读后续写画面感的描写讲义-2023届高三英语复习写作专项.docx

一、名词动词是续写语言之基，善用doing/done形容词、副词、 介词短语，做伴随状语，在关键处驻足，避免流水账，细化动作 延缓过程，立体动感show出鲜活。1.从设定假设，到做调查问卷, 再到联系学校申请实验许可，一切都如预期般顺利，但不好的事 情却在等待着我。（2022年1月浙江卷续写，“与学霸做项目”） Everything went on smoothly as expected, ranging fromsettinghypothesis,makinga questionnaire to contacting a school for permission toconductingexperiments, but something bad was in store for me.亮点：连续相接的动词叠加能够使读者身临其境，如 关于“合作式项目”进展顺利的描写用setting, making, contacting, conducting,环环相扣，一气呵成。2.让我沮丧的是， 爸爸妈妈低声说着，轻声笑着，咯咯笑着，最后哈哈大笑起来。（2021年1月浙江卷续写，"南瓜卡头"）Much to my dismay, my dad and momwhispered, chuckled, giggledand finallyburst into laughter.亮点：四连动，由轻渐重，层层递升，所抒发的感情层 层推进，增强语言的说服力和感染力。3.我深吸一口气，大喊一 声，往前冲去。（三连动"took a deep breath jet out a shoutandsprinted forward.4.沃尔夫女士优雅地走向钢琴，坐到座 位上，然后开始弹奏。她的手指在琴键上翩翩起舞。她时而摇摆, 时而点头，乌黑发亮的马尾辫跟着起伏摆动。她的双脚在踏板间 来回穿梭。made her qraceful wayto the piano,took her seatand then began toplay. Her fi n ger s danced aero s s the keys.sheswayedandmoddedand her shiny black ponytailbobbed. Back and forth sheracedher feet among the pedals.5.烈日烤着我的脸，汗 珠模糊了我的视线，我几乎窒息，但仍在继续努力。The scorching sunbaking （独立主格结构） my face, and beads of sweatsblurring（独立主格结构）my vision, I was nearlysuffocated （谓语动词）， yetploughing （伴随状语）on.6.伊丽莎白手里拿着玫瑰花，紧张 地慢慢走向沃尔夫，舞台灯光灼热，汗珠顺着伊丽莎白的脸上滴 下来。Clutching （伴随状语）the roses, Elizabethedged （谓语动 词）nervously towards Ms.Wolff, the stage lightsblazing （独立主格 结构）hot and beads of perspirationtrickling （独立主格结构）down Elizabeth's face.亮点：准确使用非谓语动词做伴随状语，两个独 立主格结构做状语，能让写作句子更简洁，段落更紧凑，层次更 分明，更富有立体感。二、熟练掌握一两种部分倒装句LJane在 之前的人生中从未体会过如此强烈的后悔之情。Neverbefore in Jane's lifehadshebeenso overcomeby regret.2.Jane 太累 了， 以至于 她一躺下就很快睡着了。Sotired was Janethatshe fell fast asleep the moment she lay down.=Hardly had Jane laid down when she fell fast asleep because of exhaustion.=No sooner had Jane laid down than she fell fast asleep because of exhaustion.3.她太疲倦了 ,眼睑开始 往下垂，打起了呵欠，昏昏欲睡起来。Soexhausted was shethather eyelids were beginning to droop, yawning and drowsing.4.Jane 不仅 又累又饿，而且对自己的无理行为深感后悔。Not onlywas Janeexhausted and hungry,butshe was also deeply regretful for her unreasonable behaviors.5.只有当简处于如此无助的境地时，她才意 识到汤姆对她是多么重要。Onlywhen Jane was in such helpless situation was she awarethather beloved Tom meant so much to her. 三、巧用无灵主语，增强画面感无灵主语，指的是使用没有生命的事物充当句子的主语成分，例如情 感、动作、时间、地点、物品等，这与中文表达中习惯“以人为本” 的特点即常常会把人这个行为主体作为句子主语的情况大相径 庭，体现了英语语言所强调的“客体思维”，使得语言描写生动形象 （vivid description）。【典型题例】1. （2021 年湛江二模）One look at her ripped （撕）my heart wide open.只 看了她一眼，我的心就碎了。2. （2018 年 6 月浙江）Immediately,an absolute darkness ruled the forest. 顿时，一片漆黑笼罩着森林。3. （2017 年 6 月浙江）A cold feeling crept over his heart and made him shiver.一种冰冷的感觉爬上他的心头，使得他发抖。4. （2017 年 6 月浙江）However, the car had left the wolf far behind,which made him sigh with relief.然而，汽车把狼远远地甩在后面，这使他松了一口气。5. （2021 广州二模）A wave of disappointmentsstruck him.Sadness overwhelmed him so suddenly that he couldn't think of a word to say. 一阵失望使他心灰意冷。悲伤突然使他不知所措，想不出一句话来。6. （2021 茂名二模）Thenmy empty stomach stopped meand I used my pocket money to have a bowl of noodles in a small restaurant.接着，空空的肚子让我停了下来，我用零花钱在一家小餐馆吃了一碗 面条。四、巧用拟声词增强声音特效常见的拟声词有：bark v. & n.狗叫chatter/twitterv. & n.叽叽叫，叽喳叫crack v. & n.僻啪作响，折断crunch v. & n,吱嘎作响，吱嘎roar / howl v. & n.咆哮rumble v. & n.隆隆声rustle v. & n.沙沙声ticktock v. & n.滴答声gurgle v. & n.潺潺流水声1. Wild animals started toroar/howl.野生动物开始嚎叫。2. The frozen snowcrunchedunder our feet.冻结的雪在我们的脚下嘎吱作响。3. They heard thechatterof birds among the bushes. 他们听到鸟儿在灌木丛中叽叽喳喳地叫。4. CRACK!The fragile （脆弱的）little tree was broken in two by the wildhowling wind.咔嚓一声，狂风把这棵脆弱的小树折成了两半。5. .BOOM,CRACK! The wind was howling outside my house. We were having aterrible thunder storm.砰，啪！风在我家外面呼啸，我们正在经历一场可怕的雷雨。6. （2019 高考浙江卷）Jane stopped to find a place to rest. Butthe annoying rustleof the trees in the wind, the low gurgleof the stream andthe distant roarof wild animals made it extremely hard for her to fallasleep.简停下来找个地方休息。但是，风中树木的沙沙声、溪水的低沉潺潺 声和远处野兽的咆哮声使她极难入睡。