards.临摹：在就业压力的迫使下，一些大学生开始自主创业。KEY1.With the rapid development of market economy,moneyplays a more and more important role in the society.2.Some students hope to enhance their practical abi 1 itiesby attending social practice,and hence increase their chancesof employment.3.Forced by employment pressure,some col lege graduatesbegin to set up their own businesses.(关于勤俭节约 的 英 语 作 文Directions:For this part,you areallowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Is ThriftStill a Good Virtue?You should write at least 150 words,andbase your composition on the outline（given in Chinese）below:1）随着人们生活水平的提高，一些人认为勤俭节约的生活方式已经过时了2）但是很多人反对这种说法3）你的看法是，为什么？Is Thrift S till a Good Virtue?关于勤俭节约的英语作文-行文思路本题属于提纲式文字命题。提 纲 第1点提出一种观点，提纲第2点提出另外一种相反的观点，提 纲 第3点要求谈谈“我”的观点，由此可判断本文应为对比选择型作文。根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：提 出 第1种观点：节俭和朴素的生活方式已经过时了，并说明理由；提 出 第2种观点：勤俭节约仍然是一种美德，并说明理由；表 明“我”对节俭的看法，并说明理由。关于勤俭节约的英语作文-高分范文Is Thrift S till a Good Virtue?With the improvement of the 1iving standards,many peopleare 1no longer interested in the simple life style 2 and someof them even feel ashamed to be thrifty.What they pursue i sthe latest fashion.In their eyes,thrift is already out ofstyle.3 However,still other people insist that thrift is a goodvirtue.They say that the unprecedented power of productiondoesn,t mean that we are entitied to a life of extravagance,because our natural resources are 1imited 2and some of themeven are 4on the decline.5Moreover,they hold that wastemay lead to degradation of social atmosphere and environmentalpollution as well.6As to me,I pref er the latter opinion.I believe 7“Waste not,want not.w The truth of this saying is 8 not togive up comfort but to enhance efficiency.5 In fact,economicgrowth depends enormously on saving.5Besides,there arestill millions of Chinese 9 living under poverty line.We cannever afford reckless waste.5Therefore,10 it is no doubtthat thrift is still a good virtue that we should not give up.关于勤俭节约的英语作文【亮点点评】“不再”。2表示递进。3引出另外一种观点。4 “在下降”。过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。用于引出自己的观点或选择。引 用 谚 语“俭以防匮”。8 not.but连接并列结构，意 为“不是而是”。9现在分词短语作后置定语。10“毫无疑问”。关于勤俭节约的英语作文-佳句临摹1.佳句：Our natural resources are 1 imited and some of themeven are on the decline.临摹：车祸使人们的财产遭受极大的损失，甚至还夺走了无数人的生命。2.佳句：The truth of this saying is not to give up comfortbut to enhance efficiency.临摹：我们永远都不应该低估自己的能力，而应该相信一句谚语:“有志者，事竟成/KEY1.Traffic accidents have caused great damages to people5s properties and even taken away thousands of people5 s 1ives.2.We should never underestimate our abi1ities but shouldbelieve in the proverb:cWhere there is a wi 11,there is a way.M关于节食减肥的英语作文Directions:For this part,you areallowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic OnDieting.You should write at least 150 words,and base yourcomposition on the out 1ine（given in Chinese）below:1）现在有越来越多人的选择节食减肥，有的人是为了健康，但是更多的人是为了有一个苗条的身材2）分析节食减肥可能带来的影响3）你的建议On Dieting关于节食减肥的英语作文-行文思路本题属于提纲式文字命题。提 纲 第1点指出一种现象并要求说明原因，提纲第2点要求分析这种现象可能带来的影响，提 纲 第3点要求针对该现象提出“我”的建议，由此可判断本文应为现象解释型作文。根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：描述越来越多的人节食的现象并分析主要原因；阐述节食不当可能带来的影响；针对节食给出“我”的 建 议。关 于 节 食 减 肥 的 英 语 作 文-高 分 范 文On DietingNowadays more and more people are beginning to go on a diet.Some people are concerned with their health,and they go on adiet in order to lose unwanted weight.But still others,1 especially the young women,are paying too much attentionto their outward appearance.They 2 become the leading numberswho go on a diet.3 However,dieting might 4bring great negative effectson people.3 For one thing,quite a lot of people don t reallyneed dieting to keep health,and they diet just because theywant to keep slim.For them,dieting 5 not only is useless butalso might damage their health.3For another,some peoplelack enough knowledge on how to diet scientifically.3As aresult,they are 1ikely to suffer from malnutrition.6 Considering the serious damage of unhealthy dieting,weshould be cautious in dieting.3In my opinion,dieting,7forwhatever reasons,needs professional guidance.8Only withright guidance can dieting work 9as we expect.关 于 节 食 减 肥 的 英 语 作 文-【亮 点 点 评】1 “尤 其”，表 示 强 调。“成为主力军”。3过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。4用于引出对危害或负面影响的阐述。5 not only.but also”用于连接并列成分。“考虑到,鉴于”，介词。7 不管因为什么原因，whatever意为 无论什么。8“only+状语”位于句首,引起句子部分倒装。9“像我们期望的那样”。关于节食减肥的英语作文-佳句临摹1.佳句：For them,dieting not only is useless but also mightdamage their health.临摹：基因技术不仅使动植物受益而且还有助于提高人类的生活质量。2.佳句：In m y opinion,dieting,for whatever reasons,needsprof ess ional guidance.临摹：无论你的目标是什么，你都必须通过诚实的劳动来实现它。3.佳句：Only with right guidance can dieting work as weexpect.临摹：只有修满足够的学分，学生才能够获准毕业。KEY1.Genetic technology helps not only the plant and animalsbut also human beings to live a higher quality2.Whatever your aim i s,you must worked honestly to attaini t.3.Only when adequate credits have been achieved canstudents gain the qualification for graduation.关于交通事故 的 英 语 作 文Directions:For this part,you areallowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic RoadAccidents.You should write at least 150 words,and base yourcomposition on the out 1ine（given in Chinese）below:1）交通事故会给人们的生命和财产带来很大的损失2）分析交通事故发生的主要原因3）如何降低交通事故发生率Road Accidents关于交通事故的英语作文-行文思路本题属于提纲式文字命题。提 纲 第1点提出一个问题，提纲第2点要求分析造成该问题的原因，提 纲 第3点要求说明解决该问题的方法，由此可判断本文应为问题解决型作文。根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：指出道路事故的严重性及主要危害；分析导致道路事故的主要原因；说明应该如何降低道路事故的发生率。关于交通事故的英语作文-高分范文Road AccidentsRoad accidents,1 as one of the important social problems,have always been paid great concern.I n most of the big cities,every d a y,there happen quite a few road accidents.I n theseaccidents,many people suffer great property losses 2 and someof them even lose their liv e s.3The following reasons contribute t o road accidents.4Above a l l,traffic i s becoming heavier and heavier,especially i n big cities.More and more vehicles on road5increase the chances of accidents.4In addition,manydrivers lack safety awareness and even d o n t comply with thetraffic regulations.For example,some drivers run the redlight or drive after being drunk.4 Besides,the 6 weaksupervision and management of traffic control sectors i s anoticeable reason.7Considering the seriousness of the traffic problem,8i t i s high time for us to take more effective measures tosolve i t.4 Firstly,the government should invest more moneyto improve public transportation and provide moretransportation ways for people to choose.4 Secondly,stricter laws and regulations should be made to punish thosewho break traffic regulations.4 Finally,drivers shouldenhance safety awareness and develop good driving manners.9Only in this way could road accidents be avoidedsuccessfully.关于交通事故的英语作文【亮点点评】插入语，as意 为“作为”。2表递进。用于引出原因。过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。5 “增加了的机会或可能性”。6 监管不力，weak的使用准确地道。“考虑到,鉴于”，介词。用于引出解决办法，表示解决问题的紧迫性，常 译 为“早该是的时候了”。9 “only+状语”位于句首，引起句子部分倒装。关于交通事故的英语作文-佳句临摹1.佳 句：In these accidents,many people suffer greatproperty losses and some of them even lose their 1ives.临摹：一些人失败后可能会变得灰心丧气，甚至会放弃成功的希望。2.佳句：More and more vehicles on road increase the chancesof accidents.临摹：许多学生认为考取更多的证书可以增加他们找工作的机会。3.佳 句：It is high time for us to take more effectivemeasures to solve it.临摹：因此，我们早该关注一下人口过剩问题了。KEY1.Some people,after a failure,may become discouraged andeven give up their hope for success.2.Many students believe that more certificates mayincrease the chances of their being employed.3.Therefore,it is high time we paid special attention tothe problem of overpopulation.(关于大学生就业难的英语作文 Directions:For this part,youare allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topicCollege Students5 Job Hunting.You should write at least 150words according to the out 1ine given below in Chinese:1)近年来出现大学生就业难的现象2)产生这一现象的原因3)如何解决这一问题关于大学生就业难的英语作文【思路点拨】本题属于提纲式文字命题。提 纲 第1点要求指出目前大学生就业难的现象，提纲第2点要求分析这种现象产生的原因，提 纲 第3点则要求阐述应该如何解决这一问题，由此可判断本文应为问题解决型作文。根据所给提纲，本文应包含以下内容:提出大学生就业难的现象,指出现象的表现；说明现象产生的原因，如大学生追求目标过高等；从几个方面提出解决方法。关于大学生就业难的英语作文【参考范文】Col lege Students5 Job HuntingNowadays,the employment of col lege students is becomingmore and more of a problem.About a decade ago,universitystudents could find satisfactory and enviable jobs aftergraduation,while the things are quite different at present.In addition,according to statistics,about 30%of graduatestudents can,t find a job but stay at home after graduation0Employment difficulty of college students is due to thefollowing reasons.Among these,the increasing recruitment ofcolleges and universities plays a vital role.In addition,manycolleges and universities fail to adapt their courses to thedevelopment of economy.Considering the seriousness of unemployment of collegestudents,I think it is high time that we took effectivemeasures to solve the problem.Above all,college studentsshould realize their own defects and further improve themselvesto keep
