读后续写浙江高考真题遇熊脱险--高三英语写作专项.pptx
读后续写人与动物人与动物人与动物故事一般围绕两方面展开：1.人与动物和谐相处，相亲互助2.人与动物发生冲突，成功脱险1.家养动物的趣事囧事或是相互治愈dog，cat，duck等和人类交往中产生情感依赖，互相陪伴，安慰或治愈(heal a lonely soul)，共同度过艰难黑暗时期(get us through gloomy days)。2.旅途遭遇无危险动物或是救助小动物这些动物的出现只是给旅途增添一点乐趣和曲折，体验一次难忘惊险或救助的经历。如rabbit,sheep,cow等。3.旅途偶遇危险凶猛动物本着保护且不能伤害野生动物，不能私自圈养的原则，遭遇时可设法驱赶，或择机躲避，确保双方安全无恙。最终大多依靠外援救助成功脱困。2020年年7月浙江高考真题月浙江高考真题：遇熊脱险：遇熊脱险1.本题总分为25分，按7个档次进行评分。2.评分时，主要从内容、语言表达和篇章结构三个方面考查，具体为：（1）续写内容的质量、续写的完整性以及原文情境的融洽度。（2）所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性。（3）上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。3.评分时还应注意：（1）此数少于120的，酌情扣分；（2）单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英、美拼写和词汇用法均可接受；（3）书写较差影响交际的，酌情扣分。One fall,my wife Elli and I had a single goal:to photograph polar bears.We were staying at a research camp outside“the polar bear capital of the world”the town of Churchill in Manitoba,Canada.Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous.Polar bears like all wild animals should be photographed from a safe distance.When Im face to face with a polar bear,I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens.But sometimes,that is easier said than done.This was one of those times.As Elli and I cooked dinner,a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed,and smelled our garlic bread.The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp,which was surrounded by a high wire fence.He pulled and bit the wire.He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.Terrified,Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew.We yelled at the bear,hit pots hard,and fired blank shotgun shells into the air.Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off.Not this polar bear though he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws(爪子).I radioed the camp manager for help.He told me a helicopter was on its way,but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived.Making the best of this close encounter(相遇),I took some pictures of the bear.Elli and I feared the fence wouldnt last through 30 more minutes of the bears punishment.The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray.The spray burns the bears eyes,but doesnt hurt them.So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and,through the fence,sprayed him in the face.With an angry roar(吼叫),the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1：A few minutes later,the bear came back._ Paragraph 2：At the very moment,the helicopter arrived._ 原文原文出处出处 2009 2009年国家地理杂志年国家地理杂志FACE TO FACE WITH POLAR BEARSFACE TO FACE WITH POLAR BEARSOne fall,my wife Elli and I had a single goal:to photograph polar bears.We were staying at a research camp outside the polar bear capital of the world-the town of Churchill in Manitoba,Canada.Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous.Polar bears-like all wild animals-should be photographed from a safe distance.When Im face to face with a polar bear,I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens.But sometimes,that is easier said than done.This was one of those times.As Elli and I cooked dinner,a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed,and smelled our spaghetti and garlic bread.The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp,which was surrounded by a high,wire fence.He clawed,bit,and shoved the wire mesh.He stood on his hind legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.Terrified,Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew.We yelled at the bear,banged pots,and fired blank shotgun shells into the air.Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off.Not this polar bear-he just growled and went back to trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws.I radioed the camp manager for help.He told me a helicopter was on its way,but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived.Making the best of this close encounter,I snapped some pictures of the bear.Elli and I feared the fence wouldnt last through 30 more minutes of the bears punishment.The camp manager suggested l use pepper spray.The spray burns the bears eyes,but doesnt hurt them.So I crept up to our uninvited guest and,through the fence,sprayed him in the face.With an angry roar,the bear ran back to the lake to wash his eyes.理解材料Read for 5Ws Point of view(POV):Tense:Who:When:Where:What:Why:Past simpleThe 1st limited point of viewmy wife Elli and I，a young male polar bear，the camp manager，a helicopterone fallresearch camp outside the town of Churchill in Manitoba,CanadaThe couple wanted to photograph polar bears,but a bear attacked their camp.The bear sniffed,and smelled our garlic bread.How to writeAll-rounded synergy(协协同）同）理解材料The bear came back angry and they had to try new ideas.1.OpeningThe couple went to a town in Canada to take photos of polar bears.A bear came unexpectedly while the couple was cooking dinner.Frightened,the couple tried all the means of defense they knew but none of them worked.The helicopter arrived to their rescue.2.Build-up3.Climax4.Resolution5.EndingRead for PlotsConflictHow can we be saved?Analysis of the beginning sentencesPara 1:A few minutes later,the bear came back.Para 2:At the very moment,the helicopter arrived.At the very moment4.a tense situation between us1.our action and _feelings of seeing the helicopter2.our response and _ feelings after seeing the bear1.the bears action2.how we escaped 4.our feelings of the experience scaredexcited3.our new ideas to defend ourselves3.The bears actionsentencesentencesentencesentencelogical&coherentSome expressions对对发动进攻发动进攻回到回到拆毁拆毁在在上空盘旋上空盘旋安然无恙安然无恙冲洗我们的照片冲洗我们的照片launch an attack on head back to tear down hover over safe and sounddevelop our picturesTip 1 生动的动词描写生动的动词描写1.它（熊）的吼叫声（roar）在我们周围回响（echo）The bears roar echoed all around us.2.他用后腿站立，推着木栅栏的柱子(post)。It stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.3.我抓起(snatch)相机，拍下(snap)了最后一张熊的照片 I snatched my camera and snapped one last shot of the bear.Tip 2 Tip 2 非谓语作状语非谓语作状语1.我们紧紧地抱在（huddle）一起，害怕地直打哆嗦（shiver）。Shivering with fear,we huddled together.2.看到北极熊逼近，我吓得呆住（freeze）了，吓得不敢动。Seeing the approaching of the polar bear,I froze with terror,too scared to move.3.那只熊被喷雾激怒（irritate）了，怒吼着迎接我们。Irritated by the spray,the bear greeted us with a howl of rage.4.一种强烈的恐惧感抓住了我，我能感觉到手心冒汗。Seized by a strong sense of horror,I could feel my palms sweating.Tip 3 Tip 3 倒装句倒装句1.我吓得喉咙发紧，双膝发软(so that的倒装)So scared was I that my throat tightened and my knees felt weak.2.我的心跳得如此之快以至于我几乎喘不过气来。(so that的倒装)So fast did my heart beat that I could hardly take a breath.Its time for your writing!Time for your writing!Para 1:A few minutes later,the bear came back.Para 2:At the very moment,the helicopter arrived.At the very moment4.a tense situation between us1.our action and _feelings of seeing the helicopter2.our response and _ feelings after seeing the bear1.the bears action2.how we escaped 4.our final thought of the experience scaredexcited3.our new ideas to defend ourselves3.The bears actionsentencesentencesentencesentencelogical&coherentParagraph 1：A few minutes later,the bear headed back to our camp.Sentence:Sentence:Paragraph 2：At that very moment,the helicopter arrived.Sentence:Sentence:当我知道我们可能得救时我高兴的心砰砰直跳。当我知道我们可能得救时我高兴的心砰砰直跳。随着那只熊再次试图用它巨大的爪子推倒栅栏时，我们几乎崩溃了，随着那只熊再次试图用它巨大的爪子推倒栅栏时，我们几乎崩溃了，完全不知所措。完全不知所措。尽管我们已经使出浑身解数，但是这只熊仍然没有离开，甚至还朝着尽管我们已经使出浑身解数，但是这只熊仍然没有离开，甚至还朝着我们小跑（我们小跑（trot）了几步过来。）了几步过来。直到现在，我也还在不断的想起这次意外的相遇。直到现在，我也还在不断的想起这次意外的相遇。As the bear was trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws again,we were on the edge of breaking down,totally at a loss.Despite every possible trick we had attempted,the bear didnt leave but even trotted forward a few steps.My heart leaped with joy as I knew we were likely to be saved.Even now,I am constantly reminded of this unexpected encounter.A possible version A few minutes later,the bear came back.Roars and screams pierced the silence with needle-like shrillness.The noises turned Elli and I pale with horror.I feared that the giant would destroy our whole fence.He roared repeatedly,shattering what was left of the silence.Elli seized this opportunity to take some pictures of the bear.The animals noises echoed all around us.We betrayed our feelings by huddling together,shivering with fear.After thoroughly scrutinizing the area,he trotted forward a few steps.At the very moment,the helicopter arrived.It hovered over the camp,making a deafening noise all around us.My heart leaped with joy as I knew we were likely to be saved.Elli used pepper spray again to buy us enough time.But this time the bear became more alert.He regarded us with the merciless necessity of hunger,so we throw all the food we have.He then turned away and started devouring.As we were climbing the rope ladder,Elli prayed like a thousand times to show thankfulness of being safe and sound.THANKYOU
