2023年上海十六区高三英语一模汇编 —作文（答案解析版）.pdf
专题1 0：作文-2 0 2 3 年上海十六区高三英语一模汇编1.宝山区随着数字技术的广泛使用，现在，学校里有些老师喜欢给学生布置线上作业，也有一些老师仍然喜欢布置线下作业，还有一些老师喜欢布置线上和线下混合式作业。作为一名高三学生，请你给老师写一封邮件，提出你关于作业方面的建议。邮件内容必须包括：1.你觉得哪种作业形式更适合你们班级；2.简单陈述你的理由，说明其利弊。（文中不要出现真实姓名和学校名称）【答案】Dear Mr.Hu,Im writing to express my opinion about the online homework.With the scientific development,the Internet isdeveloping rapidly.Online homework will become a trend.Therefore,1 think that online homework can be moresuitable for our Senior Three students.The contents and forms of online homework are relatively rich,which not only can promote students to activelycomplete their homework,but also can greatly relieve the tense learning atmosphere.Besides,online homework canshorten the time of teachers correcting homework so that they can help us with important learning problems,becausesenior three students need more help from teachers.Although online homework also has drawbacks,such ascomputer time,I think we can control ourselves as teenagers.I hope my suggestions will be helpful to you.Yours,Li Hua【解析】【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生给老师写一封邮件，提出你关于线上作业和线下作业更适合自己班级的建议。【详解】1.词汇积累适用：be suitable for apply to积极地：actively positively此外：Besides-Whats more有用：be helpful to-be beneficial to2.句式拓展简单句变复合句原句：Im writing to express my opinion about the online homework.拓展句：I,m writing to express my opinion about the online homework,which I think is useful to our study.【点睛】【高分句型 11 The contents and forms of online homework are relatively rich,which not only can promotestudents to actively complete their homework,but also can greatly relieve the tense learning atmosphere.（运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句）【高分句型 2】Besides,online homework can shorten the time of teachers5 correcting homework so that they canhelp us with important learning problems,because senior three students need more help from teachers.（运用 了 sothat引导的结果状语从句和because引导的原因状语从句）2.崇明区假设你是中华中学高三学生徐晶，校团委为了帮助高三学生缓解学习压力，拟利用本月最后一个星期五下午开展一个高三年级减压活动，目前正在向全年级同学征求活动意见。你给校团委王老师写一封邮件，内容须包括：你的建议；你的理由。注：文中不得提及你的真实姓名或学校。【答案】Dear Mr.Wang,I am very glad to hear that our school is going to carry out an activity to help students relieve stress.I am writing tooffer my advice.I suggest that a fun game for all Senior Three students should be held on the school playground.Various sportsgames,fun and exciting,will attract lots of participation,among which Riding Pigs,Mud Wrestling and ChineseRolling will be the most welcomed.The playground will be filled with the students laughter and cheers.Aiming torelieve the senior 3 students from pressure and get them a break from heavy school work,the activity will be a greatsuccess.Ed appreciate it if you could take my suggestions into consideration.Looking forward to your early reply.Yours,Xu Jing【解析】【导语】这是一篇应用文。要求考生给团委王老师写一封邮件，就最后一个周五开展的高三年级减压活动提出自己的建议，并陈述理由。【详解】1 .词汇积累高兴的：gladdelighted刺激的：exciting thrilling充满：be filled with be full of考虑：take.into consideration take.into account2.句型拓展合并句子原句：I am very glad to hear that our school is going to carry out an activity to help students relieve stress.I amwriting to offer my advice.拓展句：Hearing that our school is going to carry out an activity to help students relieve stress,I am writing to offermy advice.3.奉贤区假如你是明启中学高三学生李华，你校学生会正在征集志愿者活动方案，请在以下三项活动中选择一项：一、深入社区宣传环保知识；二、担 任“奉贤博物馆”义务讲解员；三、去孤儿院为孩子们上兴趣课。请你给学生会写封邮件，内容须包括:1.你的选择及理由2.你准备如何做【答案】Dear Sir/MadamOur school will hold a volunteer activity,which may be chosen from the following three programmes:publicizing knowledge of environmental protection to communities,being a volunteer guide for the FengxianMuseum and conducting interesting lessons to kids in the orphanage.In my opinoin,being a volunteer guide for theFengxian Museum is suitable fbr students.There arc two reasons why I choose the second activity.To start with,its a valuable opportunity fbr students tohave a better knowledge of the Fengxian Museum,during which they can broaden their horizons.Besides,itsbeneficial for students to improve their communication skills especially English speaking because there are manyforeigners visiting it.If Tm lucky enough to be chosen as one guide I will cherish the golden opportunity and make full preparations,such as searching materials on the Internet and asking teachers for help.SincerelyLi Hua【解析】【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生给校学生会写封邮件在三个志愿者活动策划中选择某一项活动，并阐述选择的理由和要如何做。【详解】1.词汇积累项 目：programmeproject除此之外：besides moreover珍惜：cherish treasure寻求某人的帮助：ask sb fbr help seek sbs help2.句式拓展同义句转换原句：In my opinoin,being a volunteer guide for the Fengxian Museum is suitable for students.拓展句：In my opinoin,being a volunteer guide fbr the Fengxian Museum is suitable for students,from whichstudents can learn a lot.【点睛】【高分句型 1 To start with,its a valuable opportunity fbr students to have a better knowledge of theFengxian Museum,during which they can broaden their horizons.（运用了“介词+which”引导的非限制性定语从句）【高分句型 2 If Im lucky enough to be chosen as one guide,I will cherish the golden opportunity and make fullpreparations,such as searching materials on the Internet and asking teachers for h e lp.（运用 了 if 弓|导的条件状语从句和主将从现）4.虹口区明启中学拟举办一次摄影展。现就布展方式（校图书馆或校园网站）征集学生意见。假设你是王磊，请给学生会写一封邮件表达你的想法。你的邮件必须满足以下要求：1.简述你写邮件的目的及你对布展方式的选择；2.说明你的理由（从体验感、互动性或影响力等方面对这两种布展方式进行对比）。【答案】To whom it may concern:Ive learned that a photography exhibition is to be held and that you*re collecting advice on the way ofarrangement.Fm writing this letter to share my opinions with you.In my opinion,it is more advisable to hold thephotography exhibition in school library than on campus website.My reasons are as follows.At first,the library of our school is spacious,which provides visitors with a comfortable environment forappreciating the exhibition,so they will have a nice experience.Besides,watching the exhibition at school library ismore convenient for visitors to interact with others.Last but not least,a photography exhibition held on campuswebsite has far less impact than that held in school library,because people may assume that holding a photographyexhibition on website is just like a virtual activity.Therefore,I suggest the exhibition be held in school library.Yours,Wang Lei【解析】【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。明启中学拟举办一次摄影展，现就布展方式征集学生意见，要求考生给学生会写一封邮件表达自己的想法，内容要点包括：L 简述你写邮件的目的及你对布展方式的选择；2.说明你的理由（从体验感、互动性或影响力等方面对这两种布展方式进行对比）。【详解】I.词汇积累：建议：advice suggestions在我看来：In my opinion As far as I am concerned宽 敞的：spacious capacious此外：Besides Whats more2.句式拓展简单句变复合句原句：In my opinion,it is more advisable to hold the photography exhibition in school library than on campuswebsite.拓展句：I hold the belief that it is more advisable to hold the photography exhibition in school library than on campuswebsite.【点睛】【高分句型 1 Fve learned that a photography exhibition is to be held and that youre collecting advice onthe way of arrangement.（运用了 that引导的宾语从句）【高分句型 2 At first,the library of our school is spacious,which provides visitors with a comfortable environmentfor appreciating the exhibition,so they will have a nice experience.（运用 了 which 引导的非限制性定语从句）5.黄浦区假设你是明启中学学生李华，学校正在征求学生对云课堂的感受和建议。请发送一封邮件至校长信箱，你的邮件内容须包括：1.详细描述一节云课堂以及你的感受；2.简单阐述你对云课堂的态度和建议。【答案】Dear sir.Hearing that the school is asking students for their feelings and suggestions on cloud classes.Here are some of myfeelings and suggestions.Because of the epidemic,we cant go to school.Therefore,the school provides students with cloud classes,so thatwe can not miss our studies even at home.When the course began,I could clearly see the teacher on the computerscreen,as well as his carefully prepared courseware for us.I can hear the voice of the teacher very clearly throughthe headset,which is a feeling I cant feel in the classroom.Cloud Classroom provides a good solution for students who cannot be taught face to face by teachers for somereasons.However,cloud classes cant let students and teachers interact well,and the teacher cant know whetherstudents learn well.These need to be improved.I hope these suggestions can help the school improve the cloud classroom.Yours,Li Hua【解析】【导语】本文是一篇应用文写作。要求考生发送一封邮件至校长信箱，阐述你对云课堂的感受和建议。【详解】I.词汇积累建议：suggestion 一 ad vice因 此：therefbre-as a result提供某人某物：provide sb.with sth.offer sb.sth.改善：improve-perfect/better2.句式拓展简单句变复合句原句：Because of the epidemic,we cant go to school.拓展句：Because the epidemic broke out,we cant go to school.【点睛】高分句型 1 JTherefore,the school provides students with cloud classes,so that we can not miss ourstudies even at home.（so that引导的结果状语从句）高分句型 2I can hear the voice of the teacher very clearly through the headset,which is a feeling I cant feel inthe classroom.（which引导非限制性定语从句）6.嘉定区假设你是光明中学的学生张华。你们学校拟开设劳动课程，现给出如下方案，学校委托学生会征询大家的意见。内容高 一：电 器 使 用 和 维 护 高 二：植物种植与养护高三：物品整理和收纳时间每学期最后两周，每 周2整天地点理科实验专用教室给学生会写一封邮件，内容须包括:1）你认为该方案中存在的问题;2）你的建议和理由。【答 案】Dear Students9 Union,Im writing to put forward some advice on the labor course planned by you.It is of great benefit for us studentsto take a labor course with an intention of building up our body and learning more life skills.However,according to the schedule,the content of the labor course,which I think is not appropriate for thesenior 1 students,is supposed to be adjusted because they should be developed some basic skills of school life so thatthey can adapt to the independent school life quickly.Furthermore,as far as the time given the labor course is concerned,it is not enough at all.In order to pay moreattention to the labor course,students should be offered more time to experience more activities related to the laborcourse.r m deeply convinced that as long as you take my advice into account,this labor course will be interesting andrewarding.Yours sincerely,Zhang Hua【解析】【导语】本篇书面表达是一篇应用文。要求考生给学校学生会写一封邮件，就学校拟开设劳动课程的方案提出问题，并给出建议和理由。【详解】1.词汇积累提出：put forward come up with方案：schedule plan此 夕 卜：ftnthermore whats more考虑：take.into account take.into consideration2.句式拓展简单句变复合句原句：Im writing to put forward some advice on the labor course planned by you.拓展句：Im writing to put forward some advice on the labor course which is planned by you.【点睛【高分句型 1 】It is of great benefit for us students to take a labor course with an intention of building upour body,learning more life skills.（运用了 it作形式主语，不定式短语作真正主语）高分句型 2 However,according to the schedule,the content of the labor course,which I think is not appropriatefor the senior 1,is supposed to be adjusted because they should be developed some basic skills of school life so thatthey can adapt to the independent school life.（运用了 which引导的非限制性定语从句，because引导的原因状语从句以及so that引导的目的状语从句）7.金山区假设你是光明中学高三学生李明。近期，年级组正在策划18岁成人礼仪式，其中一个环节为“说说你的故事”，筹备组现面向本校全体高三学生征集真实故事案例。请给筹备组写一封邮件，内容须包括：1）你印象最深的一件事情；2）此事对你的启发和影响。【答 案】One possible version:During the past three years in the Guangming senior high school,I have had many unforgettable experiences.Oneof the most unforgettable things was when our class prepared fbr a group singing competition.In order to win thecompetition,we all went fbr it.During the week before the competition,we practised singing in our free time.Although it was a hard job,every participant took it seriously and did their best.Thanks to our effort,we won the firstprize.Hearing the exciting news,we were all wild with joy.The movement reminded me of an old saying-No pains,no gains.It was hard work,but during the course of preparation,we developed deep friendship,confidence as well asunderstanding!【解 析】【导 语】本文是一篇开放作文。年 级 组 正 在 策 划18岁成人礼仪式，其 中 一 个 环 节 是“说说你的故事”,要求考生给筹备组写一封邮件说说自己印象最深刻的一件事，以及此事对你的启发和影响。【详解】1 .词汇积累难忘的：unforgettable memorable为 了：in order toin an effort to困难的：hard*tough由 于：thanks toowing to2.句式拓展同义句原 句：Hearing the exciting news,we were all wild with joy.拓展句：When we heard the exciting news,we were all wild with joy.【点 睛】【高分句型 1 One of the most unforgettable things was when our class prepared for a group singingcom petition.（运用了 when引导的表语从句）【高分句型 2 Although it was a hard job,every participant took it seriously and did their b est.（运用 了 although引导的让步状语从句）8.静安区你所居住的小区，虽地处闹市，但因建成较早，当年规划的300个停车位早已不能满足500户居民的停车需求。小区业委会(ownerscommittee)现正就如何缓解小区停车难这一问题征求居民们意见。在小区公众号留言，谈谈你的看法。留言中包括：1.你的建议；2.你的理由。(文中不得出现考生姓名，学校等真实信息)【答案】Dear owners,committee,As a resident of this community,I have the following suggestions on how to alleviate the parking problem in thiscommunity:First,I think the community can scientifically and reasonably plan the parking spaces,number them,and guidethe car owners to check the number.At the same time,we can also talk with residents in the community to reduce thepublic green space and increase the number of parking spaces.Second,we could seek help from the relevantdepartments,putting forward the proposal of building a large parking lot or three-dimensional parking building;Meanwhile,we can negotiate with the surrounding shops to implement the method of“dislocation parking5 to relievethe tension of parking in the community.Third,I strongly recommend that public transportation and public bicycletravel should be advocated.By doing these not only can we could relieve the pressure of tight parking space,but alsobuild up our bodies,which could be called win-win.The above is my opinion,which I hope will be helpful to you.【解析】【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生给业主委员会写一封建议信，针 对“小区停车难”问题提出自己的建议和理由。【详解】1 .词汇积累建议：suggestion-advice首先：first f first and foremost其次：second-*in addition有 益 处：helpful-*beneficial2.句式拓展简单句变复合句原句：As a resident of this community,I have the following suggestions on how to alleviate the parking problem inthis community.拓展句：As a resident of this community,I have the following suggestions on how we could do something to alleviatethe parking problem in this community.9.闵行区你的英国朋友Jim所在的学校要组织来中国进行主题夏令营活动,每个学生可以从以下三个主题营中选择一个参加：1.唐诗(Tang poems)学习夏令营2 乒乓球训练营3剪纸(paper-cutting)学习夏令营。Jim 来信希望你能给他推荐一个。请你给他回信，内容包括：1.你的建议;2.你的理由。【答案】Dear Jim,I am glad that you are going to lake part in summer camps in China.Of the three themes,I suggest that youshould choose to learn to play table tennis.My reasons are as follows.In the beginning,it is easy to learn table tennis.Table tennis can help you build up your strength and make youbecome more energetic.Whafs more,table tennis is popular among Chinese people.By participating in this tabletennis training class,not only can you make some friends with the same interest but also you can get someprofessional guidance and improve your skills.I hope you will enjoy your summer camp.I am looking forward to meeting you in China.【解析】【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生给英国朋友吉姆回信，给他推荐一个夏令营活动主题，并介绍推荐理由。【详解】1 .词汇积累高兴的：glad-*pleased参 力 口：take part in-*participate in此外：whats more-besides希望：hope-wish2.句式拓展合并简单句原句：In the beginning,it is easy to learn table tennis.Table tennis can help you build up your strength and make youbecome more energetic.拓展句：In the beginning,it is easy to learn table tennis which can help you build up your strength and make youbecome more energetic.10.普陀区假设你是启明中学高三学生王华，你校学生会将组织一次“品上海”的活动，已在学校官网上发布方案，征求全体学生的意见。你需要写一封邮件，包含以下两点：1.提出你觉得需要改进的地方；2.需要改进的原因。主题品上海时间2023年 1月 2 日上午7:00-下 午 18:00路线从人民广场坐旅游巴士前往青浦，参观“陈云故居”“朱家角古镇”“青西郊野公园”,然后返回人民广场。【答案】Dear Sir/Madam,Im really excited to hear that an activity named“Taste Shanghai“will be held from 7:00 am to 18:00 pm onJanuary 2nd,2023.However,there may be further improvement of
