2023年浙江卷一月高考英语写作部分分作文及提分策略讲义 高三英语二轮复习高.docx

应用文题目：上周末你参加了校学生会组织的“认识我们身边的植物”活动，请为校英文报写篇报道，内容包括：1.活动的感受和过程2.收获与感想。考场作文1：13分（满分15分）Getting to Know the Plants Around UsLast weekend witnessed an activity called "Getting to Know the Plants Around Us" held by our Student Union.During the weekend, volunteers showed students around the campus introducing various kinds of plants in our school. With that topic of “the importance of plants", a lecture which received generous applause from audience was given in the auditorium hall on Saturday night. On Sunday, samples of plants offered by students were exhibited in the gallery.Students were more than glad to participate in it. I'm no exception: Not only did I learn more about plants, but I also got aware of protecting plants. Such activity is definitely beautiful and fun. Look forward to next one.         考场作文2：13分（满分15分）Getting to Know the Plants Around UsLast Sunday witnessed an activity themed on "Getting to Know the Plants around us" launched by the Students' Union. Every classmate in Senior 3 participated in it.At 8:00 am, as scheduled, we gathered together to observe the trees and flowers on campus one by one. Certainly the maples, the tea flower trees and even Mudan flowers all captured our eyes, with fragrance and ravishing beauty along the way. After lunch, some of us took photos of the vigorous plants and shared them at the auditorium. Applause and cheers of appreciation lingered long in it.Highly spoken of, this event proved to be a precious opportunity, immersing everyone into the marvellous and sheer experience of nature.         高分技巧：1.写应用文不要假、大、空，可以举一些与话题相关的话题词汇，比如这篇文章中的samples，maples2.写作活动要与活动本身有关系，比如第一篇三个活动分别是：逛校园-看植物，演讲-植物重要性，展览-植物样本。逛校园演讲和展览都是比较常见的活动，要与话题相关，我们就需要加上“逛什么，讲什么，展什么”。稍微具体一点就可以了，千万不要泛泛而谈。3.其他部分就基本要求了：格式准确，单词和句子表达准确，要点都要达到，衔接要紧密，字尽量用衡水体                  读后续写题目：I was invited to a cookout on an old friends farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention, so I entered it. It was a hummingbird (蜂鸟), desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs (蛛网) and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.With the bird in my cupped hand, I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me.When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still, she made no attempt to fly, Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired? Or too thirsty?As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move. I stopped, and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away. Hovering (悬停), she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight.During the cookout, I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window, As I was departing, my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment, all were speechless. Then someone said, “She must have come to say good-bye.”注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.Paragraph2:I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.         23分（满分25分）A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. Walking past the familiar milking house, I noticed the repaired window, which reminded me of the adorable hummingbird. Was she all right now? The lovely squeaking call was still etched on my mind. I felt a strong desire to see her again. Warmly welcomed by the hosts, we chatted a lot and I asked about the hummingbird. "Oh, she must be waiting for you somewhere." he said, smiling slightly. Hearing this, I walked out of the dining room, past a long corridor and into a big garden full of trees and flowers, where I thought she might stay. Searching for her up and down, I still couldn't even hear a sound, and I was quite at a loss.I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. Having approached me, she kept hovering in front of my eyes and chirruping merrily, as if to convey her welcome and elation. A strong wave of joy rushing to my heart, I felt my whole day lit up by this lovely creature. I looked directly again into her small diamond-like eyes, sensing I was having fabulous communication with the daughter of nature. Wanting to create more connections, I stretched out my hand. Surprisingly, she perched, on it, letting out squeaking calls. With sunshine enveloping us in its warm hug, I appreciated the harmonious atmosphere from the bottom of my heart.         高分技巧：1.充分运用文章信息，尤其是人物特点和人物关系，还有前文出现的矛盾和问题，比如这篇文章中：repaired window, squeaking call, look directly into my eyes,letting out squeaking calls2.情节不要偏题（很多学生会因为偏题而导致分数很低),所以一定要多去思考给我们的两句话，即这里的A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. 和I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.这两句话之间发生的事，千万不要急于落笔3.用词准确丰富，尤其是与鸟相关的词汇的运用：hover, chirrup merrily, perch 等4.句子表达比较丰富，整篇文章用的比较多的是非谓语作状语，定语从句，虚拟语气等5.用到了场景与虚拟语气的结合，充分利用了场景或环境传达的作用，Having approached me, she kept hovering in front of my eyes and chirruping merrily, as if to convey her welcome and elation.6.适当合理地用了环境描写，With sunshine enveloping us in its warm hug, I appreciated the harmonious atmosphere from the bottom of my heart.7.字要写好，衡水体（这位学生的字和印刷体一样）学科网（北京）股份有限公司