岑书面表达--高分策略(教育精品).ppt

（一）一）The Spring Festival is coming.It is very significant for Chinese,when all the family members get together.It is like Christmas in the western countries.Do you want to feel the Chinese culture?I am sure you will live happily here and learn a lot of funny things.Besides,I can also show you around some places here.（二）二）The Spring Festival is just around the corner.It is of great significance for Chinese,when all the family members get together.It is like Christmas in the western countries.Would you like to feel the Chinese culture?I am sure you will live happily here and learn a lot of funny things.Whats more ,I can also show you around some places of interest here.Which passage is more beautiful?2010江苏江苏书面表达亮点书面表达亮点 Beautify sentences with beautiful words ,phrases，linking words,sentence structures in your writing.-提升第一反应词、句提升第一反应词、句用用use 参观参观拜访拜访visit 喜欢喜欢like帮忙帮忙help 非常非常花花(时间，时间，金钱金钱）very+adj.spend.in doing(on sth.)第一反应词第一反应词代替词代替词enjoy,be fond of,be into,be interested in be longing to dopay a visit tomake use of put to use do sb.a favor give/lend sb a handmore than+adj.devote to doing sth./sth.It takes sbto do sth.be+adj.顺顺序序 first,second,递进递进 besides结结果果 so并列并列（和（和)and 一一就就 as soon as 总结总结 first of all,firstly,secondly,finally,lastly,last but not least whats more moreoverfurthermore in addition 第一反应词第一反应词代替词代替词 be+of +n.(be very useful=be of great use)thus,therefore,so thatas a result/consequence,as well，as well as，not onlybut alsoin conclusion,all in all,in short,in general,generally speaking,in briefin a wordon/upon doing on/upon+n.the moment/minute immediately1.The following day,we visited her with flowers and fruit.2.Our school has a new look.3.The picture let me think of those who succeed in unfavorable conditions.4.Thank you for helping me to solve the problems .5.Please let me know if you have any questions and Id be very happy to help.Beautify these sentences by wonderful expressions.6.As soon as we arrived there,we began to work at once.7.we can achieve our goals only in this way.（用（用Only+介词词组位于句首介词词组位于句首 倒装句式倒装句式）8.The English club improved their spoken English and brought them much fun.(not only.but also)9.Love and concern have brought about the great changes.（强调句）（强调句）10.The girl is spoken highly of.Her composition was well written.(用用whose定语从句定语从句)Beautify these sentences.beautify sentences 1)The following day,we visited her with flowers and fruit.=The following day,we paid a visit to her with flowers and fruit.(2011北京北京)4.Thank you for helping me to solve the problems .=I will appreciate it if you can give me a hand to solve the problems.（2011山东山东 ）3.The picture let me think of those who succeed in unfavorable conditions.2.Our school has a new look.=Our school is taking on a new look.(2011福建福建)=The picture remind me of those who succeed in unfavorable conditions.(2010 天津天津)5.Please let me know if you have any questions and Id be very happy to help.=Please let me if you have any questions and Id be more than happy to help.(2010 全国二全国二)6.As soon as we arrived there,we began to work at once.=On arriving there,we began to work at once.(2009北京北京)7.we can achieve our goals only in this way.（用用Only+介词词组位于句首介词词组位于句首 倒装句式）倒装句式）(用用 on doing 一一 就就.引导从句引导从句)Only in this way can we achieve our goals=It is love and concern that have brought about the great changes.(2011 福建福建)9.Love and concern have brought about the great changes.（强调句）（强调句）8.The English club improved their spoken English and brought them much fun.(not only.but also)10.The girl is spoken highly of.Her composition was well written.(用用whose定语从句定语从句)=The English club not only improved their spoken English but also brought them much fun.(2010天津天津)=The girl whose composition was well written is spoken highly of.Iamwritingtoaskifyouareabletohelpme.Iwanttohaveapenfriend,hopefullyagirlinhertwenties.Ihopeshelikestraveling,swimming,andplayingtabletennis.AndIhopeshealsolikespetssowecanhavemanytopics.Iamwritingtoaskifyouareableto_.Iwantto_agirlinhertwenties.Ihopeshe_traveling,swimmingandplayingtabletennis.AndIhopeshelikespets_._,wecanhavemanytopics.makepenfriendswithisfondofaswell Thereforedomeafavor(According to passage one,try to fill in these blanks by using beautiful expressions.)Passage1（2007全国一全国一）Its a great pleasure for me to share my experience of learning English with you.I like English and hope to be an interpreter in the future.Naturally its very important for me to learn English well.We know that vocabulary is an important part of language,just like bricks in a building.I usually memorize twenty new words a day and use them whenever possible.And I often listen to English programs on TV and on the radio after class.Besides,Ive learned a lot from the Internet and other sources.Now,I want to make some suggestions on English teaching and learning in our school.First,we should be given more opportunities to use what weve learned to have a better grasp of it.Second,I hope our teachers can recommend more interesting books and magazines and give us more free time to read them.Third,we should have more English activities,such as English contests and festivals.Thank you for considering my suggestions.a composition Its a great pleasure for me to share my experience of learning English with you.I am interested in English and hope to be an interpreter in the future.Naturally its of great importance for me to learn English well.As is known to us,vocabulary is an important part of language,just like bricks in a building.I usually memorize twenty new words a day and put them to use whenever possible.Besides I often listen to English programs on TV and on the radio after class.Whats more,Ive learned a lot from the Internet and other sources.Now,I d like to make some suggestions on English teaching and learning in our school.Firstly,we should be given more opportunities to use what weve learned in order to have a better grasp of it.Secondly,I hope our teachers can recommend more interesting books and magazines and give us more free time to read them.Last but not least,we should have more English activities,such as English contests,English festivals .I will appreciate it if you can consider my suggestions.假如你是李华，希望通过外籍教师假如你是李华，希望通过外籍教师Peter找一位英语笔友。请写一找一位英语笔友。请写一封短信，描述一下你理想中笔友的条件，并说明为什么选这样的笔封短信，描述一下你理想中笔友的条件，并说明为什么选这样的笔友。具体条件包括：友。具体条件包括：1、年龄；年龄；2、性别；性别；3、爱好（旅游、运动、宠物等）。爱好（旅游、运动、宠物等）。开头语已为你写好。开头语已为你写好。DearPeter,Iamwritingtoaskwhetheryouareabletodomeafavor._BestregardsLiHuaHomework:please use what we learn today to write a composition.假设你假设你 是学校英语学习最好的学生之一是学校英语学习最好的学生之一，学校，学校 请你请你 用用英语写一篇文章英语写一篇文章，简单介绍自己英语学习的情况，并，简单介绍自己英语学习的情况，并对学校今后的英语教学提出建议。对学校今后的英语教学提出建议。自己英语学习的情况自己英语学习的情况 1.英语学习的目的英语学习的目的 2.英语学习的方法英语学习的方法 3.课外自学的途径课外自学的途径.对学校英语教学的建议对学校英语教学的建议（请考生根据自己的经历与感想，（请考生根据自己的经历与感想，提出两至三点建议）。提出两至三点建议）。注意：注意：1.对所给要点逐一陈述，适当发挥，不要简单对所给要点逐一陈述，适当发挥，不要简单翻译。翻译。2.词数词数120左右。开头和结尾已经写好，不计人左右。开头和结尾已经写好，不计人总词数。总词数。3.文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。1ts a great pleasure for me share my experience of learning English with you_.What makes a good writing?4.练速度，求质量练速度，求质量,多练多练“定时作文定时作文”，及时，及时思考老师评批思考老师评批，多背多默写漂亮句子，多背多默写漂亮句子。1.A good use of grammar and beautiful vocabulary.(语法及漂亮词汇的恰当使用语法及漂亮词汇的恰当使用)Avoid Chinglish(避免中式英语避免中式英语):Try to use beautiful expressions.2.A proper use of linking words (关联词的恰当使用关联词的恰当使用)3.A beautiful handwriting (漂亮的书写漂亮的书写)Ourlibraryisinthecenteroftheschool.Thereisabeautifulgardeninfrontofitandourteachingbuildingisrightbehindit.Ourlibraryislocatedinthecenteroftheschool.Infrontofitliesabeautifulgardenandourteachingbuildingstandsbehindit.(Pleasetrytousebeautifulphrasesorsentencestorewritethepassage.)1.As soon as we arrived there,we began to work immediately.()(2009北京)3.The picture let me think of those who succeed in unfavorable conditions.()(2010 天津)4.The English club improved their spoken English and brought them much fun.()(2010天津)attend to替换look after meanwhile替换at the same time for instance替换for exampleamazing替换surprising as a matter of fact 替换in fact be worn out替换 be tired/broken After five hours non-stop work,we were all worn out(tired).My shoes are worn out(broken).Please buy me a new pair.Ladies and gentlemen,(2010福建)Good morning.Im Li Hua from Fujian,China.Its my great honor to be here to say something about global water shortage and ways of dealing with it.As we know,the global water shortage is becoming increasing severe mainly due to global warming,environmental pollution and the ever-increasing population.Therefore,its a high time we did something about it.Firstly,an effective way,I think,is to reserve water in a scientific way for future use.Secondly,new methods need to be developed to use the existing water resources,for example,turning sea water into fresh water.Thirdly,we must stop water pollution by law.Last but not least,its everyone responsibility to make good use of water,such as recycling and saving water in our daily life.In conclusion,people around the world should be aware of the real situation of water shortage,protect the present water resources and explore potential ones scientifically.Thats all.Thank you.表表第一反第一反应词应词替替换词换词时间时间When,now,then,since then,the next moment，in the past,eventually,meanwhile,by the time，as soon as,nowadays,顺顺序序First,second,First of all,firstly,secondly,finally,lastly,last but not least递进递进Besideswhats more,moreover,furthermore,in addition转转折折But,althoughon the contrary,in contrast,in spite of,despite,while,on the other hand,however,nevertheless,yet原因原因Because of thanks to，owing to，due to 结结果果Sothus,therefore,as a result,so that条件条件If,unlesson condition that,as long as换换种方式种方式In other wordsthat is to say,namely并列（和）并列（和）andas well，as well as，not onlybut also总结总结In a wordin conclusion,all in all,in short,in general,generally speaking,in brief Well hold an activity of 10,000-metre race on the afternoon of May 15,whether it rains or not.I hope you can join us.Well set off at 2:00.Thus,we must arrive at school before 1:30Well have an activity of 10,000-metre race on the afternoon of May 15,whether it rains or not.I hope you can come.We will start at 2:00,so we must come to school before 1:30.What makes a good writing?A good use of beautiful vocabularyTry to use beautiful expressions.使用漂亮的表使用漂亮的表达（词组、句型）达（词组、句型）假如你是新华中学的学生李华。某学生英文报正在招聘兼职的学生假如你是新华中学的学生李华。某学生英文报正在招聘兼职的学生记者记者,你想应聘。请根据以下要点给该报社写一封自荐信。信的开你想应聘。请根据以下要点给该报社写一封自荐信。信的开头已经给出。头已经给出。DearSir,IamastudentfromXinhuaMiddleSchoolandIamgladtolearnthatyouneedafewmorepart-timeEnglishreporters.写信目的写信目的你喜你喜欢欢兼兼职记职记者者这这份工作，所以决定份工作，所以决定应应聘。聘。自身自身优势优势英英语语好，知好，知识识丰富丰富,写作能力写作能力强强；曾任学校广播站曾任学校广播站(radio station)记记者者善于交善于交际际，能很好与他人合作。，能很好与他人合作。其他（考生补充）其他（考生补充）个人要求个人要求希望能收到回复，并得到希望能收到回复，并得到这这份工作。份工作。Our school has a new look.Our school is taking on a new look.We can work wonders,if we unite as a family,caring for each other and helping those in need.We unite as a family,caring for each other and helping those in need.We can work wondersAs soon as he arrives at the airport，he gives me an e-mail.we achieve our goal only in this way.Though Im weak，Ill make the effort.On arriving at the airport，he gives me an e-mail.I feel thankful/grateful for your help.I would appreciate it if you could help me to solve the problems.Only in this way can we achieve our goal.Weak as I am，Ill make the effort.The girl is spoken highly of.Her composition was well written.The girl whose composition was well written is spoken highly of.The National College Entrance Examination is drawing nearDetermined to be admitted to a good university,now I put all my heart into the subjects.It is love and concern that have brought about the great changes.假定你是李明假定你是李明,请你给英籍教师请你给英籍教师Mr.Wood写封短信写封短信,告诉他你校将举行一次万米告诉他你校将举行一次万米长跑活动长跑活动,热情邀请他前来参加热情邀请他前来参加,并请他收到信后通过电话并请他收到信后通过电话(6354-1234)告知能告知能否准时参加。注意：否准时参加。注意：1.具体内容见下面海报；具体内容见下面海报；2.信中请告知长跑的具体行程路信中请告知长跑的具体行程路线线What makes a good writing?1.A good use of grammar and beautiful vocabulary (语法及漂亮词汇的恰当使用语法及漂亮词汇的恰当使用)Avoid Chinglish(避免中式英语避免中式英语):例:不喜欢英语的学生喜欢这种方式。The not like English students like this way.Try to use beautiful expressions.The holiday is coming soon.The holiday is on the way.The holiday is just around the corner.What makes a good writing?2.A good use of grammar and vocabulary (语法及词汇的恰当使用语法及词汇的恰当使用)Avoid Chinglish(避免中式英语避免中式英语):例:不喜欢英语的学生喜欢这种方式。The not like English students like this way.Try to use beautiful expressions.The holiday is coming soon.The holiday is on the way.The holiday is just around the corner.What makes a good writing?3.A proper use of linking words(关联词的恰当使用关联词的恰当使用)因果关系因果关系:so,therefore,as a result/consequence，thus,hence,consequently,accordingly,in this way,for this reason递进关系递进关系:besides,whats more，moreover,in addition,also,too,furthermore,on top of that,apart from that转折关系转折关系:but,however,yet,instead,still,while,though,even so,in spite of that,on the other hand,in contrastWhat makes a good writing?3.A proper use of linking words(关联词的恰当使用关联词的恰当使用)时间关系时间关系:first,second,now,then,soon,finally,afterward,before,later,recently,meanwhile,since then,after a while 强调关系强调关系:indeed,certainly,obviously,clearly,in fact,as a matter of fact,that is to say,of course,in this case总结关系总结关系:in a word，in short,in conclusion,to sum up,all in all,on the whole 阅卷老师喜欢什么样的作文阅卷老师喜欢什么样的作文 字体工整字体工整,卷面干净；卷面干净；紧扣主题紧扣主题,条理清晰；条理清晰；语言地道语言地道,过渡自然；过渡自然；长度适中长度适中.一气呵成一气呵成